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TITLE: Being Rehabilitated

 

cammi

 

These four walls are my prison

Where I am trapped is my prison

I may never leave what is my prison

Sometimes voices are in my prison

Evil voices in my prison

They tell me to take drugs in my prison

I will not do that in my prison

Nothing chances in my prison

Paranoia is my prison

The sweet taste I will never have is my prison

The creepy doctor is my prison

Having hope is my prison

I am protected by my prison

But its thanks to my prison that I survive

When the world says give up, my prison tries me one more time

I love my prison

 

kmlwin.1996

 

I'm standin' in the corner of the room

Tears and my brain think I'm gonna blow out in the Boom

I feel that I am lonely and I just want to get out of this room

But there's many of my faults I done out the room

So I'll gonna stay here before I end up as a good man

I will change the mind of heart, and I love this art

I still breathing but I don't know why I'm breathing

All I know is I am trapped in this place, never be going out to be rehabilitated

Yeah, I was supposed to be the good man and now I'm the bad man

So, let me stay here and repair my pieces of mind

I'm going through changes and I'll find what I want to find

SOOO! Rehabilitation is the only way to get back in my original face and life

Let's stop chasing the pain, wipe up the tears and start the new life.

 

Mokrie Dela

 

Cold turkey, cold shoulder

I feel my skin growing colder

No worries, they told her,

Rehab; rebuilder.

 

Cold grey walls and shadows of wolves,

They lurk beyond, teasing all night long

Darkness falls and the hunger pulls,

But there is no relief, the wolves bare their teeth

 

Night time weighs

Heavy on me,

The creatures of the night

All mocking in their presence.

 

Dawn grows nigh,

To my anguished pleas,

At the first glimmer or light

Comes my fear's evanescence.

 

Relief and release, the sun kisses me again

You're cured, that's the slur they say

Reintegration, I return to my shame

Knowing that I shall be back here someday

 

Coat.

 

I grab my swords

With both weak arms

On the boundaries of the wards

I balanced on my palms

 

Before the accident

Ahead of crash

I stood on both feet

Without judgement

Then I was lashed

 

I Fell on my knees

I cried for savior

No reply

But I stumbled on these swords

Inside this dull ward

I grab my swords

With both weak arms

And lift myself, to forge my cause

On the boundaries of these wards

 

Deadline : 18th August, Saturday

 

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1: Coat.

2: kmlwin.1996

3 Cammi

The only true wisdom is in knowing you know nothing.


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1- Mokrie Dela

2- Coat.

3- kmlwin.1996

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1. Coat. - Liked the metaphores and how the sword is esscentially redemption and how the narrator tries to grab it. Good job.

2. Morkie Dela - Great little poem here, I loved the sentence structure and how it flowed.

3. kmlwin.1996 - yeah, pretty good, some of the rhymes didn't really work though.

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