Lee. Posted March 6, 2012 Share Posted March 6, 2012 (edited) Status : WORK IN PROGRESS Brian Ray is a member from Vice Kings gang, one of the most dangerous gang in San Fierro. One day, a firefightbetween the Vice Kings and the San Diego Gang broke out in an alley on Chinatown, San Fierro. This shootout will change Brian's life FOREVER. Brian Ray Age: 25 Affiliation: Vice Kings (1st Mission), Delta Team(The rest of the story) Status: Alive Brian is a member from Vice Kings gang. He later join the Delta Team because his gang betray him Jackson Age: 27 Affiliation: Delta Team Status: Alive Jackson is the leader of the Delta Team. Before that, he is a most wanted criminal before his friends betray him Paul Age: 24 Affiliation: Delta Team Status: Alive Paul is the strongest team member in the Delta Team. His partner in Delta Team is Jackson Brad Age: 30 Affiliation: Delta Team Status: Dead Die in: Loose Ends Brad is member of the Delta Team. His specialist in Sniper give the Delta team more chance to win a fight Vasquez Age: 33 Affiliation: Delta Team Status: Dead Die in: Loose Ends Vasquez is the oldest member in Delta Team. His partner in the team is Brad General Marshall Age: 40 Affiliation: Delta Team,the Marine Status: Dead Die in: A Fatal Protection General Marshall is the commander of Delta Team. And he is close to Brian Toreno Age: 38 Affiliation: Delta Team Status: Alive Toreno is the leader of Delta Team. He gives command to the team Boss/Boss Age: ??? Affiliation: Vice Kings gang Status: Dead Die in: Chinatown War He is the leader of Vice Kings gang. Breznev Age: ??? Affiliation: Morning Star Status: Alive He is the head of the illegal human experiment and the leader of the Morning Star Tony Age: 33 Affiliation: San Diego Status: Alive The leader of San Diego gang. A very rich person and own a mansion Ken Age: 30 Affiliation: The Syndicate Status: Alive The leader of the Syndicate. A very dangerous person Simon Age: 29 Affiliation: Delta team Status: Alive One of the Toreno's bodyguard. A big fan of the Delta team Roach Age: 27 Affiliation: Delta team Status: Alive One of the Toreno's bodyguard. A big fan of the Delta team Ryan/Ryan Age: 25 Affiliation: The Syndicate ( El Sindicato) , Delta team ( The rest of the game ) Delta Team Status: Friend This secret team is quite same as STAG(From Saints Row the Third). Their goal is to eliminate every gangs in San Andreas Vice Kings Gang Status: Enemy/Destroyed Destroyed in: Chinatown War Vice Kings gang is one of the most dangerous gang in San Fierro San Diego Gang Status: Enemy San Diego is the Vice Kings rival gang Morning Star Status: Enemy Morning Star is the most dangerous gang in San Andreas The Syndicate Status: Enemy The Syndicate is a newcomer gangster in San Andreas, but don't underestimate them The list will be updated as the story continue Act 1:When the Good Things Go Bad - Link Face Your Fear - Link CQB Test - Link The Delta Forces - Link A Fatal Protection - Link Chinatown War - Link Download Act 1 - Link Act 2: Operation Black Rain - Link El Sindicato - Link Loose Ends - Link I think this song might be fit to this mission pack Yes, it's Saints Row the Third song. I think it might be useful for the upcoming trailer The Delta Forces and A Fatal Protection by ToniForelli I'll review that for you since AznKei said i should prove myself if i want to become a reviewer. @Reserved: Lee_atsugai Hello everyone my name is ToniForelli and i will do my first review so i can join DYOM reviewer community and lets start reviewing lee_atsugai's mission called The Delta Forces from his mission pack called "Gangster and the Army" now time to review "Writing: Very Good There were few grammar mistakes. Nothing too bad. "Presentation: Excellent Cutscenes are in good position and i would say it's excellent "Length Decent The mission wasn't long. All you had to do is to kill enemies from one deck to another. "Difficulty Very Easy Enemies don't have very good accuracy and their health's are low so not the hardest mission, but atleast it's fun. "Variety Decent There were the army guys, some random people and few enemies that look different. If there was one different actor then it would be good. Overall 7/10 I would give 6/10, but grammar and camera positioning made me raise the rating up. The downside is that the enemies are weak and that mission isn't long. Still i enjoyed and you will probably do . Next mission is A Fatal Protection "Writing: Very Good Same as the last mission i played and nothing changed. "Presentation: Very Good One cutscene wasn't positioned as it should be. "Length Decent Same as the last mission, it was 4 minutes. "Difficulty Easy This time the mission was easy and i lost only [----//////] armor. Accuracy got increased "Variety Good Now there are couple new ones i have seen. Good choice of actors for that protagonist(forgot his name). Overall 8/10 I liked the ambush part and one cutscene didn't match. Anyway enemies got a bit improved aim, but not the health and also i liked the part where that guy shot the protagonist. Mission was fun and enjoyable. I think in the future your missions will be long and hard. Keep Up Chinatown War by ToniForelli Hello everyone my name is ToniForelli and i will do another DYOM mission review, ok so lets start reviewing lee_atsugai's mission called Chinatown War from his mission pack called"Gangster and the Army" now time to review "Writing: