Quantcast
Jump to content
Search In
  • More options...
Find results that contain...
Find results in...
    1. Welcome to GTAForums!   (91,976 visits to this link)

    2. News

    1. GTA Online

      1. Find Lobbies & Players
      2. Guides & Strategies
      3. Vehicles
      4. Content Creator
      5. Help & Support
    2. Crews

      1. Events
      2. Recruitment
    1. Grand Theft Auto Series

    2. GTA Next

    3. GTA V

      1. PC
      2. Guides & Strategies
      3. Help & Support
    4. GTA IV

      1. Episodes from Liberty City
      2. Multiplayer
      3. Guides & Strategies
      4. Help & Support
      5. GTA Mods
    5. GTA Chinatown Wars

    6. GTA Vice City Stories

    7. GTA Liberty City Stories

    8. GTA San Andreas

      1. Guides & Strategies
      2. Help & Support
      3. GTA Mods
    9. GTA Vice City

      1. Guides & Strategies
      2. Help & Support
      3. GTA Mods
    10. GTA III

      1. Guides & Strategies
      2. Help & Support
      3. GTA Mods
    11. Top Down Games

      1. GTA Advance
      2. GTA 2
      3. GTA
    12. Wiki

      1. Merchandising
    1. GTA Modding

      1. GTA V
      2. GTA IV
      3. GTA III, VC & SA
      4. Tutorials
    2. Mod Showroom

      1. Scripts & Plugins
      2. Maps
      3. Total Conversions
      4. Vehicles
      5. Textures
      6. Characters
      7. Tools
      8. Other
      9. Workshop
    3. Featured Mods

      1. DYOM
      2. OpenIV
      3. GTA: Underground
      4. GTA: Liberty City
      5. GTA: State of Liberty
    1. Red Dead Redemption 2

    2. Red Dead Redemption

    3. Rockstar Games

    1. Off-Topic

      1. General Chat
      2. Gaming
      3. Technology
      4. Programming
      5. Movies & TV
      6. Music
      7. Sports
      8. Vehicles
    2. Expression

      1. Graphics / Visual Arts
      2. GFX Requests & Tutorials
      3. Writers' Discussion
      4. Debates & Discussion
    1. Forum Support

    2. Site Suggestions

Yasir_RFL

The real heroes are the Army Man

Recommended Posts

Yasir_RFL

Hello Everyone,

02

This is Yasir RFL with new MP 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 0202 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 0202'The real heroes are the Army Man'

yk27318.jpg

Story---

02

An attack has happened suddenly in Los Santos ,No one is safe02

Everyone is running or getting killed by the Terrorist.

02

Anyone don't know who is behind this.Cheif Andrej tells Commisioner Patrick that the attack on Los Santos .Patrick advice Andrej that to get ready the Team DYOM.

02

Characters)

02

1.Commander Patrick

02

One of the most powerful assain in 1994,He get promoted after the 1st commander retire.

02XihOWve.jpg

2.Chief andrej

He joined army to wipe out terrorism,he get promoted due to his true duty toward his aim.

02AVqqqpm.jpg

3.Huzaifa

A special soldier that is expert in air battle.

028vrdc2a.jpg

4.Aftab

He also known as the Eagle Eye of Team Dyom.

02JXx0XLV.jpg

5.Yasir

The Best gunman and expert in bomb difuser.

029LSE2VQ.jpg

6.Dhiman

02He has the power to give the fear of milatry veihcles.Bb026XC.jpg

7.GYA

02Anyone said one shot KO.Meet GYA.jDMk33e.jpg

(Some characters are on hold)

02

02Great Reviews

Following are the things I am going to focus. All rating are accounted for your mission pack.02

02

  • Grammar
  • Spelling Mistake
  • Plot
  • Cutscenes
  • Object&Pickup
  • Length
  • Difficulty
  • Presentation
Indications:

02

Horrible

Could be Good

Decent

Good

Very Good

Excellent

02

02

02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 02 0202YczUFcA.png

02

Grammar -02(Grammar also include punctuation. You have to put some serious amount of time on your grammar. Not as a hater but actually I saw02many errors during playing mission also02Punctuation02need some more attention first after Grammar. Vast number of mistakes in0202Punctation was caught. Maybe it is because you were new in the community at that time or you need to face some improvements)

02

Spelling Mistakes -0202 (There were many spelling mistakes like "safly" etc but it was good. I saw many fixes of spellings in02missions but still, I was watching the existence so this obtains yellow02colour)

02

Plot -02 (Good I mean really. That was a good idea making something unique which contains Real life Designers but their roles were not impressive. I was expecting something better from them according to their skills IRL)

02

Cutscenes -02(Cutscenes placements and their movements were good especially when there was a meeting in the office. Rotations were good. I am impressed with the cutscenes but still, I need more impressment)

