Shiva. Posted January 14, 2012 Share Posted January 14, 2012 (edited) Thanks to Narcis_Speed6 for the logo It is 2003 and Los Santos is becoming more and more dangerous. People were killed like birds by the Drug lords. The cops were completely helpless. Some cops were bribed while some honest cops were killed in a horribel manner. People lost all their faith on the cops. Mr.Zeon and his wicked brother were ruling Los Santos. They became rich quickly through Drug Business. People living there hoped that they would be saved by a hero one day. Characters Descriptions Wade Hopkins He's a small time crook. He leads a crookery life along with his friend Darren G Darren G He's the friend of Wade. He's a crook and a robber too. They both spends most of their lives behind the bars. Mr.Zeon He's a powerful drug lord in Los Santos. He takes care of the drug business in South Los Santos. Officer Richard He's a cop hanging around San fierro. He always use to have an eye on Wade and Darren. His past is unknown and he still remains as a mystery. Here's a video review by Aznkei: Special thanks to those who're gonna pay my missionpack. Please give me feebacks about the topic too. (Missions one by one) Chapter 1:http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=17599 1.Intro:http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=16847 2. Uninvited Visitors:http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=17289 3. Life at Stake:http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=17329 4. The Stranger:http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=17443 5. I didn't sign for this:http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=17566 6. Pain in the neck:http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=17582 7. West to east:http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=17586 8. Officer Down:http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=17598 Chapter 2: 9. A Hero is not born but made:http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=17625 10.First day:http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=17809 11.The Party:http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=18000 12. An Ambush:http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=18187 13. The Nightmare:http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=18188 14. Way Down:http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=18276 15. Final Battle:http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=18317 16. The Fall of Garry Bottom:http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=18335 Chapter 3 17. Clown's Play:http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=18447 18. Robbing Uncle Zeon:http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=18492 19. The End:http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=18611 Download the whole series here Edited April 21, 2012 by shiva s Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
IX-MJ-XI Posted January 14, 2012 Share Posted January 14, 2012 I will try this and give feedback later. Hope you will make it on .zip file. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shiva. Posted January 14, 2012 Author Share Posted January 14, 2012 I will try this and give feedback later. Hope you will make it on .zip file. Thanks, Man. Yea, I'll compress this. Glad to get comments from guys like you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MadMarshMallow Posted January 14, 2012 Share Posted January 14, 2012 Nice story and amazing logo. I'll give it a try. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shiva. Posted January 14, 2012 Author Share Posted January 14, 2012 @Arejai Thanks, dude. Actually, the story is too big to explain and I don't know how to write it fully. So, made a short plot for it. Play the intro and give feedbacks. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shahonix Posted January 14, 2012 Share Posted January 14, 2012 Good luck with this! Awesome logo too! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shiva. Posted January 14, 2012 Author Share Posted January 14, 2012 @Shark21 Thanks, dude. Play and give feedbacks. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
IX-MJ-XI Posted January 14, 2012 Share Posted January 14, 2012 Played the Intro, not much, but it's a nice mission for a intro. I will wait for more. Ratings: 3.5/5 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sk0n Posted January 14, 2012 Share Posted January 14, 2012 Your story is awesome i like it and i'm definately gonna play this mission pack Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shahonix Posted January 14, 2012 Share Posted January 14, 2012 Played the introduction Nice one for intro But I wanted to know who is Garry Bottom (if I'm right) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shiva. Posted January 14, 2012 Author Share Posted January 14, 2012 @IXMJXI thanks for your honest feebacks and rating. Much appericiated. @Skander Blade Damn! I can't believe that a pro like you've commented. Thanks. I'll be waiting for your feedbacks. @Shark21 that's a suspense. You've to play the upcoming missions to find out. Thanks for your feedbacks Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MadMarshMallow Posted January 15, 2012 Share Posted January 15, 2012 Nice intro . You put a mystery thing in it. I loved the scene in the casino. Good work But, one thing that can be improved, in the cutscene when Mr. Zeon and his men are leaving his place with a car, make it a little longer. Otherwise, nice mission. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KaRzY6 Posted January 15, 2012 Share Posted January 15, 2012 Nice! I will play when I have time. Lots of spelling and grammar mistakes in the main post. Maybe in your free time, try and work on your English a bit, no offence Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shiva. Posted January 15, 2012 Author Share Posted January 15, 2012 (edited) Thanks, Arejai. Theres also a bug. The actor who is taking outside the hospital in the phone is supposed to die. But, a small bug has occured so he's not dying. You know I'm playing your Bad Boys right now. Its awesome. @KaRzY nah, no offense. There maybe spelling mistakes in the post but not in the mission. Don't forget to give feedbacks after playing. Edited January 15, 2012 by shiva s Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MadMarshMallow Posted January 15, 2012 Share Posted January 15, 2012 Thanks, Arejai. Theres also a bug. The actor who is taking outside the hospital in the phone is supposed to die. But, a small bug has occured so he's not dying. You know I'm playing your Bad Boys right now. Its awesome. It's okay. It doesn't spoiled the intro. Just keep it up the good work. Btw, thanks for playing my mission Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shiva. Posted January 15, 2012 Author Share Posted January 15, 2012 Thanks, Arejai. Theres also a bug. The actor who is taking outside the hospital in the phone is supposed to die. But, a small bug has occured so he's not dying. You know I'm playing your Bad Boys right now. Its awesome. It's okay. It doesn't spoiled the intro. Just keep it up the good work. Btw, thanks for playing my mission Thanks, Man. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