Very Good It was good and i've seen a bit of improvements. "Presentation: Excellent Not many cutscenes, but were positioned at the best angle. "Length Decent It took me to complete this mission in 6 minutes. Why? Because i had to kill Vice Gangs Leader otherwise it would take me 3 minutes. "Difficulty Very Easy Is it me or i didn't noticed that they were weak. Health is good, but accuracy is bad and also lower protagonists health cause it was easy to take them down. "Variety Very Good Few objects and lots of actors. It's not the variety that counts. It's the mission's quality. Overall 9/10 Mission was sh*t good and it took me some time. Make sure that the actors would be stronger with 75 accuracy cause it kinda felt like it was on 50-25 accuracy. Anyway nevertheless that the leader had lots of health. Keep Up PS: Sorry for the late reply. Act 1 by Arejai Here's the review for Act 1. PLAYABLILITY 4.5/5 The playability was pretty nice! Although there are some mistakes along the missions, it's still good. The shootout started from the beginning of the mission, and it's challenging me sometimes. BALANCE 4/5 This campaign was hard, but still I can beat them. The last mission(Act 1) is the hardest, but very enjoyable and fun. Almost all the shootout war was nearly hard to win. Yes, the enemies has a medium health, and high accuracy that I think it's set to 50-75. CREATIVITY 3/5 You used the driving school and army ship as a place for training is pretty creative. But, it's still normal. You need to give a player something new, that can amazed their mind. VARIETY 3.8/5 All the objects was placed on a right and good position. I loved how you arranged the objects at the training ground which is in the 2nd mission. It's creative but keep it realistic. About the skins, I'm very confused. You need to keep the skins to less than 10 types for one gang. But, I don't know, it's your style. STORY / WRITING 4.4/5 Act 1 has a good plot and storyline. The protaonist started as a gangster and then become an army. It begin without instructions that gives a user a little bit confusing. It's nice beginning. About the writing, all of them are good. Some of the dialogues seems a bit childish. But, it's still acceptable. OVERALL Its required a good experienced & skill to play these missions. Not for beginner I think. So, anyway, good work, keep it up, and don't give up. RATING 8/10 By Arejai. Duthcy3010 and PatrickW for creating the DYOM Mod Chimpso for the DYOM Tutorials Arejai for the second mission inspiration ThaBoy for help me to improve the Third mission gameplay (added time limit in the test) and the Trailer ToniForelli for the review -S-hark21 for the video review kmlwin.1996, XTREME0235 and Panty Dropper for the header People who play my Mission Pack Have fun! Edited April 11, 2012 by lee_atsugai Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MadMarshMallow Posted March 6, 2012 Share Posted March 6, 2012 Looks promising. I'll give it a try. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lee. Posted March 6, 2012 Author Share Posted March 6, 2012 Looks promising. I'll give it a try. and don't forget to give a feedback Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kwabs Posted March 6, 2012 Share Posted March 6, 2012 Good luck I 'll try it when I've time Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lee. Posted March 6, 2012 Author Share Posted March 6, 2012 @ThaBoy : Thanks. And don't forget to give a feedback MISSION 3 "CQB Test" Released! Check the main post for download link Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kwabs Posted March 6, 2012 Share Posted March 6, 2012 You know what, I 'll try it now and give you feedback. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kwabs Posted March 6, 2012 Share Posted March 6, 2012 Mission 1 - Why did the place explode - You could give the actors a bit more health - It's too short Mission 2 - ehh...they call the organisation "The Marine" as far as I know. - I didn't know that they recruit like that But it was a very nice idea Mission 3 - You forgot to hide Brian after the 1st cutscenes - You didn't give a time limit for the test... Overall, I like the way this is going. I see some COD in this and I like it. It's a good begin for a story. So, keep it up Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lee. Posted March 7, 2012 Author Share Posted March 7, 2012 Why did the place explode The owner has some C4 strapped on his body It's too short It's just the beginning of the story. So, it's short ehh...they call the organisation "The Marine" as far as I know No, there is a top secret Task Force that Brian will join. I'll introduce it in the next mission I didn't know that they recruit like that But it was a very nice idea It's just for fun. You forgot to hide Brian after the 1st cutscenes I'll fix it. Don't worry you didn't give a time limit for the test... I'll fix it. Don't worry Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lee. Posted March 7, 2012 Author Share Posted March 7, 2012 (edited) NOTICE Mission 3 has been fixed. -Improved Gameplay: The enemy are now harder to kill -Time limit added (5 Minutes) Special thanks for ThaBoy that reminds me to improve the third mission gameplay Edited March 7, 2012 by lee_atsugai Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lee. Posted March 7, 2012 Author Share Posted March 7, 2012 The Fourth Mission "The Delta Forces" is released! Check the main post for the download link Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lee. Posted March 7, 2012 Author Share Posted March 7, 2012 The Fifth Mission "A Fatal Protection" is released! Check the main post for download. