LuisBellic Posted August 16, 2010 Share Posted August 16, 2010 (edited) Story In you Play as Sammy Bottino a 43 year old member of the Gambetti Family who has returned to Liberty City after being wanted for a murder in Vice City The Don of The Gambetti Family Jon Gravelli is in the Hospital and there is a war with The Mafia Familes Characters Sammy Bottino Sammy is the protagonist of the game who has returned to Liberty City after being wanted for murder in Vice City Jon Gravelli Jon is the Don of the family but he is in the hospital and later dies Roy Zito Roy is Sammy's friend and is the Underboss for The Gambetti Family he is accused of being homosexual and he introduces Sammy to Gay Tony Nicky Bottino Nicky is Sammy's 23 year old son He is killed after Giovanni Ancelloti pays someone to have him killed Sammy can Hang out with Nicky Jon Gravelli Jr Jon Gravelli jr was once in the Gambetti Family but he was kicked out because he developed a Cocaine Addiction he is in jail but Sammy busts him out Sammy tells him he can get back into the family if he stops using cocaine you start doing missions for him and you can call him to hang out Henry Collins Henry has just came to Liberty City from Australlia you start doing missions with him and later you can call him to hang out his special ability is to call him for Backup or Weapons He is also a friend of Little Jacob Giovanni Ancelloti Sammy is forced to work for Giovanni but he later starts refusing to work for him and in return Giovanni has Nicky killed Sammy wants revenge and kills him on the last mission Rocco Pelosi You do a mission for Rocco where you have to kidnap the union worker and bring him to the golf course this mission is connected to Practice Swing Jimmy Pegorino Jon tells you that he wants you to meet Jimmy Pegorino and you do a few missions for him later you get the phonecall about him being dead Phil Bell Jimmy tells you that Phil Bell has some work for you you start doing missions for him Gay Tony Roy says that he wants you to meet Gay Tony at Maisonette and that he has some work Ray Boccino Sammy will do some missions for Ray Boccino Papi You do 2 missions for Papi where he asks to steal a package on the next mission you and Papi go in a boat and you take him to meet armando luis and henrique Union Worker(From Practice Swing) Ray Bulgarin Patrick McReary Little Jacob Radio The Beat 102.7 Prodigy The Life Immortal Technique Dance with The Devil Immortal Technique Industrial Revolution Lupe Fiasco B.M.F Freestyle Sean Price Onion Head g3aMfG6n-BQ Nas Ether The Game ft Kanye West Wouldnt Get Far Mos Def ft Slick Rick Audatorium Cassidy Im a Hustla Kanye West Touch The Sky Weapons Golf Club AX Assault Pistol(Automag III) Revolver Semi Automatic Shotgun(Browning Auto 5) WWII SMG(Thompson) Uzi Automatic Rifle(QBZ-95) Rifle Silenced Sniper Rifle Minigun New Features Diving Underwater More Realistic Gunshot/Stab Wounds Splitscreen Multiplayer More destructible Enviroment Missions 1 Home Sweet Home Sammy walks into the door of his Old Safehouse in Bohan he turns on the TV and it shows the news of Jon Gravelli Jr being put in jail Sammy says aw f*ck i need to get him outta there then someone knocks on the door he answers and it is his son Nicky who is happy to see sammy again but is angry that he stayed in Vice City for so long Nicky asks you to Drive him to see Jon Gravelli in the hospital Jon Gravelli after you and Nicky see Jon Nicky says that the cops prolly know that you live in your Bohan Safehouse he says that he Bought a new Place in Little Italy and hes gonna let you have it 2 Edited August 18, 2010 by LuisBellic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
QwertyAAA Posted August 16, 2010 Share Posted August 16, 2010 ...An explosive sniper rifle? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Akavari Posted August 16, 2010 Share Posted August 16, 2010 you didn't put effort into this at all. try formatting it better at least Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TommyMufc-Champs Posted August 16, 2010 Share Posted August 16, 2010 Come on man put more effort In to It. Look at Akavari and Money over Bullsh*t's topics. Look how they set there's out. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tyla Posted August 16, 2010 Share Posted August 16, 2010 This has potential. But you need to expand more. Seen as you source a lot of inspiration from the Tales of Liberty City you could use that as a starting point to get ideas of your own coming into your head. Tell us more about your characters. Give them a bit of background. Why was Sammy Bottino in Vice City in the first place? Why is he wanted for murder there? What is his history with the Gambetti Family? What is Roy Zito's relationship with Gay Tony? Is it purely business or not? What is Sammy and Nicky's relationship like? Why did Jon Jr get addicted to Cocaine? What was his past with the Gambetti's? What is Ray Boccino's involvement? Was he ratting out the Peg's after all? What about Bulgarin? etc. Some features, a soundtrack, pictures for your characters and vehicles wouldn't go a miss. Tables can do wonders for your presentation and you can find out how to do them and plenty of other things here Good luck Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
