[CONTEST] Slam Them Poetry

[bodyparts 1,667]

 

Poetry Slam is the aesthetic equivalent to letting others mark your feces. It is practiced by thousands worldwide but it isn't near as popular as it's slightly retarded cousin, battlerap. The rules of Poetry Slam are pretty basic; A number of poets perform their poems while a very selective jury molest them mentally with their marks (ranged from 1 to 10).

Slam Them Poetry is my very own concept. It's very similar to Poetry Slam, only big difference really is that the texts are written by you in opposite to being spit by obnoxious catladies.

 

 

If you want to participate, simply post your poem* below and just cross your fingers. Every week a winner will be announced. They will have the honor to judge the next week's contest and might be awarded a wet kiss by the great paperbagdude (He didn't agree on this, please stay quite).

The jury consists of me, the previous weeks winner and three very lucky volunteers (PM me). The highest and lowest mark will be dismissed as the judges might have had a dispute/love affair with the contestant.

*A poem can be anything from a haiku to a 'Always Sunny In Philadelphia'- Screenplay.

 

 

TBA

 

Edited October 11, 2015 by HipsterHillbilly

[paperbagdude 3,964]

Well, since lyrics are basically poetry, here is the song I wrote under 2 hours and then later spend 3 hours improving.

 

The song is about the breakup with my girlfriend I had back in Septemper this year. The verses basically describes a few of the many experiences we had together and how I felt. She often told me she knew I stared at her a lot, smiling, obviously because I admired her a lot. Hence the ''And I couldn’t get my eyes off you'' in the end of each verse.

 

The chorus basically describes the pain and misery she left me in, and how I always (and still) question myself why she actually left me (I was probably a little too nice).

 

Context of the chorus:

''And don’t think I will go for a new'': I won't let myself tempt by other women, either romantically nor sexually.

''I shall always keep an extra seat only for you'': The day she chooses to return (sure, I'm doing my best to get her back myself), I will no matter the situation welcome her back into my life. With caution of course.

 

Anyway, here's the song itself.

 

 

 

 

Back to first day of school

I didn’t know what do

I was missing a girl to love

And you got in my sight

And I knew it was right

And I couldn’t get my eyes off you

 

Chorus:

 

So tell me sweet, sweet baby

Why you'd leave me all like this?

Did your love really disappear in the mist?

You left me sad and alone

In a dark room to moan

And don’t think I will go for a new

I shall always keep an extra seat only for you

 

It was lunch time in school

And I knew what to do

I asked for the seat beside of you

And you said ‘yes please’

And you smiled at me

And I couldn’t get my eyes off you

 

So tell me sweet, sweet baby

Why you'd leave me all like this?

Did your love really disappear in the mist?

You left me sad and alone

In a dark room to moan

And don’t think I will go for a new

I shall always keep an extra seat only for you

 

Back to the field trip with school

And we shared the same room

And slept only inches apart

Played small fun games

And spoke the time away

And I couldn’t get my eyes off you

 

So tell me sweet, sweet baby

Why you'd leave me all like this?

Did your love really disappear in the mist?

You left me sad and alone

In a dark room to moan

And don’t think I will go for a new

I shall always keep an extra seat only for you

 

Bridge:

 

One Friday after school, on a bus to my hometown with you

Our friend let us alone for hours to pass

Sitting in my couch with you in my arms

It was hard to tell if this was love

But I felt a sense of it going through my blood

 

And we crashed into my bed and fell asleep…

 

And we woke up

And your green eyes

And my blue eyes

Spoke to each other

And you felt it

And I felt it

We both felt the sweetest love, you and me

And your lips

And my lips

Finally got fused together

/

So baby give me you love again

And I shall give you mine in exchange

And let it go on forever

Just a lonely boy nowadays

Who constantly only prays

For you to return

 

Because I miss you…

 

 

 

So tell me sweet, sweet baby

Why you'd leave me all like this?

Did your love really disappear in the mist?

You left me sad and alone

In a dark room to moan

And don’t think I will go for a new

I shall always keep an extra seat only for you

 

And don’t think I will go for a new.

I shall always keep an extra seat only for you, baby.

 

Copyright C. D. Pedersen, 2015

 

 

Edited October 8, 2015 by paperbagdude

[bodyparts 1,667]

That's f*cking great, Danish.

 

Just to clarify; Anything can be poetry. Sh*t, you could post your third grade exame and I would accept it.. Now don't post your third grade exame, please don't just don't.

 

Edited October 8, 2015 by HipsterHillbilly

[paperbagdude 3,964]

That's f*cking great, Danish.

 

Just to clarify; Anything can be poetry. Sh*t, you could post your third grade exame and I would accept it.. Now don't pst your third grade exame, please.

I totally wish

Billy would let me post my,

Third grade exams, but...

[bodyparts 1,667]

haikus are harder

than me when i see your feet

now give me that meat

 

 

 

 

Now let's get back to business.

[LeakyLine 5,871]

Poem

That'll sure show'em

Poem

 

AHH YE

[Mokrie Dela 2,874]

Interesting idea. I can't say I like your presentation much. Far too aggressive. But it's good to see poetry encouraged. Aspirational, as I'm not sure there'll be enough for this to work consistently, and the aforementioned presentation raises concerns with me about the jury and such but hey. I'll keep and eye on this, make sure it all runs smoothly, and all.

[bodyparts 1,667]

Yeah, I can see how the introduction was a bit agressive. I will try to change it a bit later on.

[Ferocious Banger 148]

You want me to write a poem, baby girl?

You think yo will be right?

