Grand Theft Auto: State On The Edge Of Forever

[Liver Buster]

I don't want to appear desperate, but I can't wait to see a new mission!

 

Although, it is mighty mind boggling to read all these old chapters. Like re-watching The Wire.

Nah, it's cool. Actually I have been too lazy to re-post the old missions. My actual plan was to finish re-posting them till by today, and post the new part on Tuesday. I'll be out of the town for a few days this week, probably I'll have the chance to post the new chapter by the end of this week, or the start of September. My plan is finishing Chapter I before my school starts, so the story would be much slick.

 

About Chapter II, I can't give an exact date when we can see it. Probably, the second chapter will be the longest one, as we will say a big goodbye to Los Santos after it, and moreover, there are so many plots revolving around this chapter... I'll give more info about them after Chapter I is finished. As a preparation for the new chapter, I started to re-watch The Wire yesterday... hopefully, this will put food on my table.

 

As a little sneak peek for the next two parts...

 

#14: The first appearance of coke dealer David P. Collins. The missions is much similar to To Live and Die in Alderney from GTA IV, to be honest.

#15: A crossover to San Andreas, as far as I can say...

Edited August 25, 2014 by TheUnholy

[Liver Buster]

 

- PART 9 -

 

Silent Predators

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Kane stops by Combo's apartment in Idlewood to check him out after Nate said that he run out from JD's clinic. Kane presses the buzzer a few times, but there is no one to answer. Later, he recognizes the loud laughs coming around the corner. Kane, thinking that it is no doubt Combo, goes to check it out. When he goes around the corner, Kane's suspicions were revealed to be right: there's Combo sitting around with two other Ballas drinking booze.

"Hey, Kane! Sup! Wanna some beer?" Combo, a bit dizzy on beer, offers Kane some beer to drink.

"You tell me what the f*ck you doin' here or what?" Kane doesn't even answer and angrily scolds Combo.

"I was bored like a motherf*cker. Moreover, JD not the talkin' type. And of course, I'm a man of action." Combo continued sipping his ice cold beer.

"Action? What you talkin' about? The other day, yo' ass got shot up by some crazy drugheads. You were gonna bleed out if it wasn't us. And you still have f*cking big holes up yo' chest."

"Uhh, f*ck off, Kaynard boy." Combo ignores once again and chuckes the cold beer can at once.

"Y'know what, man? You f*cking crazy. You not normal. It not everybody's thing to kill some guy, or burnin' some place down everytime." That was the last tap for Kane.

"Then what? [chuckles] You gonna send me over that damn anger management course? [fingerpoints the billboard on the pizza parlor] Or maybe you should hand me over a plumber, because you treat me like sh*t! [smashes the beer can on the ground]" Combo chuckles and fingerpoints the billboard on pizza parlor with a bald, white man with thick glasses, that reads "Dr.Lewis' Anger Management Course", however later he does a joke that also carries reality for him and smashes the empty beer can on the ground angrily.

"Maybe I should." Kane gives a hinting look as he says.

After a short silence, Combo breaks it out.

"You serious?" Combo, as well as, a confused look on his face.

Kane just doesn't talk but he gives the same hinting look. Probably, Kane doesn't think it will work on Combo as well, but he would probably deciding to take this way to keep Combo under control, at least for a short while.

"Okay. I'll go, but only to make you see that don't mean sh*t!" Combo said both angrily and with ignorant manners.

Later, the two men jack a vehicle and go to the anger management clinic in Commerce. Once they enter the clinic, a woman employee standing by a counter on the left side of the entrance meets Kane and Combo.

"Hi, gentlemen! May I help you?" The woman employee says with a gentle voice.

"Hey! My friend here, y'know... eh... he's got anger issues. And we thought you could help him." Kane says.

"Barely." Combo silently says.

"Yes. There's a fast two-weeks anger management course, just for you and..."

Kane's cellphone rings.

Kane goes away from the counter and answers the call.

"Yeah?" Kane answered the call.

"It's Bulleye, man." The caller revealed himself.

"Yeah, man. What you need?"

"There something big comin' up. I need you to go meet with Gabe..."

"Uh man. Something urgent? Cuz' I was in the middle of somethin'." Kane cuts through Bulleye's words.

"Afraid it is. Gabe waitin' you at the old, abandoned carpark in WF. He'll explain further."

" 'kay, man. Goin'." Kane said and hanged up the phone.

Kane goes back to the counter.

"Man. There somethin' showed up. I think I gotta go, quick." Kane told Combo.

"I understand. You a busy boy. Go, homie. I can take care of myself." Combo gave a chill pill to Kane.

Kane has a fist bump with Combo.

"A'right. Catch you later." Kane flashed a smile meanwhile the blonde employee warmly smiled to him.

...

Quickly, Kane goes to the old, abandoned autopark in Willowfield. He finds Gabe waiting with two Balla goons and a gray Sentinel.
"Hey, man. Bulleye talked some sh*t be urgent or somethin'." Kane asks Gabe for further information.

"Just get in. I'll explain on the way. We bein' late." Gabe said and the four men quickly loaded themselves in the gray Sentinel.

"Where we headed?" Kane, on the driver seat, asks.

"You gettin' us to the construction site for the conference center."

A few minutes later, Kane asks the same thing to Gabe.

"A'right, man. Now, you tell me, what's goin' on?" Kane asked to Gabe.

"We goin' somethin' after big. There is some new Greek dealers in the city, but they connected though. They lookin' for a good crack source, so here we are." Gabe briefly asks.

"Bulleye lookin' for loading up the pond, eh?"

"Exactly. Bulleye may have a lil' anger issues but he a businessman, fo' real. Today's market be more than slingin' dope on the corners and sh*t." Gabe says a bit agressively.

"Relax, man. I was just bustin' yo' balls." Kane chuckles and says.

"You be careful 'bout that, nigga. Bulleye is like a father to me. He takin' care of me since 12. He feed me, he gave me hot bed, all that sh*t. So, I'm sensitive 'bout that." Gabe gives Kane a little warning.

"Man, you heard of mescaline? Try it when smokin' weed, okay?" Kane busts Gabe's balls a bit.

"Man, shut the hell up." Gabe chuckled and said.

When the men arrive the meeting location, they get out of their wheels but they realize there's nobody around yet.

"Man. Where are them cocksuckers?" Gabe said impatiently.

Then a navy Patriot cut through the construction site and pulled up just in front of Kane, Gabe and the two other Ballas. A short, white man who is obviously buffed with steroid, wearing a black sun hat, black torso and a pair of dark blue jeans outshined himself, probably he's the dominant one.

"You late." Gabe tried to roughen up the Greek a bit.

"You know, niggas. The jam traffic is a damn problem in this city.

"What did you just say!?" Kane, hearing the N word, angrily came forward. Gabe tried to stop him, putting his hand on his chest.
"I... I... don't mean to be racist or something. I tried to be sympathetic. That's it." The Greek defended himself.

"Well... Don't be f*cking sympathetic. We just doin' business here." Kane was still angry.

"Uhh... let's go down the business, yeah?" Gabe tried to cool down the bad atmosphere.

Gabe zipped off the bag, revealing the dimebags full of crack in it. Zeus attempted to reach out for a dimebag but the whole place got shaken by deep, loud biker motor sounds. Then two bikers, with cobra icon on the back of their leather jackets, confronted the deal.

"Well, well, well... You ditched us for these damn ni**ers, Zeus? You're a f*cking traitor." One of the bikers, with a Sawn-Off shotgun in his hand, talked under his bushy beard with a redneckish mouth.

"You better watch you mouth, or I'll rip yo' bad tongue off." Kane was pissed off over those racist bikers.

"Shut up, chocolate boy. I'm talking with this treacherous f*ck here." The biker did burst fire on his eyes while he was at the end of the sentence.

"f*ck off, skinheads. The deal is off. You're a bunch of racist f*ckers but nothing more. Also your ice is sh*t! Like chili powder in it." Zeus gone rough towards those racist bikers.

Later, a short silence will dominate the area, just the two side will look at each others' with angry eyes.

"I'm pissed now!" The other biker, who is notably younger than the other, fired his Sawn-off shotgun, putting a bullet on one of the random Ballas' skull.

However, the bikers could make more action; Kane, Gabe, the other Balla, Zeus and his two men emptied their magazines on the two bikers, killing them in cold blood.

Right after, the men will be aware of harsh, strong, approaching motorbike engines. So Gabe opens the trunk of his Sentinel and hands Kane an AK-47 which has been stuffed up there.

"Would make a hand, homie." Gabe shoved the assault rifle out of the trunk and hit it on Kane's chest.

Later, a wave of hostile bikers will show up on the area quickly and they will start ride madly, drawing 360 while opening fire on all Kane, Gabe and Zeus. Here will make a challenge for the player, because the bikers are drawing 360, they will need steadily change the side of their covers (on Gabe's car obviously).

After brushing the mad bikers, other Balla goon gets killed by a biker that wields sniper on the top of the building under construction.

"What the f*ck!?" Gabe will respond with a open mouth as the bullet goes through his homeboy's skull.

"sh*t! How did they get up there?" Zeus will respond confused, as well.

The whole men will take cover behind their cars, not wanting to be a clear target for the sniper.

"Shoot the sniper, Kane." Gabe orders.

Now, Kane must shoot the sniper and the three other bikers protecting him. However, it's advisable to kill the sniper first, because one shot from the sniper rifle will result in a huge waste of health. After the sniper is killed, the other bikers will not be much of a big deal.

The men, get out of their covers, thinking that it's finished but two bikers suddenly show up, fully speeding up. The biker in the front immediately grabs the bag full of crack and rushes away. The other biker tries to keep up with his friend but he is stopped when he gets shot by in the skull by Gabe.

"Go grab that bike, and get the damn bag back!" Gabe orders Kane.

Kane takes the bike of the dead biker and tails on the escaping biker. The biker surprisingly makes his way into construction site. He jumps over a ramp in the site, landing on the road. For his chance on an empty spot. Later, he makes his way into the sewer, will continuously turn left and right. However, when he jumps out of the sewer, a car bumps into him, causing him to fall off his bike. Here, the biker reluctantly gives the bag to Kane and starts to plead for his life.

"Give me the bag!" Kane will harshly tell to the biker.

However, the biker will hold onto bag more tightly.

"Give me the f*cking bag!" Kane now points his gun on the injured biker, demanding the bad with more intimading style.
The biker reluctantly drops the bag, having Kane take it.

"Okay. Now I gave you the bag. Now please don't kill me. Please!" The biker will start pleading for his life, meanwhile he whines like a little b*tch.

Now the player is given the choice of killing the biker or sparing his life.

KILL
Kane, whose Pistol is still in his hand, fires six bullets on the biker's torso.

SPARE
Kane just kicks the biker softly and tells him "Just get the f*ck out of here."

Afterwards, Kane gets the bag back to Gabe and Zeus, who are still waiting at the construction site.

"I got your bag." Kane says with cool manners while he walks like a badass.

Gabe hands the bag and opens it again, holding it towards Zeus to let him have a sample.

Zeus gets a piece of rock, put it in the palm of his hand, later he smashes the rock with the butt of his gun and snorts it. Zeus will experiene difficulties while he tries to get the rock pieces through his nose. After, Zeus will shake himself like he is warped by an electrical leak, which leaves Kane and Gabe watching him with open mouth.

"Wow! That's what I can call 'good sh*t'. A'right, man. The deal is on. Take this [shoves a wad of cash from his pocket] as a deposit for out big deal." Zeus will steadily sniff, in order to get the rock piece get through his nose canals and gets a reasonable amount of cash from his pocket, hands it to Gabe.

Gabe counts the money, later he nods his head, like saying that the green light is given. However, Gabe will say nothing, he will just get back in the car with Kane.

"I guess... see you around then." Zeus will surprisedly say and get back in his Patriot with the crack bag.

"Take me over the club, eh. So I can tell Bulleye about this thing." Gabe asks Kane for a lift to Alhambra.
...

"f*ck, man! Those skinhead bikers are crazy. They killed two of our boys." Gabe says.

"Yeah, what a clusterf*ck was that. However, we saved our own skins. You'd be glad." Kane tries to look at the glass from the full side.

"Screw this, man! It's a shame a couple of racist ass bastards come and screw your deal."

"It always work that way. At least, we have the money, the Greek guy have the rock."

"Damn straight right." Gabe puts a solid end.

When they arrive at Alhambra, Gabe will thank for his good services today, and gives him a six thousand to show his respect.

"The deal is on, and you did good today, bro. You deserved that. [gives Kane a six G] Laters, homie." Gabe will get six thousand bucks from the stack of cash Zeus paid for crack and give it to Kane.

"Thanks, homie. Laters." Kane will bid farewell to Gabe.

Gabe gets out of the car and slowly walks to the gate of Alhambra.



Shortly after this part is completed, Kane will be ringed by one of his crew members named Nay Nay.


"Hey, Kane. Long time no see, homie." Nay Nay makes a fast introduction.

"Yeah, if you find some time to drop by yo' homies, we can see each other." Kane sarcastically criticizes Nay Nay's habit of frequenting Alhambra.

"You right. You goddamn right, man. There always somethin' showin' up, I'm a busy artist, y'know. Anyway, I heard you rollin' with Bulleye. That true?"

"Yes. True." Kane keeps it short and simple."

"Ice cool, homie. Bulleye is a straight dog, I mean. Just know his weight. Also we should hang out soon, homie... get some chicks to the bed or somethang." Nay Nay is totally a bad hat.

"Yeah. Whatever. See you soon, Nay Nay." Kane hangs up the phone.


After a long while after the completion of this part, Kane receives a phone call from Bulleye.

"Kane! How you doin', my dog?" Bulleye greets Kane as soon as he answers the phone.

"Not much. You?" Kane asks.

"I heard some f*cking bikers cap some of our boys' ass but things are cool. Zeus, that Greek dealer, called me. Nigga lookin' for someone to know the city well and I suggested you. You cool, homie?" Bulleye is happy like Pollyanna, totally surprising.

"Man, don't get me wrong but that guy is a pain in the ass." The reluctance flowed through Kane's body when he said this.

"I'd do it myself but my head drown in business. Come on, Kane." Bulleye even pleaded to Kane to have him do this.

"A'right, man. A'right. Where the cat holed up?" Kane asks for an adress.

"He stays at one of 'em brick like houses in Jefferson. I'll tell him you comin'."

"Okay, man. I'll check on the creep bastard. Catch you later." Kane reluctantly says and is about to hang up the phone.

"Oh, man. Hold on. I almost forgot. There's a train and the plan be robbin' it. You on the board, also Gabe'll help you as well, but this is a three-men job. Find yo' man for the job and we be all set." Bulleye cuts out before Kane hangs up the phone.

"Okay. I'll check the homies for that. See ya' all later." Kane hangs up the phone.

[cj2000]

 

Greek Gang

Actually, not wide as a gang, Greeks are a crew of drug dealers who work for Russians and seek new opportunities for them. They're thought to be a big LSD supplier, yet they're willing to make cooperations with other gangs, because they want to expand their interests (moving into trade of the drugs such as crack cocaine, crystal meth etc.) for their Russian bosses and for theirselves. Also they're thought to have connections with several burglars from South Central Los Santos.

So is there also a russian mafia gang in your concept?

[Liver Buster]

 

 

Greek Gang

Actually, not wide as a gang, Greeks are a crew of drug dealers who work for Russians and seek new opportunities for them. They're thought to be a big LSD supplier, yet they're willing to make cooperations with other gangs, because they want to expand their interests (moving into trade of the drugs such as crack cocaine, crystal meth etc.) for their Russian bosses and for theirselves. Also they're thought to have connections with several burglars from South Central Los Santos.

So is there also a russian mafia gang in your concept?

Yep, there is a Russian gang, but they're mostly inactive as Greeks are their connection in the city. I'm planning to make them include physically just in one part of Chapter V.

[Liver Buster]

- PART 10 -

Sugarboy

"I done with that gay-ass course, homie. Now, I'm soft like a f*cking cotton candy. So what you up to?"

Columbus "Combo" Burton

 

 

On the orders of Bulleye, Kane goes to Zeus' residence in Jefferson. As Kane walks down the pavement, he recognizes Zeus, along with a couple of his men, drinking canned beer but they don't seem to be drunk. Kane shakes his head in shame. It was obvious that Kane doesn't want to do this in everycase. However, he must because orders are orders even if it means babysitting a steroid pumped douchebag.

"Here is the black dude! Hey, man. What's up? Zeus wipes the beer out of his mouth with his hand as soon as he sees Kane in front of his yard. He greets him and offers him a shoulder greeting.