McReary7772 Posted August 16, 2010 Share Posted August 16, 2010 Not enough effort Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LuisBellic Posted August 16, 2010 Author Share Posted August 16, 2010 Not enough effort im gonna put more stuff like missions Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LuisBellic Posted August 16, 2010 Author Share Posted August 16, 2010 ...An explosive sniper rifle? Why not?????? it would be a f*ckin awesome gun Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LuisBellic Posted August 16, 2010 Author Share Posted August 16, 2010 i added my first mission Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
QwertyAAA Posted August 16, 2010 Share Posted August 16, 2010 ...An explosive sniper rifle? Why not?????? it would be a f*ckin awesome gun It wouldn't be so unlike a regular sniper rifle. There is little actual difference between a guy getting a bullet in his brain and a guy getting an exploding bullet in his brain - you might want to read these two Wikipedia pages. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LuisBellic Posted August 16, 2010 Author Share Posted August 16, 2010 (edited) ...An explosive sniper rifle? Why not?????? it would be a f*ckin awesome gun It wouldn't be so unlike a regular sniper rifle. There is little actual difference between a guy getting a bullet in his brain and a guy getting an exploding bullet in his brain - you might want to read these two Wikipedia pages. they alredy put the explosive shotgun in TBOGT Edited August 16, 2010 by LuisBellic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LuisBellic Posted August 16, 2010 Author Share Posted August 16, 2010 you didn't put effort into this at all. try formatting it better at least i wanted to put some more stuff in the story but i didnt have time Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ash_735 Posted August 16, 2010 Share Posted August 16, 2010 Music The Beat 102.7 Prodigy The Life Infamous Mobb War(Havoc) Lupe Fiasco B.M.F Freestyle Papoose Paid a Grip The Game ft Kanye West Wouldn't Get Far Personally, I doubt a Mob underdog in his 40's would be cruising around listening to The Beat, second, The Beat has already been updated in TLAD, come on guys, stop updating LRR and The Beat in this Make Your own Story Threads! With it being Mafia related, I'd much rather hear stations like JNR, The Journey and Fusion FM getting updates and would love to hear members ideas of what classic tracks they'd like to hear. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LuisBellic Posted August 16, 2010 Author Share Posted August 16, 2010 Music The Beat 102.7 Prodigy The Life Infamous Mobb War(Havoc) Lupe Fiasco B.M.F Freestyle Papoose Paid a Grip The Game ft Kanye West Wouldn't Get Far Personally, I doubt a Mob underdog in his 40's would be cruising around listening to The Beat, second, The Beat has already been updated in TLAD, come on guys, stop updating LRR and The Beat in this Make Your own Story Threads! With it being Mafia related, I'd much rather hear stations like JNR, The Journey and Fusion FM getting updates and would love to hear members ideas of what classic tracks they'd like to hear. yea but its really up to the person whos playing the game what music he wants his player to hear Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LuisBellic Posted August 16, 2010 Author Share Posted August 16, 2010 Please dont lock my topic im new to GTAForums and im not very good at making topics Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Notorious MOB Posted August 17, 2010 Share Posted August 17, 2010 This needs a lot of work my friend. And if you aren't good at making topics then why did you make one?? Just Curious. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
