GroveWarrior Posted January 3, 2012 Share Posted January 3, 2012 [/b]Liberty City : Undead Nightmare -CHAPTER 1- It seemed like a normal night for Christopher Warris.Just sitting on his couch,in his apartment,which was quite a sh*thole.Watching "Replubican Space Rangers" and eating some pizza from the Pizza This place.He seemed to not really enjoy these kinds of moments of his life.Being alone,in a dark,dark city.But what he really didn't know,was that ALL that was about to change. Christopher: (sighs) Sh*t,im sleepy, im going to bed. Christopher then stood up from his torn,dirty couch and layed comfortably on it.Soon,he shut his eyes and fell deep asleep. -THE NEXT MORNING- As Christopher awoke from his soundly sleep,he heard Warning sirens from outside.He walked towards his door and opened,later to reveal the streets filled with smoke and fog,and a couple of cars on fire.Christopher looked around the place,not finding a single person in sight.He then walked back to his apartment,turned the T.V. on to Weazel News. Announcer: Welcome to Weazel News,Kicking TNN's ass.Now reporting,Brad Johnson. Brad Johnson: Hello, im Brad Johnson and this is todays' news.....It seems like there's a "Zombie Apocalypse" around the Algonquin and Broker area, Alderney seems to be the only place not to have this problem.Liberters seem to be blaming the Derneys' for this chaos.The LCPD force are commanding every citizen in the LC area to evacuate the city. Christopher,now with a freaked out face,ran towards his clothes and packed them up in his backpack.He grabbed a couple of snacks and a kitchen knife,in case a cannibal tries to munch on his intestines.He then walked towards his car and drove around the lonely neighborhoods.The whole boroughs filled with smoke and fog.As he drove,he saw a lady crying with an old man with her. (Christopher then exited his vehicle and walked towards the lady) Christopher: Are you okay,miss? Lady: (crying) My dad,hes...been bitten by those....mon- monsters! Christopher: Ok,you two get in my car,I'll take him to a hos- Lady: Everythings' closed,stores,restaraunts,hospitals. We're doomed! Christopher: Ok,ill get help,just get in my car i'll come back. (Christopher,now running and looking back,looks for any help.) As he kept walking and walking,not finding anything useful,he was thinking if he'll eventually get lost and i'll sooner or later be eaten alive.As he was walking he saw the nearby diner that he always eats breakfast at.The 69th street Diner. He then walked in the place,the whole place was all bloody,and had the stench of a raccoon ran over in the middle of the road,left there for weeks.He looked around and saw a first aid kit.Christopher was now running back to the road where he left the lady and his car.When he was back,he saw the lady laying on the floor..dead and eaten from the neck. Christopher: (gagging) Oh sh*t! Christopher decided to get a closer look and as he did,a force all of a sudden came in and pushed to the ground.The "force" was actually the old man that was with the lady.His face,yellow as a sweat shop Asian's ass.The man's eyes were plain white,with a couple of red veins surrounding the white base.The man then ran towards Christopher and tackled him down.It looked as if the man was trying to chomp on Christopher's face.The only way Christopher could've get out of this was to sacrifise the man.He pulled out the kitchen knife he grabbed,and push it through the man's skull and split through the brain.Blood,was all Christopher had splattering on him.Some even went into his face.Christopher pushed the body off and hopped on his car and drove to look for help. Hope you guys liked it! Chapter 2 will be up tommorow!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GroveWarrior Posted January 3, 2012 Author Share Posted January 3, 2012 In the description i put Niko....I messed up so yea...my bad Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ziggy455 Posted January 3, 2012 Share Posted January 3, 2012 Proofread this! Chuck it in a word processor! The punctuation is not right, I'll proofread it ASAP and get back to you. "I might have laughed if I'd have remembered how." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GroveWarrior Posted January 4, 2012 Author Share Posted January 4, 2012 -CHAPTER 2- As Christopher was driving looking for anyone,he turned to see the Funland fair.Possibly someone could've been in there.As Christopher entered the fair,chills were flowing down his spine.The sound of the Cherry Popper ice cream truck theme song was heard throughout the carnival.Looking around the foggy fair,desperately looking for a "human".He then saw a Cowboy Shootout game,which displays guns with REAL bullets.Then,strange noises were heard.Footsteps heard,crackling glass and rocks.When Christopher finally calmed down and sighed.A clown,with a moldy bloody face.The clowns clothes,torn to reveal his lungs hanging out from his stomach.The zombie then ran