Sk0n Posted January 21, 2012 Share Posted January 21, 2012 (edited) Status: ON HOLD Main Theme: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=17SgVGPvv6E One year has passed since this mess started and San Andreas is now in complete doom. The Black Operations locked the city and are killing every citizen untill a cure is found, but for now its KILL OR BE KILLED... ¤The Survivors: who are the armed and surviving citizens of San Andreas including Jane Simmons. Their enemies are The Infected and The Black Operations. ¤The Black Operations: A specialized group of soldiers who have been ordered by the gouvrnment to lock San Andreas and kill everyone untill a cure is found. Their enemies are The Survivors and The Infected. ¤The Infected: Who are killing any human they see and are the main cause of this apocalypse. Their enemies are Humans (The Survivors and The Black Operations). NOTE: You will unlock new subjects by advancing in the game Subject: Jane Simmons Gender: Female Age: 27 Condition: Fine Position: Survivor Unlocked In: Introduction Subject: Tommy Stevens Gender: Male Age: 46 Condition: Fine Position: Survivor Unlocked In: Saving Him Subject: Ken Robbinson Gender: Male Age: 31 Condition: Fine Position: Survivor Unlocked In: The Favor Introduction: http://www.dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=16979 Saving Him: http://www.dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=17231 The Favor: http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=17917 Edited June 2, 2013 by Skander Blade Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
IX-MJ-XI Posted January 21, 2012 Share Posted January 21, 2012 (edited) Wow! You made a new zombie mission pack! I will surely try this now and give feedback later! EDIT: Played the Introduction, a decent intro, just cutscenes, no grammar mistakes just a bit of typo, but understandable. Anyways, nice mission for a INTRO! Rate: 3/5 Edited January 22, 2012 by IXMJXI Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sk0n Posted January 22, 2012 Author Share Posted January 22, 2012 Wow! You made a new zombie mission pack! I will surely try this now and give feedback later! EDIT: Played the Introduction, a decent intro, just cutscenes, no grammar mistakes just a bit of typo, but understandable. Anyways, nice mission for a INTRO! Rate: 3/5 Thank you and stay tuned for more missions Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MadMarshMallow Posted January 23, 2012 Share Posted January 23, 2012 Played 1st mission. Good introduction, good story. And wow, it's something hard to find a woman being a protagonist/playable character. But, you can make it even better by put an action scenes that flow with the story telling. For example, as the story says "And they were acting like animals so they killed the personel in the facility", you can put some acting, such as the zombies are killing the personel. So, it can avoid a boredom. Btw, keep it up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sk0n Posted January 23, 2012 Author Share Posted January 23, 2012 Played 1st mission. Good introduction, good story. And wow, it's something hard to find a woman being a protagonist/playable character. But, you can make it even better by put an action scenes that flow with the story telling. For example, as the story says "And they were acting like animals so they killed the personel in the facility", you can put some acting, such as the zombies are killing the personel. So, it can avoid a boredom. Btw, keep it up. Yeah i had that idea too but it will be too much of a work and thanks for playing Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shiva. Posted January 24, 2012 Share Posted January 24, 2012 Played the introduction. It was good. My rating is 4/5. Keep it up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sk0n Posted January 25, 2012 Author Share Posted January 25, 2012 Played the introduction. It was good. My rating is 4/5. Keep it up. Thank you for playing and rating Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pvt. Hunk Posted January 27, 2012 Share Posted January 27, 2012 (edited) Are you copying my zombie name, The Infected? Edited January 28, 2012 by Girish Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shahonix Posted January 27, 2012 Share Posted January 27, 2012 What the hell man!? Stop quoting all the main post! And also, he create this mission pack before you! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sk0n Posted January 27, 2012 Author Share Posted January 27, 2012 @-S-hark21: Don't bother with these newbies @Pvt. Hunk: Your comment is pointless Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pvt. Hunk Posted January 29, 2012 Share Posted January 29, 2012 You need any header ? Or logos? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sk0n Posted January 29, 2012 Author Share Posted January 29, 2012 You need any header ? Or logos? Yeah do you know a good logo site ? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MadMarshMallow Posted January 29, 2012 Share Posted January 29, 2012 You need any header ? Or logos? Yeah do you know a good logo site ? Or you just could post a request on GFX section. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sk0n Posted January 29, 2012 Author Share Posted January 29, 2012 Or you just could post a request on GFX section. No i wanna design logos by myself but thanks for the heads up Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pvt. Hunk Posted January 29, 2012 Share Posted January 29, 2012 Or you just could post a request on GFX section. No i wanna design logos by myself but thanks for the heads up OK then, mate Goodluck with your TZI2 ! BTW, cool intro ! My Ratings : 7.9 / 10 Keep up Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