"Yeh. How you doin' ?" Kane passes the greeting, his unwillingness was exactly seen.

"Could do with a better place, y'know? A mountain home in Vinewood, or a cute crib down Marina Beach..." Zeus replies and throws away the empty beer can in his hand.

"If you have somethin' big in yo' pocket, I'm sure yo' bosses may pay yo' services better." Kane arrogantly says.

"Yeah, man. That's exactly what I'm doing. I got in contact with some dudes down the east of the city. They could be a nice source of coke."

"Hello, people! Combo is back." Combo appears out of the blue, which makes Kane unsatisfied yet curious.

"Yo, who is this fat potato right there?" Zeus fingerpoints Combo and says.

"Hey, Kane. Who this steroid ape friend o' yours?" Combo strikes back with a similar sense of humour.

Zeus and Kane started to walk towards each other, while Zeus' men got their hands on the guns stuck up their pants. Luckily, Kane cut in and the things started to get cool again.

"Combo, what you doin' here, fool? Yo gotta be at that anger management thang." Kane angrily says to Combo.

"I done with that gay-ass course, homie. Now, I'm soft like a f*cking cotton candy. So what you up to?"

"Look, man. I was plannin' to sleep all day after a hot action packed week, but I must help this motherf*cker right here buy some weight or somethin'. So if you..." Kane tries to fend Combo off his head but gets cut through by him.

"A drug deal? Sweet! F*cking awesome! Let's go." Combo excitedly said, probably looking for some good action after last boring two weeks and started to walk towards Zeus' navy Patriot.

"Man. What happening?" Zeus was confused.

"I don't know. Just come on." Kane was confused as well, but he didn't let his charisma ruined near Zeus.

Three men load themselves into Zeus' navy Patriot.

"A'right. I've my Uzi, just gimme a rag and I can clap the best of 'em NIGGAS. I listen gangsta sh*t everyday, I'm a big fan of Dogg." Zeus says.

"You being a dumb dick again, man. Shut the hell up and gimme the adress." Kane tells Zeus to stop being a fool, and wants a destination.

Zeus gets a little piece of paper from the lighter pocket of his pants and hands it to Kane.

"Man! This damn place be Vagos hood." Kane curiously says as soon as he reads the whole adress.

"Don't be a hot sh*t, homie. We ain't seen them Vago boys fo' a long time. This gonna be fun." Combo says.

"Yeah. You need to go walk in some serious sh*t after a sh*t time with prescription drugs and boring professor lectures. I forgot, huh?" Kane sarcastically criticizes Combo's love of action right now.

"Uh, shut the f*ck up! You chicken or what? So what's the thing?" Combo tries to stop Kane complaining about the fact that they're going to a deal with Vagos and asks for further information.

"Looking for some nice coke source. Gotta expand the f*cking vision, man. Now, there ain't one drug no more. Cocaine, heroine, crack, meth, acid... now it's the open market." Zeus expains furtherly.

"You's a goddamn huge investor, huh Zeus?" Kane sarcastically says.

"For sure, man. I mean I'm a successful businessman with more brains than muscles. I'm a wide thinking motherf*cker. I said I have brains more than muscles, but like some that Jack Howitzer movie and sh*t. You wanna touch my arms?" Zeus being cocky.

"Uhh, nah. Thanks. I like girls, pussies... y'know?" Kane spatchcockes immediately.

"Motherf*cker!" Zeus says as Combo bursts into deep laughs.

Later, the men arrive at the location: a long apartment block in East Los Santos. As soon as they enter the building, dozens of Vagos gangbangers eyes and shows hostile manners towards the men, especially to Kane and Combo, due to being a Balla colour. Zeus, Combo and Kane climb up to the fourth floor where the deal will take place.

They move down to the flat which is located at the left side of the floor. Zeus knockes on the door and the men are welcomed by a a bald Vagos gang member, who is with his underpants.

"Yeah?" The bald Vago with underpants, responds with a dizzy state of mind.

"Apparently you got snow, and I love making snowmen." Zeus tries to be both sympathic and cold by his manners.

"You got the greens, gringo?" The bald Vago was out of his previous dizzy state of mind.

"Sure. A satisfying amount of Benjamin Franklin." Zeus opens the bag, revealing a huge pile of money inside.
"A'right. Get in." The Vago chuckles and says.

Bald Vago lets the men in and leads them to a big dinner table on which there is a huge wall of dust cocaine.

"Wanna a taste?" The Vago asked with his deep Latin accent as he took a packet which was stayin apart from the wall and started to hop the package in his right hand.

"Cool." Zeus responded with an excited tone.

The Vago produced a little pocketknife from his pants and opened a little slit on the package to let Zeus sniff the snow.

"Here you go. Be careful, ese... sh*t's strong." The Vago warned as he handed the package to Zeus.

"Let us decide the sh*t's good or not. Go ahead, ape." Combo, as a violent yet strict businessman, tried to show that he's dominant.

Zeus takes a blow from the coke, he really likes the merchandise and is extremely eager to give a big bag of cash over it.

"Wow!.. [sniffs continously] I think I'm gonna f*cking bleed out." Zeus showed his like towards the coke, barely talking, still trying to get the coke through his nose canals.

Combo eyes the whole event with suspicious eyes.

"The wall... I want a brick from the wall." Combo, much more skeptical and suspicious, demands taking a taste from the huge coke pile.

"Come on, Combo. Don't be a jackass, man." Kane tries to stop Combo from going wild.

Combo quickly snatches a dust block from the wall, splits the brick into two. He takes one of the parts and snorts from it.

"Hey!" Combo said as he showed a weird face expression.

Combo dived one of his fingers into the package, a little dust debris got sticky on his finger. Later, Combo got his finger in his mouth, sucked it only to realize that it's just a pile of sugar wrapped to a piece of nylon.

"If we wanted to buy sugar, we would have gone to a supermarket, RIGHT!?" Combo angrily yelled on the sneaky Vago.

"Dumb buster." Kane said as he learnt that the dust is actually k's of sugar.

"What!? Sugar!?" Zeus said with an open mouth.

The trick enrages Combo and he starts to walk towards the gangster. The Vago tries to draw his gun but before he can, Combo grabs him by the neck, he pinches his neck with his left arm while he starts hitting his head over and over, with the another one. Vago yells for help but before any help comes, Combo manages to crack his skul, make his brains show up and eventually leaves him paralyzed. As Kane and Zeus watch this with horrible eyes, four Vagos members burst in from inner rooms, and spray fire on them.

Kane, Combo and Zeus quickly eliminate those Vagos (the player must act fast here, because Vagos members are armed with Advanced SMGs, with which they can easily eliminate the player, Zeus or Combo) and are welcomed by a shotgun wielding Vago, who shows up at the door right after the four Vagos are dead. The Vago will spray bullets randomly across the flat, which makes him a deadly target and Kane takes cover from the wall, or the dinner table the huge coke wall is located on, and kills the guy in the simpliest way.

Later, the men start to climb downstairs, but they're confronted by a dozen of Vagos members who use Pistols, in general.
When they're about to go down the first floor, a Vagos member at the ground floor throws a grenade which blows up the three other Vagos who were about to burst out from their flat. Here, Kane, Zeus and Combo must not urge because they'd be blown by the explosion, if they act so fast.
After that Vagos throws the grenade and it blows up, Kane, Zeus and Combo burst in and brutally kill him. At the ground floor, Kane, Zeus and Combo find three bikes (BMX) near the stairs. Kane unlocks the each bike, lets Zeus and Combo take first and he snatches the last one.

As soon as they exit the apartment, a yellow Voodoo, controlled by two Vagos gang members tails on the men and they guy at the passanger seat opens fire on them with a Micro SMG.

"Follow me... homeboys!" Zeus started to ride like crazy when he heard the first gunfire and told the others to follow him.

"Zeus! Hold on there, motherf*cker. You don't know the city." Kane said.

"Seriously, I hate this pumped monkey." Combo grunted as he tailed after Zeus.

The group follows the lead of Zeus, who will generally take alleyways, narrow roads and something like them. The hot-action car chase ends when Zeus rides into a playground where a white boy does show with his skateboard as another white yet fat, nerdy boy with glasses records a tape of it. Kane, Zeus and Combo speed down into pit in which the skater boy frequently goes down and up from. The Vagos leads the three men into the pit, but they bump onto the skater boy, killing him.

"Oh no! Phil! My star! My wonderful star!" The fat, nerd boy said with an open mouth as Phil was swimming in a pool of his own blood.

Driving so fast, the Vagos eventually lose the control of the car after they jumped over the pit, the car flips down and this leaves the two Vagos right in the middle of a burning wreck.

"Woo hoo! The motherf*ckers turned into a grilled cheese toast." Zeus yelled out.

Having got rid of the hostile attackers on their back, Zeus, Combo and Kane stop, Zeus thanks Kane and Combo and rides away.

"Wow! The sh*t went crazy back there." Zeus said with his action-loving voice tone.

"For sure." Kane said with a lame voice tone.

"Thanks, homies. If you weren't there, those spics would have turned me into extra size burrito." Zeus thanks Kane and Combo for protecting him.

"Don't mention it." Combo said with a lame voice tone, as well.

"I gotta roll. Catch you later, men." Zeus bid farewell to two men and rode away.

The short silence dominates the area until Kane comes back to the anger management thing.

"Combo, you ain't escaped from that damn course, did you?" Kane said while he held the anger inside him.

"Nah, nigga. It been two weeks since the damn course... the painkiller, dumb lectures and all that sh*t." Combo responds.

"You say so?.. sh*t." Kane couldn't believe the two weeks have ended up.

After a short silence, Combo jumps in.

"So... man. I've heard about that train heist and now I'm soft like a k of sugar wrapped in plastic, I think... I would be the man for the job." Combo surprisingly was in his most serious manner.

"Soft?.. Yeah, that mean a lot from a guy that cracked another guy's skull JUST an hour ago. [pauses for a second] Who the f*ck told you that?"

"Nay Nay. I pushed the little f*cker and he popped that out." Combo responds.

"Nay Nay?.. I will rip that b*tch's tongue off. That bastard." Kane said while grinding his teeth.

"So what you thinkin' ?" Combo asks for Kane's opinion on the train heist.

"I don't know, man. I don't f*cking now. Just gimme a break bit, a 'right." Kane exhaled a huge amount of air from his mouth and said.

"Well... I'm hungry like a motherf*cker. How about a Cluckin' Bell?" Combo asks Kane's company for a meal at Cluckin' Bell.

"Sure. I'd love me a Cluckin' Bell." Kane accepts Combo's offer.

Kane and Combo go over eating at the Cluckin' Bell in East Los Santos.

"Man. One day, I will go off a heart attack, eatin' buckets." Combo says.

"You've a huge belly sagging under yo' breasts." Kane mocks Combo's overweight.

"Shut the hell up."

Upon exiting the restaurant, Kane and Combo recognize a couple of Grove Street Families members spraying the wall oppositing the Cluckin' Bell.

"Look! Some Grove fools taggin' up our turf!" Combo fingerpoints a couple Families members who spray a wall green.

"Let's go get 'em." Combo yells.

There are three Grove members near the wall, one of them will be spraying the wall until he realizes two Ballas are coming to him. Here, you will be instructed melee fighting. You will be shown how to duck and deliver a hard fist in an opponent's stomach, how to grab an enemy by the collars and punch him in the face and something like that. First, the Families members will be unarmed, but after defeating them all, one of them will stand up and draw a knife on Combo and Kane. Now, Kane must disarm the gangster and steal his knife. Also, you don't need to get in a melee fight with the gangbangers, you can simply shoot them with your guns, but this way you won't be instructed melee fighting tactics.

After defeating the members, Combo gets the spray can of them, throws it to Kane.

"Wanna do some tag, man?" Combo throws the can to Kane, who catches it by the stomach.

Now, Kane must tag over the Grove graffiti on the wall. The grafitti system is more different than it's in GTA San Andreas. Spraying a tag is more like Bully style. You need to choose the graffiti type you want to spray and later go over it. Sometimes, your spray can will stop bursting paint. All you need to do this shake the can a bit, and it will start bursting paint again.

Combo will suggest going to do some gun practices.

"These fingers ain't seein' triggers fo' a long time. A little bit practice would be a'right." Combo sort of suggests go to shoot some guns.

"Yeah, I bet there'd be cramps in yo' fingers." Kane sarcastically comments.

So Kane and Combo go to Ammu-Nation in Willowfiled together and get into shooting range where two men have a friendly competition. For the mission, Kane and Combo both will be given Pistols. There will be several moving targets required to be shot. Winning the challenge or losing it won't affect the mission progress, just Combo will comment on the situation differently.

Kane wins
"The gear of the gun was wrong, I swear. Otherwise you wouldn't stand a damn chance." Combo says.
"Yeah, whatever man. I think yo' hands are too greasy to hold a gun." Kane responds.

Kane loses
"My homeboy. You need to learn a lot to reach yo' chief's level." Combo says.

...

"Drop yo' chief over his crib, eh?" Combo asks mixed with order.

After arriving at Combo's apartment. Combo asks Kane if he will involve him in the train heist. Feeling that he has no other choice, Kane accepts to give him a place in the heist.

"Here we are." Kane pulls up the grip brake and says.

"Kane, you though 'bout it?" Combo asks.

"Thought 'bout what?" Kane completely forgot what Combo said to him.

"The train heist, man. You need one more person. There no better man than me for this job, I guess." Combo refreshes Kane's mind.

Kane just keeps silent and exhales a mouthful of air.

"Come on, man. What happened to old days we used to roll together, fire guns, get chicks an' all that sh*t. We were f*cking homies." Combo tries to hit Kane's emotional sense.

"Till' you've become a drug poppin', murderin' maniac." Kane, resented with all grief over the old days.

"Jesus, not again. That's what makes us a team. You a smart bastard, I be the one who whip his dick and pisses all over. Let's be a team again, man. I want to make it right, make it f*ckING right."

"Uh, come on. You're in." Kane unwillingly says.

"A'right, man. Hit me up when somethin' shows up." Combo says.

Combo walks into his apartment, as Kane looks at him gullibly yet like saying "Jesus!" after him.


Kane earns five thousand bucks for accompanying Zeus during the bad drug deal with Vagos.

• Tagging mini-game is unlocked.
• Shooting Range Challenges are unlocked.

 

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Sometimes after this part, Kane receives a phone call from Gabe who talks Kane about the "big job".

"Kane!" Gabe says from the other line of the call.

"Gabe. How you doin?" Kane answers.

"Come over the Crystal Gardens, that crack lab of ours. It's time fo' the 'big job'. And you got a man fo' the job?"

"Yeah, I got him."

"A'right. Come along with yo' boy and we end this sh*t up."

"Okay, man. See you there." Kane hangs up.


Right after Gabe's phone call, Kane calls Combo to tell him about the new progress.

"Speak." Combo says with his usual dizzy voice tone.

"Combo! Get to the crack lab in Crystal Gardens. The time's come." Kane says.

"A'right. I'll hit you up there." Combo says and hangs up the phone.

 

 

Comments on this part...

 

 

 

Happy with how this story is shaping up!

Just read the last two chapters. "Sugarboy", especially with Combo demanding a taste from the other coke and the following shootout, reminded me a lot of Hood Safari from GTAV.

The whole thing had nice little references back to San Andreas. Zeus enjoying Madd Dogg; the getaway on BMX's; tagging up turf after beating up your sworn rivals. I don't know if they were intentional but I enjoyed them.

Edited August 26, 2014 by TheUnholy

[Young Martini]

Gratz, bro! I was just like : "WOW, this guy is really good". Keep up the good work. I really love that logo... I think I need one for mine, but I ain't a good designer lol, I'mma name mine "Grand Theft Auto Liberty City" BTW. Would love to see more of you! Another time Congratz!

[Tyla]

Yep, there is a Russian gang, but they're mostly inactive as Greeks are their connection in the city. I'm planning to make them include physically just in one part of Chapter V.

I actually like that the Russians only make one appearance. The early 90s and the fall of the wall are like Russia's stepping up to the tasting plate of America - they want to sample a few of the wares before going ahead and making their order.

 

Genuinely excited for what the future chapters have in store.

[Liver Buster]

 

Yep, there is a Russian gang, but they're mostly inactive as Greeks are their connection in the city. I'm planning to make them include physically just in one part of Chapter V.

I actually like that the Russians only make one appearance. The early 90s and the fall of the wall are like Russia's stepping up to the tasting plate of America - they want to sample a few of the wares before going ahead and making their order.