towards Christopher and reached his arm out to grab him.Christopher pulled the trigger from the guns.Though they did no damage,as they were just beans.Christopher then saw a hammer from a Muscle Gong game.He then grabbed it,and swing straight at the clown's skull,killing it. Christopher,threw the hammer,accidentaly hit the gong from the game.The sound echoed throughout the fair.It was a long pause,thinking that nothing happened,something did.The noise triggered dozens of zombies lurking around sniffing out blood.Christopher ran towards his car,later to be grabbed by a zombie. Christopher: HELP!!! No reply,no mercy.There was no hope,several other zombies gathered around to feast on Christopher.Luckily,no zombie bit him yet.Just as Christopher was about to give up,a loud bang warned the zombies.It was the sound of a gun,as one of the zombies was shot.Then more were killed,and more.Christopher then turned to reveal a man,not a zombie.The man was about in his late 30's, light skinned, wearing a puffy olive green jacket, with cargo jeans.The man then helped Christopher up. Man: (with a rough cockney Australian accent) Ello' friend. Christopher: Uh...hey,wha- whats up? Man: You okay,pal? Did you get (raises his shotgun up) bitten? Christopher: No,i...I come in peace...heh.Name's Christopher, by the way. Man: Im Gregory. Thas' all you have to kno'. Gregory: Look, you seem to not kno' wat' you're doing so how bout' you come with me and the other survivors. Christopher: There's others?! Gregory: Yes,now les' go. (Christoper and Gregory then entered Christopher's car.) Gregory: Okay,they're held up at a little secret tunnel,just a little under the Broker Bridge. Christopher: Okay,Lets go... -10 MINUTES LATER- Both arrived at a road where the Broker Bridge is at good sight.Gregory led Chris to an open space, that seemed empty.Gregory then stomped on the ground three times, the stomps sounded like wood being hit.Then a man opened a door that seemed secretly hidden.The man was an African American Male,with a buisness suit. Man: Ay yo,Greg, who is this guy. Gregory: He's alright. Man: Is he...y'know Gregory: (sighs) No he is not bitten',Harry.If he was,he would've been dead by now. Harry: Okay come in. Both Christopher and Gregory entered the secret entrance.When both entered,Harry looked left and right and closed the door. Harry: (Walking along with Christopher and Gregory) Ok,now welcome to the Zombie Apocalypse Protection....ZAP for short. Gregory: Ye' ye' ye', Wat' he said...NOW! Look here there are 5 rules. Rule Number One,Dont be a zombie.Rule Number 2, f*ck the rest of the rules. The three then ended in a room with three women.Two were around in there twenties,and the other was a fifty year old. Girl 1: Whos is he? is he infected? Harry: No,Mary,he's just fine. Lady: Look sweety (putting her hand on Mary's arm.) Don't you worry,no one's an undead cannibal here... Gregory: Alright,Chris.Now were camping here for tonight,but by tommorow's sun light were headed to Alderney..... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GroveWarrior Posted January 5, 2012 Author Share Posted January 5, 2012 -CHAPTER 3- It was now morning, Day 2 of the apocalypse.Christopher was just waking up in the little room with the rest of the survivors.When he looked around, Gregory was already up. Chris: (Getting up, and rubbing his eyes.) Greg? Do you really get up this early? Gregory: Well..i wan' to make sure no one in here was bitten' o' sumthing. Anyways, did you get the chance to meet the ladies? Gregory then led Christopher to a room with the three ladies. Gregory: This here is Mary. (pointing at a young girl, about Christopher's age.Dark brown hair,and beautiful grey eyes.) This right here is Elizabeth, Mary's mother.And over here,we have Rachel (same age as Mary,blonde hair,blue eyes.) Christopher then shook Mary's hand, blushing, he knew that Mary was a new "crush".He later shook the other two girls' hand. Gregory: (looking at his gold watch.) Oh! Guys its time we go... (looking around) Wheres Harry? Gregory,looking around for Harry, was getting nervous.Then revealing Harry sleeping. Gregory: Harry! You bloody basturd'. (kicking Harry) Harry: (half asleep) What?... Gregory: We gotta' go now. Harry stood up, and loaded some weapons with Gregory.Gregory turned to Christopher, and handed him a pistol. Christopher: Really? A f*cking pistol... Gregory: Seeing as you almost got eaten by a hungry horde of undead creatures from hell, I think you're an amature. Christopher: Come on, Just hand me a...