Grand Theft Auto: Ultimate

[Pooyan Cyrus]

Mission 18: Nice JobMulti-Protag

Boss: Jin-Ho Cheon

[Jin walks fast to Chin and stands just in front of him. He looks straight at his eyes and this continues for some seconds. Then...]
Chin: Hello?!
Jin: Hello, Mr. Worthless Sh*tpiece! I'm still wondering how stupid you are. People who smoke pipes, think they're doing a great thing. But that's because of black smoke filling anything around them... You aren't anything great, Chin! I'm sorry for myself. I said you're best mob around while you were filling around yourself with the black smoke!
Chin [claps]: What a Nice Lecture!
Jin: What a rude kid! And also a nice job! Go and take my daughter back.
Chin: You've said it once before.
Jin: And you haven't done anything! [shouts angrily] Go and do what I told you! Get out! Get out now!
Chin [walks back slowly]: Have a nice day, Mr. Jin-Ho.

Objectives:
1. Call Tim.

Tim: Hi Chin!
Chin: I'd be pleased more if you call me Mr. Lee! Are you a friend really?
Tim: Do you have any doubt?
Chin [shouts]: I have no doubt that you're a f*cker!
Tim: Why are you talking like this?
Chin: Cause you left me alone while I had more trouble than anytime!
Tim: Where are you?
Chin: In hot water!
Tim: Are you still in Alderney?
Chin: Should I be in your ass? Yes I am.
Tim: Calm down, I come now.

Objectives:
2. (Tim) Drive to Jin-Ho Cheon's house.

[Chin comes at Tim angrily]
Chin: Where were you?
Tim: Let's not talk about past. What's going on?
Chin: There's somebody who you should find for me. He's got a black jacket and black pants. He also wears sunglasses.
Tim: Then...
Chin: Bring him to here!

Objectives:
3. (Tim) Go to Chinatown.
4. Look for that guy.
5. Kick him from back with baseball bat.
6. Throw him in your car.

Main Objective: Drive back fast, Triads are coming!

Reward: 10000$

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Mission 19: Violent DetectiveTim

Boss: Chin Ho Lee

[Chin runs at Tim]
Chin: That guy is in the basement.
Tim: And...?
Chin: You've got 6 hours to find out where's Jiyoung.
Tim: Who's Jiyoung? And how?
Chin (smiles): Jiyoung was my GF. Go there and you'll see how.
Tim: But, hey... I'm not a torturer!
Chin [Aims his pistol at Tim's head]: Now you are!

Main Objective: You've got six hours of in-game time (18 minutes in real time) to find out where Jiyoung is. There are 50 torture ways that you could use.

[Finally that guys says]: Sto- p...She's in a warehouse near... Dukes...

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Mission 20: Final Punch Multi-Protag

Boss: N/Y

[Tim and Chin are sitting on two chairs]
Tim: A drug warehouse in Dukes... What's the plan, Chin?
Chin: How about wearing black Triad clothes?
Tim [sarcastic]: Good, especially for me, because I have a veeeery chinese face!
Chin: It's not time for joking! Wear sunglasses.
Tim: Now it's better.
Chin: Stay here while I collect some guys.

Objectives:
1. (Chin) Go to Jin-Ho's house.

[Chin walks in calmly. Jin is looking at pictures on the wall.]
Jin: Again You. What are you going to do?
Chin: See, I know where's Jiyoung. I just need some men.
Jin: Aren't you man enough?! I don't send my men to die.
Chin: That's a big warehouse and we're talking about Jiyoung's life. [Gets Jin's hand in his hands] Please help me!
Jin: Okay, but you'll lose your head if you don't bring her back.
Chin: I promise, sir, I promise.

Objectives:
2. (Chin) Get a Van.
3. Pick Korean mobsters up.
4. Drive back to your house and pick up Tim.
5. Drive to Chinatown.
6. (Tim) Get into a hideout silently.
7. Steal some clothes and be careful not to be spotted.
8. Wear the clothes.
9. (Chin) Drive to Dukes.

[The camera zooms on warehouse. There are six guards.]
Tim: Let me solve this problem.

Objectives:
10. (Tim) Get out of the car.
11. Get to Attic of the building in front of Warehouse.
12. Shoot warehouse's guards with sniper.

[Chin and mobsters run out of the car]

Objectives:
13. (Chin) Break the door and run in.

[Huang is standing there.]
Huang: Here again! [Laughs]Searching for a girl!
Chin: Where's she?
Huang: It doesn't help you. My friends are coming to take you down.
Chin [runs out and calls tim]: Tim! Chinese f*ckers are coming, take care of them! [Turns back at mobs] Don't let him move.

