MOTW #231

[zakarum5835]

Maybe.. I can try to launch gta sa for the next motw because my pc is too slow. I remember that the game was crashing a lot while I was creating the mission without saving any progress, it will be for the next time lol

[jayshizzo]

16 hours ago, RedBaronFromTheUG said:

Yeah that's the contest's #1 rule nowadays. Also, @MelonDoge30, if anyone tries submitting an entry that uses IX or ReD, disqualify them instantly.

why red ?

[MelonDoge30]

Sorry for the delay, the voting has now started.

[jayshizzo]

i was going to post mine but the participation was too short, I would have to reserve it in the books

Edited September 9 by jayshizzo

[Gregory49]

On 9/8/2023 at 11:23 AM, jayshizzo said:

why red ?

Because of some things in red don't work in DYOM 8.

[MelonDoge30]

So, after playing all the 4 entries, here's a brief review:

 

IF YOU HAVEN'T PLAYED THE MISSIONS YET, FIRST GO PLAY THEM AND THEN CHECK THE REVIEWS!

1. KadiR's happy day:
 

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The mission had decent story, the surprise at the end was pretty good. You could've added some more details into the story, like how Kadir waited for the perfect moment to confess to her love or something like that. Also, the soundtracks would've made mission felt like a romantic movie. I'd give it a 6/10. I believe you will improve on your next missions!

 

2. Stardust101's First Time:

 

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This one was a funny hilarious mission. Like when you introduce at the beginning, and when it's found that stardust's GF is old granny (ngl I laughed on seeing an old lady). The mission was short and and apart from that there isn't anything much to say, the mission could've been a bit longer. I'd also give it 6/10.

 

3. Love Story - About Kelly And Leon:

 

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The story was good, the story development was nice (the way they knew each other and dated, btw the fastfood part could've been made with more detail). You could've used the intro song as ambient music while driving. (I legit started to think why that cutscene was long xD). It was good mission overall, it deserves 6.5/10. 

 

4. The Tragedy of Romeo and Juliet!:

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This was the best mission in my opinion, the story was really great and how the story progression was perfect. The story never felt hurried, it was on point. The soundtrack made it feel even more real, the only issue I'd say was the language, as not everyone would be able to understand that, but that's fine cuz that's how it was. (And idk why I think you made some words up xD). 

I'd give it 8/10

 

Edited September 9 by MelonDoge30

[Gregory49]

On 9/7/2023 at 2:25 PM, TonyKitaab said:

Boy, it is time, here is my submission: https://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/75382

 

Wish y'all no issues and good playthrough!

I can hardly understand the words in that mission, plus, I don't remember Romeo and Juliet very well, was there really a fight scene?

[Kailojado haddines]

i cant wait for the next motw

[RedBaronFromTheUG]

8 hours ago, Gregory49 said:

I can hardly understand the words in that mission, plus, I don't remember Romeo and Juliet very well, was there really a fight scene?

He tried to emulate Ancient English, which is why it sounds weird and poetic, me personally after taking a glance at the script, i don't see the issue.

[TonyKitaab]

16 hours ago, Gregory49 said:

I can hardly understand the words in that mission, plus, I don't remember Romeo and Juliet very well, was there really a fight scene?

I have used archaic English forms and also transcribed parts of the script. And there is a fight between the two rival families in Act I, if you are wondering.

7 hours ago, RedBaronFromTheUG said:

He tried to emulate Ancient English, which is why it sounds weird and poetic, me personally after taking a glance at the script, i don't see the issue.

Early Modern English, while preserving archaic verb forms and words, to make it sound "Shakespearean". Yah, it can be hard for a beginner to understand, but once you start to understand the forms and words, its easy to follow.

Edited September 10 by TonyKitaab

[Gregory49]

2 hours ago, TonyKitaab said:

I have used archaic English forms and also transcribed parts of the script. And there is a fight between the two rival families in Act I, if you are wondering.

 

I mean the fight between Romeo and the guy who killed the other guy, plus I heard there was a suicide scene in there, where Romeo and Juliet commit suicide, I don't remember that scene in your mission.

[TonyKitaab]

Just now, Gregory49 said:

I mean the fight between Romeo and the guy who killed the other guy, plus I heard there was a suicide scene in there, where Romeo and Juliet commit suicide, I don't remember that scene in your mission.

That is the

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fight between Tybalt and Mercutio, where Romeo would revenge Mercutio's death by killing Tybalt.

Also sadly I could not include everything from the tragedy in one single mission, so I included just the most relevant parts.

[jayshizzo]

On 9/10/2023 at 6:01 AM, TonyKitaab said:

That is the

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fight between Tybalt and Mercutio, where Romeo would revenge Mercutio's death by killing Tybalt.

Also sadly I could not include everything from the tragedy in one single mission, so I included just the most relevant parts.

The Shakespearean language took me off.  The story was all over the place.what would have made it funnier would have been mixing the Shakespeare with Gen z language and also making use of medieval mods

[Kailojado haddines]

well, i guess kadir won

[MelonDoge30]

The voting is now over folks, a big congratulations to @xKadiRX for the win! A very well deserved one! This one was close as @TonyKitaab put up a really good competition!
Good luck to all the participants for upcoming MOTWs, see ya there! 

[RithRake24]

Sorry for the late notification but congratulations to @xKadiRX for winning MOTW #231! Your mission will be pinned on the DYOM site for a week.