 

Genuinely excited for what the future chapters have in store.

 

Russians' part in the story is a bit complicated, so I don't want to spoil it too much. But yeah, maybe "Bringing Back The Wall" could be good title for that part... on the other hand, my original idea for that part's title is "Four Walls of Brick", which also could be a reference to Russians' rise back after the fall of the wall, at the same time to another thing.

Edited August 28, 2014 by TheUnholy

[Liver Buster]

 

- PART 11 -

 

Dead Freight

 

 

 

 

 

Kane goes to Ballas' main crack den in Crystal Gardens to put the train heist job in order. Kane goes around the back of the lab, knocks the iron door twice. After a few minutes, a black man with buzz hair and a thin moustache opens the door, with a shotgun in his hand.

"Who this?" The man asks for an identification.

"I'm Kane and uhh..." Kane tries to talk but he's immediately cut by the rude man.

"I know no Kane. f*ck off! If you want stone, come back and other time." The man quickly says and slams the door on Kane's face.
Cut into the crack den, Gabe and Combo are seen sitting together around a wooden table, with one beer can for each, and a huge pot full of peanuts on it.

"Randy, who was that, man?" Gabe asks.

"A punk-ass calls himself Kane. He a junkie or somethin' I think." Randy arrogantly says.

"Kane? What the f*ck did you do!? He is my man, yo. Get him in." Gabe says and takes a big toke from his beer and later take a bunch of peanuts from the pot.

Randy opens the door again, facing with an angry Kane.

"Come in!" Randy fully opens the door.

Kane looks at Randy angrily and slowly moves his shoulder as he looks at him.

Inside, Kane walks towards Gabe and Combo who are sitting on a wooden table, enjoying beer and a pot of peanuts.

"Kane! Wanna some beer, man? You gotta be thirsty." Gabe greetly welcomes Kane as he chuckes the can of beer.

"Nah, thanks. I'd rather pull this job quick, it'll make me chill." Kane calmly says.

"This yo' man? He looks like a chubby and ni**er version of Charlie Manson, but seems okay." Gabe jokingly says.

"F*ck you!" Combo says and drinks a little beer.

"Yeah... my dried up ass crew chief. Doesn't need to pay a shrink to call him a psychopath... he a stamped one already." Kane jokingly replies as well.

"F*ck you too, Kane." Combo, now a bit angry, says.

"So, gentlemen... we gonna hit that train or what?" Kane says.

"Yeah. Lift your asses, crew. Let's go." Gabe says and throws a peanut in his mouth.

Gabe and Kane start to walk away as Combo chuckes his beer at one, and later joins them.

Then, Kane will find himself in the front yard of the lab, along with Gabe and Combo. Kane recognizes a gray Picador right in front of him, assuming that it's the wheels for the job.

"Kane, you drivin'. Charlie, hop in the back." Gabe gives direction as he walks towards the pickup.

"Oh, wait, wait, wait, wait! Why I'm sitting on the back." Combo rejects sitting on the case of the truck, in a way.

"Because this my wheels, asshole." Gabe simply answers.

"Oh yeah? You think what would happen if I sit on the back? With this belly, this booty..." Combo strikes back.

"Dammit! You right. A'right. Go near Kane, I'll sit on the truck's ass." Gabe angrily says.

After everybody takes their place in the vehicle, Kane moves on.

"Where we goin' ?" Kane asks.

"East Los Santos." Gabe answers.

...

"Man, what makes this mothef*cking train so special?" Kane asks in wonder.

"Some punk-ass drug pushers outside the town carrying a sh*tload of drug money. They tryin' to set up a new factory in LS. So we gonna both enjoy a good wad of cash and eliminate a possible competition." Gabe says.

"Sounds good to me." Combo says.

"Yeah, but you have a plan? Jacking a big-ass cargo train wouldn't be so easy." Kane asks.

"Course, I got a plan. I paid the dog in the booth... Greedy busta'. So we'll get the control of the booth, block the way. Them fools ain't gonna know what hit 'em." Gabe explains the plan.

"That could work." Kane, a bit suspiciously, says.

"Just get the f*cking grip. I can give a damn middlefinger to others." Combo replies.

"Y'all shut the f*ck up? We gonna get in the train and leave it be rich brats like Fresh Prince, a'right? Now get goin'." Gabe replies.
After reaching the destination, the three men leave the pickup near the railroad and walk towards the control booth across the other side of the railway.

"Here, take this [hands the booth guy a few bucks] and get the f*ck out of here!" Gabe hands a little cash to the employee in the control booth and sends him away.

Gabe takes his place in the control booth and tells Kane and Combo to hide somewhere they couldn't be seen.

"You get behind something over that you ain't be seen." Gabe orders the other two.

"I can hide well, but I can't say the same thing for Combo." Kane jokingly says.

"F*ck you! Come on, eh... cracker homeboy." Combo replies to Kane in the same way.

Kane follows Combo to a small brick wall behind which they duck, so they won't be getting attention.

Soon after, the train is seen coming out from the tunnel and making its way towards the booth, meanwhile Kane and Combo, still ducking behind the wall, have armed with their guns, probably as experienced gangsters, they know what will happen soon.

"Why the f*ck is this barrier here?" The train driver says full of confusion.

Then, three drug dealers jump out of the train and go to the booth for checking what's going on.

"Sup, gentlemen? The documents?" Gabe plays to keep it calm.

"The documents? What are you talkin' about?" The white dealer with a red bandana on his head angrily answers.

"I gotta check what you loaded. It's the procedure, sorry..." Gabe replies.

"You saw this, motherf*cker?" The drug dealer quickly draws a Pistol off his pants.

Reactionally, Gabe quickly gets his gun and shoots the dealer in the chest. Seeing that the other two armed dealers are coming to him, Gabe quickly ducks under the booth to protect himself from a sudden death.

Kane and Combo get out of cover and shoot the other two dealers before they get Gabe. Later, Gabe gets out of the booth and checks Kane and Combo.

"You a'right?" Kane asks Gabe if he's shot or something.

"Cool. Cool. I'm cool. You go check the train while I watch fo' some sneak ass bastards." Gabe tells to Kane and Combo.

Kane and Gabe climb the back of the train, entering through an iron door. As soon as they get inside the train, they face heavily armed drug dealers bursting fire on them.

"This iron junk heap be full of hipster dressin' motherf*ckas. Damn!" Combo yells.

"Man, just shoot them bitch asses." Kane says.

Kane and Combo will need to pass through all two vagons to kill all the drug dealers in the train. There will be ten drug dealers to be taken out, in total. However, the shootout in the train will be a great pain because the drug dealers are heavily armed, even some of them are using AK-47s. Also the place lacks of cover, you're just able to cover behind piles of wooden boxes, but they'll be rarely found.

Killing the two vagons full of heavily armed drug dealers will lead Kane and Combo to the control room of the train eventually.

Kane and Combo burst in the room and Combo fires a bullet in the drug dealer's head, who was about to work the engines again. That blows up the dealer's brain, causing its pieces to stuck on the window on his splash of blood.
Soon after, Gabe is heard demanding help when two cars full of Vagos pull up in front of him, probably they're after the goods as well.

"I'd need some help here, homies!" Gabe yells for some help.

"I'm gonna help Gabe. You go find the stash a'right?" Kane says.

"A'right, a'right... You guys have fun." Combo unwillingly accepts.

Gabe is seen taken cover behind his pickup. Kane can take cover behind the pickup, but excessive bullet holes onto pickup will cause it explode, which will lead the failure of the mission. Anyways, the Vagos would not be much challenge if you have picked the assault rifled of the dead drug dealers on the train.

After all the Vagos are dead, that doesn't finish yet because then a Sentinel full of Dominican Cartel member comes the scene.

"sh*t! Where all this come from?" Gabe says as he blows the shells of his shotgun.

"This town is not that type can keep a secret after all." Kane answers as he fires on the Dominicans.

After all the Dominicans will be wiped out, Combo shows up outside the train, on the back board, telling that he has found the money.

"Niggas! I got the money. Seem like they stuffed the sh*t in some tight trash bags." Combo yells it over Gabe and Kane.

However, suddenly, the train starts to work again for no reason.

"Sh*t! What the f*ck?!" Combo says in shock.

Kane gets in the pickup meanwhile Gabe hops in the case.

"Don't worry, man! We right behind you." Kane tries to calm Combo as he drives behind the upgoing train.

Now, Kane must catch up with the train, getting close to it till' the distance is enough for Combo to throw the money bags to Gabe, who is on the back of the truck, picking up the trash bags. All Kane must to do is keeping the pickup steady, so Gabe can catch the bags. There will be ten bags of money in total and the player must make Gabe catch at least seven of them. If Gabe misses more than three bags, the mission will be failed.

After collecting the money payload from the train, we will be suddenly cut to the outskirs of Las Colinas where Kane, Gabe and Combo has taken a little break after a hard yet fruitful job.

The three men bump their beer cans on each others' in a glory, celebrating their hard yet worthy victory.

"We did it, man! We f*cking did it! Wooh!" Combo says as he bumps his beer onto the the others'.

"I can't believe we f*cking did it!" Kane says in his all glory.

"I told you, fools. I told you we'll f*cking rich men after this mothef*cking job." Gabe takes a big chuck of beer in his mouth as he says.

"We're the biggest crooks in town." Kane replies.

Out of nowhere, a child, probably around his 14 or 16's, shows up while riding his mountain bike. It seems like the kid has figured out he has bumped into bad guys. Realizing the big trash bags in the back of truck makes it more accurate in his mind. The kid tries to be seen as 'sweet' when he waves his hand to the crew. The men just show no respond, they just look at the kid's face with open mouths and confused face expressions. The silence remains until Combo hits the kid back by waving his hand and later he shoots the kid to death with a bullet to the torso.

Combo waves his hand towards the kid and later draws his Pistol stuck up his pants.

"Noooo! Combo! Nooo! Don't f*cking do it! No!" Kane starts to plead Combo as he recognizes he's getting his gun from his pants.

Combo, showing no remorse but grinding his teeth, kills the kid in the blink of an eye. The death was hard for the little kid. The kid passed his last minutes while he tried to inhale some air with his ripped off lungs but he eventually ended up choking on his own pool of blood that was all over his throat.

"I understand you kill a pusher, torture the f*ck out a pig, but what is this? You killed a child, a LIL' DAMN CHILD!" Kane bursts his anger on Combo.

"I don't wanna do that, but I ain't see another choice." Combo angrily says.

"What? You mean the kid gonna talk. He probably had no idea what he saw." Kane walks towards Combo.

"Yeah. That exactly what I mean!" Combo strikes to Kane, as well.

"You a damn child killer!" Kane says as he pushes Combo by hitting him on the chest.

"Don't tell me a child killer, you f*ck!" Combo pushes Kane as well.

Gabe cuts into Kane and Combo, splits the fight.

"F*ck! Stop it! We gotta sort this out! Quick." Gabe says as his one hand on Kane's chest, the other is on Combo's chest.

"The f*ck you thinkin' ?" Combo agressively asks.

"I don't know. I don't f*cking know. Just load the body and the bike to the pickup. We gotta get it somewhere quiet before someone sees that." Gabe says, all anxious.

...

Kane finds himself in the driver seat of the gray Picador with Gabe. There's a huge, thick nylon wrapped on the case of the pickup to cover the child's dead body and his bike. Combo is gonna go with another transportation, because there's no room at the pickup.Now Kane must get the pickup back to the crack lab in Crystal Gardens without receiving attention. This requires Kane to drive slower because going too fast may lead the nylon fly off, revealing the child's corpse. Also receiving any wanted level will lead the failure of the mission.

After reaching the crack lab, Kane and Gabe will be carrying the dead body inside with the wrap on it. Gabe will be urging to knocking on the lab's door, he knocks the door like he will be crashing it. After a few minutes, Randy opens the door and investigates the two men about the wrapped thing.

"Oh sh*t! What that?" Randy asks as he has halfly opened the door.

"Just open the motherf*ckin' door!" Gabe yells to Randy.

Randy fully opens the door, Kane and Gabe quickly runs inside the lab with the wrapped body. After putting the wrap on the white marble floor of the lab, Kane gets out of the lab to bring the bike.

"You gonna tell me what's that or not?" Randy curiously asks as Kane bursts in the lab with the kid's bike.

All Randy, Kane and Gabe pull together in front of puffy nylon, Gabe crouches besides the wrap and opens it revealing the bloody nylon, along with a little kid's dead body whose chest is all bloody.

"What the f*ck did you, boys?" Randy tells in shock as he looks at the dead child's body in awe.

There will be a short silence dominating the area, nobody will say anything.

"Also why the f*ck you bring a child right into meh place? There be a f*cking sign writing 'Dead Child Storage' or somethin' on my crib?" Randy keeps going on Kane and Gabe for the incident.

The door is knocked.

"Randy! Go get the door!" Gabe orders Randy, showing the door with a slight move of the head.

As soon as Randy opens the door, Combo walks inside in a rage, even knocking out Randy on the floor as he walks.

"You here, huh?" Combo says after checking near the group.

"Yeah, we here, you psycho buster. F*cking dick!" Kane is still angry to Combo for the incident.

"Uhh... gimme a break, homie. You know I needed to do it." Combo defends himself with an agressive yet a bit choked tone.

"Well... it seem like you throw that kid in just to feed yo' bloodlust!" Kane yells over Combo.

"Cut that f*cking sh*t, a'right! We have a dead body on the floor of a crack home and you just arguin'." Gabe splits the fight, and tells the men to turn to real problem.

"Uhh..."

"But how?" Combo says and starts to think.

All the men will remain silent to think about what to do with the child's corpse. The first word comes from Combo.
"Got it!.. Uh, f*ck it!" Combo later thinks that the idea's null.

"Maybe we could... No!" Gabe has come with something but later he rejects telling it, because he thinks it's not worthy.

"Maybe you guys should... Nah, it's damn dumb." There's something that came to Randy's mind but he later thought it's an actually stupid plan.

Seeing that they're just wasting time, Kane goes to a narrow corner of the lab, pulls out his phone and calls Suge for help.

"Suge, man! You available?"

"Actually I was in the middle of somethang, but shoot it." Suge says.

"Things f*cked up here, man... and I think we need yo' help." Kane now says with a more anxious voice tone.
"What happened there?" Suge a bit anxiously says but also keeps it cool.

"Can't tell it on the phone, man. You gotta come here. Quick."

"Okay. Where you now?" Suge asks.

"Y'know that crack lab in Crystal Gardens, right? There."

"Okay. Keep yo' head down. I'm comin'." Suge says and hangs up the phone.

Later, the screen fades to black, throwing the player one hour later or so.

Randy and Gabe sit on the wooden table on which Gabe and Combo were sitting on in the beginning of this part, the both are smoking cigarettes. Kane has laid on a wall, crouching while his head is down, looking on the floor like saying "What a waste.". Combo has been sitting on a pile of cartoon boxes, just moving his legs up and down. Immediately, the door is knocked down and Combo, who is the nearest one to the door, opens the door.

"Combo! Get the door." Gabe says.

Combo stands up and slowly moves towards the door. As soon as he opens the door, Suge enters the place like a blowing wind, his long leather coat is pulled off because he is too fast.

"Okay. Now, tell me what the problem?" Suge doesn't even recognize the dead child body until he comes right in front of it.

"Oh sh*t!" Suge jumps in awe when he sees a child corpse whose all chest is covered with blood.

"Which nutjob f*cking did this?" Suge yells over in anger, he's really angry.

"You called him over, right Kane? You were always a big F*CKING pussy!" Combo presumes that Kane has called Suge and yells to him in anger.

"What you gonna do? Gonna BURY a DEAD KID under the floor of a crack den in a public housin' project? No doubt anybody wouldn't find 'bout it!" Kane strikes back.

"Stop! We have a dead little boy right here, and we gotta get rid of this sh*t! That's our problem." Gabe splits Combo and Kane and returns to the situation.

"Yea... I ain't want a dead brat on my floor!" Randy cuts in.

"Okay. We gonna load the boy and his bike in my cage. Kane, Combo... you go destroy the car at the junkyard in Angel Pine. It be a crusher there, should work to get rid of this sh*t." Suge explains what they're going to do.

"Hey! What you an yo' boys here gonna do?" Combo asks like he's complaining.

"We're gonna destroy that bloody sheet up. Now go!" Suge says.

...

Kane and Combo get in Suge's blue Emperor which now contains the child's dead body and his bike. As the last objective of this part, Kane must get the car to the junkyard in Angel Pine, so they can destroy the car in the crusher. If the trunk happens to pop out, you can stop the car and close the trunk before you get any attention, but receiving any police attention will end with the failure of the mission.