Dayumn, let me give my fingers a twirl,

as I let this poem go up the web like a whirl.

[waxman. 2,231]

A twisted cortex of spirals above,

Upon a painted night sky.

That's where I found my one true love,

But for lust, a star must die.

The scope was my pen

As I magnified the heavens

My mind, the envelope

That'd I send with intentions.

You'd leave me in awe

For hours on end,

There was never a time

I had to pretend,

That I loved you.

 

Though your love was exotic,

And we'd meet at night.

You'd dress in black,

And your smile was bright.

The more I looked closer,

The further I saw.

And the further I saw,

I wanted more,

But received none.

 

You were coated in mystery,

And often were still.

But sometimes you'd shoot off

A star for the thrill.

Startled, until

I knew of your nature.

Like humans, in patterns

I fathomed your stranger,

But you knew me.

 

So I broke my scope,

And locked up my mind.

How could you lie to me,

Your love, genuine?

I could barley believe it,

But you kept on moving.

I would glimpse at you often

Through the hole in my ceiling,

You were still.

 

Now as I use this pen,

This pen is my scope.

But what stays the same,

My mind, the envelope.

I will always love you,

But my love it has tainted.

Like the scars on your skin

Through the time,

Through the ages.

We both bleed.

[Mokrie Dela 2,874]

A twisted cortex of spirals above,

Upon a painted night sky.

That's where I found my one true love,

But for lust, a star must die.

The scope was my pen

As I magnified the heavens

My mind, the envelope

That'd I send with intentions.

You'd leave me in awe

For hours on end,

There was never a time

I had to pretend,

That I loved you.

 

Though your love was exotic,

And we'd meet at night.

You'd dress in black,

And your smile was bright.

The more I looked closer,

The further I saw.

And the further I saw,

I wanted more,

But received none.

 

You were coated in mystery,

And often were still.

But sometimes you'd shoot off

A star for the thrill.

Startled, until

I knew of your nature.

Like humans, in patterns

I fathomed your stranger,

But you knew me.

 

So I broke my scope,

And locked up my mind.

How could you lie to me,

Your love, genuine?

I could barley believe it,

But you kept on moving.

I would glimpse at you often

Through the hole in my ceiling,

You were still.

 

Now as I use this pen,

This pen is my scope.

But what stays the same,

My mind, the envelope.

I will always love you,

But my love it has tainted.

Like the scars on your skin

Through the time,

Through the ages.

We both bleed.

Man I th I that deserves its own topic

Really enjoyed it

[bodyparts 1,667]

@mokrie & athande: Totally agree. That's purely amazing.

 

How about we close this thread and open a new one where people can share their poetry and song lyrics without being judged?

[Mokrie Dela 2,874]

If you want it locked, say so (clearly! ) and I'll lock it

As for a single poetry topic, no. This section isn't busy enough for that. By all means start a topic with all yours, but for most people who've written the odd one here and there, like stories, they'll be fine in their own topic

Edited October 27, 2015 by Mokrie Dela

[bodyparts 1,667]

I will hit you up if I want to end this miserable topic.

 

Are you sure a poetry thread wouldn't work? It could be something like the writers room or the creators lounge - a place where people can share their poetry and ideas. It doesn't need to be active, just that we have a place where one can share their deepest thoughts and read others.

 

Maybe I could put it in general chat if it would gain more attention!?

 

Love.

 

Off topic: Is it impossible to change names even though half ayear is yet to pass?

Edited October 27, 2015 by HipsterHillbilly

[Shmoopy 191]

I will hit you up if I want to end this miserable topic.

 

Are you sure a poetry thread wouldn't work? It could be something like the writers room or the creators lounge - a place where people can share their poetry and ideas. It doesn't need to be active, just that we have a place where one can share their deepest thoughts and read others.

 

Maybe I could put it in general chat if it would gain more attention!?

 

Love.

 

Off topic: Is it impossible to change names even though half ayear is yet to pass?

It would be best if you make one where people can cooperate in writing a short novel, you begin by planning the genre and the cast, alongside the characteristics and the back-story of the protagonist and the plot, you choose a member to start with a proper introduction, the other members will post their part of the story developing the plot, you then decide whether it is time to finish it with a proper ending. A big plus would be to allow members to put drawings alongside their part of the story, or even better,you make a list of images portraying the protag with different expressions.

 

I think this would make a great thread.

[Mokrie Dela 2,874]

The problem with social writing topics (look at the bar) is twofold

 

1) people rarely keep it up. A sub forum this size doesn't have the traffic for it to work

 

2) people tend to tread on others' toes, killing off each others characters and undermining others work. The bar didn't suffer from that but it's a risk

 

On these forums, it'd be much more benifitial to simply show your own solo projects.you can of course co write with someone

 

By all means go for it, but I don't think it's work,nag least beyond the dual novelty period

 

 

 

And no, a poetry thread just isn't necessary. It's not like they'll get lost. You can have a 'catalogue' topic grouping all your own poems in one place if you want, but a communal poetry topic? Nah.

[bodyparts 1,667]

@schmoopy: Couldn't you start it? I would support it with any means necessary.

 

@mokrie: Nah, I might do a thread where everyone can post anything from the deepest part of their hearts. A thread where anyone can post anything that atleast look poethic to a 6 year old.

[Mokrie Dela 2,874]

Obviously your free to post anything you want, within the rules, but I just see it as a futile task. Scroll to the bottom of the front page of WD and there's topics six months old. Poems aren't going to get missed too easily, but if you really want to start a project like that, go for it, I guess