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Brian Ray is a member from Vice Kings gang, one of the most dangerous gang in San Fierro. One day, a firefight

between the Vice Kings and the San Diego Gang broke out in an alley on Chinatown, San Fierro. This shootout

will change Brian's life FOREVER.

 

 

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Brian Ray

Age: 25

Affiliation: Vice Kings (1st Mission), Delta Team(The rest of the story)

Status: Alive

Brian is a member from Vice Kings gang. He later join the Delta Team because his gang betray him

 

Jackson

Age: 27

Affiliation: Delta Team

Status: Alive

Jackson is the leader of the Delta Team. Before that, he is a most wanted criminal before his friends betray him

 

Paul

Age: 24

Affiliation: Delta Team

Status: Alive

Paul is the strongest team member in the Delta Team. His partner in Delta Team is Jackson

 

Brad

Age: 30

Affiliation: Delta Team

Status: Dead

Die in: Loose Ends

Brad is member of the Delta Team. His specialist in Sniper give the Delta team more chance to win a fight

 

Vasquez

Age: 33

Affiliation: Delta Team

Status: Dead

Die in: Loose Ends

Vasquez is the oldest member in Delta Team. His partner in the team is Brad

 

General Marshall

Age: 40

Affiliation: Delta Team,the Marine

Status: Dead

Die in: A Fatal Protection

General Marshall is the commander of Delta Team. And he is close to Brian

 

Toreno

Age: 38

Affiliation: Delta Team

Status: Alive

Toreno is the leader of Delta Team. He gives command to the team

 

Boss/Boss

Age: ???

Affiliation: Vice Kings gang

Status: Dead

Die in: Chinatown War

He is the leader of Vice Kings gang.

 

Breznev

Age: ???

Affiliation: Morning Star

Status: Alive

He is the head of the illegal human experiment and the leader of the Morning Star

 

Tony

Age: 33

Affiliation: San Diego

Status: Alive

The leader of San Diego gang. A very rich person and own a mansion

 

Ken

Age: 30

Affiliation: The Syndicate

Status: Alive

The leader of the Syndicate. A very dangerous person

 

Simon

Age: 29

Affiliation: Delta team

Status: Alive

One of the Toreno's bodyguard. A big fan of the Delta team

 

Roach

Age: 27

Affiliation: Delta team

Status: Alive

One of the Toreno's bodyguard. A big fan of the Delta team

 

Ryan/Ryan

Age: 25

Affiliation: The Syndicate ( El Sindicato) , Delta team ( The rest of the game )

 

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Delta Team

Status: Friend

This secret team is quite same as STAG(From Saints Row the Third). Their goal is to eliminate every gangs in San Andreas

 

Vice Kings Gang

Status: Enemy/Destroyed

Destroyed in: Chinatown War

Vice Kings gang is one of the most dangerous gang in San Fierro

 

San Diego Gang

Status: Enemy

San Diego is the Vice Kings rival gang

 

Morning Star

Status: Enemy

Morning Star is the most dangerous gang in San Andreas

 

The Syndicate

Status: Enemy

The Syndicate is a newcomer gangster in San Andreas, but don't underestimate them

 

 

The list will be updated as the story continue

 

 

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Act 1:

When the Good Things Go Bad - Link

Face Your Fear - Link

CQB Test - Link

The Delta Forces - Link

A Fatal Protection - Link

Chinatown War - Link

 

Download Act 1 - Link

 

Act 2:

 

Operation Black Rain - Link

El Sindicato - Link

Loose Ends - Link

 

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I think this song might be fit to this mission pack

 

 

 

Yes, it's Saints Row the Third song. I think it might be useful for the upcoming trailer

 

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The Delta Forces and A Fatal Protection by ToniForelli

I'll review that for you since AznKei said i should prove myself if i want to become a reviewer.

@Reserved: Lee_atsugai

Hello everyone my name is ToniForelli and i will do my first review so i can join DYOM reviewer community and lets start reviewing lee_atsugai's mission called The Delta Forces from his mission pack called

"Gangster and the Army" now time to review

 

"Writing: Very Good

There were few grammar mistakes. Nothing too bad.

"Presentation: Excellent

Cutscenes are in good position and i would say it's excellent

 

"Length Decent

The mission wasn't long. All you had to do is to kill enemies from one deck to another.

 

"Difficulty Very Easy

Enemies don't have very good accuracy and their health's are low so not the hardest mission, but atleast it's fun.

 

"Variety Decent

There were the army guys, some random people and few enemies that look different. If there was one different actor then it would be good.

 

Overall 7/10

I would give 6/10, but grammar and camera positioning made me raise the rating up. The downside is that the enemies are weak and that mission isn't long. Still i enjoyed and you will probably do smile.gif.

