Bratva Assassin Posted November 1, 2018 Share Posted November 1, 2018 Kill Playboy X, Kill Derrick, and the Revenge ending of GTA IV are being taken into conservation. All of these characters are going trick or treating together as Roman and Mallorie’s child wants someone a whole group to go with them. Niko Bellic: wears a Count Dracula costume Roman Bellic: wears a Frankenstein’s monster costume Mallorie Bardas: wears a cat costume Roman and Mallorie’s child: wears a dog costume Brucie Kibbutz: wears a mummy costume (candy, that’s the last thing HE needs!) Little Jacob: wears a hippie costume Dwayne Forge: wears a rapper costume Florian Cravic (aka Bernie Crane): wears a My Little Pony costume to troll people, lol Also, Francis McReary has had a complete change of heart within the past ten years so he decides to pass out candy from his police car when they pass by. Jesus is My Friend, Jerking For Soup, tega and 7 others 10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Penguin Bobo Posted November 1, 2018 Share Posted November 1, 2018 (edited) ....Okay then....But one thing, don't you think they're a bit too old to go trick or treating, or passing out candy? Edited November 1, 2018 by xXPinguXx angeldavidrevilla, Bratva Assassin, Femme Fatale and 5 others 8 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bratva Assassin Posted November 1, 2018 Author Share Posted November 1, 2018 25 minutes ago, Penguin Bob said: ....Okay then....But one thing, don't you think they're a bit too old to go trick or treating, or passing out candy? Yeah, but they’re doing it for the young child, El Penguin Bobo, christii, goofsoup and 2 others 5 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Penguin Bobo Posted November 1, 2018 Share Posted November 1, 2018 Just now, ThatKyloRenGuy said: Yeah, but they’re doing it for the young child, You mean Mallorie and Roman's baby? That's actually pretty good. But one thing I would suggest is to remove the costume part. It seems a bit childish for a bunch of adults. The child should be the only one wearing a costume. But, it is your story and you can add anything you want to it. HansiK, goofsoup, tega and 1 other 4 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bratva Assassin Posted November 1, 2018 Author Share Posted November 1, 2018 (edited) Additionally, GTA takes place in a universe where cops literally don't care if you flee the scene of an accident, unless it's one of their cars and you can go as fast as you want and pass all kinds of red lights without the cops caring unless you crash into them or a pedestrian in the process. On top of all that, vendors will gladly serve you a hot-dog after witnessing you kill people in the streets with the cops coming after you, and you can survive things that one would obviously die from IRL because you always come out of the hospital in less than 24 hours. All of that is just as, if not even more unrealistic, than what is being portrayed here. So yeah..GTA is clearly not even "realistic fiction" so to speak. Edited November 1, 2018 by ThatKyloRenGuy HansiK, tega, goofsoup and 2 others 5 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
universetwisters Posted November 6, 2018 Share Posted November 6, 2018 On 10/31/2018 at 10:08 PM, Penguin Bob said: That's actually pretty good. But one thing I would suggest is to remove the costume part. It seems a bit childish for a bunch of adults. The child should be the only one wearing a costume. I mean in OP's defense they have costume parties for adults. El Penguin Bobo and Bratva Assassin 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sinner! Posted November 7, 2018 Share Posted November 7, 2018 (edited) Why is this even a thread? and how on EARTH does this qualify as writing? I mean good fictional lord above. you're not even trying anymore. What's next? what presents do the GTA IV characters buy for Roman's child? Edited November 9, 2018 by Sinner! Femme Fatale 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ziggy455 Posted November 9, 2018 Share Posted November 9, 2018 At this point I just feel like you're just spamming and trolling. This isn't an improvement. Your writing appears to be getting lazier. Femme Fatale 1 "I might have laughed if I'd have remembered how." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sinner! Posted November 9, 2018 Share Posted November 9, 2018 @ThatKyloRenGuy All joking aside, could you please elaborate on why you feel this qualifies as writing or as a story? Trolling seems like the only conceivable explanation right now. With that said, I shall allow you to retort. Femme Fatale and Ziggy455 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bratva Assassin Posted November 9, 2018 Author Share Posted November 9, 2018 6 hours ago, Sinner! said: @ThatKyloRenGuy All joking aside, could you please elaborate on why you feel this qualifies as writing or as a story? Trolling seems like the only conceivable explanation right now. With that said, I shall allow you to retort. Trolling and spamming was never my intention. These are just ideas that I have in my head that I feel like writing down and I don’t know where else to write it down. I never claimed this to be a story per se, just as something fun to write down. Do you think that I should perhaps just stick to keeping it on a piece of paper or on my iPad’s notes? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