abishai.kochara Posted January 29, 2012 Share Posted January 29, 2012 Are you copying my zombie name, The Infected? If you look closely that post says 'edited by girish' hmm....... Anyways good luck skander! I'll be playing this when i get time soon! Its on my list...... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sk0n Posted January 29, 2012 Author Share Posted January 29, 2012 @Pvt. Hunk: Thank you for playing and rating @abishai.kochara: Okay then... i'll wait for your feedback Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
abishai.kochara Posted January 29, 2012 Share Posted January 29, 2012 Well played the mission, good work with the cutscenes and text. I expected gameplay in the end when Jane's status is displayed but sadly i was left wanting to know whats next and who's in the hut as the mission got over. I could have done with some gameplay but the introduction was an introduction alright! it was awesome and good work! Good luck for the next missions! Also good job with objects! Good work and good luck! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sk0n Posted January 29, 2012 Author Share Posted January 29, 2012 Well played the mission, good work with the cutscenes and text. I expected gameplay in the end when Jane's status is displayed but sadly i was left wanting to know whats next and who's in the hut as the mission got over. I could have done with some gameplay but the introduction was an introduction alright! it was awesome and good work! Good luck for the next missions! Also good job with objects! Good work and good luck! Woah... this is what i call a feedback... thanks man ,guys like you make me wanna carry on with my projects Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shahonix Posted January 29, 2012 Share Posted January 29, 2012 I've played the introduction so, here's my feedback. 1. You made good use of cutscene and text. I like it. 2. There's around 4 - 6 spelling mistakes. Don't type it too fast next time. 3. I was expecting to have gameplay after Jane was introduced , but it's already passed. You nearly got me there. Don't want to use any color on this, because it doesn't matter. Rating : 9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
abishai.kochara Posted January 29, 2012 Share Posted January 29, 2012 Forgot to add the rating - 9.5/10 Waiting for the next missions and I'm happy that I was able to motivate you! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sk0n Posted January 29, 2012 Author Share Posted January 29, 2012 @-S-hark21: Thank you @abishai.kochara: Next mission is still in devlopement so stay tuned Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
General Scrotum Posted January 29, 2012 Share Posted January 29, 2012 (edited) I tried your mission. It's nice to see you are doing a sequel for this. I don't know if you remember, but I had played 'The Zombotech Incident' at the time you and I were at our starts. Anyway, I think the intro was good although there were some spelling mistakes and lack of capitalisation for words beginning a sentence. I liked how you presented the factions, but I had hoped for more information and maybe seeing them at their usual hangouts, what they look like and how they behave. Also, in my opinion, you start off with excitement straight at the beginning: after the presentation of the main character, we can see she is up to something. The only con about that is that I had hoped for some action, but nonetheless the mission pack shows promise and I can't wait to see what will happen in the next mission. You pulled this introduction good enough, even though there was no gameplay and only cutscenes. Overall rating of the mission: 5/10. Edited January 29, 2012 by Secronom President Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sk0n Posted January 30, 2012 Author Share Posted January 30, 2012 I tried your mission. It's nice to see you are doing a sequel for this. I don't know if you remember, but I had played 'The Zombotech Incident' at the time you and I were at our starts. Anyway, I think the intro was good although there were some spelling mistakes and lack of capitalisation for words beginning a sentence. I liked how you presented the factions, but I had hoped for more information and maybe seeing them at their usual hangouts, what they look like and how they behave. Also, in my opinion, you start off with excitement straight at the beginning: after the presentation of the main character, we can see she is up to something. The