"Look, man. I really ain't mean shootin' that kid but I see no other choice." Combo tries to make Kane believe that killing that kid was necessary.

However, Kane doesn't respond, he just concentrates on the road.

"You and me on the streets fo' a long time, homie. You know... sh*t happens!" Combo barely talks, probably he is doing such thing, trying to make himself clear to someone, for the first time.

"Shut up, Combo if you don't wanna get yo' ass beaten." Kane is still angry to Combo, and while saying this all the anger could be noticed throughout his eyes.

Upon arriving the junkyard, drive to the crusher. It's close to the entrance of the junkyard, located between two cranes. Kane and Combo leave the car in the soil patch, so the car will be taken by the orange crane and dropped into the crusher to be destroyed.
After destroying the car, Kane and Combo walk outside the junkyard. Combo bids farewell to Kane, but Kane doesn't seem to take it.

"See you soon, man." Combo says and starts to walk away.

"Yeah, whatever... Get the f*ck out of my sight."

Upon this point, the part will be ended. Kane receives $ 5.000 from the heist (he and Combo were meant to take $ 10.000 for each, but the tragedic havoc lessened their cuts) and having the blue Emperor crushed will make Kane earn $ 1.500 bucks for extra.

• Crusher is unlocked.
  

Shortly after the completion of this part, Kane receives a phone call from Suge.

"Kane! It's Suge." Suge introduces himself with a much more serious voice tone.

"Sup?" Kane says with a calm yet a bit choked voice tone, still under the pressure of the unfortunate incident.

"Just wanna check what happened down there." Suge says.

"We need to talk 'bout this?" Kane plays hardball, although he is angry to Combo, he doesn't want to tell him off.

"I'm afraid... yes." Suge becomes more serious.

"Uhh... take a damn shot. Just a damn shot! What coulda happened?" Thinking he will need to tell this anyway, Kane makes a quibble not to keep him out of a direct compunction.

"Combo..." Suge says between his grinded teeth.

"Exactly. We were gonna rob that damn that train, a'right? We did... got them bags of grip, but we stopped by Las Colinas befo' gettin' back to the lab. There, a lil' kid showed up and Combo f*cking shot him. Now please gimme a break man. I livin' a bad day already." Kane unwillingly explains the whole thing.

"Okay, man. Go get some sleep or somethin'. Get a grip! See you later."

"Yeah. Much love." Kane hangs up the phone.

 

 

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Comments on this part...

 

 

Dialogs are so so so solid. The story is also nice. Everything looks good.
Just nice! Waiting to see what happens next!

 

 

 

I like this guy Randy. His first scenes reminded me a whole lot of Gerald McReary.
It's a reflection on how well you do dialogue that I can get such an impression from only a brief appearance.

Wow. Child killing. How you talked up the train robbery, I thought that was going to take centre stage. I didn't expect that.

I got shades of Todd killing that kid and Jesse's horror in Breaking Bad, but it seems you're going to go much deeper with this. Even though they've crushed the body, I still see it coming back to bite them in the ass.

One your best chapters so far.

[Liver Buster]

 

- PART 12 -

 

Consequences

 

"Actions have consequences. You should learn that, Combo."

 

- Sean Troy "Suge" Tucker

 

This part kicks in after a phone call from Combo.

"Speak." Kane is still angry with Combo.

"Kane. Could you pick me up over my crib? It's serious." Combo says with an anxious voice tone.

"What's happenin', man?" Kane immediately becomes anxious, as well.

"I don't know! West and his damn lap dog Suge called me over that motel in Idlewood. I think it's 'bout tha last sh*t." Combo gets bitter anxious.

"A'right, man. Be cool, a'right? I'll take you over yo' crib." Kane tries to cool down Combo, and later hangs up the phone.

Kane grabs a ride immediately and picks up Combo who waits right in front of his apartment block in Idlewood.

"Hey, man. Sup?" Combo says worried.

"Not much. You really don't know what the f*ck is goin' on?" Kane says.

"I ain't have a bit idea, but I predict the 'worst'." Combo seriously says.

"Worst? What is you talkin' 'bout? You smoked too much, man?" Kane says.

"F*ck you! You're always a damn jackass. Stop being so or I'll see you in the ground, buster."

"Jesus. Calm down! Just chill out, homie." Kane says.

"But y'know what... f*ck it! If they gonna do somethan', they go get what they comin' to them." Combo gets encouraged a bit.

"Welcome back, good ol' Combo." Kane mockingly says.

Upon arriving at the motel, Kane parks the car in the huge parking lot of the motel. Later, Kane and Combo climb up the concrete stairs located at the west side of the building. Kane follows Combo to a small room located at a narrow corner of the building. Combo knocks on the door with fear while looking at Kane with terrible eyes. After a minute or so, a bulky African-American wearing a purple T-shirt opens the door.

"Yeah?" A bulky man opens the door and he lifts his shoulder upper, which makes him look more bigger and intimidating.

"West want to see me." Combo tries to seem like a tough nut.

"You the big boy, eh?.. Get in!" The bulky pulls his neck out on Kane's and Combo's faces and opens the way to the inside.

Kane attemps to walk inside the flat with Combo, but he is eventually stopped in the tracks by the bulky bodyguard.

"You. Stop! Boss wanna talk with the big boy... face to face." The bulky bodyguard puts his hand on Kane's chest, stopping him.

Cut to the inside, Suge is also seen with West, both sitting around a wooden table, smoking cigarettes and drinking coffee. The TV is turned on, news tuned in, reporting about a missing child named Seth Campbell who left home for a ride with his bicycle. West suddenly realizes Kane on the door and unexpectedly he offers his bodyguard to let him in.

"Hey! Let him in, chump." West orders his bodyguard to let Kane in.

Kanes takes his place near Combo who is standing on foot, with his arms crossed to each other, right in front of West and Suge.

"Gentlemen... Coffee, cigar or whiskey?" West offers the men.

"I'll pass on that." Combo says.

"Nah... thanks." Kane will slightly lift his right hand and say.

"You gotta feel perfect... like a guy who hit the f*cking jackpot!" West keeps being calm, but his anger could be noticed.

"If that kid you talkin' bout, I know you pissed, but it gotta done. I think you too clouded to see that." Combo makes a quick defence.

"[chuckles] A'right, then... Lemme get this straight... In this business, there's realism and idealism. I love idealism, makes young brothers ambitious. But we doin' business, boy. So you gotta be realist at the same time. So go take realism and idealism..." West shoots.

"What is you talkin' bout?" Combo asks with a confused face expression.

"I say you livin' in a fantasy, motherf*cka. Giant mushrooms... long skirt teen bitches... talkin' rabbits. Wake up!" West becomes more angry.

"Excuse me?" Combo says again.

"You goin' out on point, pickin' up the business in the 'Entourage'." Suge explains the whole thing in one sentence.

"What!? You gotta thank me for what I did fo' you, but you lettin' me down! No wonder why we suckin' hairy asses of others. Fifty of me, this town would be saint." Combo now loses his control, bursting his anger. The spits come out of his mouth as he talks.

"Actions have consequences. You should learn that, Combo." says Suge.

"Consequences? F*ck consequences, f*ck you, f*ck all of them..." Combo's fury has become more and more dominant.

"That was it... Combo was demoted to 'Entourage'. However, I had a weird feeling inside, perhaps I regret something but at the same time I think Combo had what's comin' to him. Like Suge said... 'Action have consequences.'. You steal product on the counter... you die. You snitch out yo' homies... you die. Maybe that's the spirit." Kane's inner voice said as Combo was still yelling over his anger.



Later, Kane will be spawned to the main street, near the pizza parlor in Idlewood. There won't be mission available for a time until one day later, Kane receives a pager message from an unknown person telling him to come to Pershing Square.

However, when Kane arrives at the meeting location, he doesn't see anybody but later a black Huntley approaches the pavement. A man whose face is all covered with the shadows opens the right back door of the car, revealing himself as West, who wears a white-red tracksuit. Kane is surprised but he eventually gets in the car.

"What up, kid?" West warmly greets Kane as he chuckles a grin.

"Not much." Kane simply gives an answer.

"Suge talked a lot 'bout you... and I think you could be a perfect candidate for the space.

"Thanks, man... bu-but I don't know what to say." Kane's eyes shine but at the same time he's a bit pessimistic.

"All before, I think there be a leak in the pipe." West states that he thinks there is a snitch around.

"Who?" Kane curiously asks.

"That guy, works near Bulleye. Our friend in the bureau said that he been passin' information to the Feds." West hits Kane hard with these words.

"No way, man. Gabe is loyal to Bulleye like a dog. You barkin' at the wrong tree." Kane just moves his left and right and tells there's gotta be misunderstanding.

"I wish I'd say that same thang, but I'm afraid it ain't true. [produces a tape player] Listen it."

It is a voice tape recorded some dialogues between Gabe and a police detective, probably while eating at a restaurant. The detectives asks Gabe what would he eat, to which Gabe responds 'bacon'. During the dinner, Gabe states he would snitch on his own gang in exchange of witness protection.

Hearing a solid proof of Gabe's betrayal, Kane doesn't believe his ears, he's downbeat. However, Kane still doesn't want to believe it. Kane just keeps being silent, he gets his hands on his hairs, slicking it back and responds with an open mouth.
"Sorry, man. You can't know which one is a rat... which one is a dog." West replies.

"I-I-I don't know, man. It's f*cking bullsh*t. I gotta think 'bout it." Kane still shocked, he barely talks.

"Good. Go get some sleep, take a shower... just chill yo' brains out... but be fast. Every minute we wait be another minute we waste. Good bye, chief." says West and chuckles another grin.

West drops Kane off in Idlewood, a couple of miles away from his home. To continue the progress, you've got to check through your safehouse, but you can free roam as well.
...
Checking out the safehouse will warp the time to the midnight when Kane thinks about what to do with Gabe while smoking blunt and drinking booze in front of a TV with a gray screen.

"I thought it all over the night. I smoked blunt, drank beer till my face be numb, eyes feel like gonna bleed. I still ain't believin' it... Gabe can't be a rat... but at the same time, I been thinkin' on the possibility of him bein' a snitch. If he really was, it would be catchin' up with us... me, my homies, West, Suge, Bulleye... all of us. It just matter o' time. So I just thought clippin' Gabe soon possible is the right thing to do."

...

The next morning, the first thing Kane does is calling West and informing him about his decision right after he gets up.

"Hey, chief. Wassup? You thought about that thang? You made a decision?" West asks with a calm voice, but he's actually very curious.

"Yeah... and I just think doin' it is the best thing to do." Kane says with a worried voice tone and exhales air right after he finishes his sentence.

"You cold, Kane. You know Marty? He's at that chop shop in Idlewood. Go see him. He has got some gear that may be helpful on yo' task." West calls the shot.

"Yeah, I know him."

"A'right then, man. Catch you later. Love and peace." West says and hangs up the phone.

Now, Kane must make it to Marty who will waiting at his usual place, the chop shop in Idlewood. When Kane arrives at the chop shop, he finds Marty talking to a hot, blondie customer who is about to take her car and leave.

"I fixed the front bumper and there was some problem with the brakes, fixed it, Miss." Marty talks with a female customer with a happy face.

The hot blonde customer gets in her red Comet and leaves.

"Have a good day, Miss." Marty waves his hand after the hot lady.

"Damn, man! What a hot ass." Marty replies.

"Yeah, I bet it." Kane mocks as he walks towards Marty.

"Kane, wassup? What brings you here, homie?" Marty is all ears.

"West said you have somethin' fo' me." Kane responds.

"West? I've forgotten all that 'bout. Yeah, he wanted somethin' fast... somethin' reliable and I got that." Marty says.

"So, shoot it." Kane says while his arms are crossed to each other.

"I know some rich-ass bastard owns a bitchy beautiful beige Sabre. Go to his home in Jefferson and when you jack the car, get it to me, a'right?" Marty says as he explains the whole thing with fast arm moves.

Kane gets out of the garage.

Now, Kane must make it to car owner's location. He lives in Jefferson. When you arrive his place, a young man will get in a beige Sabre parked right in front of the house's garage. The man will drive madly, so it makes a bit challenge if you want to stop him and take his car. However, if you want to stick to follow him, he'll make a stop by Vinyl Countdown in Market, which provides Kane with an open chance to steal the car.

After stealing the car, Kane delivers it to Marty's lockup where Marty says he'll take care of it.

"A'right. I got the heap." Kane says as he gets out of the car.

"A'right. I'll take care of it now. Ehh... by the way West told you to call him when you finished." Marty says.

Kane gets Marty's word and walks out of the garage.

"You wanted me to call you?" Kane says.

"Yeah. You get that car?" West.

"Sure... it was easy."

"Cold. You gonna pop some soda, so y'all need some heat. Go see my friend Gonzo. He runs an underground gun shop in El Corona, he'll get you what you need." West gives Kane his next objective.

"A'right. I'll go check him." Kane says and hangs up.

So Kane needs to go to Gonzo's gun shop which located at a backalley in El Corona. Kane passes by the iron door of the shop which leads him a basement where is all covered with glass counters with guns inside. However, a bulky Latin with a bald head looks at him with bad eyes until he is irritated enough off Kane.

"Hey, ese. What you messing around here? Who are you?" Gonzo says as he crackles his knuckles.

"I'm Kane. West sent me." Kane says.

"West?.. Why didn't you say so. West told me you need some gun. [produces a Pump-Action Shotgun under the glass counter] Shotgun... you would blow the f*cker's brain up." Gonzo produces a shotgun under the counter as he says.

Kane takes the gun and starts examining it.

"Wow, man... Seems legit sh*t. How much you want for it?" Kane says as he examines the shotgun.

"Nothing. This one is from West." Gonzo replies.

"A'right then. I gotta go." Kane starts walk down back to the door with the shotgun in his hand.

"But don't forget to come back, jefe. I got the best quality here. Guns reliable, prices good... right from Mexico." Gonzo tries to advertise his product but Kane doesn't seem give a sh*t.

After finishing job at Gonzo's store, Kane calls West who tells him to come over his place.

"A'right, man. I went to that boy Gonzo and handed me a shotgun... seems good."

"Gonzo is a sneaky f*cka when it's guns. Get yo' ass up to my crib, man. I got some surprise fo' you." West says.

"I wonder if you gonna wrap it up and put a pretty bow on it." Kane says.

"Stop bein' a fool! Come here right now."

"If you say so... boss." Kane sarcastically replies.

When Kane goes back to hotel, Kane checks on West's room located at a narrow corner of the motel. Kane knocks on the door and after a few minutes, West shows up, opening the door, surprisingly with a bath robe on him.

"Ehh... I guess I come at the wrong time." Kane mocks with West putting on a bath robe.

"F*ck you, cat. Just come in." West says and slams the door after Kane.

Kane walks into West's tiny motel room meanwhile West comes after him, with a glass of whiskey in his hand, later takes seat near the table in the middle of the flat.

"Okay. What yo' present fo' me?" Kane sarcastically asks.

"Just hit the closet, dog." West says as he smokes a fat cigar to accompany a good Scotch.

Kane opens the closet, only to reveal a dead Families member inside it.

"What this!?" Kane is both confused and scared to see a dead gangbanger inside West's closet.

"You gonna show you like a Grove fool and shoot that f*cking rat Gabe's ass. That's it, homeboy." West shortly explains it.

"I ain't understand. Why? If Gabe a snitch, we could take out his ass any f*cking way." Kane says.

"Look... things not that easy, Kane. You no know Bulleye yet, he a damn busta with anger issues, he probably ain't takin' that. So we gotta stir the sh*t up fo' Grove." West having a realist chat.

"Maybe you right, but I still think this be a bad idea." Kane says.

"Go get 'em wheels from Marty's... it's probably be done right now." says West.

"Ohh... and you done, go stash the car at my lockup in Verdant Bluffs, a'right?" West adds.

Later, Kane finds himself out of West's room, wrapped up with green colours and a green rag around his face, covering it. Now, Los Santos is covered in all dark, it's nightmare. Kane must make it back to Marty's garage to recover the Sabre.

When Kane arrives at the garage, he recognizes that Sabre is now painted green and finds Marty sitting on a nearby chair.

"I came to grab the wheels. Everythang cool?" Kane checks if there is something to be done for the car.

"Got it tuned up, man. Here you can have it." Marty spreads smiles as he says.

Kane gets in the green Sabre and drives away.

Now, Kane must get to the old, wrecked autopark in Willowfield where Gabe is holed up along with Bulleye's drug stash.