McReary7772 Posted August 17, 2010 Share Posted August 17, 2010 It just seems all abit dull and boring.We dont know barely anything about the characters Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LuisBellic Posted August 17, 2010 Author Share Posted August 17, 2010 This needs a lot of work my friend. And if you aren't good at making topics then why did you make one?? Just Curious. i might try writing some of my story then put it on here when im done Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Drift-Kingz Posted August 17, 2010 Share Posted August 17, 2010 Yeah I can tell no effort or thinking has been put to this. Sorry. Next time you gotta think more before you make topic's like this. Why don't you take a look at other concept threads? Study the format and constructive design of it. Maybe then we might find it very amusing and fantastic as a whole. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Akavari Posted August 17, 2010 Share Posted August 17, 2010 I say you take a few days to gather information for your concept, get a good story going and all the features figured out, write it down in Notepad or something...meanwhile lock this topic and make a new, more organized one when you are ready. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LuisBellic Posted August 17, 2010 Author Share Posted August 17, 2010 f*ck it im not good at making gta stories im just gonna write everything down and make it later Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LuisBellic Posted August 17, 2010 Author Share Posted August 17, 2010 I say you take a few days to gather information for your concept, get a good story going and all the features figured out, write it down in Notepad or something...meanwhile lock this topic and make a new, more organized one when you are ready. yeah i'll do that and do you have any title ideas? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Drift-Kingz Posted August 17, 2010 Share Posted August 17, 2010 Stop double posting. Please Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LuisBellic Posted August 17, 2010 Author Share Posted August 17, 2010 Stop double posting. Please whats so bad about double posting? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
xNewtype Acex Posted August 17, 2010 Share Posted August 17, 2010 Stop double posting. Please whats so bad about double posting? Why literally spam a topic with two posts, with you can just edit one? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LuisBellic Posted August 18, 2010 Author Share Posted August 18, 2010 This has potential. But you need to expand more. Seen as you source a lot of inspiration from the Tales of Liberty City you could use that as a starting point to get ideas of your own coming into your head. Tell us more about your characters. Give them a bit of background. Why was Sammy Bottino in Vice City in the first place? Why is he wanted for murder there? What is his history with the Gambetti Family? What is Roy Zito's relationship with Gay Tony? Is it purely business or not? What is Sammy and Nicky's relationship like? Why did Jon Jr get addicted to Cocaine? What was his past with the Gambetti's? What is Ray Boccino's involvement? Was he ratting out the Peg's after all? What about Bulgarin? etc. Some features, a soundtrack, pictures for your characters and vehicles wouldn't go a miss. Tables can do wonders for your presentation and you can find out how to do them and plenty of other things here Good luck Sammy went to vc because he wanted to get away from lc for awhile im not sure about what happens in the murder yer I might tell his histroy wit the gambettis in the topic no Roy Zito and Tony are pretty good friends but Roy is mad at Gay Tony for saying he was gay Sammy and Nicky have a very good relationship Sammy can even call him to hang out Im not sure about Jr's cocanine addiction yet but i might think of something you do 1 mission for bulgarin where he asks you to kill the chef who sold the diamonds to luis and tony when you go see the chef he tries to attack you with an ax but you disarm him take the ax and chop off his head but some of some people find out you killed him and chase you in a car you have to lose or kill them after that you bring his head to the building which is the building luis finds his head Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Akavari Posted August 18, 2010 Share Posted August 18, 2010 can someone give me some titles?????? sex and the city Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LuisBellic Posted August 18, 2010 Author Share Posted August 18, 2010 This needs a lot of work my friend. And if you aren't good at making topics then why did you make one?? Just Curious. how will i ever get good at making topics if i dont try? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
killer6699 Posted August 18, 2010 Share Posted August 18, 2010 • There is an edit button to stop double and triple posts, so please use it. http://www.gtaforums.com/index.php?showtopic=137906 so please stop double posting Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LuisBellic Posted August 18, 2010 Author Share Posted August 18, 2010 • There is an edit button to stop double and triple posts, so please use it. http://www.gtaforums.com/index.php?showtopic=137906 so please stop double posting everytime i use the edit button no one replies to me Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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