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The title may seems silly. But don't judge the mission by it's title. (JK)



"I will protect my daughter at all cost."


-Jack Thompson


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Intro: 1981-1996



San Fierro 1981. Crisis economy of San Andreas is getting worse as the corruption and tyranical government rules the region cities and oppress the poor people. Only Las Venturas that did not suffer under the tyranical of San Andreas governor Anas Urbaningrum. The rich getting richer and the poor getting poorer. So the only way people can survive in this state is to become as evil as their government. One of these people is Jack Thompson. A 25 years old man who has stuck in the crime life since he was teenager. He and his team have done many criminal acts for years. Until a time when they managed to steal Matsuda's belongings. Leader of Reiketsuna Kira Yakuza operating at San Fierro. The yakuza killed Jack's wife and kidnaped his 2 years old daughter. After rescued his daughter, Jack abandoned his team and fled to Las Venturas for the safety of his daughter, which is much safer than San Fierro. Then, he lives peacefully for 15 years. Until the mayor of Las Venturas that always oppose the dictatorship government, dies misteriously. Las Venturas will be the 2nd most corrupt city in San Andreas.



Act 1: Back to San Fierro (1996-????)



Coming soon!





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Jack Thompson


Age:


Intro: 25 years old


Act 1: 40 years old


Already explained in the Intro story.



Erick Wright


Age:


Intro: 22 years old


Act 1: 37 years old


Jack's co-leader. And also Jack's old partner since they were teenagers. He loves money and will do anything to get as much money as possible.



Tony Owens


Age:


Intro: 24 years old


Act 1: 39 years old


Strategist of the team. He's cunning and often solved the problems of the team.



James Gamer


Age:


Intro: 21 years old


Act 1: 36 years old


A computer genius. Perfect at hacking. But a little idiot at socializing. Often called by Jack as 4 eyes or nerd.



Matsuda Yamamoto


Age:


Intro: 25 years old


Act 1: 40 years old


Leader of Reiketsuna Kira Yakuza. Cruel, vindictive, and can't be trusted. He's also Jack's old classmate, that always bullied by Jack.



Gomez Reyes


Age: Unknown


Former leader of San Fierro Rifa. Killed by Matsuda.



More characters will be revealed soon!


 




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Reiketsuna Kira


Leader: Matsuda Yamamoto


Strength: High




San Fierro Rifa


Leader: Gomez Reyes (Deceased)


Strength: Low



More gangs will be revealed soon!


 




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Intro:


Prologue (Jack Thompson)


http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/39170



I Quit (Jack Thompson)


http://dyom.gtagames.nl/show/40118



Act 1:



W.I.P.




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Dutchy3010 and PatrickW. for creating DYOM


DKI (me) for creating the missions, and also the headers

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Guys, seriously, what's with the overused "government oppressor rebellion resistance guerilla hurr durr" mission packs lately? This is not ARMA for christ sakes..

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Sorry if i made a MP with that "government oppressor rebellion resistance guerilla hurr durr". I don't know if someone else made MP like that. I just thought that gangster MP is overused so i choosed this theme. It's not about fighting the dictator. The "government oppressor rebellion resistance guerilla hurr durr" is only for the story and the player will not fight against them. But if this really that overused then i will change the plot a bit since the Intro missions doesn't have government nor dictatorship words so i still have time to change it.


However, i respect your opinion and i don't want to argue with you. But really, give it a try before judging the mission.


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Hdxt_Hardluck

i laugh at the name cuz it means something like, you know :p , anywyas i'll try to give a review ASA i finish the tow mission keep it up :D

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^Just making an unique name :D Waiting for your reviews.

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Huzaifa khan

Should try this. Good luck :)

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Hdxt_Hardluck

The Prologue



Writing: very good


There is nothing's bad in the grammars or spelling it's just few mistakes, logical mistake, you said "enter the car instead of turk"


Presentation: Very good


The presentation of this MP was pretty nice and attractive , the thing i laugh hard at it, when the russain guy said "Well, that was the signal"


Length: very good


The mission run from 6 to 10 mins (i'm not pro GTA player but enough to shot)


Difficulty: Meduim


The actor accuracy meduim, i able to pass through em' easy way, the poursuit wasn't too hard too, just meduim.


Variety: Very good


Lot of object we see you've put, shoting, pursuits, etc... just fine



I quit



Writing: very good


just few mistakes, but they still understandbale


Presentation: Very good


The presentation of this MP was pretty nice and attractive , only one bug the actor goes no where at the first cutscene? since you alredy poit that it's ok


Length: very good


The mission run from 6 to 8 mins (i'm not pro GTA player but enough to shot)


Difficulty: easy


Just easy.


Variety: Very good


just fine.



overall i've enhoy this tow mission in such nice way just improve the bad things you've done mistakly and it will be great my rate goess 7.8/10


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Thank you so much for your rating :D I'll try to make my mission better.

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Jack Thompson? I've heard that name before.

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Alan Eastwood

Jack Thompson? I've heard that name before.

 

The guy who was against gta and video game violence. Looks like he's back to take the goverment down for good.

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I just randomly choosen that name. I swear i don't know who is the guy you talking about.

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Alright, I decided to give it a shot.

 

It was not as bad as I expected, but not good either.

The first mission started nicely. I liked the use of objects. However, it was very confusing that there was completely no backstory to the mission at all. I know it's written in this topic, but i purposely ignore them when playing the mission pack to see if you get the story flow nicely, as you should also give people some hints of what's going on. There were none. All I know it was an ambush. Who were the people on my side? Why were we ambushing them? Were we a gang? A government organisation? The story flow gets a very low grade from me.

i couldn't finish the mission - it kept crashing when the yakuzas start chasing us. I think it might be an overlooked DYOM bug, as I had that happen in my own missions too.

 

As for the second mission, well, it was definitely worse.

First of all, the entire mission as confusing. The only way I knew it was a nightmare is because of the description of the mission in DYOM.gtagames.nl. If I wouldn't have read that, I would have thought you're insane.

The entire wife murder scene was just one big epic fail. The guys wife is murdered, and the first thing he worries about is to get his friend to take care of the body. The dialogue and monologue is so unconvincing it hurts.

The shootout scene was nice, but could have used some polishing. The dialogue once again was a big pile of no no. The best part is - I couldn't finish that mission either, after killing every attacker - nothing happened.

 

Why such a bad review? Once again - rush, rush, rush. You obviously rush your missions so you can throw them into release as soon as you can. The fact that the guy gave you 7.8 is disappointing, it just shows how much the quality of the missions have dropped. No, this mission pack is not terrible, it's okay overall, I saw worse, but this is definately not worth more than a 5. Because that's exactly how much minutes you put into your missions.

 

Do not rush your missions, take your time to create them, add as much detail as possible, and make sure people can understand what's going on. Because I couldn't.

 

Final score:

 

4/10

 

Amateur

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PyThOn #TakeItEasy

Nice, goodluck for this (and for contest) ;)

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