DYOM Mission Reviews

[yo-g]

hello i have done two missions and I plan to do others to make a story, let me know how wrong they are available and whether or give me some advice on where to improve or change if the plot is not very exciting ... I hope we'll play to give me your opinion

 

http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=12494 ( This is the first part )

http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=12501 ( This is the second part )

 

thanks for reading

[AznKei]

Hello everyone,

 

Today, I'm going to review 4 missions made by Nitesh aka AAAAAAA. They're part of his GTA San Andreas 2 storyline.

 

The storyline file can be downloaded at: http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=download&id=12177 .

 

Now, it's time for the review,

 

- Writing: Very Good. They're generally very well written with very few mistakes. They really serve the purpose of explaining the mission objectives and the storyline, even though they aren't many texts overall.

- Presentation: Good. Nice timing and viewing shots between different cutscenes, even though they're actually few of them. The main character, allies and enemies fit very well into a gangster theme.

 

Trouble in Angel Pine

- Length: Short, as it can be done in 3 minutes. The player plays as CJ, and he meets The Truth as his ranch with his white cheetah car and the latter tasked him to go to Angel Pine and get inside the cluking Bell restaurant while being unnoticed by the Ballas members there.

- Difficulty: Easy. There's no gunfights involved even though the enemies carry heavy weapons. The mission is mostly focused on platform elements, on which the player has to cross and jump different rooftops in Angel Pine and find a hiding spot while the enemies are walking in the streets.

- Variety: Very Good. The characters include CJ, The Truth and the Ballas members. The vehicles include the white cheetah car and a motorbike. The weapons include minigun, homing launcher and rocket launcher. The objects include car scraps, metal playforms and ramps.

 

San Fierro

- Length: Very Short, as it can be done in 2 minutes. The player CJ went to San Fierro to see if the Ballas members are also in the city. Unfortunately, they're present in the baseball field, west of Doherty.

- Difficulty: Hard. The enemies near the patriot car carry m4s with 100% accuracies, while the player doesn't have any weapons, and they're mandatory to kill. Fortunately, the player's white cheetah car is bulletproof, so he can just kill the enemies by running into them before they can get in their car. The enemies at the baseball field carry melee weapons, so just beat them one-by-one.

- Variety: Good. The characters include CJ and the Ballas members. The vehicles include the white cheetah car and the Ballas patriot car. The weapons include m4, baseball bat and metal knuckle.

 

Bayside

- Length: Very Good, as it can be done in 7 minutes. The player CJ meets a stranger if he saw the Ballas at Bayside town, north of San Fierro. They're around the town carrying miniguns, so CJ needs a sniper and some vintage spots to get rid of them of the town.

- Difficulty: Medium. The mission is mainly focused on stealth, so it's recommended not to kill the enemies before the player gets a sniper by swimming at the edge of the town to the sniper provider (Da Nang Boyz member). Once the player gets the sniper, spot carefully the enemies and kill them.

- Variety: Good. The characters include CJ, a middle aged stranger, the sniper provider and the Ballas members. The weapons include minigun, chainsaw and sniper.

 

El Quebrados

- Length: Good, as it can be done in 6 minutes. The player went to El Quebrados to see if the Ballas are in this town, along with the Aldea Malvada ghost-town. Unfortunately, they're both there.

- Difficulty: Medium. The player and the enemies in El Quebrados are carrying melee weapons, so the best way to get rid of them is to lure a few of them at a time and knock them down. At Aldea Malvada, both the player and the enemies are carrying assault rifle. Kill the enemies while they aren't moving by shooting them from a distance.

- Variety: Good. The characters include CJ and the Ballas members. The weapons include baseball bat, knife, golf cane, rod, m4 and ak-47. The vehicle includes the white cheetah car.

 

Overall the missions are good , as they're pretty much the same format and length as the original GTA SA missions, except they're expanded as the storyline progresses. Good job for the author and keep up the good work .

 

[AznKei]

IMPORTANT NOTICE!!!

 

I just want to say that from today, there is a new DYOM reviewer who is going to join us in this topic.

 

The new DYOM reviewer is... maliksusanto, and he really wants to be DYOM reviewer. I read his reviews via PM, and it's very good.

 

So I want the DYOM community to be less harsh into his reviews as he just started to write the reviews in this topic. As for maliksusanto, I hope you can take the responsibility to be a very good reviewer. ^_^

[Nitesh002]

Thanks for the review.

