DYOM The Designers Lounge

[Juice the Joos]

 

 

I need someone to help me out with the story (again)

Here's the progress

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fzmitc-FR-M&feature=youtu.be

Here's what you should know (If you wanna help)

 

 

• The husband faked his death, and soon the wife to haunt their former boss and manager
• The boss, Frederick did not take responsibility nor any actions (like taking care of the insurance, funeral, etc) for the couple's son's death, he didn't care
• The Manager is the Brad dude in the document
• Brad won the Manager rank unfairly (bribing Frederick (and maybe other employees?)), the husband knows this and tries to give the proof of evidence to some other guys, Brad knew this and tried to stop him but he didn't stop, then Brad heard about an experiment who needed a human volunteer, Brad had contacted the couple's son personally (as they met before) and persuaded him to be the volunteer (he said that it would help his parents) The son died in the experiment
• Brad has some connections with the mafia
• Brad hides the ripped page evidence at his house, Claire and Jimmy would go to his house and take it later on.
• Brad decided to kill Frederick later on (him and some other mafia guys), as he was the other guy who knew about this
• Frederick would later acknowledge the investigation and becomes worried and turns on Brad, He got worried that maybe he would kill him and tried going into some protection
• The Case would end with Frederick visiting the couple's grave, asking for forgiveness as they haunted him even more. Them he finds them still being alive, then being attacked by Brad's mafia guys, Claire and Jimmy would stop the attack then later on the couple will take Frederick and maybe arrest them?

 

Can someone help me if there's something wrong or something I should add?

Please give me the link of that font! PLEASE!!

 

http://www.sendspace.com/file/m7a3tv

 

Anyone help?

 

Make the cutscenes longer, don't use Portal 2 Chell model for the girl (since she has the long fall boots...), maybe the plot is going too fast?

[Gummy]

 

 

 

I need someone to help me out with the story (again)

Here's the progress

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fzmitc-FR-M&feature=youtu.be

Here's what you should know (If you wanna help)

 

 

• The husband faked his death, and soon the wife to haunt their former boss and manager
• The boss, Frederick did not take responsibility nor any actions (like taking care of the insurance, funeral, etc) for the couple's son's death, he didn't care
• The Manager is the Brad dude in the document
• Brad won the Manager rank unfairly (bribing Frederick (and maybe other employees?)), the husband knows this and tries to give the proof of evidence to some other guys, Brad knew this and tried to stop him but he didn't stop, then Brad heard about an experiment who needed a human volunteer, Brad had contacted the couple's son personally (as they met before) and persuaded him to be the volunteer (he said that it would help his parents) The son died in the experiment
• Brad has some connections with the mafia
• Brad hides the ripped page evidence at his house, Claire and Jimmy would go to his house and take it later on.
• Brad decided to kill Frederick later on (him and some other mafia guys), as he was the other guy who knew about this
• Frederick would later acknowledge the investigation and becomes worried and turns on Brad, He got worried that maybe he would kill him and tried going into some protection
• The Case would end with Frederick visiting the couple's grave, asking for forgiveness as they haunted him even more. Them he finds them still being alive, then being attacked by Brad's mafia guys, Claire and Jimmy would stop the attack then later on the couple will take Frederick and maybe arrest them?

 

Can someone help me if there's something wrong or something I should add?

Please give me the link of that font! PLEASE!!

 

http://www.sendspace.com/file/m7a3tv

 

Anyone help?

 

Make the cutscenes longer, don't use Portal 2 Chell model for the girl (since she has the long fall boots...), maybe the plot is going too fast?

 

It's not done yet, and Chell's just a personal mod.

 

That;s why I ask for help, What should I add/remove?

[ONP]

Hello suckers!

Here we go again...

[Doublepulse]

Let's Qwerty, you should probably stop spamming whole bunch of topics..

[Nitesh002]

@Prince Gumball

There's one think that I don't think fit the story.

Brady's connection with mafia. From the information you have given so far, I don't think they play a big role in the story apart from them going with Brad to attack Frederick. Maybe you should let Brad work on this alone unless the mafia affects the story in any other way apart from adding more action to it.

 

[Gummy]

@Prince Gumball

There's one think that I don't think fit the story.

Brady's connection with mafia. From the information you have given so far, I don't think they play a big role in the story apart from them going with Brad to attack Frederick. Maybe you should let Brad work on this alone unless the mafia affects the story in any other way apart from adding more action to it.

