JesperRohrsel Posted July 4, 2011 Share Posted July 4, 2011 (edited) The Story About Phillip Mauc History: Phips lives in Los Venturas until one day he will meet with his best friend Loc What he does not know is that all the times LOC has talked about moving back to Los Santos, now a reality. He also meets a new friend on this trip, the bar where the two friends always meet is now a third. A mexican guy named Ushtro. The three "friends" are now in the car immediately and drive to Los Santos. Phipps and Ushtro have started the idea of a gang, and Phips becomes a member of this gang. Occurs already problems from the start. Ballas gang has made an on stations which must be eradicated if want to take their hood. Also Grove Street offers a few problems. It ends with a guy named Earl must enter the gang. Earl has a past as a Major in the military. Also an old flame for Phipps enters, Lis. Lis live in Grove Street area and blah trouble paying its debts to its bearings. Claude, an acquaintance of Ushtro should also be on a walk, until he suddenly are in the gang. But waiting more trouble, strife and battles! (I tried to translate it so good i could) Missions: Intro: Buzzin L.O.C Download Mission: 1 Taking Over The Stations Download Mission: 2 This Hood Could Be bigger Download Mission: 3 The Dock War Download Mission: 4 The Streets Download Mission: 5 Its War Grove f*ckers Download Mission: 6 A Hood in Ruins Download Mission/Last Mission: Sweet Revange.. Download Pic of Phips: Phips: The Man! Tell me, this is my first missions But what do you think of the story? Edited July 5, 2011 by JesperRohrsel Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mati Posted July 4, 2011 Share Posted July 4, 2011 Welcome to the forums The story sounds not bad so far, I'm waiting for the missions. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JesperRohrsel Posted July 4, 2011 Author Share Posted July 4, 2011 The first mission is up now! - When you play this mission, you dont have the map on the screen.. I think its a bug on DYOM I upload to more and then i go to bed! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JesperRohrsel Posted July 4, 2011 Author Share Posted July 4, 2011 - I uploaded "The Dock War" and thats the final for today. But take a play, and pls comment! Im really noob to this so i will like some comments or something i could use in the future! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mati Posted July 4, 2011 Share Posted July 4, 2011 Nice job, I'll play them. I know what caused your bug. You made cutscenes in an interior but didn't add a teleport objective. EDIT: I see that your missions have just a few objectives, try to make them longer next time Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JesperRohrsel Posted July 4, 2011 Author Share Posted July 4, 2011 Thanks! Remember these are the first ones, the next ones are better - But thanks! I will remember that to my next storyline! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rytuklis Posted July 5, 2011 Share Posted July 5, 2011 I can see very very much grammar mistakes, such as missing "." and etc. But i like the story Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JesperRohrsel Posted July 5, 2011 Author Share Posted July 5, 2011 (edited) I can see very very much grammar mistakes, such as missing "." and etc. But i like the story I can't make " when im writing? Altso : and ?. It really piss me off.. EDIT: Oh, you mean in THE story in here? or in the Game? Edited July 5, 2011 by JesperRohrsel Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Notna Posted July 5, 2011 Share Posted July 5, 2011 I really like the story. I will play your missions. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JesperRohrsel Posted July 5, 2011 Author Share Posted July 5, 2011 I really like the story. I will play your missions. Thanks What did you like most? And is there something you diddn't like? - Pls, i will make a new story soon, but i need to know what you liked most, maybe then i could use it for the next I will upload the last missions today. Btw the last mission is maded. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Notna Posted July 5, 2011 Share Posted July 5, 2011 My favourite mission to this point was "The Dock War". I liked too the "Taking over the stations". The introduction was dissapointing because there wasnt map, but when I made my first missions I made these missakes too, and on my newest mission pack, there is still that mistake. Keep going, these was good missions. MAYBE YOU CAN PLAY MY MISSION PACK? (GTA Las Venturas)<read Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JesperRohrsel Posted July 5, 2011 Author Share Posted July 5, 2011 Now, you can download the rest of the missions! I hoped that you enjoyed this amatour missions! And trust me, soon there will be more and much much better from me! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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