universetwisters Posted November 12, 2018 Share Posted November 12, 2018 On 11/9/2018 at 7:11 AM, ThatKyloRenGuy said: Trolling and spamming was never my intention. These are just ideas that I have in my head that I feel like writing down and I don’t know where else to write it down. I never claimed this to be a story per se, just as something fun to write down. Do you think that I should perhaps just stick to keeping it on a piece of paper or on my iPad’s notes? tbh you should get a deviantart made and put your fanfiction on there because that's basically what you write is, GTA 4/GTA 5 but more family friendly. Femme Fatale and Bratva Assassin 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bratva Assassin Posted November 12, 2018 Author Share Posted November 12, 2018 40 minutes ago, universetwisters said: tbh you should get a deviantart made and put your fanfiction on there because that's basically what you write is, GTA 4/GTA 5 but more family friendly. I actually do have a Deviantart, though I rarely use it. Perhaps, I should start using it more often! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ziggy455 Posted November 29, 2018 Share Posted November 29, 2018 Stop spamming WD with these. They aren't stories, and you refuse to take any criticism. I've tried to give you feedback before, as have others. Stop posting these poorly written five minute efforts. Femme Fatale 1 "I might have laughed if I'd have remembered how." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bratva Assassin Posted November 29, 2018 Author Share Posted November 29, 2018 (edited) @Ziggy455 I tried messaging you but it didn’t work as you can’t receive any messages. I’d just like to say that I am truly sorry for writing nonsense verses that are barely even stories (including this one) in the WD as well as for not giving the best responses to my criticisms. I shall request for this one and all others except for my GTA V rewritten versions to be deleted as they simply aren’t going anywhere. Sure, my GTA V rewritten version needs improvements, but just simply having one work by me isn’t going to make it look like I’m spamming this section. Am I forgiven? Edited November 30, 2018 by ThatKyloRenGuy Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ziggy455 Posted November 30, 2018 Share Posted November 30, 2018 On 11/29/2018 at 12:06 PM, ThatKyloRenGuy said: @Ziggy455 I tried messaging you but it didn’t work as you can’t receive any messages. I’d just like to say that I am truly sorry for writing nonsense verses that are barely even stories (including this one) in the WD as well as for not giving the best responses to my criticisms. I shall request for this one and all others except for my GTA V rewritten versions to be deleted as they simply aren’t going anywhere. Sure, my GTA V rewritten version needs improvements, but just simply having one work by me isn’t going to make it look like I’m spamming this section. Am I forgiven? Learn to take criticism and your work will improve. Then your work would get read a lot more. Femme Fatale and Bratva Assassin 2 "I might have laughed if I'd have remembered how." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jerking For Soup Posted December 3, 2018 Share Posted December 3, 2018 Unpopular opinion but I don't think you should avoid writing. You may not be the best at writing conventionally well-written stories with a lot of depth or realism but I crack up with laughter every time I see these kinds of posts made by you. I don't think all stories need to be taken seriously; you're a great meme writer. Bratva Assassin and universetwisters 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bratva Assassin Posted December 3, 2018 Author Share Posted December 3, 2018 (edited) 1 hour ago, Jerking For Soup said: Unpopular opinion but I don't think you should avoid writing. You may not be the best at writing conventionally well-written stories with a lot of depth or realism but I crack up with laughter every time I see these kinds of posts made by you. I don't think all stories need to be taken seriously; you're a great meme writer. Thanks! Much appreciated! Edited December 3, 2018 by ThatKyloRenGuy Jerking For Soup 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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