Build Up Your San Andreas Gang II

[QED]

Here's my introduction.

 

http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/41937

 

Also, first mission.

 

http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/41938

Edited April 22, 2016 by QED

[Curtis]

Damn, you work fast.

[General Scrotum]

So I can't choose shotgun and desert eagle now? I almost finish my mission.

 

Edit=One more question. Can I use Italian Mafia skins as the "opposite Russian Mafia"?

 

Nope, you cannot choose them.

 

You can choose whichever skin you want for your enemies but make sure to state if they are Italian Mafia, an other gang, or a random no-name gang before.

[Curtis]

I made a new mission.

I want to buy 100 ecstacy pills for 500 dollars and here is the mission explaining how the VLA buy it.

[QED]

It's look like a President named Secronom forgot about my missions...

[Mister Busta]

Patience please. He's not a robot.

Still waiting for /\rdooZ and HardluckStyle.

[QED]

Yeah, you're right here...

[ghettospaghetti]

Introduction mission for the Ballas gang:

http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/41972

[Mister Busta]

My theme of the week. It's still April 24 so I wasn't late right?

I choose the third option:

 

Weapons:

-SMG

-Rifle

-Micro SMG

 

Vehicles:

-Boxville

-Flatbed

-Phoenix

 

Mission: http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/41982

Edited April 24, 2016 by mister busta

[Curtis]

damn. i feel sorry for you, pledge. You gotta review 5 missions. We gotta find another rater.

edit: I have a suggestion. Instead of writing down "Shotgun, Shotgun, Shotgun" in a gang's weapon list you should write down Shotgun (3x)

Edited April 24, 2016 by Bender

[QED]

I would be a rater, but i live in central europe so...

[Curtis]

I'll practice on Pledge's Missions.

 

Las Venturas Triads:

$43 and (4,3 - 0,3 = 4) 4 Members. But because you have waited a week before anyone rating your missions you get $100 and 10 members.

Restriction: $5 Bonus

Difficulty: Cutscene Only $0

Variety: 9 Different actors $6 Decent

Length: 04:13.52 Good $9

Writing: 3 Mistakes (th instead of the, hav instead of have, mentionned instead of mentioned), Text coloring the (chinese) names. Very Good $15

Presentation: It's good for a cutscene only mission. Nothing too complex. Everything within the gang is explained. Good use of ~n~ and dead actors as a fun little addon. Decent $8

Ecstasy? Buying!

$60 and 6 Members. But because you have waited a week before anyone rating your missions you get $100 and 10 members.

Restriction: $5 Bonus

Difficulty: Very Easy, you just have to drive to the meet and back and the spar sequence is very easy if you move instead of standing idle. $2

Variety: 6 Different actors, 1 different car and 1 pickup. $6 Decent

Length: 05:28.19 good $14

Writing: Text Coloring the names, but only one mistake. I believe it is "Spar" and not "Spare". Very Good $19

Presentation: The cutscenes are good, i find the spar sequence a smart idea, good use of the san fierro gym interior and casino's open garage and for some reason i also like the deal cutscene. Good $14

EDIT:

I just released another mission that has the VLA selling the drugs they've bought. They also meet the Russians in this mission and FYI Mister Busta will release his mission soon which is the same mission but from the russians' point of view.

Edited April 25, 2016 by Bender

[ghettospaghetti]

The second Ballas BUYSAG mission:

http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/41995

[General Scrotum]

Alright so - Theme of the Week has ended 48 minutes ago. It is now too late to participate in it. Next Theme of the Week will come out soon though.

 

 

Bender: Congratulations on becoming a BUYSAG Contributor as a rater. You are now allowed to review and rate other people's missions.

Bender: I will think about your suggestion.

Bender: Your mission (about selling drugs) will be reviewed shortly.

 

Bender: $78 added to the Varrios Los Aztecas gang bank account and 8 (7.8 + 0.2 = 8) members added to the usable VLA members.