[guib]

I just want to say that from today, there is a new DYOM reviewer who is going to join us in this topic.

 

The new DYOM reviewer is... maliksusanto, and he really wants to be DYOM reviewer. I read his reviews via PM, and it's very good.

 

So I want the DYOM community to be less harsh into his reviews as he just started to write the reviews in this topic. As for maliksusanto, I hope you can take the responsibility to be a very good reviewer. ^_^

Cool, good luck maliksusanto !

[maliksusanto]

This time i will review 2 Mati mission from BUYSAG Forelli brother

 

-Writing:Very good-Nice coloring Text and little mistake word

-Presentation:Good-Nice Cutscene position,Nice Storyline

 

The Beginning

Link:dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=12197

 

-Length:Decent-It can be done 4 minute Player play as Marco Forelli Member,He must take his friend henry to Visage hotel

-Difficulty:Easy-In the beginning player must kill the Terrorist in Plane,and some civilian help kill the terrorist,and Marco must take Henry to Hotel

-Varienty:Decent-Character include marco,Henry,Terrorist,Mike,Franco,and women in Plane,weapon include Deagle,Smg,and car called elegant

 

Badfellas

Link:dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=12208

 

-Length:Very good-It can be done 7 minute

Player play as Marco,The mission is Buy Cocaine From Yellow people/Triads near Come-a-Lot

-Difficulty:Medium-Player must Buy Cocaine from Yellow people,Unfortunately Police ambush them

-Varienty:Good-Player inculde Marco,Henry,joe,Chubby,Some Yellow people/Triads,police and some weapon:Ak47,Shotgun,Deagle,Uzi,Rifle and Car called elegant,Police car

 

Overrall mission is Very good ,Nice forelli Storyline,Good work(sorry i did't Review all Because i dont have much time)

Edited May 11, 2011 by maliksusanto

[Satourn]

maliksusanto, umm...

Sorry, but write the last sentences(I mean those whcih are after the review) in yellow color, as the blue in not readable for all.

Not bad for first review.

[pauliux2]

I think that Malik's review is not bad,just he has some little grammar mistakes.

[maliksusanto]

I think that Malik's review is not bad,just he has some little grammar mistakes.

I will improve my grammar

[A.O]

hey maliksusanto can you review my ADomL missions in here

[Mati]

Thank you very much . A very good review, although there are some grammar mistakes. But I understood everything

[maliksusanto]

This time i will review 3 Jaban/Ahmed mission series Called "Another day of my Life"

 

-Writing:Good-The writing is Good,There Some mistaken word but Good job,Not many Text in mission and Cutscene,Nice Coloring Text

-Presentation:Good-Nice Cutscene Placement and nice timing,Player placement is Good,Maybe add some action in Mission in Taking Revenge mission you can see CJ in front Ray

 

ADOML-Intro

Link:http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=11793

 

-Length:Short-It can be done in 2 minute,Ray(Player)Have go to his Daily work on Gang Bar,No action just Go work

-Difficulty:Very easy-No enemy in this mission Because this mission is Just the beginning,The mission is Just go work on Bar almost No action

-Varienty:Decent-Player named Ray,2 Grove gang in Bar,Car called Cadrona

 

ADOML-Another Normal Day

Link:http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=11804

 

-Length:short-It can be done in 2 minute,Ray must go work on Bar but A gang war is started near his home he must escape and Go to work,Unfortunately Ray Got Fired and Go back home,No action in this mission

-Difficulty:Very easy-Player must go work on Bar,He must escape from Gang war,When Ray escape 2 Ballas will shot Ray,Dont Worry The Ballas will not Chase You

-Varienty:Decent-Player include Ray,Manger,Some Ballas and Grove gang,Cadrona Car,and some Gang weapon

 

ADOML-Taking Revenge

Link:http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=11827

 

-Length:Good-It can Be done in 6 minute,Player must Have Revenge To Ballas Gang,Player must Kill some Ballas member near Glen Park

-Difficulty:Medium-Some Ballas use Powerfull weapon like Shotgun,You can Kill the Ballas From YOur Vehicle without Get Shot,Wacth out Ballas Leader Cant Be Headshoted,You can Kill him From Your Car or hide somewhere

-Varienty:Good-Player Called Ray,Some Ballas member,and Ballas Leader,Car Called Cadrona,Weapon Include Deagle,Shotgun,Ak47,SMG,Uzi

 

Overral mission is Good,In Taking Revenge Mission THe ballas Leader Cannot Be Headshoted it will make Player Hard To kill him,Maybe you can make The mission more longer,More Object But This mission is Very Good,Good Job to the Author

[Jimmy_Leppard]

Uh, sorry but my missions were skipped. They are on 25th page here --> http://www.gtaforums.com/index.php?showtopic=452914&st=480

They should have been reviewed after mati's BUYSAG missions.