Objectives:
14. (Tim) Shoot Triad cars coming with Rocket launcher.
15. (Chin) Kick Huang.
16. Bind him to a chair.
17. Search for Jiyoung.
18. She's binded to a chair. Call Tim.
19. (Tim) Get into warehouse and cut the rope with a knife.

[Chin and Jiyoung hug each other, but then Chin gets near Huang]
Chin: Do you have the bombs, Tim?
Tim: Let me do that myself!
Huang [shouts]: No! No! Please! I promise I get the f*ck off the crime! Please!

Objectives:
20. (Tim) Stick 3 bombs to him and some more to other places in the warehouse.

[Jiyoung and Chin get each other's hands and walk out alongside Tim. You could still hear Huang whining and shouting.
When you get far from there, Tim waves his middle finger for Huang, and Jiyoung and Chin laugh loudly. Then, Tim presses the detonator's button.
The theme song plays, and while camera zooms out, you could hear them saying some things]
Jiyoung: Epic, man!
Tim [Laughing]: Really!
Chin: Will you stay here, Tim?
Tim: Where?
Chin: Liberty City.
Tim: Oh... I don't know... Why don't go to Vice City for holidays?
Jiyoung: That's a good idea, isn't it, Chin? Liberty's too dark!
Chin: Eh... Yes, but we have lots of things to do here...
Tim: Oh, Chin! The drugs!
Chin: Didn't you take them back?!
Tim: Forget about it.
Chin: So you want to give Peter a middle finger instead of drugs, huh?
[The screen fades out.]

[Tyla]

Much better!

Best three missions you've done so far, I think.

 

The phone call between Chin and Tim at the beginning of mission 18 was good. Tim bailing on Chin was a real dick move.

 

 

Tim: But, hey... I'm not a torturer!
Chin [Aims his pistol at Tim's head]: Now you are!

This is what I like to see. Chin might've just become my favorite protagonist of yours. Why should he trust Tim, or treat him remotely like a friend? Damn straight he's putting a bead on his head.

 

Final mission was great. I'm glad Jin made another appearance.

I noticed how many questions your characters are asking now. Lots more how, why, what's the plan Chin? It makes it so much better to read. Kudos.

 

Tim redeems himself by placing those bombs on Huang. Nice touch, needed to happen. You know Tim f*cked up and you wrote him making amends.

 

So, final thoughts?

Your next episode looks much more promising now you've made a few changes and gotten into the swing of things. I'm going to be following this closely. If there's anything you should take away from this it's that you don't need loads of missions - just a few that make, if you'll pardon the pun, a big bang. If you look back on the last episode, you could probably cut six or seven of the missions and still satisfy us with the same ending.

Something to consider for the next episode, huh?

 

Hope to see more soon.

[Naughtius Maximus]

I'm happy that you're actually starting to get over the "uninteresting" and "non-deep" missions problem which has been the biggest maybe the only problem I've seen with this topic. You did good job with the last episodes. I was waiting something much more destructive for the final but I won't regret, you did good job. "Bitten and Risen" is the best of them three episodes. And I can say both Tim and Chin were successful protagonists. Keep this rhytm up! Waitin' for the next episode.

[Pooyan Cyrus]

@Tyla and MarijuanaMonkey: Thanks.

Tyla, seems like you really enjoyed "Jin-Ho Cheon"'s characteristic!

The "Last Week" which is next episode, is much shorter than other ones and it will only have 10 missions.

However, I will not start writing it very soon because it takes place in Captainstate and I should make its map before writing the missions.

I'm going to focus on TV, websites and Radios for a little time, then I will start writing missions again.

Edited January 9, 2014 by PooyanCyrus

[Naughtius Maximus]

I recognized recently, did you cancel "The Fake Guy" episode? Actually, I was wondering what were you gonna do with that episode.

[Pooyan Cyrus]

Yea I added "Black Mob Story" instead of that.

[Pooyan Cyrus]

you see my signature?

[Pooyan Cyrus]

Television channels have arrived! Check them out!

[Pooyan Cyrus]

Liberty State and Alderney map updated. Also WIP map of "Captainstate" added.

I'm getting disappointed 5 days since last response.

[GTAKid667]

Very good work on this! Keep it up

[Pooyan Cyrus]

Episode 4 - Last Week

Mission 1

Boss: N/Y

[A mid-aged man is sitting on a chair, talking with room's telephone, in an office. You could see Emerald city's landscape through the window.]

Man: What's going on, Tra'?