 

Restriction: Respected - $5 bonus

Difficulty: The only difficulty thing is to drive to the tunnel before the timer runs out (which is quite very easy) - $3

Variety: 22 different things (14 actors, 3 weapons, 3 vehicles, 1 object, 1 pickup) - $16

Length: 6:58'79 - $16

Presentation: Shady telling to Chico a drug deal opportunity (also used a subtle way of explaining how BUYSAG's drug dealing system works), gang members added around the property to make it more lively, drug deal location: classic small time drug deal object, vehicle, actors placement. Have to reach a tunnel to loose the police helicopter before it calls backup and wait for it to go away when reached (could have been better if an actual police helicopter followed the group), excellent cutscenes - $18

Writing: Use of Spanish words, text coloring the names, use of slangs for the pimp, didn't notice any mistakes - $20

 

Bender: $500 removed from the VLA gang bank account and 100 Pills of Ecstasy added to the gang's inventory.

 

Bender: $250 bonus added to the VLA gang bank account due to reaching a multiple of five mission.

 

 

 

QED: If you wish to become a rater, just do as Bender did on two random missions that were already rated. If you do good enough, then you'll be accepted and I will forward you the official rating system.

 

QED: Due to being the first member to design a mission for the San Fierro Rifa, you are now the ''leader'' and have final word on all future gang purchases.

 

QED: $37 added to the San Fierro Rifa gang bank account and 4 (3.7 + 0.3 = 4) members added to the usable SFR members.

 

Difficulty: Cutscene only - $0

Length: 58'67 - $0

Restriction: Respected - $5 bonus

Variety: 11 different things (6 actors, 3 vehicles, 2 weapons) - $6

Writing: Spotted some mistakes: ''tommorow'' -> ''tomorrow'' / ''bendejo'' -> ''pendejo''. Other than that: use of Spanish words, text coloring (not names but actual sentence words) and some weird sounding sentences or words wrongly used. - $13

Presentation: El Coronas breaks the fourth wall by talking directly to the player (this is the feeling I got), gang members around the property to make it more lively (and most of them all seem to have different animations), excellent cutscenes, police officer and police vehicle appearing out of nowhere which ruins the 'realism' a bit, small explanation of what the gang does - $13

 

QED: $43 added to the San Fierro Rifa gang bank account and 4 (4.3 - 0.3 = 4) members added to the usable SFR members.

 

Difficulty: Very easy to headshot the first wave of enemies, very easy to kill the second wave of enemies too (but you do have to be careful your ally does not die under the tramway) - $2

Restriction: Respected - $5 bonus

Variety: 10 different things (6 actors, 2 weapons, 2 vehicles) - $6

Presentation: Excellent cutscenes for the very few there were, basic cutscenes of how the Da Nang Boys are selling drugs on SFR territory and of the second wave, nothing too spectacular - $6

Length: 4:00'03 - $9

Writing: ''i'' -> ''I'' / ''ammunation'' -> ammo / bullets / ammunition (ammunation is a gun shop, thus you have to use the word ammunition or use other words such as bullets or ammo) / ''show those'' -> ''show them''. Other than that, some text colorinh (not names but actual sentence words) and use of Spanish words - $15

 

 

 

San Fierro Rifa / Da Nang Boys: One mission out of three before enemy status is reached.

 

 

 

GangstaZilla203: Your two missions will be reviewed and rated shortly (by me or Bender).

 

mister busta: Your mission and your Theme of the Week rewards will be awarded shortly (by me or Bender).

 

Pledge of Chaos: Added $200 and 20 members to the San Fierro Triads totals.

Edited April 26, 2016 by Pledge of Chaos

[QED]

Buying 2 Tec-9's.

[Curtis]

GangstaZilla203: $46 added to the Ballas gang bank account and (4,6 + 0,4 = 5) 5 members added to the usable B members.