Kane cuts in front of the autopark so fast that the whole place echoes with the sudden brake sounds. This attracts Gabe and a couple of his homeboys who are sitting around Gabe's gray Sentinel. Gabe and his boys get their hands around their pants, to make themselves feel confident. Later, Kane gets out of the Sabre and draws his Pump-Action Shotgun. Gabe and his homeboys point their guns towards Kane as well.

"Die you, Grove motherf*cka." One of Gabe's homeboys says as he draws his gun.

However, Kane acts faster and kills both of Gabe's goons in cold blood before they can shoot him.

Although Kane seems like an ice cold killer, however his actual nature at the moment can be realized from his eyes and his stretching muscles. However, Kane acts and delivers swift shell to Gabe's chest before he shoots him. Later, Kane slowly walks towards Gabe, who is now down on the floor, starting to cough blood a little bit. Kane points his shotgun Gabe, but the more closer he approaches it to him, his eyes become more teary and his muscles shake more. However, Kane eventually blows Gabe's head off with a shotgun shell as he has been trying to get his Pistol back.
Kane walks back to his car as Gabe chokes on his own blood with his bloody brains spread all over the concrete. In the car, Kane puts off his rag and puts his head on the steerwheel while he keeps it with tight hands, showing his angry yet desperate measure. Kane drives off the autopark as the police sirens get louder.

As the last objective of this part, Kane must drive to West's lockup in Verdant Bluffs and stash the green Sabre in the lockup.
West earns $ 5.000 for the completion of this hard task.



Shortly after this part is finished, Kane receives a notification in his pager from West: "Wassup man? Hit up my crib when you free. Got somethin' to discuss. Laters... - West"

 

 

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Comments on this part...

 

 

 

Great chapter man. As ever, you plant the idea of something being as simple as getting the Green Sabre for the first time and turn it into an epic.

First off needs to be mentioned is West. Like Randy in the last chapter, he came across a real strong character here. It's about the first time in a long time that I've seen a character come across in a mission as they're described in their character bio. Good job. Consistent too - I remember West being a strong character and mediating bad blood between Ballas and Vagos in Part 4 too.

In a way, he reminds me of Cutty Wise from The Wire.

Onto the action. It was nice to see the return of good old dress up as your rival and make problems. GTA backstabbery at it's finest.

Also. The "green" Sabre originally being beige. Was that intentional or am I reading too much into this? Reason being, beige is a shade of grey. Everyone being grey is mentioned in your overview. And this would be super poignant, if true.

Here's hoping for more soon.

 

 

 

Thanks for the compliment! By the way, I really appreciate your support to me, you've been the biggest help for me on SOTEOF. I wanted to express it.

I think West is and will be one of the most outstanding characters of this concept thread. Actually you may be right about West, he resembles Cutty Wise some ways, I think West probably shares a similar vision with Cutty on the shaping criminal world... West is some kind of more realist, like Cutty and they look at the world with a modern vision. However, I always thought Cutty had been a dignified criminal, unlike West... you may know what I mean in the upcoming chapters. To be honest, I tried to shape West more like Stringer Bell. A sharp, calculative, wise man... and he's the actual brains behind the Ballas. I rememer Avon saying something like this "I bleed red, you bleed green." to Stringer (I guess while Stringer was confronting Avon about the hit on D'Angelo). West is actually a greedy motherf*cker who does care about opportunities and survival, in the most means. Also plus like I wrote in his character bio, he's a true follower of pragmatism... now it makes all sense, yeah?

Plus, I need to correct you, man. West has sat on the table with Dominicans, not Vagos after Combo shot their lieutenant to death during the busted drug deal in the opening cutscene of the game. Also I suggest you people keep everything about Chapter I as possible, because like the Dominican thing and Gabe's death will form some of the building blocks of Chapter V... All I can say about it is this.

Plus, more six to go!

[Liver Buster]

- PART 13 -

Leashing The Dogs

"You know actually how a dog f*cking naturally is... Wild! Dogs be hard to deal with. They ain't know authority, they always bark an' all that sh*t. You wanna get hold of yo' dogs, you gotta leash 'em tight. You gonna own yo' dogs soon, Kane... you gonna understand."

- Omar Curtis "West" Simmons

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I...

After reading West's pager message, Kane goes to his little, narrow hotel room one more time. Kane knocks on the plastic door of the crib, prompting to West's bulky bodyguard from the previous part open it. However, the bodyguard won't seem to remember Kane and he points his shotgun on him with one hand, while his other hand is on the doorknob. In order not to get a shotgun shell in the guts, Kane tries to refresh the bodyguard's mind.

"Woaw! Calm down, man. I'm with West. Remember... dropped by the other day?.." Kane says while his hands up.

The bodyguard will say nothing but he will pull himself out of the doorstep, letting Kane in. As soon as Kane enters the room, the bodyguard slams the door hard. West is on his exactly same spot, wrapped in his bathrobe again, drinking coffee while watching a news report on a gangbanger named Gabe who got shot the other day. When he recognizes Kane, he suddenly turns off the TV and wants his bodyguard to leave them alone for a minute.

"Hey, boy! How you doin?" West says as he turns off the TV.

"What you expect?" Kane says, under the emotion of the last tragedy as he takes a seat on the chair oppositing West.

"Tyrone! Could you leave us alone, yeah?" West asks the bulky guard for a bit privacy.

Tyrone will not show any response again, he just looks at Kane with bad eyes just before he gets out of the crib and slams the door hard.

"Man, what you want? Shoot it already." Kane will say with a quite reckless voice tone.

"What this?.. What the f*ck be wrong with you, nigga?" West says angrily a bit.

"What?" Kane says with a tough manner, at the same time he stops eye contact with West, looking anxiously.

"Stop be a f*ckin' idealist like your fat-ass, nutjob homie! We doin' business here... We gotta be professionals... be realists. I like a bit of idealism, make people ambitious, but that's it." West's voice gets a bit higher.

"What you talkin' about?" Kane angrily says.

"You know actually how a dog f*cking naturally is... Wild! Dogs be hard to deal with. They ain't know authority, they always bark an' all that sh*t. You wanna get hold of yo' dogs, you gotta leash 'em tight. You gonna own yo' dogs soon, Kane... you gonna understand." West gives Kane some lesson, in the behaviours of a street wise who is in the game for a long time.

"Whatever." Kane says with a drowsy voice tone.

"I've got somethin' I need you to do... later we all party yo' promotion." West says.

"You told me 'Kill Gabe, all is yours.'. Now what the f*ck is this?" Kane's pitch goes higher and more tougher.

"I know, 'kay? Just consider this a personal favour to me."

"You've lots of leashed 'dogs' off the streets, right? Make 'em do it." Kane mockingly says to West.

"A'right then. Your call... I can find anyone else fo' this kind of opportunity." West arrogantly says while he throws his head back, trying to manipulate Kane into doing his work.

"A'right. Damn! What you want?" Kane says.

"You heard 'bout Homie Cigarettes?" West asks.

"Sure, man. Their pot flavored sticks... they the best."

"I'd like to buy a stake of Homies, but that big, bald f*ck called Penn won't sellin' it. F*ckin' bitch!" West says.

"You want me to kill him?" Kane asks, like he's reckless to do such kind of a job.

"Nah... I want you to leash him... make him yo' dog. He holed up at his office in Richman. When you get him, gimme a call." West orders.

Kane gets up from the chair and walks towards the door as West continues drinking his coffee.

Now, Kane makes his way to Richman where Penn's office located in a multi-story building which is occupied by working places.

Kane finds Penn's place in the second floor, but the guards give him a hard time.

"Woaw! Woaw! Woaw! What do you think you're doing, buddy?" One of the two guards stops Kane in his tracks.

"Gotta see Mr. Penn. Get out o' my way!" Kane harshly says.

"I said ' f*ck off'." The guard replies.

"Come on, man. I'll just see him and go." Kane tries to persuade the guards but he seems to be unsuccessful, because they get more angry.

"You want me to introduce this in your guts." The guard on the right side of the door slowly lifts up the left side of this black jacket, revealing the Pistol stuck up his pants.

Kane acts faster, immediately pulls out the gun stuck in the guard's pants, ironically Kane puts the gun in the guard's guts and spills them out. Later, finished with the first guard, he throws his away and shoots the other guy in a fast reaction.

Later, Kane kickopens the door but he can't see anyone. However, suddenly a fat, bald man in a smart suit gets out under his desk and empties his Pistol on Kane, but the fact that he is a damn bad shooter saves Kane, because Penn misses all the shots.

"Die you, motherf*cker. Die!" Penn yells over as he randomly shoots his Pistol.

Kane doesn't ruin his cold manners, he checks him around, moves his hand around his shoulders, later his torso but he can't see any bullet holes on his body. Then Kane points his gun on Mr.Penn and demands him to come with him.

"Who... w-who are you? Please don't shoot me." Mr. Penn has fallen down on his leather armchair after he emptied his Pistol, and he puts his hands in the air, demanding mercy from Kane.

"Mr. Simmons sends his regards." Kane has come right near Penn.

"Simmons? That piece of sh*t can go f*ck himself, I'm not selling my shares."

On this point, Kane must use physical pressure to persuade Penn to come with him. Kane will have to use basic attacks such as slapping Penn or punching him to do this. While you beat him, Penn will state that Kane is a dead man, he has powerful friends and they won't let it slide.

Shortly after, Kane hears some cars speeding down and suddenly braking out.

"What the f*ck?" Kane says while his hands are on Mr.Penn's collars.

"Here they are." Penn says and chuckles an evil grin.

"Shut the f*ck up! You gettin' yo' fat ass with me." Kane puts his gun right on Penn's fat face.

Kane grabs Penn by the throat and walks outside the office. Later, eight black suit wearing men point their guns towards Kane meanwhile Kane holds Penn in gunpoint.

"You... stay back! If you don't let me go, I'll shoot his fat ass." Kane props the gun on Penn's greasy face harder.

However, the men won't take Kane's warning too serious and they will start shooting on Kane and Penn.

This part of the mission requires the player to act fast. Kane must quickly take all the eight hitmen, because it's possible for Penn to be pinched by the black wearing men's bullets. In addition, Penn's death will result in the failure of the mission.

After killing all the eight attackers, Kane shoves Penn up the trunk of one of the black Elegants owned by the black suit men.

Kane tries to get away with Penny but the two black Elegants tail on them and burst fire on the car. Kane mustn't let the car take too damage otherwise Penn could die. On the way, Kane call West and says "his boy" is in the trunk of his car because things didn't go well.

"Yo' boy in the trunk of my car. Things ain't smooth back there, so I needed to give our man an unlikely treat." Kane says.

"What!? You out of yo' f*cking mind!?.. Come down to my lockup on El Corona, near the railway. Be sure no one's on yo' ass." West becomes furious for Kane not doing the job quietly.

"Okay. I'll meet you there." Kane says and hangs up.

After the losing the two car on him, Kane drives to the lockup to meet with West. When he arrives at the garage, Kane finds West and a bodyguard of his. On the background, Penn can be heard punching on the trunk and yelling "Get me out of here, ni**er!".

"Get him out of the trunk." West orders.

Kane goes to the back of his car and shoves Penn out of the trunk, who is all dirty and wasted.

"Hey! Open the trunk, you damn ni**er. I'm f*cking choked!" Penn hits on the trunk and yells over.

Kane opens the trunk and shoves Penn out of the trunk, but with a bit difficulty because of his overweight.

"Hey! I'ma teach you some lesson of cultural differences, pal." Kane holds Penn by collars and punches him in his fat face a few times for using a racial slang on him.

After hitting him a few times, Kane throws Penn on a wooden chair. Later, West's bodyguard ties Penn to the chair with a piece of duct tape as Kane stands near by Penn with his arms crossed to each other.

"Sorry 'bout my friend's rudeness, Mr. Penn. He didn't go to college, screwed his life over drugs... that's why he a lunatic." West says as he watches his bodyguard duct-taping Penn on the chair with evil eyes.

"F*ck you!" Penn shouts while he struggles to free himself from the duct tapes.

"You ain't a man of that bad mouth, Mr.Penn. Let's get down the business, shall we?" West says and claps his hands one time.

"You won't be taking sh*t from me. You can suck my big, floppy balls." Penn is still persistent.

"Then I guess we gotta do in the hard way. "

West strips down Penn's torso, ripping his dirty white shirt and he moves towards the shelfs on the left wall of the garage and gets a pair of clips. Later, West opens the black Elegant's hood and connects the clips with the car battery. West hands the clips to Kane and orders him to torture Mr.Penn but Kane seems to be unwilling to torture Mr. P.

"Kane. Let's show Mr.P a guest welcomin'." West strictly orders.

Kane looks confused at the clips for a long time.

"Hey! I ain't a torturer." Kane says in West's face.

"Now you are." West pulls out a gun and points it on Kane's head.

Now, the player is ordered to torture Mr. Penn with a pair of clips. Kane can electric shock Mr.P by clipping his nipples. Also Kane can spark the clips by pressing RMB, this will put more intimidation on Mr.Penn.

After three parties of getting shocked, Penn will give up and agree to sell his shares.

"Allright. Allright. I'll do it. Just stop that sh*t!" Mr. Penn shouts, getting waster after being tortured.

"Thanks fo' your understandin', Mr. P. It be pleasure to work with you." West says and pretends like he's writing something towards his bodyguard, ordering him to get the contracts.

Kane and West walk towards the gate of the garage.

"Now kid. You free to go, but don't miss out yo' promotion party at Alhambra. And get somethin' smart fo' the night. You gettin' a crown tonight." West says with his right hand on Kane's shoulder.

Now, Kane must get some new, smart clothes for his promotion party. There are total six shops where Kane can purchase new threads: Binco, ProLaps, SubUrban, Zip, Victim, Didier Sachs.

The party will start by 21:00. You will be informed when the party starts.

II...

Kane walks down the concrete pavements of Idlewood by the glamorous dark of the night and cuts through the corner to get right in front of the main entrance of Idlewood. On the opposite side of the road, Combo is in his car, puffing a cigarette with his full lips. Just before Kane enters the club, Combo finishes smoking his cigarette, throws it away and drives off.

Kane finds the club more shiny than it has ever been and fully attended: it stores almost whole Ballas gang. The place is crawling with the hottest chicks who are intentionally given stage just for Kane's big night, and of course the tables are fully covered with fresh drugs and best drinks.

A bald African-American guy, who wears a white shirt accompanied by a purple tie and black puffy vest, is seen doing coke with two whores. As soon as he recognizes, he stops doing coke and leaves the girls behind. The man stops Kane in his tracks but Kane is creeped by him because he acts a bit weird probably because he's pretty high on coke.

"Hey, Kane. What up, big dog?" The bald Afro-American says with a highly blurry voice tone because he's high on alchocol and snow.

"Uhh... Nay Nay. You a'right, homie?" Kane is creeped by Nay Nay a bit.

"Of course I'm a'right. My homie made it! Listen, man. Since you the big dog now, you gotta expand the horizons. Enjoy the night now, but don't forget to tip me some time. I've somethan' big fo' ya." Nay Nay said with the same blurry tone as he barely stands on foot.

"A'right, man. A'right. I'll hit you. Catch up later." Kane says.

After fending Nay Nay off, Kane goes to the bar to get some drink. There, he encounters with his LT, Bulleye who shares Kane's happiness but at the same time he's not enjoying the night so much because of the sudden death of his right hand man Gabe.

Kane lifted his forefinger towards the bartender, implying him to get him one. Right later, he recognizes Bulleye near him, who seems to be not happy too much, drinking over the loss of his employee.

"Hey, Kane!" Bulleye said with a choked voice and later continued sipping his vodka.

"Hey, LT!" Kane said and took a one sip from his whiskey.

"You did good, boy. You're gettin' up the stairs, you gotta know that it's damn important." Bulleye said with a bit lighter choked voice.

"Yeah, man. I know."

"Rulin' yo' own crew comes up with responsibilities. You gotta think both fo' yo'self and yo' boys... Uhh, poor kid... I coulda saved him." Bulleye says and gasps a burp afterwards.

"Yeah, man. I was shocked when I heard he's... dead." Kane played the emotional.

"Damn straight. He was a one tough motherf*cker, how the f*ck that happened?.. Anyways, boy, have tonight off. We'll talk later, we have lot to discuss." Bulleye said and continued drinking.

Later, Nate and Smut suddenly show up out of the blue and will join Kane's company right on the other side of the bar. The two will probably be the happiest for Kane's promotion and they show their enthusiasm by giving them a special, hand-made weed blunt.

