RamiTR Posted January 19, 2012 Share Posted January 19, 2012 (edited) The series is now officially dropped. This was just another test series. That is why I made a trailer, asked for a review, etc. so soon. I WILL be making future packs. Thanks for understanding. 2004, Los Santos. The beauty of the Los Santos beaches, sun & women was overlapped by the criminal activity in the past year. Gangs started to mark their territory, police started to kill gang members on sight. Everyone was pulling triggers, then asking questions. The typical 1992 Los Santos. The untold story of Danny Murphy was remained a secret, he died in 2003 due to cancer. Xaviar Brown moved to the North of the United States of America, he wanted a better life, as usual. The only ones who were left were Brianna & Jordan. Let us not forget about all the gangs & criminals in San Andreas too. Jordan had changed the name of his gang from "Niggas from da' Block" to "Temple District Bloods". Jordan is now a professional boxer as well, he does a lot of drugs though. He has so many rivals & enemies. Recently, a fight club named "Thai Eagles" kidnapped Jordan's athletic trainer. Play the pack, to find out what comes next... I will post missions as I finish them, my goal is to make 8 missions every week. I will try my hardest to make them works of art. CHAPTER 1 Progress: 12% Introduction Progress: 100% Download link: Mission 1 Recruiting Progress: 100% Download link: Mission 2 Something in Return Progress: 0% Mayday! Progress: 0% Sup Ese Progress: 0% New Kid Progress: 0% Home Alone Progress: 0% Rescuing Coach Progress: 0% Jan. 20 - Uploaded the first mission. Jan. 24 - Uploaded the second mission. Jan. 26 - Added a trailer. First trailer: Temple District BloodsLeader: Jordan Davis Status: Allies Thai Eagles Leader: Kurayami no musuko Status: Enemies Jordan DavisAge: 23 Status/Relation: Main Character Short Bio: Jordan has had a rough life, but that hasn't stopped him from doing what he loves. He is a homie person & cares for his homies. He does whatever it takes to kill his enemies. Sofyan de Koning Age: 34 Status/Relation: Homie Short Bio: Sofyan is Jordan's personal athletic trainer. He was once a very famous boxer in the Netherlands. A major injury made him retire. He moved to Los Santos in search for a job. He found himself working with Jordan & he is now his athletic trainer. Montell Taylor Age: 24 Status/Relation: Homie Short Bio: Montell is one of Jordan's best homies. They fight against each other in the ring, but that never gets in the way of their friendship. Montell has a history of drug abuse & alcohol overdose. He is almost clean now, but he takes a few shots every now & then. Christian Miono Age: 28 Status/Relation: Enemy Short Bio: Christian is the spy for the Thai Eagles. No one knows his real name or origin, so they call him Christian for his religious beliefs. He finds himself in many hard situations, but most of the time, he manages to escape. Jeffrey Prince Age: 21 Status/Relation: Sorta Homie Short Bio: The poser in this mission pack. He goes around running his mouth about how he is this successful man. Even though he is an annoying foo', his rewards are out of this world. Kurayami no musuko Age: Unknown Status/Relation: Enemy Short Bio: Unknown. Peter J. Ford Age: 25 Status/Relation: Homie Short Bio: The cool white cop. He helps Jordan out with a lot of things such as; gang information, deal locations, etc. Please post any thoughts & first impressions. The first mission will probably be released on Friday. Edited January 27, 2012 by Juan-R Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RamiTR Posted January 19, 2012 Author Share Posted January 19, 2012 (edited) Only typed reviews will go here! Review for the 1st & 2nd mission - by Arejai Greeting everyone. This time I'm going to review a mission series called GTA: A Gangsta's Past - Jordan's Side by Juan-R. He requested the first two missions to be review. Here's the link: http://www.gtaforums.com/index.php?showtopic=499058 Writing (Very Good) I found no spelling mistake in it. The using of words is good but sometimes it's hard to understand. Anyway, it's still acceptable. Just don't make the words too complicated to read. Presentation (Very Good) Almost all of the cutscenes is well accurated. Some of them have a nice positioned cutscene. I loved the cutscenes in the beginning of the 1st mission. You made a nice scenes. Introduction Length (Good) It can be done in 5 - 6 minutes. There are a lot of cutscenes to give more sense to a players as this is an introduction. Difficulty (Very Easy) It's only consist of driving to the destination. But, the car we're using is almost to explode because it's only set to 100 health. Remember this, Juan. Variety (Decent) There are 3 types of actors were used in this mission, I think. And there are 2 types of objects and 1 type of vehicle. Recruitment Length (Very Good) It can be done in 7 minutes. It consists of driving to the destination and some shootout. The place we need to go is very far away from our starting place. So, it takes time to arrived there. Difficulty (Hard) We'll role as Jordan and with our friend, Montel, we need to go to the target place and there are a lot of enemy. They'll come again as a second wave that is much more than the first enemies. Although their headshot is turned "on", they have a pretty high accuracy. We just need a cover or we'll die easily. And the good one, there a some health and armors given. Variety (Good) There are a much more types of actors and weapons. We can see the enemies is using some kind of different weapons such as 9mm and m4. Correct if I'm wrong. Overall, it's a nice job. I loved the shootout at the 2nd mission. It's a bit hard but not impossible to pass. Need to remember that sometimes a players didn't like to travel to a long distance. But, don't worry. For me, it's normal. Anyway, about the red car, it has been repaired, eh? Just kidding Last words, nice mission, keep it up, and don't give up. Rating: 8.7/10 By Arejai Edited January 25, 2012 by Juan-R Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RamiTR Posted January 19, 2012 Author Share Posted January 19, 2012 This spot is reserved for future additions Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shahonix Posted January 19, 2012 Share Posted January 19, 2012 So, you gonna remake it Juan-R? Waiting for it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ItsAllAboutGTA Posted January 19, 2012 Share Posted January 19, 2012 Another great project JR ! Goodluck ! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