Next mission is A Fatal Protection

"Writing: Very Good

Same as the last mission i played and nothing changed.

"Presentation: Very Good

One cutscene wasn't positioned as it should be.

 

"Length Decent

Same as the last mission, it was 4 minutes.

 

"Difficulty Easy

This time the mission was easy and i lost only [----//////] armor. Accuracy got increased

 

"Variety Good

Now there are couple new ones i have seen. Good choice of actors for that protagonist(forgot his name).

Overall 8/10

I liked the ambush part and one cutscene didn't match. Anyway enemies got a bit improved aim, but not the health and also i liked the part where that guy shot the protagonist. Mission was fun and enjoyable. I think in the future your missions will be long and hard.

Keep Up

 

Chinatown War by ToniForelli

Hello everyone my name is ToniForelli and i will do another DYOM mission review, ok so lets start reviewing lee_atsugai's mission called Chinatown War from his mission pack called

"Gangster and the Army" now time to review

 

"Writing: Very Good

It was good and i've seen a bit of improvements.

"Presentation: Excellent

Not many cutscenes, but were positioned at the best angle.

 

"Length Decent

It took me to complete this mission in 6 minutes. Why? Because i had to kill Vice Gangs Leader otherwise it would take me 3 minutes.

 

"Difficulty Very Easy

Is it me or i didn't noticed that they were weak. Health is good, but accuracy is bad and also lower protagonists health cause it was easy to take them down.

 

"Variety Very Good

Few objects and lots of actors. It's not the variety that counts. It's the mission's quality.

 

Overall 9/10

Mission was sh*t good and it took me some time. Make sure that the actors would be stronger with 75 accuracy cause it kinda felt like it was on 50-25 accuracy. Anyway nevertheless that the leader had lots of health.

 

Keep Up

PS: Sorry for the late reply.

 

Act 1 by Arejai

 

Here's the review for Act 1.

 

 

PLAYABLILITY 4.5/5

The playability was pretty nice! Although there are some mistakes along the missions, it's still good. The shootout started from the beginning of the mission, and it's challenging me sometimes.

 

 

BALANCE 4/5

This campaign was hard, but still I can beat them. The last mission(Act 1) is the hardest, but very enjoyable and fun. Almost all the shootout war was nearly hard to win. Yes, the enemies has a medium health, and high accuracy that I think it's set to 50-75.

 

 

CREATIVITY 3/5

You used the driving school and army ship as a place for training is pretty creative. But, it's still normal.  You need to give a player something new, that can amazed their mind.

 

 

VARIETY 3.8/5

All the objects was placed on a right and good position. I loved how you arranged the objects at the training ground which is in the 2nd mission. It's creative but keep it realistic. About the skins, I'm very confused. You need to keep the skins to less than 10 types for one gang. But, I don't know, it's your style. smile.gif

 

 

STORY / WRITING 4.4/5

Act 1 has a good plot and storyline. The protaonist started as a gangster and then become an army. It begin without instructions that gives a user a little bit confusing. It's nice beginning.

 

About the writing, all of them are good. Some of the dialogues seems a bit childish. But, it's still acceptable.

 

 

OVERALL

Its required a good experienced & skill to play these missions. Not for beginner I think. So, anyway, good work, keep it up, and don't give up. biggrin.gif

 

 

RATING 8/10

 

 

By Arejai.

 

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Duthcy3010 and PatrickW for creating the DYOM Mod

Chimpso for the DYOM Tutorials

Arejai for the second mission inspiration

ThaBoy for help me to improve the Third mission gameplay (added time limit in the test) and the Trailer

ToniForelli for the review

-S-hark21 for the video review

kmlwin.1996, XTREME0235 and Panty Dropper for the header

People who play my Mission Pack

 

Have fun!

 

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MadMarshMallow

Looks promising. I'll give it a try. biggrin.gif

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Good luck smile.gif

 

I 'll try it when I've time

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@ThaBoy : Thanks. And don't forget to give a feedback

 

MISSION 3 "CQB Test" Released! Check the main post for download link

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You know what, I 'll try it now and give you feedback.

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Mission 1

 

- Why did the place explode mercie_blink.gif

 

- You could give the actors a bit more health

 

- It's too short

 

Mission 2

 

- ehh...they call the organisation "The Marine" as far as I know.

 

- I didn't know that they recruit like that lol.gif

But it was a very nice idea

 

Mission 3

 

- You forgot to hide Brian after the 1st cutscenes

 

- You didn't give a time limit for the test...

