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Jimmy_Leppard

The Runaway

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Honestly I can't remeber how long I waited to bring you feedback on this project, since you asked.

A month? could be? I suppose it can be forgiven though; as you still working on it.

I might be late, but I assume feedback for such nicely made mission is harmless.

 

First Chapter Feedback

 

I have been expecting major stuff, exciting story and all those things I used to face in your missions,

Haven't seen any of the above.

Until the 8th mission that is, in which it began being interesting.

Nuclear projects. Well, applause. I knew you'd go into big stuff again.

 

I just couldn't figure out a few things -

-Why would the army be interested in a mere teenager?

-There were 5 soldiers in the same spot, and if one couldn't hit a kid why wouldn't any of the 4 left blast that kid to oblivion and get things done?

 

Well done, I'll get a more serious review once I finish the seond chapter. and hopefully a nicer review when I get all 3 done.  wink.gif

 

Well, it was a long time, but no matter. I don't mind waiting for feedbacks.

 

First, to answer your questions:

 

The army was interested in the kid cause he was a foriegn enemy country carrier of harmful information, but he wasn't aware of that. He thought he's carrying a letter. General Mills decided to shoot him even when he found out he was a kid. The foreign enemy army sent a kid cause they thought the USA army won't suspect a kid is a carrier of the info.

 

The other question is more simple. Yes, there were 5 soldiers (including Jeff), but Jeff was the only Sniper there, and he was tasked to kill the kid cause they were very distanced from him. No other of the soldiers there couldn't make a clear shot from a distance like that other than Jeff. So, that's why they weren't able to kill the kid from that distance. And when General Mills gave the order to execute the kid and Jeff to other soldiers present, the kid heard a gun shot when the other soldiers started to shoot at Jeff, so he managed to run away before they got to him. But, they wouldn't have gotten to him anyway cause Jeff killed them all. biggrin.gif

 

Anyway, I've said that the first chapter is just to get to know the background story a little and get to the point, so that's why there weren't any action or very interesting parts. And, maybe you wanna think about the ''Nuclear project'' thingy. Maybe it's not a Nuclear project wink.gif

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MadMarshMallow

Still waiting for the chapter 3.

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Jimmy_Leppard
Still waiting for the chapter 3.

I still haven't found time to proceed with the series, but, I'll see what I can do biggrin.gif

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Still waiting for the chapter 3.

I still haven't found time to proceed with the series, but, I'll see what I can do biggrin.gif

It's okay. icon14.gif

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Update (at last): 18th missions uploaded. Have fun, play the missions and give me feedbacks biggrin.gif

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Update (at last): 18th missions uploaded. Have fun, play the missions and give me feedbacks biggrin.gif

At last. Will play ASAP! biggrin.gifbiggrin.gif

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Update (at last): 18th missions uploaded. Have fun, play the missions and give me feedbacks biggrin.gif

At last. Will play ASAP! biggrin.gifbiggrin.gif

Thanks biggrin.gif Don't forget to give me feedback afterwards wink.gif

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SatournFan

Holy f*ckin' sh*t, Jimmy made a mission! mercie_blink.gif

 

Kidding. Trying it now.

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Notna

YEEEEEESHHHHHHHHHHHHHH! Gonna play it soon! biggrin.gif

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@ SatournFan and Notna - Thanks, guys. And SF, I was expecting that kind of reaction. It really was a long time since I made a mission LOL. biggrin.gif

 

Anyway, don't forget to give me feedback after you're done wink.gif

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Update (at last): 18th missions uploaded. Have fun, play the missions and give me feedbacks biggrin.gif

At last. Will play ASAP! biggrin.gifbiggrin.gif

Thanks biggrin.gif Don't forget to give me feedback afterwards wink.gif

Will do biggrin.gif

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MadMarshMallow

Played the mission 'Reaching out'.

It's nice mission as always icon14.gif

I failed at the 1st try(late of picking up the cameras), but passed at the 2nd try. The part may be confusing, but it's interesting.

One more, why don't you put a time limit when we need to place a bug at the Howstore's car? (just my opinion)

Overall, nice smile.gif

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catfish123

Big fan of you Jimmy. I have been using DYOM since August 2010, but only just made an account. So I can finally give feedback on your great work. smile.gif

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@ Arejai - Well, to be honest, there was a bug while creating a mission and when I tried to put a time limit on placing the bug on a car, the mission crashed. I couldn't get it fixed, so I thought I could change the position of the time limit to somewhere else in the mission. I placed the time limit on getting the cameras cause it makes sence. They can't be messing around the building for hours. They had to get those cameras as quickly as possible cause you never know if someone could come. At the end of the mission, you can see it was a tight time. wink.gif

 

@ AshleigghJaade.x - Thanks, man. It's good to see that new people come to this forum because of me biggrin.gif I'm glad you like my work and I appreciate your feedback, so.. Whenever you can, feel free to post it. Every feedback counts biggrin.gif