abishai.kochara Posted January 19, 2012 Share Posted January 19, 2012 Good luck dude! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kwabs Posted January 19, 2012 Share Posted January 19, 2012 Hmmm, I never played one of your missions. But the story sounds good, so I 'll play it for sure when it comes (I hope soon) Good luck with this Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RamiTR Posted January 19, 2012 Author Share Posted January 19, 2012 @-S-hark - Basically, yea. Since the previous mission pack got canceled, I decided to get back to it, but with a different protagonist. @ItsAllAboutGTA - Thanks dude, I hope you give this a try when it's uploaded @abishai.kochara - Thanks man @ThaBoY - Thanks for wanting to play this The first mission will probably be released tomorrow! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Venus FlyTrap Posted January 20, 2012 Share Posted January 20, 2012 Very interesting story, and i love logos. Gonna play it for sure. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MadMarshMallow Posted January 20, 2012 Share Posted January 20, 2012 I like this kind of story and you got a nice logo too. Btw, good luck and I'll give it a try. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RamiTR Posted January 21, 2012 Author Share Posted January 21, 2012 Thanks, I made everything myself Also, the mission was not uploaded due to personal situations. Thank you for understanding. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RamiTR Posted January 21, 2012 Author Share Posted January 21, 2012 Mission 1 - Introduction has been released. The download link can be found in the main topic. Please post feedback if you played! It would get me one step closer to making professional missions. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MadMarshMallow Posted January 21, 2012 Share Posted January 21, 2012 Played the introduction. It's a nice mission. I loved the cutscenes in the beginning when Jordan are pointing a gun to Xavier at the alleyway. The place is really fit with the situation. But, there's something that can be improved; it's the red car that belongs to Jordan. The car is almost explode, because you set it to 100 health, I think. So, remember to set it to the higher health. Otherwise, good job. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shahonix Posted January 21, 2012 Share Posted January 21, 2012 Feedback time : Red : I din't like it Green : Love it Warning! Contains Spoiler!! 1. The car, it's almost explode, I think it's 100 health 2. The intro was nice, really fit into the situation. Jordan aiming at Xavier is great. Rating for intro : 7.5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MadMarshMallow Posted January 21, 2012 Share Posted January 21, 2012 Feedback time : Red : I din't like it Green : Love it Warning! Contains Spoiler!! 1. The car, it's almost explode, I think it's 100 health 2. The intro was nice, really fit into the situation. Jordan aiming at Xavier is great. Rating for intro : 7.5/10 It's what I said above.. But, it's okay. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shahonix Posted January 21, 2012 Share Posted January 21, 2012 Ya, I know I was about to post that And also, sometimes i don't understand what they saying Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MadMarshMallow Posted January 21, 2012 Share Posted January 21, 2012 Ya, I knowI was about to post that And also, sometimes i don't understand what they saying You can check them with notepad++. It's great software. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kwabs Posted January 21, 2012 Share Posted January 21, 2012 Nice mission man I just didn't like the part where my car blew up. So more health for the car plz. Besides that, Everything's in the story's great. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RamiTR Posted January 21, 2012 Author Share Posted January 21, 2012 I'll fix the car health right away. I think I accidentally changed it. I'll upload the fixed version when I fix it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RamiTR Posted January 24, 2012 Author Share Posted January 24, 2012 Mission 2 - Recruitment has been released. The download link can be found in the main topic. Please post feedback if you played! It would get me one step closer to making professional missions. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shahonix Posted January 26, 2012 Share Posted January 26, 2012 I played the second mission and here's my feedback 1. The enemy actor have a really strong weapon and high accuracy (I guess), They shoot me easily. Their is AK47, Desert Eagle, etc. 2. The enemy actor is headshotable, which make me easy to kill them. I just go behind the wall and shoot them. That's all I guess. Waiting for more Rating 9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RamiTR Posted January 26, 2012 Author Share Posted January 26, 2012 @-S-hark - Thanks for posting feedback I tried to make it hard by making a lot of enemies with almost powerful guns. I set it in that place because there are many places to take cover. I tried to make it hard (guess I succeeded) but not too hard, that's why I put some pick ups around. Thanks for playing Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darkseller63 Posted January 26, 2012 Share Posted January 26, 2012 The second mission was very good, Juan-R. It was hard, but the covers and the headshots at the enemies made the mission much easier. Good work! P.S. The first mission is good, too. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RamiTR Posted January 26, 2012 Author Share Posted January 26, 2012 @Darkseller - Thanks I was almost done with the 3rd mission but it got waaay buggy. So I deleted it & am currently remaking it. I will make 6 missions this weekend. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RamiTR Posted January 27, 2012 Author Share Posted January 27, 2012 **DROPPED** Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shahonix Posted January 28, 2012 Share Posted January 28, 2012 Ah man, why? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RamiTR Posted January 28, 2012 Author Share Posted January 28, 2012 It was just a test series, I wanted to test the cutscenes, different objectives. I know I could've kept it to myself, but I was also wanted to test/see what I needed to work on & what people like, as well as their reactions. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Recommended Posts
Create an account or sign in to comment
You need to be a member in order to leave a comment
Create an account
Sign up for a new account in our community. It's easy!
Register a new accountSign in
Already have an account? Sign in here.
Sign In Now