MOTW #178

[M316]

MOTW #178

 

For rules and guidelines, click here.

 

Mafia edition

Create a mission that includes any types of Mafia related activities; anything related to organized crime jobs in the cities whether a job,

or a war between 2 famlies or practically ANYTHING else will be qualified

 

IMPORTANT NOTE: ANY MISSION SUPPORTING ANY FALSE IDEA OF RACIST OR OFFENSIVE BEHAVIORS WILL BE DISQUALIFIED AND THE AUTHOR WILL BE WARNED!

 

 

Entries

 

Spook

Liquor Deal

 

John David

Offer You Can't Refuse

 

The Monster

The Factory Raid

 

Stardust101

Protection Money

 

Mister A

The Ambush

 

Axoez(aka Professional Idiot)

The Rat

 

 

 

Deadlines

Participation: 10/03/2021 - 18:00 PM (GMT +1)

Voting: 12/03/2021 - 18:00 PM (GMT +1)

 

Credits

AnDReJ98 - Founder & Co-Leader

RithRake24 - Co-Leader (2019-present)

Target13 - Co-Leader (2014, 2018-2019)

Chips237 - Co-Leader (2013)

MOTW Council - Management Team

The Odyssey - Founder of the first MOTW Discussion Thread

@M316- Winner of MOTW #177 and Host

Edited March 10, 2021 by M316
Final missions added

[Robert17]

Nice job winning. The thread is looking pretty good, but the image is a bit too big.

[Aymunz]

2 minutes ago, Robert17 said:

Nice job winning. The thread is looking pretty good, but the image is a bit too big.

Say that again...

[ZeroRaxo]

6 hours ago, Aymunz said:

Say that again...

 now it's too small, and I'm 100% going to participate in this

[zakarum5835]

sh*t, I haven't been able to write my personal review in the previous MOTW. Congrats on winning your first contest! 

[M316]

3 minutes ago, zakarum5835 said:

sh*t, I haven't been able to write my personal review in the previous MOTW. Congrats on winning your first contest! 

Not too late actually u can still write a review, I think you already voted. Just write it in the old thread.

[spk_oo]

https://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/68748

[The John David]

 

=== Download Link ===

 

Spoiler

San Fierro 1990, A taxi driver, Gabriel Mendoza stumbles two mafias, Diego & Salieri sprinting across the construction site escaping from the cops, guilty for a crime scene on Autumn building, must drive and escape them in order to fulfill their job well done. However things will not goes well for Gabriel as one of mafia's subordinates invited him in return of their honor. Play this and you will find out more.

 

[ZeroRaxo]

3 hours ago, The John David said:

San Fierro 1990, A taxi driver, Gabriel Mendoza stumbles two mafias, Diego & Salieri sprinting across the construction site escaping from the cops, guilty for a crime scene on Autumn building, must drive and escape them in order to fulfill their job well done. However things will not goes well for Gabriel as one of mafia's subordinates invited him in return of their honor. Play this and you will find out more.

I wonder what this reminds me of...

[The Monster]

Here is my entry:

Vote my mission!

https://dyom.gtagames.nl/list

 

 

 

[M316]

3 hours ago, The Monster said:

Here is my entry:

Vote my mission!

https://dyom.gtagames.nl/list

 

 

 

Wrong link but found ur mission anyways

[KingAceGamer]

Hey guys, I'm back but with an issue, My exam starts in a week, so I could not participate for a month. Congratulations, @M316  for winning the last MOTW. and good luck to all the participants there.

On 3/3/2021 at 11:07 PM, M316 said:

 

 

Mafia edition

Create a mission that includes any types of Mafia related activities; anything related to organized crime jobs in the cities whether a job,

or a war between 2 famlies or practically ANYTHING else will be qualified

 

IMPORTANT NOTE: ANY MISSION SUPPORTING ANY FALSE IDEA OF RACIST OR OFFENSIVE BEHAVIORS WILL BE DISQUALIFIED AND THE AUTHOR WILL BE WARNED!

 

 

The theme of this MOTW is basically what Rockstar is doing for all gta games, nice topic.

Edited March 8, 2021 by KingAceGamer

[Stardust101]

Congratulations on winning MOTW 177 @M316! Here's my entry: https://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/68788

[M316]

1 hour ago, Stardust101 said:

Congratulations on winning MOTW 177 @M316! Here's my entry: https://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/68788

Thx so much, also your entry has been added, good luck!!!

[Mister A]

Here is my entry @M316:

https://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/68795

 

Edited March 9, 2021 by Mister A

[ShmoopieVictim]

DYOM - "Mafians" by ShmoopieVictim (gtagames.nl)

Hope I am not too late!