 

 

I guess so... But I gotta have a little action though, at least for the grave scene, what do you think is best? Hitmen? Other corrupt workers?

and Brad's maybe not gonna be with them when they attacked him.

 

Edited October 11, 2014 by Prince Gumball

[Nitesh002]

@Prince Gumball

 

I think other corrupt workers work best. Or maybe the people behind the experiment who don't want to get exposed because of Frederick realised his mistake.

 

[Gummy]

Okay, good.

[Revolver1]

@Ryutuklis: Are you working on DYOM TV episode 2? You know, I'm still waiting.

[Target13]

"To achieve peace and harmony, There must first be war and discord." -Marcelo Chavez

 

Yep...I'm kinda announcing my new MP right now.

 

[THBP]

 

"To achieve peace and harmony, There must first be war and discord." -Marcelo Chavez

 

Yep...I'm kinda announcing my new MP right now.

 

 

 

Great line and logo. Good luck on your MP. XD

[ProdigyX34]

 

[MP's picture]

"To achieve peace and harmony, There must first be war and discord." -Marcelo Chavez

 

Yep...I'm kinda announcing my new MP right now.

 

Really nice, good luck with your new MP.

 

 

 

Frei : So being a racer is now my primary decision, and leaving my old work...

 

Following what he ever said in my series, i'm gonna leave from this forum for a while because of no mood being a dyom designer. I'm recently interested playing online racing games named "Need For Speed World" and "Trackmania" which i ever played long time ago, and also my college time will started soon. so yeah... i'll see you all again at next several months or till i have my mood for designing is back.

Edited September 16, 2014 by ProDX34

[Juice the Joos]

 

 

[MP's picture]

"To achieve peace and harmony, There must first be war and discord." -Marcelo Chavez

 

Yep...I'm kinda announcing my new MP right now.

 

Really nice, good luck with your new MP.

 

 

 

Frei : So being a racer is now my primary decision, and leaving my old work...

 

Following what he ever said in my series, i'm gonna leave from this forum for a while because of no mood being a dyom designer. I'm recently interested playing online racing games named "Need For Speed World" and "Trackmania" which i ever played long time ago, and also my college time will started soon. so yeah... i'll see you all again at next several months or till i have my mood for designing is back.

 

Me too, school is going to be one hell of a challenge and i have other games as a ''priority''

[Revolver1]

Frei : So being a racer is now my primary decision, and leaving my old work...

 

Following what he ever said in my series, i'm gonna leave from this forum for a while because of no mood being a dyom designer. I'm recently interested playing online racing games named "Need For Speed World" and "Trackmania" which i ever played long time ago, and also my college time will started soon. so yeah... i'll see you all again at next several months or till i have my mood for designing is back.

 

Damn, seems like everyone's leaving. Oh well, you know what they say, all fun has got to end at some point. Hope we'll see you again.

Until then, hasta la vista.

 

 

"To achieve peace and harmony, There must first be war and discord." -Marcelo Chavez

 

Yep...I'm kinda announcing my new MP right now.

 

 

Nice, a new MP. It's been a while since I last saw a new MP from you.

Edited September 16, 2014 by Revolver1

[xMatix]

 

 

 

[MP's picture]

"To achieve peace and harmony, There must first be war and discord." -Marcelo Chavez

 

Yep...I'm kinda announcing my new MP right now.

 

Really nice, good luck with your new MP.

 

 

 

Frei : So being a racer is now my primary decision, and leaving my old work...

 

Following what he ever said in my series, i'm gonna leave from this forum for a while because of no mood being a dyom designer. I'm recently interested playing online racing games named "Need For Speed World" and "Trackmania" which i ever played long time ago, and also my college time will started soon. so yeah... i'll see you all again at next several months or till i have my mood for designing is back.

 

Me too, school is going to be one hell of a challenge and i have other games as a ''priority''

 

If age in your profile is true, then you must be joking.

[Target13]

Nice, a new MP. It's been a while since I last saw a new MP from me.

Someone made a mistake.

[Revolver1]

 

Nice, a new MP. It's been a while since I last saw a new MP from me.

Someone made a mistake.

 

My bad, my bad, excuse me. Hehe, wasn't paying much attention, was playing DMC and all. Sorry, no hard feelings right?