02

Object&Pickup Placements -02(Seriously, the objects placements were not good. They were like half of their corner was through the other near object like there is no collision in them + inappropriate objects for mission and that cue ball on the actor's head was really unrealistic)

02

Length -02(Too short mission but long distance checkpoints were making the missions longer + I was not able to read and understand the cutscenes as they were concluding soo fast. Please avoid from the short cutscenes as they disturb many designers)

02

Difficulty -02(Difficulty was very easy. Easy enemies + given a hunter to kill 250 health people)

02

Presentation -02(I was going to give it a yellow but when I deleted the colourful hud and fonts then they were looking good. Using green in the colourful text with white in a right position was good but presenting your name in a very colourful way was a new member just joined the community. I want you to keep it up)

02

+ there were some things like putting a cage for jumping from the top was really unrealistic and too many enemies in first mission was really absurd. Punctuation was bad and too much capital letter.02

02

+OVERALL -026\10

02

Try to improve on mentioned mistakes and weakness02and you will be awesome!

02

02

02

0202

02

02

02

02

Intro Version=

02

Army Men get ready: Los Santos in danger

02

Version=

02

Mission Pack

http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/50707

02

Stay Tuned for more

02

(Realesed)

Next Chapter will be progressing!

02

------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

Edited by YasirRFL King

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
Next Previous

Nice, but you forgot the Pictures of the characters, Maintexts.
Seems great, i'm excited

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
Yasir_RFL

Nice, but you forgot the Pictures of the characters, Maintexts.

Seems great, i'm excited

Thanks Next, look like you enjoyed it.

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
Absar J Khan

Oy man,i am in roll on your mission.

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
Yasir_RFL

Oy man,i am in roll on your mission.

Yeah Fatin my friend

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
MartZ2

Nice.

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
Yasir_RFL

Thanks Delaware

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
Gregorio150

Nice mission, bro. But I suggest you to put some pictures and some headers. Anyway goodluck for this.

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
.GreenGoo

You should add some pictures and images. It'll be great if you do that. Btw, story looks great. I'm waiting for it! :D

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
Yasir_RFL

Thank you Reza and Jhan my friends.

 

Yeah i will update the pictures soon.

So ,stay tuned

Edited by YasirRFL King

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
Yasir_RFL

Finally Make half of 3rd mission will upload 2 days later

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
Yasir_RFL

OKAY , Here mission three realeas now u can enjoy it

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
Yasir_RFL

Character Images Update

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
Roxie

Wow. Nice story mate.And you take names from our nicknames it would Amazing!

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
universetwisters

I just love how it's supposed to take place in America yet all the names are Indian.

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
Yasir_RFL

Not all names are indian bro, some from Americans and Pakistan

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
universetwisters

It's still an awful lot for America but I dunno how accurate you want that to be or not.

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
Yasir_RFL

Its awful because it contains lots of Indian and Pakistani names,not many Americans names.

That names are from my gta forums friends and its only a MP. So no big deal.

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
Yasir_RFL

Ok , Guys the Beta 0.8 will realeas 2 days later.

So stay tuned

 

Edit: sorry guys , will upload it soon !

Edited by YasirRFL King

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
Yasir_RFL

UPDATE

 

BETA 0.8 has released. :lol:

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
Roxie

Where is my name :( and Upload you MP on DYOM Site
I will play this just wait for my feeback I'll give u Review about your MP

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
DeAdLy PyThOn

Add my name too :)

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
Yasir_RFL

Chill Roxie bro,

I have made a far plan for you and for those who are in rolls.

 

Well,

I will think about you Karan that where I put you!

Just Relax and wait.

 

And sorry Roxie bro it is not uploading on the DYOM website.

Edited by YasirRFL King

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
Nuddle King

Add me,A Secerct Agent Guy,If We Can Be Friends!

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
Yasir_RFL

Hehey,

You answered my question before I asked ,

You are in. So what will be your name , because AfricaDesignerDz should be curious! XD

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
Nuddle King

The name is Africa,Thx Btw

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
Yasir_RFL

I see, Well ........ Welcome to my MP!

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
Nuddle King

Hell Yeah!

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
Yasir_RFL

5th Mission will be uploaded on Sunday!

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites
Yasir_RFL

UPDATE

The MP has realesed

New Characters added

 

Plz Review and rate Thanks

Share this post


Link to post
Share on other sites

Create an account or sign in to comment

You need to be a member in order to leave a comment

Create an account

Sign up for a new account in our community. It's easy!

Register a new account

Sign in

Already have an account? Sign in here.

Sign In Now

  • 1 User Currently Viewing
    0 members, 0 Anonymous, 1 Guest

×

Important Information

By using GTAForums.com, you agree to our Terms of Use and Privacy Policy.