[Now you see a half-breed cop with ECPD, Emerald City Police Department outfit]

Travis: I think we'll have some hardcore action for tomorrow, Vic.

Victor: I love hardcore actions, you know!

Travis: Do you remember those blue-wearing drug boat guys, who attacked us in Port Hepburn?

Victor: Oh, those useless "Gems" you mean?

Travis: Yeah. They're getting a big package of LSD at Port Santos.

Victor: Hey... I've lost all my money in that stupid deal at Port Hepburn.

Travis: You just need a gun.

Victor: I have lots of things to do right now, let's talk about it later.

[He puts the phone on its set. It rings again.]

Victor: Ahhh... Again.

[You can see a young guy in baggy clothes talking on his phone]

Guy: Hello Victor!

Victor: Hello boy! How's everything? It's been almost 2 years after our last meeting!

Guy: I've came to Vantucky, did you know?

Victor: That's just nice, Phil!

Phil: Ehh... Vic! Let's say... I need money, man.

Victor: I don't have any money to be honest. I've lost most of my money.

Phil: How about having a deal?

Victor: What deal?

Phil: Give me a cut of an action.

Victor: Oh, good idea! I have a deal with Gems in Port Santos, will you go there?

Phil: Okay. 50-50, huh?

Victor: 60-40.

Phil: Hey... Hmmm... No problem.

Victor: So go there now[smiles].

[3 hours later. Phil is driving a red no-roof Banshee to Port Santos. Some blue-wearing guys are also there. A boat is coming near the port.

Phil gets out of his car and walks to those guys. One of them starts talking with him]

Blue Guy: Whatchoo lookin' fo?

Phil: All the LSD you're receiving today.

Blue Guy: So wait.

[When the guy walks to carry boxes from the boat, he gets shot. The boat explodes, too. A huge load of bullets come to the port and Phil jumps in his car and drives away fast. When he gets near Emerald City, he gets out of his car and calls Victor].

Victor: Hi, my friend! Have you got the goods?

Phil: Oh... Victor... The deal got ambushed!

Victor [Angrily]: Are you kidding me?

Phil: No joke at all. The boat got exploded, I don't know where did all those shoots come from but they killed everybody.

Victor [shouts]: GIVE MY MONEY BACK TO ME! YOU, YOU STUPID DICK!

Phil: Heeey stop swearing! You should give me some time.

Victor: Just a week! I want all my 200000 bucks next Sunday!

[Victor shuts the phone angrily.]

Objective: Call Matthew Carling.

Phone Call:

Phil: Hi, Mat.

Mat: Hi, Phil. Have you arrived?

Phil: Yea, but I made a big mistake, too.

Mat: Calm down boy, calm down. What's happened?

Phil: Let's talk about it later. Where's your garage?

Mat: At Edison Street, Down the Ohio Intersection.

Main Objective: Drive to Mat's.

Reward: 300$

Edited January 18, 2014 by PooyanCyrus

[Naughtius Maximus]

Very well introduction. I've enjoyed the first cutscene so badly. There's a bit creepiness with Vic's manners and thoughts maybe but I guess this caused from the yet ambigiousness of the story. Staying in touch for more, wondering what are you gonna do with this episode.

 

Also Morocco is such a good name for its real-world equivalent "Albany".

[[...]]

You should add parody of AMC and Comedy Central to Entertaiment Channels list.

Edited January 18, 2014 by S13

[Tyla]

Okay Pooyan. This is already a lot better than your third episode and I have to say the change in tone is remarkable. Good job. I gotta agree with Unholy, Vic is f*cking creepy. Great character so far. You seem to be much better at the darker stuff.

 

Part of me has to wonder what if Vic was the protagonist. Part of why Vic was the stand-out character in that mission was because he had so much more presence than Phil, who basically turned up broke, got a job and got in his car and ran away when the deal got jumped. I know it's early days, but I would have liked your protagonist to have had more backbone. If the ambush was so chaotic and Phil is so desperate for money (has nothing to lose), he could have stolen something that would introduce another group of antagonists down the line.

 

Great introduction though, you are doing much better. More missions soon!

FREEZE! MIAMI VICE!

5000 concepts in GTA Series Chat and Gumby here has to pick ours...

[Naughtius Maximus]

You should add parody of AMC and Comedy Central to Entertaiment Channels list.

A "Comedy Central" parody would work well with a GTA game, when considering Rockstar's sense of humor. Also, as a hardcore fan of Comedy Central, that'd be cool I say. I would like to see a definite South Park parody and a Drunk History parody (would be named "Junkie History" taking plot of famous people who cannot stop their habit of doing heroine).