Edited September 16, 2014 by Revolver1

[Juice the Joos]

 

 

 

 

[MP's picture]

"To achieve peace and harmony, There must first be war and discord." -Marcelo Chavez

 

Yep...I'm kinda announcing my new MP right now.

 

Really nice, good luck with your new MP.

 

 

 

Frei : So being a racer is now my primary decision, and leaving my old work...

 

Following what he ever said in my series, i'm gonna leave from this forum for a while because of no mood being a dyom designer. I'm recently interested playing online racing games named "Need For Speed World" and "Trackmania" which i ever played long time ago, and also my college time will started soon. so yeah... i'll see you all again at next several months or till i have my mood for designing is back.

 

Me too, school is going to be one hell of a challenge and i have other games as a ''priority''

 

If age in your profile is true, then you must be joking.

 

I'm not good at school. Video games addiction comes whenever i try to do homework and i can't pull it back. Studying is even worse, i can't concentrate because apparently my brain can't think about something that aren't video games.

Edited September 17, 2014 by Juice the Joos

[Target13]

Meh, school is easy.

Whats hard is doing 30 hours of community service at a place where they teach the mentally challenged people to cook.

[Adolf_Traplord_Hitler]

Okey Okey.. schools are sometimes harder to me. anyway all i need is a silent room with light, its pretty motivating for studies.

 

I will design another "short" puzzle mission pack soon and thats gonna be good to me! because i dont wanna announce big projects, the one is on hold. all i mean with puzzle is a mission with many objects also with tricks.

 

 

Can someone please take this person to warning before he reaches T13's home? - dyom.gtagames.nl/profile/9538

 

[Target13]

Yeah...i highly doubt that he wants to visit me.

But in case he does, i should download some adult films so we can watch together.

 

I'm waiting, James...

Edited September 18, 2014 by Target13Productions

[The Odyssey]

Come on, they're just titties.

 

Side note, Some of the comments on that profile are making me lol.

"Hey , what the f*ck in that picture , that f*cking porn , please remove it , it not xnxx.com (porn site)"

Edited September 18, 2014 by The Odyssey

[ONP]

Goddammit! I finally found some time to log onto my profile, I'm so busy with school even though it's just the first week. And yeah, school would never be hard if you just focus on studying and do some really hard work. That's what I'm doing, it's helping me a lot in getting good marks. My parents are happy with that.

[Juice the Joos]

Okey Okey.. schools are sometimes harder to me. anyway all i need is a silent room with light, its pretty motivating for studies.

 

I will design another "short" puzzle mission pack soon and thats gonna be good to me! because i dont wanna announce big projects, the one is on hold. all i mean with puzzle is a mission with many objects also with tricks.

 

 

Can someone please take this person to warning before he reaches T13's home? - dyom.gtagames.nl/profile/9538

 

 

 

Yeah...i highly doubt that he wants to visit me.

But in case he does, i should download some adult films so we can watch together.

 

I'm waiting, James...

 

 

Come on, they're just titties.

 

Side note, Some of the comments on that profile are making me lol.

"Hey , what the f*ck in that picture , that f*cking porn , please remove it , it not xnxx.com (porn site)"

 

 

 

DEM BOOBIES R FAEK

[Rytuklis]

Might resume designing some time soon.

[THBP]

A little correction: Trailer coming in the first week of October, complete chapter coming probably to October (with Final chapter and side missions)

THBP, work in progress

 

 

Edited September 20, 2014 by THBP

[Revolver1]

A little correction: Trailer coming in the first week of October, complete chapter coming probably to October (with Final chapter and side missions)

THBP, work in progress

 

 

Dope dude, waiting.

 

Might resume designing some time soon.

Nice, but wut about DYOM TV?

[Rytuklis]

Might resume designing some time soon.

 

 

 

Nice, but wut about DYOM TV?

 

Well, that obviously means DYOM TV returns too D:

[Revolver1]

 

Might resume designing some time soon.

 

 

 

Nice, but wut about DYOM TV?

 

Well, that obviously means DYOM TV returns too D:

 

Awesum', can you give us an ETA?

[Rytuklis]

 

 

Might resume designing some time soon.

 

 

 

Nice, but wut about DYOM TV?

 

Well, that obviously means DYOM TV returns too D:

 

Awesum', can you give us an ETA?

 

I just came back man, give me a break.