[ZeroRaxo]

https://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/68813 puto

[spk_oo]

Alright I vote for RaXo's mission but here's a short review/feedback for each mission.

1. An Offer You Can't Refuse: Great mission, I liked the drive by part a lot but the whole mission is taken from Mafia, inspiration isnt bad but this just felt unoriginal in my opinion, you could also use different name for the Don instead of Salieri. 4/5, 4 stars for unoriginality
2. The Factory Raid: The gameplay was good, but the grammar ruined the mood. Also the mission should've ended after the bike fell on ground, not in middle of the fall. 2/5, should improve your English next time. Not trying to be rude just saying what you've should improve.
3. Protection Money: This mission was fun but the story had a lot holes, also you should've used different name for the Mafia family and the Protagonist, because Esperanto is more of a latin name than Italian. The SWAT seemed way too polite and the Bar owner was too much of a badass for a 78 years old guy to attack a Mafia mansion alone. Also why would the Don let Sonny chill in his mansion? 3/5, 3 stars for the story.
4. The Ambush: This mission is the second best in this MOTW. Just when you flied with the sparrow, to distract the Sindaccos, the timer was too long... you've should make it at least 1:30 than 3 minutes, flying around for 3 minutes and avoid RPGs got kinda boring after 2 minutes. The explosion was good but it didnt feel that cool (but yeah you had 100 objects already, that's not your fault) 5/5 *****
5. The Rat: I liked this mission the most and it got my vote. Unlike John David's An Offer You Can't Refuse this was original even after seen many inspiration from Mafia and Mafia 2. Just one problem with this mission, it had some errors (not grammar ones, or at least I didn't notice any, but designing ones), if you can't see them I'll tell you on discord. This mission was the best from this MOTW. good job Raxo. 5/5 *****

[M316]

Due to the mission breaking boundaries and including non acceptable behavior, ShmoopieVictim's mission will be disqualified for breaking the rules as well including suspicious activities in the mission's elements. Hereby also you are not allowed to vote as you are new to the community as well as bringing controversial topics in the mission

 

 

Also @The Monster, voting for yourself is not allowed

Edited March 10, 2021 by M316

[zakarum5835]

Gonna review them all! 

[ZeroRaxo]

8 hours ago, spk_oo said:

Alright I vote for RaXo's mission but here's a short review/feedback for each mission.

1. An Offer You Can't Refuse: Great mission, I liked the drive by part a lot but the whole mission is taken from Mafia, inspiration isnt bad but this just felt unoriginal in my opinion, you could also use different name for the Don instead of Salieri. 4/5, 4 stars for unoriginality
2. The Factory Raid: The gameplay was good, but the grammar ruined the mood. Also the mission should've ended after the bike fell on ground, not in middle of the fall. 2/5, should improve your English next time. Not trying to be rude just saying what you've should improve.
3. Protection Money: This mission was fun but the story had a lot holes, also you should've used different name for the Mafia family and the Protagonist, because Esperanto is more of a latin name than Italian. The SWAT seemed way too polite and the Bar owner was too much of a badass for a 78 years old guy to attack a Mafia mansion alone. Also why would the Don let Sonny chill in his mansion? 3/5, 3 stars for the story.
4. The Ambush: This mission is the second best in this MOTW. Just when you flied with the sparrow, to distract the Sindaccos, the timer was too long... you've should make it at least 1:30 than 3 minutes, flying around for 3 minutes and avoid RPGs got kinda boring after 2 minutes. The explosion was good but it didnt feel that cool (but yeah you had 100 objects already, that's not your fault) 5/5 *****
5. The Rat: I liked this mission the most and it got my vote. Unlike John David's An Offer You Can't Refuse this was original even after seen many inspiration from Mafia and Mafia 2. Just one problem with this mission, it had some errors (not grammar ones, or at least I didn't notice any, but designing ones), if you can't see them I'll tell you on discord. This mission was the best from this MOTW. good job Raxo. 5/5 *****

bruhh lmao i was searching hard for spook's "Liquor Deal" review and then I just realized that you're spook

[Robert17]

14 hours ago, ShmoopieVictim said:

DYOM - "Mafians" by ShmoopieVictim (gtagames.nl)

Hope I am not too late!

Btw, the reason your mission is not qualified is because of it's edgy stupid plot.

In this mission you're literally ending up killing your mom, mafia telling you to kill a lot of children at a children's playground (for no absolute reason) and then commit suicide at the end.

If you removed these elements from your mission, it could've been qualified. But it's not fitting the theme anyway, 20% of the mission is actually getting into the mafia part (kinda).