abishai.kochara Posted January 15, 2012 Share Posted January 15, 2012 awesome! guess I'll play it tomorrow! DON'T READ THIS This is heavily influenced by Indian movies! right? And 'I am soldier by India's present state and movies, by Indian movies I mean the south indian ones, right? 'cause even I'm a south. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shiva. Posted January 15, 2012 Author Share Posted January 15, 2012 awesome! guess I'll play it tomorrow!DON'T READ THIS This is heavily influenced by Indian movies! right? And 'I am soldier by India's present state and movies, by Indian movies I mean the south indian ones, right? 'cause even I'm a south. I can't get you. But, you mean that I made a mission pack based on the Indian movies,huh? No, I'm not. If you still have something to say send me a PM. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
abishai.kochara Posted January 16, 2012 Share Posted January 16, 2012 (edited) Played it, awesome mission! I thought it wouldn't consist of gameplay but it cam in the end all right! you should've kept some screenshots in the end too. Awesome mission, good use of cutscenes and animations, good work & good luck! I'm waiting for more! Edited February 11, 2012 by abishai.kochara Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shiva. Posted January 16, 2012 Author Share Posted January 16, 2012 Played it, awesome mission! I thought it wouldn't consist of gameplay but it cam in the end all right! you should've kept some screenshots in the end too. Awesome mission, good use of cutscenes and animations, god work & good luck! I'm waiting for more! Thanks, Man. Appericiate your feedbacks. The second mission was to be released today but a crash occured and I want to make the missions again. So, its gonna be delayed. Keep waiting and dont forget to give feedbacks. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
abishai.kochara Posted January 16, 2012 Share Posted January 16, 2012 (edited) haha.... crashs are annoying! Edited January 17, 2012 by abishai.kochara Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shiva. Posted January 16, 2012 Author Share Posted January 16, 2012 Yeah, Man. What makes you laugh in that? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
abishai.kochara Posted January 16, 2012 Share Posted January 16, 2012 expression............. no offense Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shiva. Posted January 16, 2012 Author Share Posted January 16, 2012 No problem. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shiva. Posted February 10, 2012 Author Share Posted February 10, 2012 The second mission has been released. Check the main topic for the link. Sorry for the late release but I'd been busy lately. There are two bugs. I have no idea how they occured. 1. Our partner Darren will not follow us after hijacking the car. 2. Two checkpoints seem to occur in the map. Hit the pay n spray first and then go to the hideout. Thanks, negative feedbacks are much appericiated than positive feedbacks Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MadMarshMallow Posted February 11, 2012 Share Posted February 11, 2012 Played the 2nd mission. Cool mission. I loved the hijack part. It confused me at first, but when I looked around, yes, I saw the packer. At the beginning, the two people is talking but they're doing nothing other than idle. They need an animations. So, it can avoid bored. One more, as the older designers said, DON'T PLACE A CUTSCENE AT THE 2(or more) ACTORS AT THE SAME TIME(when both of them are talking). In the house, the guards follow Mr. Zeon to the room. And when their route/way are blocked, they'll face at random directions. It's something annoying. You can hide and create a new actors to replace them. The part when the wife is dead and the husband is on her side. Yeah, on the cutscene I can't see the wife's body and the husband is right above the wife. So, place the actor(husband) at a little bit far from the wife. Overall, the mission is pretty cool. I loved how you separated the story between Wade/Darren and Mr. Zeon. Nice job. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
abishai.kochara Posted February 11, 2012 Share Posted February 11, 2012 uhh..... Shiva.... the Zeon guy.... eh.... I remembered him right now when I was downloading your mission...... He's in my pack as well.... hope you aren't angry, it wasn't on purpose.... sorry.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shiva. Posted February 11, 2012 Author Share Posted February 11, 2012 @Arejai Thanks for the honest feedbacks, Man. I wanted to make it just like the levels you play in God of war. I'll keep your points in mind. @Abishai Kochara Nah, I won't get angry. No problem. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
abishai.kochara Posted February 11, 2012 Share Posted February 11, 2012 Thanks for understanding bro.... Anyways to the feedback- I was waiting for the mission and when it was released I was really waiting to play it which I did. The mission is very good and I kinda' enjoyed it till i got to the hijacking part, I didn't get what I was supposed to do! i loved the mission even though I faced some obstacles, the cutscenes and dialogues were awesome, really good way you made the missions and I expect a lot of twists, same problems as Aj just theres a bug of which I'll upload a pic soon.... Awesome missions and waiting for the next! Good job! i believe you should've at least supplied us with a knife, i mean such a big robbery needs some planning right? That cuts out the realism effect and annoyed and got me to cheat(I got myself a knife) Then I didn't understand what to do so.....(guess what i did!CHEATED)(jetpack) Sorry and please explain to me.... Good mission and good job! Good work and good luck! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shahonix Posted February 11, 2012 Share Posted February 11, 2012 I've played the second mission and here's my feedback 1. I like the way you use the cutscene and the talking. But, you should add animations too. It's awkward both of them (the guy with the cap and the other guy) didn't have any animations when talking. 2. About the wife... when she was dead, the husband check (or whatever you call) her by stepping on her body. You should played the mission to know what I mean. 3. And the Highjacking, I fail it like 3-4 times because I didn't saw anything that can help me, not until I saw the Packer. So, it's a good place where you hide it. 4. And also, about Darren G, after done highjacking the car. You should add checkpoint on where he's standing. And then hide the actor and spawn new actor so that the Darren G will follow you. 5. When hit the checkpoint in the Pay & Spray, you should add a Timeout Objective which is a 4-6 seconds until the Pay & Spray complete it's job. Just press the (space) button. It's awkward when I hit the checkpoint and then suddenly gotta go back to the hideout. It was kinda disappointed to me when you compare to the intro. Please, no offence. Anyway, the rate 8.1/10 Hope you'll improve in the next mission Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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