(observing the table full of weapons)...... a shotgun. Gregory: (chuckle) Come on, you'll shoot yourself on the foot. Anyways we've gotta go.Now. The whole crew then walked through the tunnel.Harry walked to the front of the group, and slowly opened the secret entrance.Peeking through the cracks from the entrance, Harry then gave the "clear" signal, and the rest of the crew exited. Gregory: Alright, heres the plan.We all go in Chris' car and drive to the Broker Bridge.Then, we drive through Algonquin, to seek for help. Harry: Why can't we just drive to Alderney right away? Gregory: Because, we need more survivors....Not all of us are gonna survive this. Christopher,now had a nervous look in his face.Mary then noticed his face. Mary: (grabbing Christopher by the shoulder) Everything's gonna be fine. Christopher: (smiling back) Yea....you're right. The group then walked to the car, and Christopher started the engine and drove away.While driving, the crew noticed the sadness around the streets.Fog,dead bodies,and burning objects all over the whole neighborhood.When they finally reached the bridge.All that was scattered were abandoned cars, and such more horrific things.Burning cars, all over the bridge, Christopher had to drive through the walkway of the bridge.As Christopher was driving, the car suddenly stopped. Gregory: What happened? Christopher: The....car is dead. Harry: ah...Thats f*cking great. Gregory: Looks like we gotta walk the whole way... Harry: You crazy n*gga!! Gregory: Well do you got a better solution, Mr. Suitman. Harry: Ay, i found this suit from a dead body.My clothes was all bloody and sh*t. Christopher: Ok...so we walk......alright thats...thats fine. The group exited the vehicle and walked up to the bridge's road.After sometime walking, a loud crashing noise was heard from the entrance of the bridge.The group all looked back to see what was up.The next thing they all saw was a 8ft. tall Zombie.Crashing through every car or thing on its way, to get to them. Gregory: Sh*t....I always feared these things. Christopher: What is that?? Gregory: That, my friend, is what is like to call a "Brick". When the whole outbreak happened, a few Homeless junkies got hit with the toxins..BAD.So they got all giant and muscley... Christopher: Wait.So the subways are covered with that stuff?! Gregory: Well.....Yea....Anyways we should start running away from that. The group then all ran to cover behing some of the non-damage vehicles. Gregory: (whispering) If you make a tinsy winsy lil' sweat..That thing will start coming at you. Christopher: (whispering) What? Gregory: I mean...It can smell Fear. Rachel: Then what the hell are we doing just sitting here. Just as they were done speaking, the Brick was on the other side of the car, sniffing around the place.Harry was about the only one sweating.The group stood still, but Harry couldnt help it.He started making groaning noises.All of a sudden, there was silence, no sound..nothing.Harry then sighed of relief, but then the Brick lifted up the vehicle.It was mainly focused on Harry. Gregory: RUN!! The group then ran away from the Brick as it followed them down the bridge.The Brick was too slow to run, so the only way it catched up was by taking large hops.The vibration of the flops shook the bridge.Each stomp it took, the cords around the bridge ripped.The creature all of a sudden grabbed Harry. Gregory: HARRY!!! The Brick wrapped his hand around Harry legs and his stomach, then pulled as hard as it can, leading to Harry being ripped apart.His lungs and intestines flew out of his stomach, with blood splattering on the group too.Gregory had enough, he pulled the trigger of his AK-47 and shot the Brick several times.The Brick fell to the ground, triggering the biggest vibration.Then, all the cords holding up the bridge, tore.Piece by piece the bridge fell apart.Gregory ordered the group to run out the bridge.The bridge was collapsing close to them.They finally reached the Algonquin island.But as they looked back, all they saw was the Broker Bridge, sunk to the surface of the water..... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Greenline Posted January 5, 2012 Share Posted January 5, 2012 I'll give you one tip, it'll make your story look much nicer. Put spaces after punctuation. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GentlemanSquid Posted January 6, 2012 Share Posted January 6, 2012 I'll give you one tip, it'll make your story look much nicer. Put spaces after punctuation. I think you might be talking to yourself. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Greenline Posted January 6, 2012 Share Posted January 6, 2012 I'll give you one tip, it'll make your story look much nicer. Put spaces after punctuation. I think you might be talking to yourself. What are you talking about? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GentlemanSquid Posted January 6, 2012 Share Posted January 6, 2012 I'll give you one tip, it'll make your story look much nicer. Put spaces after punctuation. I think you might be talking to yourself. What are you talking about? The OP doesn't seem to be taking advise, rather just posting. Plus I don't think he knows much grammar. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GroveWarrior Posted January 7, 2012 Author Share Posted January 7, 2012 I do know grammar.This is just the way i write.Not everything you'll see is going to be perfect. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GroveWarrior Posted January 7, 2012 Author Share Posted January 7, 2012 -CHAPTER 4- It was shocking, seeing the Broker Bridge underwater.Christopher couldn't believe his eyes. Christopher: Wow.....Tha-That was..... Gregory: Thats not tha' only treasured monument destroyed. Christopher: What do you mean? Gregory: Well....theres the Algonquin Bridge, titlted to its side, Middle Park burning like hell.And theres also the Statue Of Happiness, broken in half. Christoper: So is this like Liberty Citys' end. Gregory: Something like that' Well we best be movin'. The group began to walk in abandoned Algonquin.The whole borough used to be filled with cars, people, criminals.But now its just dead silence.The group was walking for a while until they reached Star Junction.Christopher looked around as he saw the electric advertisements now spewing out electricity. Christopher: What happened here? Mary: Well, seeing as there's subways entrances here, the gas spread through here. Christopher: Man, i used to love coming here. Gregory: (pointing at a Burger Shot) Look! theres a burger shoppe We can look around for any food or weapons. Everyone then walked towards the restaraunt.They all split up, looking for anything useful.Gregory saw the storage room, he slowly opened the door and aimed his gun around, only to find nothing.He then sighed of relief, but before he finished, a Zombie Cook came out from behing a box of patties.The zombie tackled Gregory.The group then heard the racket.Mary then ran to Gregory and the zombie, and shot it on the head. Christopher: Woah..You're good. Mary: Thanks... Elizabeth: (whispering to Mary) You really like this guy, don't you? Mary: (whispering back) Well...he's nice... Just as they were done whispering, a man came out from behind the counter.He was a Hispanic man, with tan skin, sporting a white tank top and grey track pants. Man: Ay, who are you? Gregory: (pointing his shotgun at the Man) We come in peace, we mean no harm. Man: Good.....well im Hector. Christopher: I find you familiar... Hector: Aren't you umm.....Chris or something like that? Christopher: Yes.Aren't you from the University of San Andreas? Hector: OH YESS!! I remember you, you were that guy who ran down the hallways in your underwear!! (Mary then giggled) Christopher: Well, my roommate pulled a prank on me... Several seconds later, a chopper sound was heard from outside.The group then exited the Burger Shot and ran outside.They all looked up, later to see a N.O.O.S.E chopper.Several soldiers exited the helicopter, and pointed the guns at them. N.O.O.S.E Member#1: Are you guys bitten? Christopher: No... N.O.O.S.E Member#2: Are you criminals? Hector: No... N.O.O.S.E Member#3: Has any of you guys served in the army? Gregory: (groaning) great.... Christopher: (looking at Gregory) Wait...whats wrong?? Gregory: I'll tell you later... The N.O.O.S.E soldier walked up to Gregory and haulted.Gregory haulted back. N.O.O.S.E soldier: Sir, what war were you serving for? Gregory: Well, it was a really sketchy background.... It was back in 06'....Los Santos......Me and my soldiers were flying in a millitary chopper through up there.Suddenly a boom was heard.The chopper lost control, the worst part was that we were carrying, Nuclear and Uranium gas and fluids.Those things were deadly.Luckily, we regained control, we knew it was too dangerous to fly, so we just drove.We sent the products to Broker Docks.The ship carrying the gasses and fluids was robbed, by the Russian and Chinese army.They wanted revenge, ever since we killed there generals...So they stole the products...and have a hideout in the subways.They did this....they started this chaos....You need to stop them....WE need to stop them.Before its too late.We can't let it spread out through the country.Vice City....Vice City now has the same problem..... Hector: Dang, ese, thats some serious sh*t.... N.O.O.S.E: Sir...were going to have to take you with us.... Christopher: wait, what about us? WAIT YOU'RE JUST GOING TO LEAVE US HERE!!! GREG!!! YOU TRAITOR!!! HELP!! YOU'RE JUST LEAVING!!! It was too late, the chopper flew off as the group just stood there, hopeless. Mary: (crying) We're gonna die here.... Christopher walked towards Mary, and hugged her. Christopher: I promise you.... we're gonna make it to Alderney.Even if i dont make it...You'll make it Christopher then locked his lips with Mary's and held her cheeks. It was a long kiss.When he pulled away, he then smiled at her and walked with the group.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ziggy455 Posted January 7, 2012 Share Posted January 7, 2012 Stop posting! Re-read your own stuff and proofread it for christ sake! We get enough floods as it is! "I might have laughed if I'd have remembered how." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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