Better luck next time 

[The John David]

13 hours ago, spk_oo said:

Alright I vote for RaXo's mission but here's a short review/feedback for each mission.

1. An Offer You Can't Refuse: Great mission, I liked the drive by part a lot but the whole mission is taken from Mafia, inspiration isnt bad but this just felt unoriginal in my opinion, you could also use different name for the Don instead of Salieri. 4/5, 4 stars for unoriginality

I appreciated your feedback

Yes, the name "Salieri" was my big mistake since I didn't think carefully about any unique names I should input out there? The way you said unoriginal is because I really didn't compare it in real Mafia game, all the ideas are created as a trial plot and plain instinct, since GTA has a lot of variety backgrounds to use. Everything was intuitive after all.

[zeko]

top down theme when?

[zakarum5835]

After played these missions, I barely decided my final vote. My vote goes to...

 

Spoiler

@Mister A

 

[M316]

So i decided to introduce a new format for my reviews from now on.

I am gonna criticize 3 crucial aspects of the mission(Ik others do something like this but it isnt wrong to do like them lel)

 

Gameplay

Cutscenes & Dialogue

Overall coherence of the mission

Also i will introduce a new scoring system:

 

sh*t                       Very Bad                   Average                    Good                   Very good                 Masterpiece

 

Without further bullsh*t here are my reviews:

 

@spk_oo:

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Gameplay:

It is a bit short for a 37 objective mission so there is not really anything to say, but u made the most out of it, it was nothing but not bad.

Average

 

Cutscenes & Dialogue:

It was good from what i can remember while going through, issue is: it was pretty forgetable, now maybe because i played it about  days ago and my memory speed is that of a snail, but to support my point there was nothing too marky, but from what i CAN remeber the dialogue fitted the mafias and established a pretty good characteristics and for that i will give you my following scoring.

Good

 

Overall coherence of the mission:

It goes without saying that the mission was good but its only major drawback is the lack of action and very little objectives, the story was very good but it was short and missed alotta things. This is basically a missed opportunity and such a shame that you had to rush it in the first 2 days even though i gave you all a WEEK, which hosts dont normally do.

Average mission

 

@The John David:

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Gameplay:

It is very balanced with the story and options you were given, i mean they are 2 mafia mobs escaping from the cops via an innocent cab driver, it is not the fanciest sh*t, but for a story like this it did the job

Good

 

Cutscenes & Dialogues:

Dialogue fits the characters and their stereotypes, especially the cab driver, the only not so special dialogue was with the mafia head but then again he was just trying to not tell too much to a civilian cab driver. I mean since you are a veteran, you know what you are doing and it shows. Cutscenes wise, the is a lot of good shots like with the cab driver but some were weird like when the boss handed him some money i mean you could have made a dialogue were the boss said the amount instead of the awkward cutscene of saying that u gained 5k $ but it was good for the most part.

Good

 

Overall coherence of the mission:

Flows really well for the most part, i mean it is a story of a driver sticking to the wrong side of things in life and ends up with a very hard alternative to his medicore life, now someone pointed out that this is more of a remake in Mafia series. I personally didnt play them so i dunno to what extent u got inspired but it was a good remake if it is for the most part. My only issue is the ending, it kinda just leaves the story there, reminds of alot of TV series that stopped abruptly and i feel that what you were aiming at could have been done better. Unless you are gonna make a series following up, if not then well.....

Good mission

@Stardust101:

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Gameplay:

Fairly ok, nothing too shabby or fancy but it is alright. Gun fight was ok but it had its flaws like it was a bit easy for an FBI onslaught, should have made their heads non-popped if that makes sense.

Average

 

Cutscenes & Dialogue:

Your cutscenes are consistently good for a prospect and it seems that you got the hang of it. As for dialogues, it was alright, everyone felt natural and not too robotic or too script like so there is that, nothing to degrade or to add.

Good

 

Overall coherence of the mission:

Your story reminds me of my second ever DYOM mission which consisted of a Protection Racket element. Safe to say that we both got inspired possibly from the same game: GTA VCS. It was quite an underrated business aspect. For the story it fits but has major flaws like first of all..... how the hell does the bar owner know the boss's place, let alone the FBI? Sounds very stupid and most eyebrow raising one is why the hell does the boss keep one of his goons in one of his flashy rooms in his OWN LUXURY MANSION. Also, the boss acting bery clueless while there are dead bodies all over the mansion is pretty stupid. Ngl expected you to be more attentative and intelligent with your mission plot design

Average mission

@The Monster:

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Gameplay:

It is your typical shooting simulator game, difficulty was ok-ish for the most part. It is just too easy to go through especially since you have friends

Average

 

Cutscenes & Dialogue:

Very generic dialogue and forgetable for mafia schticks, as for cutscenes they had their downsides which comes at the end as you were aiming for a good ramp jump shot which failed miserably and left it very awkward which kinda makes this fall a bit below average.