"Hey, Kane. Over here, man." Nate will shout over Kane who is sitting along with Bulleye.

Kane gets up from his chair and does shoulder greeting with both Nate and Smut.

"Kane. You did it, man. You did it!" Nate says.

"Yeah, Kane. You're the F*CKING man!" Smut says.

"We should celebrate it in our midst some other time. At a bar with three chicks, a bit of rock..." Nate says.

"I thought Donette be the woman of yo' life?" Kane busts Nate's balls.

"Of course, she is, nigga. She's the love of my life. The others... they come they go." Nate says.

"Here, take it, bro... Made with the best seeds of meh garden." Smut gets his hand into his jacket and produces a big, fat weed roll from it.

Kane hands the blunt, lights it and takes a strong toke from it. Before he can exhale the smoke, Suge shows up, who congrulates him and tells him that Big Ben wants to meet him.

"Kane. Wassup man?" Suge immediately shows up near Kane.

Kane finally exhales the smoke, feels a bit dizzy because like Smut suggested the blunt has been really strong.

"Same old, same old." Kane says.

"You did a good job, my man. We all proud o' you. Big Ben is here, too. He want to see you." Suge says.

"Be careful when kissin' on dat greasy lips." Smut mocks with Big Ben's request to see Kane.

"F*ck you, Smut." Kane says.

Kane follows Suge amongst the crowd. While he has been trying to dodge himself out of this hell of a crowd, his eyes catch on an exotic beautie with dark hair, skin like black silk, full lips and a perfect body, drinking a glass of red vine. The girl spots Kane as well and the both share lusty glances until Suge ruins this beautiful moment to continue their way.

Eventually they reach the table of Big Ben after a struggle with the choatic crowd. Kane and Suge find West with a big black man who is even fatter than Combo (he happens to be Big Ben, the top man of the Ballas) and they're enjoying drugs and alchocol with two chicks along with them. When he sees Kane and Suge are about to join their company, West sends the two girls off, getting the space for the men.

"You f*cking did it, homeboy. You a cold, bad b*tch." West hugs Kane in a brotherly manner.

"So you the boy, huh? Well, son. I'm glad to see such an ambitious bro like you on the board." Big Ben cuts in, says with usual slack voice tone.

"Thanks, Mr. Brown. Coming from you, it mean a lot." Kane says a bit shy.

"Nobody ain't call me Brown. How you know my last name, boy?" It leaves Big Ben in a bit of shock to Kane knowing his last name.
"Seems like papers really like you, Mr.Brown." Kane explains and tries to be a bit sharp and funny.

"Uh huh! Ain't that a funny boy." Big Ben bursts into laughs.

Interestingly, a group of ski-mask wearing men in black are see moving on the top floor with assault rifles in their hands. The men start to randomly shoot up the club, soon they're recognized and the Ballas start to push attack on them.

First, Kane, West, Suge and the other Ballas in the main room kill the hitmen on the top floor. However, another group of hitmen burst through the main door but they're killed in cold blood by the overnumbered Ballas population in the main room.

After wiping them out, Kane moves to the back door to help Nate and Smut fight off some hitmen pushing up from the back.
Once the last hitman drops, everybody takes a grip until they realize Big Ben got shot in the stomach.

"That was close." Smut says.

"Sure, it was." Kane adds.

"We was gonna get our skins iced." West says.

"Oh f*ck! Big Ben bleeding up the guts!" Suge realizes that Big Ben is laying on the armchair of his table, while trying to hold the blood spilling all over his stomach with his fat hands.

"F*ck!.. Kane, go get my wheels around the corner... Suge, help me carry the fat buster." West shoots the orders in a state of panic.

Kane runs towards the main door as West and Suge place themselves under the big, greasy arms of Big Ben, start to walk him over the door.

Kane gets West's black Huntley just around the club and parks it in front of the club. Later, Suge and West load Big Ben onto back seat and they get in the car.

"Drive over the hospital, Kane. He bleeding as f*ck." West shoots it.

"Hospital? We roll out with a man shot up to sh*t, they'll be askin' damn questions." Kane states about a possible general problem.

"Just shut the f*ck up and drive! I know what to do." West says the last word.

Before Big Ben loses too much blood, Kane rushes him to the hospital. West leads Big Ben into the hospital, meanwhile Suge hands a two thousand to Kane, telling that West wanted him to give it to him. Later, both Kane and Suge bid farewell to each other before separating their ways.

"Take it, Kane. West wanted me to give you this." Suge hands two thousands to Kane.

"Uhh, man. Ain't no need fo' somethin' like that." Kane says.

"Nah, you did good today and you deserve each coin of that. Just don't spend it on drugs, drink and chicks, a'right. Catch you later." Suge says and runs back to Big Ben and West.



After the sun rises, West gives Kane a call.

"Hey dude! How you doin' ?" West says.

"You know... the same. How is Big Ben?" Kane asks.

"He a good, ol', big pig. He hard like iron." West says.

"Good to hear that." Kane says.

"Listen... Ben be really glad you saved his f*cking life. He want to show this to you. Said his cold, hard Banshee be yours now. He say it too lil' fo' him. You know what I mean? [laughs]" West says and laughs a bit long.

"Wow, man!.. The big boss know how to make his dog happy." Kane shows his appreciation for the good gift of Big Ben.

"Yeah, he a bit mad but always a kind motherf*cker. Listen... there a crazy dude called 'Shadow', he interested in snatching men, get money over that sh*t. I gave him yo' number. You can call him if you need cash, dog." West says.

"A'right, man. I'll see what I can do. Laters." Kane says and hangs up.

Big Ben's custom, unique navy-black Banshee will be parked at an underground car park in Jefferson. Kane can take the car whenever he feels like to do so.

• Kidnapping side-mission is unlocked.

Comments on this part...

Awesome chapter! Liked the action in this one. It's a great attention to detail. I can actually play San Andreas and see all this happening at Alhambra club.

West is a great character. Always love him waxing lyrical.

"Leashing the Dogs" is a fitting title. I think it came to represent not only the mission of putting Mr. Penn of Homies on a leash, but also provided commentary on several men in Ballas who are dogs and will be forever leashed, like Nay Nay, Combo and Bullseye, who even though he is a Lieutenant is still a dog subservient to West. Even Kane is a dog for West, who throws him a few treats now and again like opportunities and kidnapping contacts. By introducing Big Ben, you show how West himself is a dog on the leash of a higher power.

I also think an underlying theme here was jealousy.

At the beginning Tyrone the bodyguard (he has a name now!) storms off and slams the door after being dismissed by West.

West says to Kane that he can find someone else to do his dirty work. That would appeal to Kane's ego... make him jealous of anyone else who would get that opportunity.

Combo sitting in a car across from Alhambra and driving away. Makes me think he is jealous enough of Kane to maybe even set him up with those guys who crashed his party.

So much going on in the background. Great reading!

And dude, I totally imagined Proposition Joe when Big Ben featured in the story

Edited September 2, 2014 by TheUnholy

[Tyla]

Are we all caught up with the story so far now?

 

Say man, I was playing San Andreas again and I was wondering how much of Sweet are we going to see here, if we see him at all?

 

A line of his got me to thinking how he could come into play: "When Moms needed an operation, I robbed people for the bread."

 

What if he stuck up a deal in the events of your story? Would be nice to see more background on him that accounts for his bleak view on life.

[Liver Buster]

Are we all caught up with the story so far now?

 

Say man, I was playing San Andreas again and I was wondering how much of Sweet are we going to see here, if we see him at all?

 

A line of his got me to thinking how he could come into play: "When Moms needed an operation, I robbed people for the bread."

 

What if he stuck up a deal in the events of your story? Would be nice to see more background on him that accounts for his bleak view on life.

Then you're gonna get what you want. Like I said, Chapter II will be the longest chapter of the game, and furthermore, we're gonna look at the situations from different perspectives. We'll see Sweet a couple of times. Looking at a sneak peek of his appearances, I can say that we're gonna see how much Sweet will take it far to keep his cause... which kinda turns him into an evil as far as Ballas or Vagos are. Furthermore, Families getting teared apart and its war with Ballas is a key part of Chapter II. For instance, I'm planning to include how Temple Drive Families decide to stir up from Grove, and how Ballas formed a set in Temple Drive. On the other hand, B-Dup, Smoke, Big Bear (we'll be able to how he got hooked up on crack), Little Weasel (who later happens to be a protege to Kane) will be other character related to Grove that are gonna make appearance.

 

BTW, I've never seen this line, but I found it pretty interesting, and it gave me an idea. Maybe Grove could perform an armed robbery, and Ballas would look out for a way how they could stir sh*t up for Grove from this.

 

P.S: I'm gonna start working on the new part today. Stay tuned!

Edited September 4, 2014 by TheUnholy

[Tyla]

Everything sounds perfect. And damn, I'm actually keyed up that you're working on the new chapter!

 

Real glad that Sweet and Smoke will make appearances, and especially that we'll see more of Big Bear and Dup.

 

I would love it if Grove pulled a robbery. Even better if the job is done within the hood. Something like how Vic Mackey robbed Armenian money launderers in The Shield. With the gangs you have you could easily make it so Sweet hits Greek money launderers and then the Russians behind the Greeks compel the Ballas to track down who was behind the robbery. Obviously there's not much that could happen to Sweet, but unknown Grove members like Tony and Little Devil this could well be the reason they end up six-feet under.

[Liver Buster]

Everything sounds perfect. And damn, I'm actually keyed up that you're working on the new chapter!

 

Real glad that Sweet and Smoke will make appearances, and especially that we'll see more of Big Bear and Dup.

 

I would love it if Grove pulled a robbery. Even better if the job is done within the hood. Something like how Vic Mackey robbed Armenian money launderers in The Shield. With the gangs you have you could easily make it so Sweet hits Greek money launderers and then the Russians behind the Greeks compel the Ballas to track down who was behind the robbery. Obviously there's not much that could happen to Sweet, but unknown Grove members like Tony and Little Devil this could well be the reason they end up six-feet under.

f*ck yeah! That actually sounds perfect. BTW, I always wanted to watch The Shield, I should put it somewhere in my schedule soon. Actually my plan's a bit different with the Greeks for Chapter II. Don't want to spoil but Zeus messes too much with Cobras, he eventually put heat on himself, that leads a chain of events involving DEA put pressure on Greeks, connectively Russians and Ballas. This heat will lead West to think that there is a "rat in the house". I don't know... maybe I could make Kane and Zeus doing few errands for DEA in exchange for the case against them to be put down but I'm not so sure. To be said, in the end, Ballas and Greeks eventually decide to split their ways because of the heat on them.

 

However, I think that's a pretty good idea. Maybe it could be done with Russians' only appearance (Four Walls of Brick) during Chapter V. For some reason, Kane and Zeus reunite again (I don't want to explain the reason, that could be a big, fat SPOILER), and Kane needs to do a little favor to Russian to get what he needs. Although I've been thinking about destroying a sub-marine that is caught by the police with k's of drugs in it, I think your idea could be better. Some batch of Russian money sent to be Greeks are reported to be stolen, and the rumors say that it's Grove who is stealing the money. So Kane is put in the line of work, and he confronts B-Dup about it. B-Dup eventually dittles that Big Bear came to him with a fat bag of cash, and it's not that kind of money he could easily find. So they together confront B-Dup, and I think that could be a good way if B-Dup tries to shake Bear's memory with a dimebag of crack. As a sub-story, Bear would have slipped with little bit of the money received from the heist while he's hopped up on crack, and this would show his last run with the Grove, till the decision of getting cleaned up in 1992.

 

For more crossovers you've mentioned, I suggest you to wait for Chapter 15.

Edited September 7, 2014 by TheUnholy

[Liver Buster]

- PART 14 -

Three Players

"Even if there is a risk, we're three players. Player one, player two, player three. We can f*ck the risk up the ass. Three players... mean we've nine lives in total."

- David P. Collins

 

 

I...

Kane makes his way to Alhambra because Bulleye has said there's something to discuss. The sun hasn't set yet, but the club has been crawling with people already. Kane was barely moving along this huge pile of party maniacs. He managed to dodge a few people, and he suddenly found Nay Nay, who is a bit high, with a glass of whiskey in his hand, popped in front of him.

 

"Hey, Kane! What's up, chief?" Nay Nay said with a just little bit blurish voice.

 

"Livin' by... much I can't say." Kane says for the sake of just giving an answer.

 

"f*ck you, boy. I can imagine you get you wet all day by bitches, while hittin' pipe... You got the whole world, nigga." Nay Nay lightly upbraids.

 

"Excuse me!?" Kane gives a clueless look and says with a noticable angry voice tone.

 

"Oh!.. Sorry, man. Sorry. What I been tryin' to say... you a real dog now, and I share yo' enthusiasm." Nay Nay becomes more clear.

 

"Thanks, man... Uh, look... I gotta go." Kane tries to fend off, and move on his way.

 

"Where you goin', man? You gave yo' word to me... Remember. We was gonna bounce." Nay Nay held Kane.

"How 'bout another time, man? Bulleye want to see me... and y'know he get pissed when he ignored." Kane tries to get Nay Nay on his head by giving him a plausible excuse.

 

"F*ck Bulleye, man. Here... I serve some pure package, and you throwin' that oppurtunity away. Don't be fool as you look, nigga." Nay Nay says.

 

"What you just f*ckin' said?" Kane becomes a bit angry because of the last word Nay Nay shot.

 

"I-I-I ain't mean to disrespect you bro, but this chance... only trashed up by fools." Nay Nay immediately turns what he says when he sees Kane getting angry.

 

"Honestly... I presume yo' thing is sh*t, man." Kane eventually shows his true opinion on the matter.

 

"Why you ain't give the boy a chance, nigga? You just bein' hypocrite... but you'll see I ain't foolin'." Nay Nay is still persistent to involve Kane in the job.

 

"You won't gimme a break, ain't you?" Kane says.

 

Nay Nay hits the whiskey glass in one choke.

 

"Come on, man. Let's go." Nay Nay leads the way.

 

Kane exhales a full mouth of air and follows Nay Nay to the outside of the club.

 

"Let's bounce to Rodeo, homie. That where my boy be waitin'." Nay Nay says to Kane.

 

After Kane gets a set of wheels, Kane and Nay Nay continue talking.

 

"Yo' boy?" Kane asks.

 

"Yeah, he a whity, but a real businessman. I'm offerin' you a big, fat pure package, dude. Don't estimate that." Nay Nay explains.

 

"That's what I been scared of." Kane says with a low voice.

 

"You can't be stuck in one sh*t if you wanna be a real, inter-global businessman and sh*t. Crack... it been cheap sh*t. My boy, he'll get you the best coke in the city." Nay Nay hears what Kane says and tries to be more reasonable.

 

"Coke? That sh*t be too risky." Kane expresses his opinion on cocaine trade.

 

"I said, you don't worry. My boy... he'll get you the cleanest besides the purest." Nay Nay says.

 

"Hope so... you sure you tight with that guy?" Kane wants to be sure whom he's going to a deal with.

 

"Two nuts in a ballsack, yo. We even share bitches, me takin' the mouth, he takin' the bass, and uhh..." Nay Nay states that he's very close with that guy.

 

"Okay! I just wanted to know if you boys cool. I don't care how you share pussies." Kane says.

 

When they're passing by Nay Nay's contact's residence, Nay Nay will warn Kane by saying "A'right, man. This is the spot.". The place is an eleven-floor luxury apartment painted with teal. Later, Kane and Nay Nay get out of their vehicle and Kane starts to follow Nay Nay up to the contact's flat.

 

Cut to a lux, elegant flat, a white man with whose clothing style resembles the one of Sammy Cracker, is seen sitting on a sweet pink sofa, doing lines of coke serially. Suddenly, his door get knocked, to which he doesn't respond good.

 

"The f*ck is this?" The guy gets up as he cleans his nose off cocaine.

 

The guy slowly moves towards the door as the knocking sounds get harder. He opens the door with sluggish eyes, revealing Kane and Nay Nay waiting on the other side of the door. The man's stagnation goes off as soon as he sees Nay Nay.

 

"My dude! You still kickin' it, man. I mean even if you coke up yo' nose with pink eyes." Nay Nay greets the white man.

 

"You know me, Nathan boy... never give exceptions. Buddies 'hi'!" The white man says and lifts up his right hand.

 

Nay Nay and the white man hit each others' hands a couple of times, later they make their shoulders touch. Later, the white man takes his place back on his sweet pink sofa and Nay Nay sits on the armchair right next to the sofa.

 

"That my boy I been talkin' 'bout... Kane." Nay Nay introduces Kane to the white man.