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@ Arejai - Well, to be honest, there was a bug while creating a mission and when I tried to put a time limit on placing the bug on a car, the mission crashed. I couldn't get it fixed, so I thought I could change the position of the time limit to somewhere else in the mission. I placed the time limit on getting the cameras cause it makes sence. They can't be messing around the building for hours. They had to get those cameras as quickly as possible cause you never know if someone could come. At the end of the mission, you can see it was a tight time. wink.gif

Yeah, it make sense smile.gif

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Update: 19th mission uploaded. Have fun, play the missions and give me feedbacks biggrin.gif

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Update: 19th mission uploaded. Have fun, play the missions and give me feedbacks biggrin.gif

Still have to play the last mission. Will play both tomorrow (hopefully) and post feedback biggrin.gif

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Update: 19th mission uploaded. Have fun, play the missions and give me feedbacks biggrin.gif

Still have to play the last mission. Will play both tomorrow (hopefully) and post feedback biggrin.gif

Ok, cool. Waiting for the feedback then. wink.gif

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Great, man! I didn't expect that Spencer would come to help Lou and Jeff. They're fuc*ing cool.

About the dialogue, the cutscene is too fast when they're talking. Seems that I can't catch it. But, it's okay.

Overall, nice icon14.gif Waiting for the next mission.

(How about Gordon the traitor? He's so damn, haha)

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Notna

Another mission? WOOW, Jimmy, you are the best. Going to play them both soon.

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Jimmy_Leppard

 

Great, man! I didn't expect that Spencer would come to help Lou and Jeff. They're fuc*ing cool.

About the dialogue, the cutscene is too fast when they're talking. Seems that I can't catch it. But, it's okay.

Overall, nice  icon14.gif  Waiting for the next mission.

(How about Gordon the traitor? He's so damn, haha)

Hey, thanks, man. I appreciate it very much. biggrin.gif

 

Well, we don't see it in the mission, but before Lou called Jeff, he texted Spencer about his problem aswell, so that's how he knew where and when to come.

 

About the cutscenes, I usually put them to 6 seconds, and that's when there are two or more sentences in one cutscene. You shouldn't have problems reading them. Perhaps you have trouble reading the cutscenes which are 4 seconds long? I put them sometimes when there are only a few words in the cutscene. But, hey. No worries. If you miss some dialogues, you can always replay the missions and read it again wink.gif

 

Yes, since the team found out Gordon was the traitor, he had to leave Las Venturas. You see a hint about him leaving to Los Santos in the mission ''Blood spills'' when one of the soldiers reports to General Mills that Gordon had escaped from team's warehouse.

 

 

More missions on the way biggrin.gif

 

EDIT: @ Notna - Thanks, man biggrin.gif I'm waiting for the feedback then wink.gif

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About the cutscenes, I usually put them put 6 seconds, and that's when there are two or more sentences in one cutscene. You shouldn't have problems reading them. Perhaps you have trouble reading the cutscenes which are 4 seconds long? I put them sometimes when there are only a few words in the cutscene. But, hey. No worries. If you miss some dialogues, you can always replay the missions and read it again wink.gif

 

 

 

That's true. I replay the mission 2 times, so I can read the missed dialogues. biggrin.gif

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Update: 20th mission uploaded. Have fun, play the missions and give me feedbacks biggrin.gif

 

P.S. It's good to be back in business. biggrin.gif

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Update: 20th mission uploaded. Have fun, play the missions and give me feedbacks biggrin.gif

 

P.S. It's good to be back in business. biggrin.gif

You're fast!

I'll play it tomorrow(I must sleep now) smile.gificon14.gif

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Update: 20th mission uploaded. Have fun, play the missions and give me feedbacks biggrin.gif

 

P.S. It's good to be back in business. biggrin.gif

You're fast!

I'll play it tomorrow(I must sleep now) smile.gificon14.gif

Thank you. Oh, sure. No problem. Play it when you can biggrin.gif

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Notna

Oh man, Jimmy, I can't keep on your speed biggrin.gif Still, gonna play them soon wink.gif

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Oh man, Jimmy, I can't keep on your speed biggrin.gif Still, gonna play them soon wink.gif

biggrin.gif While I wasn't able to make missions, I had come up with some ideas for the story, so.. And I also missed DYOM a lot. That's why I'm being fast these days biggrin.gif

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KaRzY6

Another one!!! Will play it soon. biggrin.gif Your working fast as Jimmy. smile.gif

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MadMarshMallow

Another nice mission! smile.gif

Although it has a little gameplay, it's still interesting to play icon14.gif

(Holding is genius!)

 

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KaRzY6

Played the first 4 missions of Chapter 3. As usual, excellent work. The designing is perfect. The storyline is amazing. The only thing needed to a bit more action. icon14.gif

 

Overall - 9.7/10 biggrin.gifbiggrin.gif

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