[Pooyan Cyrus]

Take a look at "Characters" section and the information on new people introduced in "Last Week" episode.

 

P.S. Couldn't believe I'm doing 4th episode. Three ones passed so fast...

[Wolf247]

Shouldn't be so hard, if all the programmers of the world work on it.
You should inform yourself about the GTA Universe even more, and I think it should have content from Rockstar, so we might as well wait till GTA VI Gets out, and GTA VII, and probably GTA VIII or whatever they're gonna name them. It's because it would be cooler if you include cities and details that are based in actual GTA games, but you could seek employment at Rockstar games if you want.

It seems the only problem is "White Castle" ok i change it.

It's mentioned as Capital City in one GTA game, so you might as well putt it's name like that.

[Wolf247]

But look at me, just being negative and telling this is not good enough, THIS IS f*ckING AWESOME MAN!

[Pooyan Cyrus]

@S13 and TheUnholy: The "Fun Box" and "MAC" channels are added now.

@Tyla: No Gumby Anymore! Thanks to Xtreme (led-by).

@Wolf247: The name is Capital C.T. The post which you have replied is old as Noah.

[fuzzel]

say what now?

[SonofYankton]

the website image isn't working for me

 

 

and i was reading the gamplay thing and i have a question about the working, Could you work at a bugershot / cluck'n bell? Maybe working your way up the chain and taking over the restaurants? opening up a management sim kind of thing.

Edited January 20, 2014 by mnmn1234

[Pooyan Cyrus]

the website image isn't working for me

 

 

and i was reading the gamplay thing and i have a question about the working, Could you work at a bugershot / cluck'n bell? Maybe working your way up the chain and taking over the restaurants? opening up a management sim kind of thing.

Try opening it from url or reloading the image. I checked and it's not broken.

And about the working... No, working at cluckin' bell or any other fastfood/restaurant will make this a parody of Sims. The jobs are chosen to fit GTA more. I will add complete list of jobs soon.

[Pooyan Cyrus]

Mission 2: Iron Life

Boss: Matthew Carling

[Matthew is on a destructor, pulling a car up. You could hear awful sound of car's smashing. Phil has headphones on his head so he doesn't hear those sounds. Then, when the car-banging ends, Mat gets out of machine and walks at Phil. Phil pulls his headphones off his head.]

Mat: Hi, Phil. Seems like you're never going to wear like a man.

Phil: So I'm a girl cuz I wear bag clothes?

Mat: Let's stop talking about your dummy... oh... okay, interesting clothing. What's happened?

Phil: I was on a deal, it was a job given by Vic, do you remember him?

Mat: Yes, of course. And what happened then?

Phil: The deal got ambushed!

Mat: It's a 80's movie plot, isn't it?!

Phil: So here must be Florida, too, yea? I'm not joking, man! I need money!

Mat: You'll earn some when you stop listening fast sh*tty music.

Phil: What should I do? I just have 6 days. No time for makin' a mistake.

Mat: Go and steal a huge truck from ports.

Phil: Hey... I'm not a hija [Mat doesn't let him continue.]

Mat: You just have 6 days!

Objectives:

1. Head to the Captain Ports.

2. Look for a good truck.

3. Break the lock with your knife.

4. Get in silently.

5. Drive back to car smashing place.

6. The owner has called pigs. Lose the cops!

Main Objective: Drive back to Mat's.

Reward: 50000$

Edited January 21, 2014 by PooyanCyrus

[[...]]

Where are these "Two TV Channels"?

[Pooyan Cyrus]

@S13: Reload the tv channels image. The new image will show.

[Pooyan Cyrus]

Good News for Anyone!

Photos from each city are coming soon...

[Pooyan Cyrus]

Mission 3: No Baggies

Boss: Travis Clifford

[Phil walks to Matthew, has a pair of headphones on head, listening a fast song. Then, he pulls them down.]
Phil: How're things goin'?
Mat: Not so good.
Phil: I hope it doesn't have anything to do with my money.
Mat: Me too.
[Travis walks in.]
Travis: Hello, Mr. Carling.
Mat: Hello, Mr. Bent Tooth.
Travis: Where's my cut?
Mat: At ECPD.
Travis [bored]: Don't kid me... Please.
Mat: I sent them.
Travis: You sent drugs to police department?!
Mat: Yea! Our business is finished, Tra!
Travis: It is NOT! As long as I don't have the drugs.
Mat: What should I do now?
Travis [Turns to Phil]: Would you something for me?
Phil: Me? For a cop?
Travis [Laughs]: Clothes fool people! Come with me...