 

"Hi, Kane! What's up, holmes?" The white man tries to be funny by using street slang while Nay Nay sniffs two cocaine lines the man left behind.

 

"Hello... fake ass Mr.Cracker." Kane mocks the white guy for his clothing style which resembles the 80's icon TV show character Sammy Cracker, the main character in the TV series called 'Moronic Vice'.

 

"Funny. If I am Cracker, then you gotta be Butts. David Collins, pal. David f*cking Collins... that's the name." The man finally reveals his identity.

 

David bows down to snort from his lines of coke, but only to realize that Nay Nay has sniffed them already.

"Man, what the f*ck!? You've finished my dust." David complains.

 

"F*ck you, you greedy asshole. You a coke dealer... and that what I was tellin' Kane 'bout." Nay Nay makes a brief entrance to the topic.

 

"Oh yeah. You know 'bout drugs, Kane?" David leans on his sofa like a king, puts his arms on the top of it.

 

David moves to the joysticks which are cabled to his game console, grabs one and gives another one to Nay Nay.

 

"I'm gonna f*ck you up this time, Nay." David says as he handles the console to Nay Nay.

 

"Course I do. I deal them since I was a lil' kid. Thing ain't like puttin' on fancy clothes, pretendin' readin' papers and changin' metal briefcases under the table." Kane sees it as insult to be asked if he knows about his primary work.

 

"Does anyone tell you you're a damn hypocrite, Kane? Really, I'm wondering this. Please tell me." David asks this as he struggles to play the console game.

 

"Actually yeah. Nay did when we was comin' here." Kane responds.

 

"A'right, a'right. Got my new party of coke. You gonna help me carry it, you get what you after; good cash, and I get what I after; fresh coke." David gives a brief info about the job.

 

"Okay. What's the risk?" Kane asks with his arms crossed to each other.

 

"Risk?.. There ain't no risk, pal. Piece of cake. Even if there is a risk, we're three players. Player one [fingerpoints himself], player two [fingerpoints Nay Nay], player three [fingerpoints Kane]. We can f*ck the risk up the ass. Three players... mean we've nine lives in total." David says as he shakes the console in his left hand.

 

"I think you misunderstand the 'game', man. It's outside... but okay. Even though it the talkin' of a man with bad fate, I'm in." Kane says.

 

David turns back to his game.

 

"What!? If I hadn't talked with Kane, I coulda f*ck you up the ass." David's reaction when he sees the score.

 

"Stop whinin' like a b*tch on his period, Dave. It's 24th minute and the score is 3-0 already." Nay Nay says.

 

"Uhh... get your ass up then. We're going." David puts on his sun glasses that was hanging out from his V-neck purple T-shirt and leads down the way.

 

Kane finds himself outside David's luxury apartment block with him and Nay Nay. Now you've to find a four-door car. David's white Sentinel will be parked right in front of the apartment if you want to grab it.

 

"So where we goin'?" Kane asks.

 

"The drugs are stashed at a lockup in Ocean Docks." David says.

 

"So who get you the snow?" Kane asks after a short silence.

 

"I think that information is secret, bro. My suppliers are a bit sensitive about that, but their merch is 100% pure. If thingS work out, maybe I can hook you up." David says and produces a stick of cigarette from his jacket.

 

"I'll pass on that. Coke... too risky. And how come you so sure we'll be movin' the coke easily?" Kane asks.

 

"Kane, man. You pathetic. Take a chill pill, bro." Nay Nay shoots it.

 

"Yeah, Kane... Look, my suppliers are real professionals. They got control over the dock, the workers are all tipped. So moving out with the coke ain't no problem." David clearly explains.

 

"A'right then, but I gotta say I'm still ambigious." Kane says.

 

"Uhh!.." Nay Nay is done with Kane's paranoia.

 

When they arrive at the entrance of the docks, they're easily let through the gate. After entering the docks, Kane drives to a garage located at a narrow area of the docks. The garage is a really small one.

 

David and Nay Nay open the gate of the garage while Kane waits for them, standing back. After the gate is lifted, a Sanchez and a "Lolita's Market Mexican Food" embled yellow Pony is revealed. David states that the coke is loaded in this van, and the back of the van can be seen filled with wrapped coke packages.

 

"It's the van the sugar is loaded in." David says.

 

Out of nowhere, two fed cars cut in front of the garage with their sirens on, but the cars confront Kane, David and Nay Nay before they're alerted.

 

"What the f*ck!?" Nay Nay says with an open mouth after seeing the two fed cars right in front of him.

 

"What did you just say?" Kane sarcastically touches on David's thesis that there won't be no problem.

 

"Where the f*ck this bacon came from?! Kane! Me and Nay are taking the van, you grab that bike and follow us." David says.

David throws the cigarette in his mouth and sits on the driver seat of the van. Nay Nay takes his place near David and straps his Pistol for the action.

 

Now Kane has to grab the bike and tail on David and Nay Nay. There will be an Advanced SMG put on the table located in the garage if the player needs it, and it's advisable to get a sub-machine gun at least, because protecting the van from the Feds will be a job for Kane, more actually.

 

Kane must follow David and Nay Nay, and keep a close distance with them as soon as possible because Nay Nay is only armed with Pistol, and he won't be very efficient to fight with hostlie federal agents on them.

 

There will be just two federal cars on the men until they drive along the docks a bit. Then, two more federal cars join into action, cutting among two warehouses located at the exact opposite sights of eachother's.

 

Actually, the heat becomes more dominant when the men get out from the docks. David and Nay Nay drive through the bridge that will get right in the middle of Willowfields. The bridge is narrow and usually busy... this'll be causing challenge to keep the cops and agents away from the van.

 

After passing the bridge, David and Nay Nay enters Willowfield from which they make it to the stadium. Then, the men make theit ways through the freeway but shortly after David cuts to Grove Street.

 

David drives on the railway while a train approaches with the highest speed. David and Nay Nay are about to get their heads depicated, but David manages to make a slight move and passes the tracks before the train could hit them.

 

Later, David gets back on the freeway and there he makes it to the downtown area of the city. From upon, David will be prone to cut through alleyways, so Kane must watch out or he may lose David, which results in the failure of the mission.

 

Around driving close to Verona Beach, Nay Nay calls Kane and tells him to park behind them and when they stop.

"Kane. Wassup, man?" Nay Nay calls Kane.

 

"As y'know I been tryin' to shake some f*cking pigs!" Kane angrily respond Nay Nay like he doesn't know what he's doing.

 

"A'right, man, a'right. Listen. Just park behind us when we stop, a'right? The heat be too much. We ditchin' the wheels." Nay Nay says.

 

"A'right." Kane says.

 

Kane sticks on following David who will start making his way on alleyways more than ever. After going through three or four alleyways, David stops the van in a bigger alleyway and Kane parks his bike right next to them.

 

David and Nay Nay open the back doors of the van, revealing the wrapped cocaine bricks stuffed up there. David takes out three holdalls inside the van, hands two of them to Kane and Nay Nay, orders them to load the bags.

 

"Fill the bags, boys. We gonna make it on foot." David says with his cigarette in his mouth.

 

Then, two SWAT vans show up and block both sides of the alleyway, preventing the three criminals' escape.

 

"Sh*t! Where they came from?" Nay Nay says, as he loads up his bag.

 

Kane, who has filled his bag, throws it on his shoulder and hugs on his gun back.

 

The deadly SWAT team enforcers will burst out from their brickade vans and will start to spray brutal fire on those three criminals who have turned the city upside down. This could be a little challenge because SWAT enforcers will be deadly equipped, most of them are handling Advanced SMGs, and some of them even carry out M4s. However, if Kane covers behind dumpsters, small pillars that could ease his job. Also standing by the van is a good choice, it's located at a bit protective location against SWAT, but this may put Nay Nay and David in danger, resulting in their demises.

 

After wipig out the deadly SWAT team, David will lead Nay Nay and Kane into a nearby car park (oppositing the alleyway which they left the van in) with their holdall full of coke bricks on their backs. The men find a parked Intruder in the car park. They stuff the bags into car's trunk, but that moment a police helicopter shows up out of the high concrete buildings.

 

"F*ck! They sent a chopper on us." Nay Nay says.

 

Kane can choose escaping from the chopper or getting rid of it (shooting the pilot, or blowing it up, RPG is highly required for this kind of a job). No matter the situation is, Kane must lose a three-stars wanted level, but the disposal of the chopper will ease this process as there won't be an "eye in the sky".

 

After losing the heat, Kane drives David, Nay Nay and the dust to David's lockup in Commerce (right near some of the foots of the freeway bridge) where David will leave it to cool down.

 

"Okay. I'll store the stuff here until the heat's gone." David says.

 

"Well... what 'bout money?" Kane asks.

 

"Just give the guy a little break, allright? You'll get your cut when I offload the sh*t. Laters." David says.

 

 

II...

In a bit, Bulleye will call Kane in the midnight and scolds him for why he didn't come see him.

 

"Where the f*ck you been, boy? The f*ck you been? You was gonna meet me at the club today." Bulleye angrily yells Kane over the line.

 

"Sorry, Ben... Couldn't find a time." Kane says.

 

"Whatever! Go get the van stashed in the lockup in Idlewood. It's special delivery for Zeus. That Greek f*ck be givin' hard time." Bulleye says.

 

"Okay. I'll handle it." Kane says.

 

"And come see in the mornin'. There is some other thang needs to be sorted of... ain't let nothing happen like today." Bulleye says and angrily hangs up the phone on Kane's face. A harsh thumb hit on the button can be heard from the other side of the line.

 

Kane has to go and get the van filled with "special delivery" from the garage in Idlewood, which located just few blocks away from Alhambra. After checking up the van, Kane gets the van to Zeus' warehouse in Verdant Bluffs. As he approaches with the van, Zeus is standing by with his arms crossed to each other and his left foot tapping the ground.

 

"You're late." Zeus is a bit serious, which is a weird situation for him.

 

"Whatever, Zeus. You got yo' merch, ain't you?" Kane says with a tired voice tone.

 

"A'right, man. No problem. By the way... good job, man. Now you're running with your own boys... We should celebrate it sometime." Zeus delivers his satisfaction to Kane for his satisfaction.

 

"Yeah, thanks. Now, I gotta go..." Kane was about to departure, but he is cut by Zeus.

 

"Bad for the fat man, of course. He was a fun guy, but he was damn loony, man. Jesus!... And I felt sorry for the poor dude, but to be honest... he looked like dumb to me." Zeus states his bad feelings for Combo and Gabe.

 

"Look..." Kane tries to intervene.

 

"Okay, I got it. Let me check on the sh*t." Zeus says.

 

Kane and Zeus moves towards the back of the van as Zeus' guys watch them and whistle something to each other.

 

Kane opens the doors of the van, revealing a big pile of cartoon boxes there.

 

"Okay, man. We're good. I'll pass this sh*t on the streets in no time." Zeus says.

 

Zeus offers a shoulder greeting to Kane, but gets rejected again. Kane just doesn't look back, begins walking out of the compound.

Edited September 8, 2014 by TheUnholy

[Tyla]

SOTEOF is back!

 

A different approach to what we've seen in your previous chapters I think. Collins is probably your most flamboyant character yet. I like him because he reminds me of the severely underrated Bryan Forbes and he appeals to my dress sense. And your "pal" count is getting there -- I counted two!

 

Part of me thinks he could be toned down a little and his cocaine use should incite a healthy degree of paranoia, drive him to a darker place. His clothes begin to resemble Crockett's alter ego Burnett and he'd start to question what is this heat? Who are these guys? Is this guy f*cking me? Either way I think he will have repercussions for Kane and begin to face his own consequences sooner rather than later.

 

The action part of the mission was great, one of your best. I see the To Live and Die in Alderney inspiration and it reminded me of a cross between that mission and the escape from Grove Street in Hood Safari. Good job!

 

Zeus seems super slippery. That's all I have to say about his sliminess so far!

 

Can't wait for the crossover next chapter.

[Liver Buster]

Thanks. I'm glad that you enjoyed Collins. Don't wanna break your hopes but Collins is more like just an introductive character. His role is pretty similar to Forbes' but Collins has more specific characteristic I guess. I have never watched Miami Vice, but I know a little bit about Burnett... he seems like a dangerous S.O.B with a lethal ego, actually could be useful to put something in Collins... make his paranoia reach the top after the heat received. Maybe Collins be holed up in his apartment, without sunshine, snorting coke all day, killing himself with unnecessary suspicions. Although it's a bit far from original idea, I'll consider this... compare it what I have and put it on the plate.

 

Zeus... all I can say about him. I don't know if he is slippery... the time will show us, but my prediction is that he is nothing but a slimy fool... like Ryder, but Ryder has got more of his uses. It is wonderable how an idiot like Zeus runs a crew that is under the thumb of Ruskies from the East. Maybe he has ambition... that could be the spirit.

 

I've planned what I'll do for the next part, but I may postpone till I clear what I'm gonna do with Part 16. I've had plans for this part, but it seems like a senseless blob of sh*t to me now. Maybe I should bring that jinxed train heist back into matter. I don't want to spoil too much, but all of yous can imagine what will happen next. After the next part, there are gonna be three parts to go and... the circle is getting more and more tight.

Edited September 9, 2014 by TheUnholy

[Tyla]

Ahh, I'm sure it will turn out just fine in the hands of the master!

 

Take your time. Whichever way you go we know it's going to turn out great. This whole thread was a big deal in getting me to play San Andreas again.

[Blennerville]

now that a wall of text.

[Tyla]

How's Chapter 15 coming along man?

[Liver Buster]

How's Chapter 15 coming along man?

Working on it, if possible, I'll post it today.

[Liver Buster]

- PART 15 -
Tough Love

 

"We on each other's throats every day... boys killed, corners drop. This ain't the old sh*t man... sh*t changin'. Back in the day, there was an order, even for killin'. Respect... love... sh*t! The game turns into coyotes' game from dogs' game."

- Benny "Bulleye" Manson

 

Kane stops by Alhambra on Bulleye's orders, but the club is all empty, there's not even a little sound except for light, slow beat playing on the background. Kane approaches the bar, raises his forefinger towards the bartender and demands a "Vodka on ice". Kane puts his head down and rubs his eyes while he waits for his ice cold vodka to come. The bartender fills a glass with vodka, throws some ice rocks in it. Kane starts sipping the vodka and right now, Bulleye rushes out of the toilet.

 

"Hey, boy. Sup?" Bulleye deploys right near Kane and bids him a hello.

 

"And you... how 'bout you, LT?" Kane just keeps his head down and continues drinking his vodka.

 

"What can I say? We on each other's throats every day... boys killed, corners drop. This ain't the old sh*t man... sh*t changin'. Back in the day, there was an order, even for killin'. Respect... love... sh*t! The game turns into coyotes' game from dogs' game. I don't know if I can take it anymore." Bulleye clearly explains the transformation of the game from the eyes of an experienced urban legend.

 

"All in the game, man... Not much to say." Kane calmly says and sips his drink a little bit.

 

"Look, Kane. I'm a traditional man, but if they wanna play dirty, I'll play dirty. There be no dignity in what we do, I should have learned that earlier."

 

Kane does not say anything, he continues drinking the cold vodka.

 

"We gonna f*ck those Grove f*ckas hard... We gonna hit 'em where it hurts most." Shortly after, Bulleye starts to talk again.

 

"What you mean?" Kane says in a calm style while facing his vodka glass.

 

"I got that word, see? Those Grove Street busters movin' guns... guns full of two trucks. We gonna steal their guns, and chop each of 'em sh*ts' head. So they gonna know what does Ballas mean." Bulleye explains his plan.

 

"When?" Kane says.

 

"Now! If you get yo' heavy ass up, we can go." Bulleye says.

 

Kane shots the remaining vodka, hits the glass on the counter and rejoins Bulleye who walks towards the exit.

 

"Take us to the gun shop over Willowfield." Bulleye orders in a tough manner.

 

"Ain't we stealin' some hardware sh*t? Why goin' gun shop?" Kane asks in a bit cocky manner.

 

"Not like that. There be a couple of niggas waitin us. They keepin' a watch out there."

 

"You really know how to turn sh*t around, LT."

 

Kane just grabs a ride and drives to the Ammunition in Willowfield where Suge and his corner kids waiting near his black Tahoma, rolling around much more heavily armed than how packed they're in usual. Bulleye approaches Suge who is leaning against the driver's door and asks him to share his observations.

 

"What's happenin' ?" Bulleye demands a report.