only con about that is that I had hoped for some action, but nonetheless the mission pack shows promise and I can't wait to see what will happen in the next mission. You pulled this introduction good enough, even though there was no gameplay and only cutscenes. Overall rating of the mission: 5/10. Wow... your actually playing my missions... thanks for playing and rating Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Converse Posted January 31, 2012 Share Posted January 31, 2012 (edited) "The Zombotech Incident 2" - The Introduction Average introduction In my opinion, there were too many cutscenes, and your grammar and punctuation was below standard, so it needs to be improved. The weather was suitable. The introduction contained all cutscenes. The was no walking or running around for the player to do, no action, which I found a bit boring. A great touch introducing the factions, but there was no cutscenes of them at their terrirtory, doing their thing. I liked it when you had the colored text for "Skander Blade Presents". I thought that was a good touch. Overall, I really think you need to improve grammar and punctuation, and try adding more action in the next missions. You still have a lot of time left, so I hope you can improve as you progress. Rating - 4.2/10. Review by Converse Edited January 31, 2012 by Converse Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sk0n Posted February 1, 2012 Author Share Posted February 1, 2012 "The Zombotech Incident 2" - The Introduction Average introduction In my opinion, there were too many cutscenes, and your grammar and punctuation was below standard, so it needs to be improved. The weather was suitable. The introduction contained all cutscenes. The was no walking or running around for the player to do, no action, which I found a bit boring. A great touch introducing the factions, but there was no cutscenes of them at their terrirtory, doing their thing. I liked it when you had the colored text for "Skander Blade Presents". I thought that was a good touch. Overall, I really think you need to improve grammar and punctuation, and try adding more action in the next missions. You still have a lot of time left, so I hope you can improve as you progress. Rating - 4.2/10. Review by Converse Thanks that was really nice of you to play and give a feedback Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sk0n Posted February 5, 2012 Author Share Posted February 5, 2012 UPDATE: Mission 2: Saving Him released Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
IX-MJ-XI Posted February 5, 2012 Share Posted February 5, 2012 Ok, played the mission (Saving Him). The mission is above average. I like how you make the door scene (correct me if I'm wrong). The difficulty is easy but if you've made a wrong move you'll be in jeopardy for the SWATS are carrying M16 and they can drain your health for a couple of seconds. You placed the actors nicely, especially the one walking (with route points). I will be waiting for the next mission. CAN'T WAIT! Rating: 4/5 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MadMarshMallow Posted February 6, 2012 Share Posted February 6, 2012 Played the 2nd mission. Firstly, nice stealth mission. All of the guards are nicely positioned. Great, man. I loved the mission. But, there are something that can be fixed/improved: Guard on the wall. It's a bit annoying when I see the guard on the wall with a talking animation. You can change the animation to something that can be related to the wall; for example, animation '34'(Leaning on the wall). It's better in my opinion. The Door Scenes I can say that it's creative. But, you know.. it's a bit funny. You just only used a wall and the 'door object'. Seems childish. So, use the real entrance, next time. The Words I'm something hate when I see a dialogues, or any words that didn't contain a full stop. It's very important to show that we do care about the writing. Be remembered after this. So, overall, nice mission and nice stealth. You should keep working on this. Good luck. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
General Scrotum Posted February 7, 2012 Share Posted February 7, 2012 I played the second mission. I liked how the mission was stealth based and how you could jeopardies that in a matter of seconds if you got spotted by one of the guards. I also liked the 'find the key' part, but I would of have liked it with more guards coming around at the same time. The cutscenes with doors opening and closing were nice, but I was confused at first. I didn't know it was a door animation for the first four seconds, but I realised it afterwards. Still, you need to pay attention to spelling mistakes and I believe I saw some sentences with no punctuation at all or filled with almost none. Anyway... So far, so good. You put this very well together. Hope to play the third mission soon. The mission was better than the first one, but you still need to pay attention to your writing. Nonetheless, good work from you. Average rating of the mission: 6.8/10. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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