Difficulty: Cutscene Only $0

Restriction: Respected $5 Bonus

Variety: 10 actors and 2 cars Decent $8

Presentation: Just an intro cutscene with the leader saying that people should wake up and realize, two cars and 9 members placed around, introducing the members. Good $14

Length: 1:58.79 Short $2

Writing: "to" instead of too, "run a errands" otherwise no other errors found, good usage of gangster slang Very Good $17

GangstaZilla203:Due to being the first member to design a mission for the Ballas, you are now the ''leader'' and have final word on all future gang purchases.

Mister Busta: You won a rifle, phoenix and $890.

Your mission review will come soon.

Edited April 26, 2016 by Bender

[Mister Busta]

Alright, after you reviewed my totw, review this also. Purchase 100 pills of ecstasy for $500 after I got some money from totw. And also, this is the first out of three missions before allying Varrios Los Aztecas and the Russian's point of view of Bender's "Making Friends".

 

http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/41999

Edited April 26, 2016 by mister busta

[QED]

Second mission (Da nang Boys will become my sworn enemy)

 

http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/42000

 

 

Damn BENDER, you work fast!

Edited April 26, 2016 by QED

[General Scrotum]

QED: Added two Tec-9's to your gang's inventory. Subtracted $340 from your gang's bank account - new total: $240.

QED: Your mission will be rated shortly (by me or Bender).

 

GangstaZilla203: Added your money and gang members from Bender's rate.

GangstaZilla203: Your second mission will be rated shortly (by me or Bender).

 

mister busta: Your mission will be rated shortly (by me or Bender).

mister busta: Your Theme of the Week rewards were added - your mission rate from Bender too.

 

Bender: Your mission will be rated shortly.

 

 

Weapons Market:

 

Rifle availability: 30 -> 29

Rifle: price increased to $550

 

 

Transportation Market:

 

Phoenix availability: 30 -> 29

Phoenix: price increased to $1 300

Edited April 26, 2016 by Pledge of Chaos

[QED]

GangstaZilla203, i'll ally with your gang Ballas. I'll make the first two missions and you make the third.

[Satourn]

so if I understand correctly, if at the start I'm given BMX and Greenwood, I'm given only one of each, right?

 

anyway, I'm buying a Mountain Bike since my introduction will have one

Edited April 26, 2016 by SatournFan

[QED]

so if I understand correctly, if at the start I'm given BMX and Greenwood, I'm given only one of each, right?

 

anyway, I'm buying a Mountain Bike since my introduction will have one

Yes, you will have only one BMX and Greenwood, but you can use them in every mission.

[Curtis]

mister busta: $98 added to the Russian Mafia gang bank account and (9,8 + 0,2 = 10) 10 members added to the usable RM members.

Restriction: Respected $5 Bonus

Difficulty: Can be hard if you don't take cover and know what you're doing or if you don't sacrifice a Bojevnik. Hard $19

Variety: 17 Objects, 12 Actors, 1 car, 2 pickups Excellent $20

Length: 7:33.92 Very Good $17

Writing: Three mistakes such as "Was happened", "The Flint County" and "No one hear it", use of russian words and text coloring. Very Good $17

Presentation: crossover/reference with the VLA and how they came before and wrecked the place, Good object placement everywhere, shootout can be hard and The end foreshadows the deal with the VLA and russians and a later mission. Excellent $20

Mister Busta: Theme of the Week rewards: Rifle (x1), Phoenix (x1), $890.

[General Scrotum]

SatournFan: Added Mountain Bike (x1) to your gang's inventory. $50 removed from your gang's bank account - new total: $450.

 

 

Theme of the Week #2 will come out later today.

Edited April 26, 2016 by Pledge of Chaos

[Curtis]

GangstaZilla203: $73 added to the Ballas gang bank account and (7,3 - 0,3 = 7) 7 members added to the usable B members.