 

"The goods be on them wheels. [fingerpoints two Bensons guarded by two heavily armed Grove gangsters, and two other members unload some wooden boxes off the trucks] The entrance should be easy, but the place crawlin' with motherf*ckers, y'know?" Suge reports to Bulleye.

 

"Okay. If we push up from two sides, we can easily make it inside. I'll go check the guys other side. When I give the sign, we gonna put them hard." Bulleye explains the plan and walks away from the group while swinging the AK-47 on his right hand.

 

Shortly after, Bulleye shows up right near the other group which is located at the right behind of the cargo. Bulleye picks up his phone and dials Suge from the phonebook.

 

"Yeah?" Suge answers the call.

 

"Be ready, man. Tell yo' boys to patch up, then hit the motherf*ckers... slow and hard. We'll attack after yo' first shot." Bulleye says with a cold tone and immediately hangs up.

 

Right after the phone call is finished, Suge turns towards his men and gives them a short heroic speech.

 

"A'right, homeboys. Now we're gonna drip right between some psycho motherf*ckers. I don't know if we could make it, but if we'll drop, we'll drop like men. Load yo' guns and follow me." Suge gives his men some encourage as he swings the Uzi in his hand.

The whole region is echoed with gun loading sounds as the Groves still don't know what's coming to them.

 

Cut back in the game, the player takes control of Kane as Suge acts like a ninja right in front of him and the other Ballas right after him. They slowly approach the trucks and Grove gangbangers while Bulleye and his homeboys are seen stealthily approaching the party as well. However, the Groves spot the Ballas coming from them almost immediately, the guards draw out their guns, and the Groves carrying gun boxes drop their load and counterattack as well, but this doesn't save them from getting in cold blood.

 

"We movin' in, niggas. Go in! Go in!" Bulleye leads as soon as the dead Groves lick the wet concreted originated from their own blood.

 

However, be hold before entering the warehouse, because there will five or six Grove members waiting in front of the warehouse, with their guns pointed to the opened steel gate. You can take cover right near the gate, take out the Groves tactically. However, there's a possibility that other Ballas could fill the whole covering spots. This probably was not gonna big deal, because those five or six Groves are totally outnumbered by the Balla attackers.

 

After killing those Groves, Kane, Bulleye, Suge and the other Ballas burst into warehouse which is filled with Grove members carrying lethal guns such as Uzis, Shotguns, AK-47s besides simple firearms such as Pistols. Now, just find a good covering spot such as a wooden box or a pillar because near the big number of Ballas occupying the first floor, also four Grove gangbangers will attack you and your gang from the iron hangers of the second floor. Taking out the Grove shooters behind the hangers first would be advisable because they will have a clear view from there, having a high chance of delivering deadly shots on you.

 

After wiping out the whole Groves in the warehouse, the gang climbs to the second floor where they're welcomed by a crazy Grove OG who wears a body armor and carries a shotgun.

 

"I ain't dyin' without fighin' you f*ckers!" The Grove OG boldly yells and starts opening fire randomly.

 

Luckily, the first three shotgun shells he fires miss, but the last one hits one of Suge's boys named V-Star, brutally wounding him.

"Uhhh! f*ck that, nigga!" V-Star screams in pain while he holds his bloody guts.

 

"Sh*t, boy! Don't worry, you'll be a'right." Suge tries to keep his man strong despite his deep wound.

 

"Come at me, busters. I take fifty of you in once." The Grove OG yells and fires a few more shots as he holes himself in the office right behind him.

 

The Grove OG smashes the window's office with his ancon and starts firing bullets again as the Ballas push themselves back onto the stairs to avoid taking shotgun leads.

 

Soon after the Ballas will push upon to attack the crazy OG. However, it's a bit hard to get the OG because of his bulletproof vest and him firing his shotgun ceaselessly. The best tactic to carry out is waiting until each time he reloads his gun, then spraying bullets on him with serial guns such as Micro SMG or AK-47.

 

After the gang seriously wounds the OG, he falls on the ground, leans on the table in the office, starts breathing heavily, which is shortly followed by coughing blood. Bulleye storms the office while his hands are wrapped around his AK-47.

"Payback time, motherf*cker!" Bulleye ruthlessly points his gun towards the OG as he shrinkles with rage.

 

"Go ahead... [coughs] Make me, ballsucker." The Grove OG orders his death without fear, as he looks into Bulleye's eyes with fire.

Bulleye empties his AK-47 on the Grove OG with flaming eyes while grinding his teeth.

 

"I'll find every one of you motherf*ckers, kill you after torturin' you all day, all night... and you'll WISH you had never born!" Bulleye shouts his oath to exterminate the Groves after he finishes off the Grove OG.

 

Bulleye storms out of the office as the other Ballas watch him with open mouths. Bulleye spots Suge who is standing right near his wounded soldier.

 

"Hey Suge! Ain't you comin'?" Bulleye asks.

 

"Nah, man. I'ma get V-Star a doc... get him patched up." Suge answers.

 

Kane and the gang follows Bulleye to the exit as they pass near Suge and the wounded V-Star. After getting out of the warehouse, Bulleye walks towards one of the trucks and orders Kane to take the other one.

 

"Kane! Get the other truck and follow me." Bulleye orders.

 

"Wait! Where we offloadin' this sh*t?" Kane asks.

 

"You know... that greedy f*cker down the Sevilla, LB."

 

"LB? I shoulda known that rat-faced, money hungry b*tch gotta have somethin' with this." Kane shows his extreme dislike towards LB.

 

Kane gets in the other truck and follows Bulleye who will drive recklessly towards the Seville Boulevard. Shortly after, Kane and Bulleye arrive LB's place in Playa Del Seville. They park the trucks in two LB's lockups and go through the back to knock on an iron door. After two knockings or so, a tall man in a yellow plaid shirt opens the door.

 

"Yeah, man?" The man asks with a questioning manner.

 

"Shut up, boy. We regular." Bulleye pushes the man and bursts inside.

 

Passing the door leads Kane and Bulleye into a basement where is filled with anything you can imagine... screens, old furnitures, car parts, firearms (which are displayed in glass counters). An ugly, short man in a gray coat welcomes both Kane and Bulleye, showing his glory to see them after a long time.

 

"Hey, boys. Long time no see, eh?" the short African-American says under his ugly face and chuckles an evil grin.

 

"Yeah... cut the crap, LB. We gotta two loads of guns, and we know you're interested." Kane directly comes to the point, not wanting to spend time with a douche like LB.

 

"I am always interested in worthy business relationships, Kane. You know that?" LB says and chuckles another of his evil grins.

 

"Yeah, you gonna take it or what?" Kane says.

 

"Sure, but I just want you to know... if you need goof piece of guns, you come to me. Screens, got in the first hand..." LB performs a serial advertisement.

 

"Uh, man... I'm out, smoking." Kane silently says into Bulleye's and leaves for a smoke.

 

Kane's goes around the corner, leans himself on the wall, smoking a cigarette. Shortly after, Bulleye comes with a handful cash, stops right near Kane.

 

"You did good, Kane. Real good. [hits the cash bundle into Kane's hand] Here... a lil' token of my respect." LB gratefully appreciates Kane's good work today and shows his respect by giving him his cut.

 

"I don't know what to say, man. You, you know how to keep yo' nigga happy." Kane thanks LB for the cash.

 

"I be going, man. Catch you later."

 

Bulleye and Kane exchange a few goodbye fists and Bulleye leaves as Kane continues smoking.

 

 

• LB's Store is unlocked.

 

"Hey, Kane. What's up?" A sneaky voice says over the other part of the line.

 

"Sh*t! LB, is that you? Where you got my number at?" Kane says.

 

"I got the phone number of every crook in the town, Kane. You know... just keepin' fruitful relationships. I have a nice source of information, brother... TVs, guns, drugs... everything you can say. And I thought you might be interested." LB says with his cunning voice tone again.

 

"Maybe." Kane says with an extremely unwilling tone.

 

"Good. I'll tip you when I got somethin', a'right? Good day, partner." LB bids farewell to Kane.

 

 

• LB's Tip-Offs are unlocked.

Edited November 1, 2014 by TheUnholy

[Liver Buster]

Let's bring it to life, shall we? A little verse from the next part, Chapter I - Part 16: Los Santos' Finest...

 

 

Combo is standing by a nearby payphone, possibly talking with West.

 

"A'right." Combo humbles between his fat lips and hangs up the phone.

 

Just across the street, a white Previon is parked, its all windows are closed, the way it looks... is a little bit creepily suspicious.

Combo flicks a cigarette from his purple tracksuit as he walks down the corner. He stands for a few seconds to light his cigarette and carries on. Turning down the corner, he checks near the young members of his crew, generally consisted of newbie, amateur child drug dealers. By that time, Kane gets close with his vehicle.

 

"Nigga! The money... be green. Ain't some sh*t like this a spoonface president on a white paper!" Combo yells to his curly haired, younger employee while holding a fistful of fake dollars his employee received from a sneaky customer.

 

Kane parks right in front of the crowd.

 

"Hey, fat f*ck! Hop in!" Kane tells Combo to come over.

 

"This ain't finished yet. [he draws out his Pistol stuck in his pants and gives it to his boy] You gonna find that motherf*cker, splash his brains all over the hard concrete... if you not, I be f*ck you up, fool. You feel me?.. Laters." Combo angrily orders around, he hands a gun to his corner kid to bring some respect.

 

 

 

Edited November 29, 2014 by TheUnholy

[Nefarious Money Man]

I've been reading through this topic over the past couple of days and I must say I really like it. The torture sequence for me was way too over the top though.. ripping off a man's nipples to reveal his ribs?? Come on now. Other than that though this topic seems really authentic and you have done a really good job of capturing the directionless mindset of west coast gangbangers who's only concerns are f*cking, killing, getting high and making money. Its the type of stuff that would have racial rights groups foaming at the mouth but lets face it people love stereotypes and I for one have never seen gangbangers appear anywhere where they didn't play right into those stereotypes.

 

A word of warning though (which kind of echoes what I said to you in The Creator's Lounge) if you want to take inspiration from something try to make it a bit less obvious. For me the Reservoir Dogs and Breaking Bad references were a bit too close to the original scenarios for comfort.. especially the latter which was almost a straight rip off. That would be the only real piece of advice I would give you though since what you have here is pretty solid and the more novel like approach you have taken sets it apart from the others. I never really have much time for 3D era stories but this one has my attention. I'm looking forward to seeing what else this topic has to offer.

[Liver Buster]

I've been reading through this topic over the past couple of days and I must say I really like it. The torture sequence for me was way too over the top though.. ripping off a man's nipples to reveal his ribs?? Come on now. Other than that though this topic seems really authentic and you have done a really good job of capturing the directionless mindset of west coast gangbangers who's only concerns are f*cking, killing, getting high and making money. Its the type of stuff that would have racial rights groups foaming at the mouth but lets face it people love stereotypes and I for one have never seen gangbangers appear anywhere where they didn't play right into those stereotypes.

 

A word of warning though (which kind of echoes what I said to you in The Creator's Lounge) if you want to take inspiration from something try to make it a bit less obvious. For me the Reservoir Dogs and Breaking Bad references were a bit too close to the original scenarios for comfort.. especially the latter which was almost a straight rip off. That would be the only real piece of advice I would give you though since what you have here is pretty solid and the more novel like approach you have taken sets it apart from the others. I never really have much time for 3D era stories but this one has my attention. I'm looking forward to seeing what else this topic has to offer.

Thanks for the honest criticism. I gotta admit that I sometimes have a really clusterf*ck mind, to be honest. That's where the torture sequence talks. I guess I have some kind of Bulent Ustun syndrome (he's a famous caricaturist in my homeland), and he sometimes comes up with real clusterf*cks, in generally while sketching his famous (or notorious maybe) character Bad Cat Serafettin... you would see that cat ripping off a dog's tail to reveal his butt, making a security guard eat his poo... I grew up reading that, and I gotta say it obviously put something destructive under the iceberg.

 

You're obviously right about the inspirations from popular culture, gotta admit that. While writing the part "Dead Freight", okay, that's gotta be something big, way over the top and unethical so that it would lead Combo's partial downfall. There, child killing would bring me what I want. I've thought in the same way as yours, "I gotta shape up the things a bit, so it would not a total rip-off to Breaking Bad. I've thought so much, but nothing has come to my mind... so I went that way. It gave me what I want, but to be honest, it didn't give me a total rest, because it was too far away from something original.

Edited December 1, 2014 by TheUnholy

[Nefarious Money Man]

 

I've been reading through this topic over the past couple of days and I must say I really like it. The torture sequence for me was way too over the top though.. ripping off a man's nipples to reveal his ribs?? Come on now. Other than that though this topic seems really authentic and you have done a really good job of capturing the directionless mindset of west coast gangbangers who's only concerns are f*cking, killing, getting high and making money. Its the type of stuff that would have racial rights groups foaming at the mouth but lets face it people love stereotypes and I for one have never seen gangbangers appear anywhere where they didn't play right into those stereotypes.

 

A word of warning though (which kind of echoes what I said to you in The Creator's Lounge) if you want to take inspiration from something try to make it a bit less obvious. For me the Reservoir Dogs and Breaking Bad references were a bit too close to the original scenarios for comfort.. especially the latter which was almost a straight rip off. That would be the only real piece of advice I would give you though since what you have here is pretty solid and the more novel like approach you have taken sets it apart from the others. I never really have much time for 3D era stories but this one has my attention. I'm looking forward to seeing what else this topic has to offer.

Thanks for the honest criticism. I gotta admit that I sometimes have a really clusterf*ck mind, to be honest. That's where the torture sequence talks. I guess I have some kind of Bulent Ustun syndrome (he's a famous caricaturist in my homeland), and he sometimes comes up with real clusterf*cks, in generally while sketching his famous (or notorious maybe) character Bad Cat Serafettin... you would see that cat ripping off a dog's tail to reveal his butt, making a security guard eat his poo... I grew up reading that, and I gotta say it obviously put something destructive under the iceberg.

Its not so much the level of violence I didn't like it was the cartoonishness of the cop having his nose ripped off with a pliers and having his lungs exposed. It was more like something out of an Itchy and Scratchy cartoon than anything that would ever happen in the real world. If hooks were put through a persons nipples and then pulled hard the hooks would simple come through the nipples. I'm no doctor but I also think its impossible to pull somebody's nose off outside an episode of the walking dead. The outer skin could be cut or bitten off sure but the whole nose coming off? I can't see that happening.. even if the 3D era is a bit more unrealistic than the HD era. I don't want to dwell on it too much though since I've found the majority of the story so far enjoyable.

Edited December 1, 2014 by Money Over Bullshit

[Tyla]

'Ya know life is chaos when it takes you damn near a month to watch the next episode read the next chapter of State On The Edge Of Forever. Best part of Tough Love? We finally meet the elusive LB!

 

It's a nice touch that he's involved with the Ballas (and every other crook in the city, for that matter) and it's clever on your part to show Seville Boulevard as never really having much concern for the Grove. The rest of the mission was enjoyable and I've been hanging on for another big shootout with GSF for a while now.

 

From the preview you posted Chapter 16: Part One will be interesting. Always is when Combo is involved...

 

Also: LB's tip-off's. Love it.

Edited December 15, 2014 by Tyla

[Liver Buster]

'Ya know life is chaos when it takes you damn near a month to watch the next episode read the next chapter of State On The Edge Of Forever. Best part of Tough Love? We finally meet the elusive LB!

 

It's a nice touch that he's involved with the Ballas (and every other crook in the city, for that matter) and it's clever on your part to show Seville Boulevard as never really having much concern for the Grove. The rest of the mission was enjoyable and I've been hanging on for another big shootout with GSF for a while now.

 

From the preview you posted Chapter 16: Part One will be interesting. Always is when Combo is involved...

 

Also: LB's tip-off's. Love it.

Thank you very much. I tried to cut LB as a real opportunist who might be willing to get his hands under every crap turning around the city just for the money. Creepingly funny, actually Argit from Ben 10 was an inspiration for LB. As far as I remember, there was two factions (one of them is red, the other one is blue) were fighting for the dominancy on a planet. Argit and Kevin were selling guns to both sides, just painting them into different colors.

 

BTW, don't worry, the Grove-Ballas will be back more heated in Chapter II.

[Tyla]

Ben 10?? I let the kids watch that. I had no idea it was so violent. It's not like I let them watch me play GTA or anything...

 

But seriously, I can see where you're coming from and I've got a lot of appreciation for how you described and introduced LB. I hope this isn't the last we see of him either...

 

Were you ever going to do anything based on that idea of Sweet pulling a robbery?