Very Bad

 

Overall coherence of the mission:

It is just really meh..... you can find thousands of those in a daily DYOM surfing, i am not being harsh but based n the standards of alot of DYOM mewbies, safe to say you need ALOTTA IMPROVEMENT. As for the time being, take what i give you

Very bad mission

@Mister A:

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Gameplay:

Honestly, this is the best gameplay this week, you definetly impressed me as i havent seen you do alot of work. All i knew is that you are a talented skin maker on the horizon. I loved the tactic of using the sparrow to eliminate the goons on the rooftop with the RPG which was pretty challenging and as for the ground ones, you either can challenge yourself with the sparrow or sit on the rooftop and kill them from above. It was balanced really good and i had a bit of fun compared to others

Very good

 

Cutscenes & Dialogue:

You sure know how to portray mexicans hehe, i am kinda certain that you used google translate, but tbh there is no shame in it, you were able to present what you have very good. It wasnt obviously as good as your gameplay but it fit really good, would have loved to see more dynamic between the Rifas though. Cutscenes seemed alright, it had its good parts but not too outstanding.

Good

 

Overall coherence of the mission:

It is a mafia family exacting revenge on another, a good story to digest even from simpler folks, the choice of bases kinda left me quiestionable. I mean they are literally 2 streets away from each other. I remember you having a problem in choosing the Sindacco's HQ but i told you to use custom objects. Having them on the other end of the city or even in Bone county would have looked more pleasing. Still it didnt foreshadow your object placement for a Mafia enviroment, also the final scene was good (even though designers use this cliche alot but it never fails to amaze us)

Good mission

@Axoez:

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Gameplay:

I mean.. i expected more but i think you sacrificed some of the gameplay for story elements, will get to that in the end, it isnt bad to do that but obviously a compromise always meets a little bit of disappointement. Which explains why you made a sequence where you f*cking go from SF to LS with 5 f*ckING STARS WTF LOL. Tbh, i made it out intact in the first try, without cheats. it reminds me of a certain creator here, who shall not be named and remain banned, but not to be a bastard, i enjoyed it; it gave a bit of challenge and i saw some people complaining about it. Long driving can be toleratable if it is done correctly and not oversaturated, like the non-named individual did wrong, but besides that it was pretty simple and average for a stand alone mission. But since the driving part took most of the gameplay sequence the rating will be based mostly on it otherwise i would have moved it down a notch.

Good

Cutscenes & Dialogue:

As expected, since you solely focused on it you were able to deliver in both aspects. Natural dialogues, good cutscenes, basically the good sh*t we expect from you and seeing how this is obviously tied to the story which was more focused than gameplay,, i say you did a good job.

Good

 

Overall coherence of the mission:

Kidnapping weasels, drivong from city to city while having donut eating pigs behind you, safe to say you did pretty good, the beginning was a bit weird and there was parts that didnt make sense but your input of irony at least explained it for me. It was unusal for me that the weasel was an old man ,cuing Kenny Paas, and got tortured on camera. Bit weird and f*cked but i kinda like this sh*t. You pushed yourself in 2 days to make this and i say you did pretty good.

Good mission

 

After a bit of headache i finally declared my vote:

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Mister A, congatz boy

 

Edited March 12, 2021 by M316

[zeko]

i'm on a decision fatigue who to vote here; every mission feels the same, with sharing similar goals and stories. i may make up my decision, but that's low chance

Edited March 11, 2021 by zeko

[ZeroRaxo]

6 hours ago, zeko said:

i'm on a decision fatigue who to vote here; every mission feels the same, with sharing similar goals and stories. i may make up my decision, but that's low chance

Vote me, do a biased vote because I made almost all the skins for your Katabasis MP 

[spk_oo]

10 hours ago, M316 said:

So i decided to introduce a new format for my reviews from now on.

I am gonna criticize 3 crucial aspects of the mission(Ik others do something like this but it isnt wrong to do like them lel)

 

Gameplay

Cutscenes & Dialogue

Overall coherence of the mission

Also i will introduce a new scoring system:

 

sh*t                       Very Bad                   Average                    Good                   Very good                 Masterpiece

 

Without further bullsh*t here are my reviews:

 

@spk_oo:

 

@The John David:

Reviews will be continued later........

Thanks for your review @M316, I appreciate it.. Yeah I'll try to make my missions longer now

[zeko]

6 hours ago, Axoez said:

Vote me, do a biased vote because I made almost all the skins for your Katabasis MP