Objectives:
1. Get in the Police car.
2. Drive to ECPD.
3. Get out.

Cutscene:
[Travis gets out. Phil does too.]
Travis: A cop doesn't wear baggies. Come after me.
Phil: What do you mean?
Travis: I mean come after me.

Objectives:
4. Follow Travis.
5. Go into wardrobe.
6. Wear the cop clothes.

Cutscene:
Travis: I've heard you need some money.
Phil: And then, I don't even know your name. How do you know my condition?
Travis: I'm Clifford, Travis. An Emerald City Cop. Do you know now? Also, a cop knows a lot, usually.
Phil: Dammit. What's the job? Be quick.
Travis: Get in the car, I'll tell you through car phone. Don't forget the card in your pocket.

Objectives:
7. Get in cop car.
8. Drive to police warehouses place.
9. Show the card.
10. Get into the truck and drive back.

Cutscene:
[Travis walks at Phil calmly.]
Travis: So brave!
Phil: Show the money, man.
Travis [Puts some money in phil's pocket]: Some bucks for your brave act.
Phil: Smells good.
Travis: Now you can take your clothes.

Main Objective: Wear the baggies and get out of the department.
Reward: 3500$

Note: After this mission Victor calls you.
Vic: Where's my money Phil? [shouts] Where is it?
Phil: Did you expect me to earn such a money at two days?!
Vic: Be quick, Phil, be fast!
[Victor ends call]

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Mission 4: Tucky's Tuckies

Boss: Matthew Carling

[Mat comes and wakes Phil up.]
Phil: [screaming] Bitch you know it!
Mat: The dream's finished, Phil!
Phil: It's 5. Let me sleep!
Mat: Another dream is starting!
Phil: Whatchoo sayin' dawg?
Mat:What would you do if somebody offers free coke?
[Phil jumps out the bed and falls on ground]
Phil: Oh... Ouch... f*ck... Where? When?
Mat: Near the border, Vantucky. 8.
[Phil runs out]

Objectives:
1. Get a fast car.
2. Drive to Vantucky.
3. It's 7:50 and Traffic is heavy. Activate the special ability (Parkour while slowing the time down).
4. Run to the dealer's boat.

Cutscene:
[The dealer looks at Phil.]
Dealer: So you're Mat's gun, eh?
Phil: You can think that way.
Dealer [Gets out the boat]: Ok, you can go.
Phil: So, what will you do?
Dealer: I continue my business. [smiles]

Objectives:
5. Go and sell them to Tuckies.

Main Objective: Go back to Mat's.
Reward: 10000$ Edited January 26, 2014 by PooyanCyrus

[Tyla]

This isn't what I expected from your fast paced Last Week episode, PC. We're four missions and two days in and already Phil has $155,000. Obviously he's a resourceful man. What Phil's doing for the money is so menial though. He's doing sh*t we'd do in GTAIV for $2,000 and being paid telephone numbers. I expected haphazard heists and doublecrossing. It doesn't feel like I have earned $155,000 off a $200,000 debt, nor that the protagonist has labored for it. I hope you've got something more frantic and action packed up your sleeves for the remaining six missions.

[Pooyan Cyrus]

This isn't what I expected from your fast paced Last Week episode, PC. We're four missions and two days in and already Phil has $155,000. Obviously he's a resourceful man. What Phil's doing for the money is so menial though. He's doing sh*t we'd do in GTAIV for $2,000 and being paid telephone numbers. I expected haphazard heists and doublecrossing. It doesn't feel like I have earned $155,000 off a $200,000 debt, nor that the protagonist has labored for it. I hope you've got something more frantic and action packed up your sleeves for the remaining six missions.

The rewards were mistaken in newest set. Thanks for telling that, fixed it.

[Naughtius Maximus]

I can say you're doing good job with Travis, I kinda liked the way how you built him. Maybe he's just a normal bent law enforcer like Francis McReary, Frank Tenpenny, Steven Haines but I'm kinda share same likeness I do with Frank Tenpenny (a well-built character for sure). And it seems like you've developed the way you build characters much. For example, Chin Ho Lee and Tim Texas are well-built protagonists, in my opinion, maybe the best ones of the whole concept. Alfie was an interesting guy back in the chapter "The Escape" (good to know he will be coming back ), maybe Peter Bohan, he might be considered as a "good character" too. Also I have an intention that Vic will be a destructive character, too. I wanted to express it, keep going, man.

 

Also, is it for sure that "Last Week" will be consisted of 10 missions?