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MadMarshMallow Posted March 8, 2012 Share Posted March 8, 2012 Played the 1st - 5th mission. A pretty good beginning you made. I loved the gunfight in the Chinatown. In the second mission, the car suddenly appeared. You could spawn the car from the start. About the stadium, good choice for a fight/shooting training. But, one thing you can fix is create new actor for the marine. He's talking to himself. So, work more on this. I love the CQB training. All the objects are well placed. Good job! In the 5th mission, when we need to defend the place, you didn't hide the actors. But, I loved the shootout. Well, this is for suggestion. If you want to make Brian to be killed by the Breznev, set Brian to 'Hold position'. For Breznev, set him to 100 accuracy, health 2500(max) and 'Hold Position". And make the cutscene a bit longer like 4 - 6 seconds. Anyway, they're a good missions. Nice job! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lee. Posted March 8, 2012 Author Share Posted March 8, 2012 thanks Arejai i will fix the 5th mission if i have time, i'm a little bit busy now Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lee. Posted March 9, 2012 Author Share Posted March 9, 2012 The 6th mission "Chinatown War" is released! Check the main post for download A Zip file containing of 6 missions of Act 1 is released! Check the main post for download Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lee. Posted March 10, 2012 Author Share Posted March 10, 2012 The first mission of Act 2 is released! Check the main post for download Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lee. Posted March 13, 2012 Author Share Posted March 13, 2012 The second mission of Act 2 is released! Check the main post for download The Character and Gang/Teams list have been updated Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kwabs Posted March 14, 2012 Share Posted March 14, 2012 Wow, I'm in the credits list Anyway here's your trailer. I hope you like it, cuz I did it and you better like it too lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lee. Posted March 15, 2012 Author Share Posted March 15, 2012 Wow, I'm in the credits list Anyway here's your trailer. I hope you like it, cuz I did it and you better like it too lol yeah. you deserve it And, i just look at the trailer and it was awesome! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lee. Posted March 22, 2012 Author Share Posted March 22, 2012 The third mission of Act 2 is released! Check the main post for download The Character list have been updated! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MadMarshMallow Posted March 23, 2012 Share Posted March 23, 2012 Here's the review for Act 1. PLAYABLILITY 4.5/5 The playability was pretty nice! Although there are some mistakes along the missions, it's still good. The shootout started from the beginning of the mission, and it's challenging me sometimes. BALANCE 4/5 This campaign was hard, but still I can beat them. The last mission(Act 1) is the hardest, but very enjoyable and fun. Almost all the shootout war was nearly hard to win. Yes, the enemies has a medium health, and high accuracy that I think it's set to 50-75. CREATIVITY 3/5 You used the driving school and army ship as a place for training is pretty creative. But, it's still normal. You need to give a player something new, that can amazed their mind. VARIETY 3.8/5 All the objects was placed on a right and good position. I loved how you arranged the objects at the training ground which is in the 2nd mission. It's creative but keep it realistic. About the skins, I'm very confused. You need to keep the skins to less than 10 types for one gang. But, I don't know, it's your style. STORY / WRITING 4.4/5 Act 1 has a good plot and storyline. The protaonist started as a gangster and then become an army. It begin without instructions that gives a user a little bit confusing. It's nice beginning. About the writing, all of them are good. Some of the dialogues seems a bit childish. But, it's still acceptable. OVERALL Its required a good experienced & skill to play these missions. Not for beginner I think. So, anyway, good work, keep it up, and don't give up. RATING 8/10 By Arejai. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lee. Posted March 23, 2012 Author Share Posted March 23, 2012 (edited) Thanks for the review Arejai. glad you like it And yeah, about the skins: You have know that Vice Kings and San Diego gang are turning into allies (The Delta Forces). So, that's why there are so many skins. As additions, the majority of the Vice Kings Members are homeless guys, for the example, Brian. You can see in the beginning of mission CQB Test and the Delta Forces that he always sleep on the streets. In Chinatown War, there are a lot of skins used for the Vice Kings gang. Because the Vice Kings Hangout (Or Hideout) is the home of every Homeless guys in San Fierro. The boss gave them a weapon to protect themself if the hangout is attacked Edited March 28, 2012 by lee_atsugai Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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