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[Eminence]

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Edited June 1, 2011 by Eminence

[Typhus]

My apologies for not responding to this sooner

I'll do you the courtesy of being honest, I hate the Wild West setting. I really do, I think it's bland, uninspired and filled with as many cliches as the average crime story. So, when I started reading this I perhaps didn't approach it from a completely unbiased perspective.

However, you write very well, you perfectly capture the way they speak in that region and have done very well in fleshing out the character of that blowhard Marshall. Because of this, I found myself ignoring the trite Western theme and enjoying it because of your excellent writing ability. As the Marshall asked for the swan I was getting a terrible hunch that it would resort to the Fight Clubcop-out ending, but instead you did something that is pleasingly simplistic and very accurate for the time. Good job, mate

 

As much as I disliked the Marshall and his good ol' boys, I agreed with what he did. Back in those days, there were some ice cold killers. And sometimes moral sacrifices had to be made to take them down. Jesse James was betrayed by his friend, Billy The Kid was shot in the dark, even up to the days of John Dillinger, they had to use duplicity and underhanded tactics to bag their man. I find it refreshing that the 'conspiracy' here is not some dreary malevolent plan to cover up some wrongdoing, but rather a plan to work towards the greater good.

 

A very good story indeed.

[Rhoda]

I find it refreshing that the 'conspiracy' here is not some dreary malevolent plan to cover up some wrongdoing, but rather a plan to work towards the greater good.

This is a key point for me. When most people think of "conspiracy" they assume it's just a blanket cover-up to protect the public from knowledge unsuitable for society. Here, the same rules apply but the result is actually a benefit. It's a mean job, but it works.

 

I'm a sucker for Westerns I think. I've still not played RDR and it kills me because it just looks like that stereotype "shots o' whisky on horseback" experience. I get the same feel from this, what with the hideout huts, lakes, cacti and all that. It's simply written and it fits the theme greatly.

 

Nice one.