Difficulty: Easy $6

Restriction: Not respected $0 (The ballas in this mission have two pistols but you can only use one.)

Variety: 11 Actors, 4 cars, 3 objects and 1 pickup. (19 things) Good $14

Presentation: The ballas go kill some of their enemies, simple but kind of unique too in its own way and minor cameo of a real life celebrity. Very Good $15

Length: 9:47.63 Very Good $19

Writing: two mistakes such as "Waste his dumbass" and "know of him", use of gangster slang Very Good $19

[Satourn]

alright boys here's the first mission for Grove Street Families at Playa del Seville - http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/42003

[Curtis]

mister busta: $99 added to the Russian Mafia gang bank account and (9,9 + 0,1 = 10) 10 members added to the usable RM members.

Restriction: Respected $5 Bonus

Difficulty: Medium, if you take cover and use the pickups and let the friend actors help you it won't be that hard. $20

Variety: 15 actors, 5 cars and 6 objects. (26 things) Very Good $19

Length: 6:42.42 Very Good $15

Writing: No mistakes spotted, Coloring the names and usage of mexican words for the VLA (even though i made up the VLA's dialogue) Excellent $20

Presentation: A crossover between the VLA and the Russians from the russian side (i made a mission showing the VLA side) Almost no flaws, the friend actors actually help in battle, nice scarface reference and at parts you did it better than my mission (The cutscene where the bodyguards arrive and again when they arrive in cars and when you actually point the camera at the chopper) and you perfectly remade my mission. Excellent $20

[QED]

BENDER don't forget about mine cuz i need to prepare for war, damn.

[General Scrotum]

Bender: $95 added to the Varrios Los Aztecas gang bank account and 10 (9.5 + 0.5 = 10) members added to the usable VLA members.

 

Restriction: Respected - $5 bonus

Writing: Spotted a few mistakes: realy -> really / mexicans -> Mexicans (?) / Comrades -> comrades. Other than that: text coloring the names and 'kill enemy objectives'', use of Spanish words, etc. - $16

Presentation: Excellent cutscenes, gang members added around the property to make it more lively (even a cop speaking to one gang member), classic drug deal setup, ambush from the previous buyer (when the enemies appear, it could have been made better: i.e. a transition cutscene or something instead of them just appearing out of nowhere), Russians using Spanish words (meh?), Scarface refference: ''Say hello to my little friend!'' - $16

Length: 8:40'14 - $18

Difficulty: Killing the enemies is very easy since you can headshot them. Killing Martin (the ''final boss'') is very easy too (even though he cannot be killed by a headshot). Be careful of the helicopter exploding and killing everyone in the parking lot though which raises the difficulty of the mission (since for some it could be a question of luck or bad luck). - $20

Variety: 35 different things (20 actors, 6 weapons, 6 vehicles, 1 object, 2 pickups) - $20

 

Bender: $1 000 added for selling the 100 pills of Ecstasy.

 

 

Varrios Los Aztecas / Russian Mafia: Two missions out of three made before ally status is reached.

 

 

mister busta: Added your money and members earned from Bender's rate.

mister busta: Removed $500 from your gang's bank account and added Ecstasy (100 Pills) to your gang's inventory.

 

 

QED: Your mission will be rated shortly (by Bender). Please be patient.

 

 

SatournFan: Your mission will be rated shortly (by myself).

[Curtis]

QED: $54 added to the San Fierro Rifa gang bank account and (5,4 - 0,4 = 5) 5 members added to the usable SFR members.

Difficulty: Easy $6

Length: 4:55.14 Good $12

Restriction: Respected $5 Bonus

Variety: 7 actors and 5 cars Decent $8

Writing: Question mark forgotten, pleasure "dome" instead of "domes" and "we're" should be "we were" and the dialogue after killing the da nang boys felt weird. Usage of spanish words. Good $14

Presentation: Two SFR members go to the da nang boys to rescue three of their members. Not really a long and complex mission but it's good. $9