 

 

Overall, I like the way this is going. I see some COD in this and I like it. It's a good begin for a story. So, keep it up biggrin.gif

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Why did the place explode

The owner has some C4 strapped on his body

 

 

It's too short

It's just the beginning of the story. So, it's short

 

 

ehh...they call the organisation "The Marine" as far as I know

No, there is a top secret Task Force that Brian will join. I'll introduce it in the next mission

 

 

I didn't know that they recruit like that  tounge.gif

But it was a very nice idea

It's just for fun.

 

 

You forgot to hide Brian after the 1st cutscenes

I'll fix it. Don't worry

 

 

you didn't give a time limit for the test...

I'll fix it. Don't worry

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NOTICE

Mission 3 has been fixed.

-Improved Gameplay: The enemy are now harder to kill

-Time limit added (5 Minutes)

 

Special thanks for ThaBoy that reminds me to improve the third mission gameplay

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The Fourth Mission "The Delta Forces" is released! Check the main post for the download link
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The Fifth Mission "A Fatal Protection" is released! Check the main post for download.
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MadMarshMallow

Played the 1st - 5th mission.

 

A pretty good beginning you made. I loved the gunfight in the Chinatown.

 

In the second mission, the car suddenly appeared. You could spawn the car from the start. About the stadium, good choice for a fight/shooting training. But, one thing you can fix is create new actor for the marine. He's talking to himself. So, work more on this.

 

I love the CQB training. All the objects are well placed. Good job!

 

In the 5th mission, when we need to defend the place, you didn't hide the actors. But, I loved the shootout.

 

Well, this is for suggestion. If you want to make Brian to be killed by the Breznev, set Brian to 'Hold position'. For Breznev, set him to 100 accuracy, health 2500(max) and 'Hold Position". And make the cutscene a bit longer like 4 - 6 seconds.

 

Anyway, they're a good missions. Nice job! biggrin.gif

 

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thanks Arejai

i will fix the 5th mission if i have time, i'm a little bit busy now biggrin.gif

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The 6th mission "Chinatown War" is released! Check the main post for download

 

 

A Zip file containing of 6 missions of Act 1 is released! Check the main post for download

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The second mission of Act 2 is released! Check the main post for download

 

 

The Character and Gang/Teams list have been updated

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Wow, I'm in the credits list biggrin.gif

Anyway here's your trailer.

I hope you like it, cuz I did it and you better like it too lol lol.gif

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Wow, I'm in the credits list biggrin.gif

Anyway here's your trailer.

I hope you like it, cuz I did it and you better like it too lol lol.gif

yeah. you deserve it

And, i just look at the trailer and it was awesome!

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The third mission of Act 2 is released! Check the main post for download

 

The Character list have been updated!

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MadMarshMallow

Here's the review for Act 1.

 

 

PLAYABLILITY 4.5/5

The playability was pretty nice! Although there are some mistakes along the missions, it's still good. The shootout started from the beginning of the mission, and it's challenging me sometimes.

 

 

BALANCE 4/5

This campaign was hard, but still I can beat them. The last mission(Act 1) is the hardest, but very enjoyable and fun. Almost all the shootout war was nearly hard to win. Yes, the enemies has a medium health, and high accuracy that I think it's set to 50-75.

 

 

CREATIVITY 3/5

You used the driving school and army ship as a place for training is pretty creative. But, it's still normal. You need to give a player something new, that can amazed their mind.

 

 

VARIETY 3.8/5

All the objects was placed on a right and good position. I loved how you arranged the objects at the training ground which is in the 2nd mission. It's creative but keep it realistic. About the skins, I'm very confused. You need to keep the skins to less than 10 types for one gang. But, I don't know, it's your style. smile.gif

 

 

STORY / WRITING 4.4/5

Act 1 has a good plot and storyline. The protaonist started as a gangster and then become an army. It begin without instructions that gives a user a little bit confusing. It's nice beginning.

 

About the writing, all of them are good. Some of the dialogues seems a bit childish. But, it's still acceptable.

 

 

OVERALL

Its required a good experienced & skill to play these missions. Not for beginner I think. So, anyway, good work, keep it up, and don't give up. biggrin.gif

 

 

RATING 8/10

 

 

By Arejai.

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Thanks for the review Arejai. glad you like it biggrin.gif

 

And yeah, about the skins: You have know that Vice Kings and San Diego gang are turning into allies (The Delta Forces). So, that's why there are so many skins. As additions, the majority of the Vice Kings Members are homeless guys, for the example, Brian. You can see in the beginning of mission CQB Test and the Delta Forces that he always sleep on the streets. In Chinatown War, there are a lot of skins used for the Vice Kings gang. Because the Vice Kings Hangout (Or Hideout) is the home of every Homeless guys in San Fierro. The boss gave them a weapon to protect themself if the hangout is attacked wink.gif

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