[Satourn]

I'll do them, Jimmy!

 

Hello, friends!

 

Today I'm going to return to the reviews and review some missions made by Jimmy_Leppard. They're the part of the missionpack called "The story of Leon Ridge"

 

Now, time for review:

 

- Writing: Excellent, I didn't notice any mistakes, even little ones. Great job.

- Presentation: Excellent. Very good use of cutscenes, you know how to create a DYOM-film.

 

Work habit

- Length: Short, as it took for me 3 minutes to complete it. Leon, Renny and Derek are planning escape and meeting before P.I. starts. They are deciding which work all of them will have. Leon must clean a barrack. After P.I., guard tells Leon that he can call from guards' room. He calls Max and asks if he and Bob can survey the prison area. After it, Leon meets Renny and Derek and tells them everything.

- Difficulty: Very Easy, as there were no enemies in mission. The only thing you must do is to get to the barrack and then get to guards' room.

- Variety: Good. Characters include Leon, Renny, Derek, guards and prisoners(even there were many of them, groups outside P.I. have similar skins). Vehicles include Barracks, Cargobob and Patriot.

 

Minutes and seconds

- Length: Decent, as it can be done in 4 minutes. Leon, Renny and Derek are having P.I. again. After this, Leon tries to receive "a call to his brother" from guards' room. When he enters it, he tries to discover the sewer. When he discovered that the sewer isn't locked, he goes back and tells everything to Renny and Derek.

- Difficulty: Very Easy, just see the review of this section of the mission above.

- Variety: Good. Actors and vehicles are just like in the mission above.

 

Finishing the plan

- Length: Good, as it can be done in 6 minutes. Leon, Renny and Derek have their jobs at P.I. again. After it, Leon gets an authorization of a guard to call someone from guards' room. He calls Max and tells him a plan. Then Leon tells the situation to Renny and Derek, but unfortunately Julio and his goons are attacking the three again. For starting a fight, the three must wait a whole day at P.I.

- Difficulty: Medium-Easy, as it can be difficult to beat all Julio's boys.

- Variety: Good-Very good, see the reviews above, with the only difference with characters, which is now iclude Julio and his goons with the other actors.

 

Tonight

- Length: Short, as it can be done in 3 minutes. Leon, Renny and Derek finally escape the prison and head to the old factory. Then Derek says goodbye to everyone and going away. The two are now free, but they must be low before the police won't search for them anymore. Then we can see what happens 2 months later. Bob's garage has been reapired and the four are going to find and kill David, but suddenly Derek calls Leon and tells that he needs some help...

- Difficulty: Very Easy, as there were no enemies and a little gameplay.

- Variety: Good, as it's like the upper ones but except the prisoners are no more there and we have Max and Bob in characters and Sultan and one more not-identified car in vehicles.

 

Overall, the missions are very good, but still need more gameplay. Author did a great work with those missions, making them long and like a movie. I'll watch and end the missionpack and then give you a feedback. Good luck in your future works

Edited May 12, 2011 by SatournFan

[Jimmy_Leppard]

 

I'll do them, Jimmy!

 

EDIT: Thanks for the review, SatournFan

Edited May 12, 2011 by Jimmy_Leppard

[guib]

Could one of you review my mission: The Pirez brothers

 

Thanks!

[jetjatin]

Hello DYOM Users,

 

Today I'm going to review a mission made by Guib called The Pirez brothers.

 

This mission is related from this Topic.

You can Download the mission from DYOM Site, check out given link below.:-

Link: http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=12507

 

- Writing: Excellent! Honestly, i didn't saw a single mistake in this mission, also good grammar. Good to see a mission made by user who didn't know much English but Great Work this time!

- Presentation: Very Good. Cutscenes are longer, not work hard on cutscenes but the stoyline is great one. I Also like the Setting and you turned off Wanted level which is good for user who is playing the mission.

- Length: Good. At the beginning, i thought this mission is short but when i played the mission, its length is so great and enjoyable mission. Definitely done in 6 Minutes as i keep an eye on my watch for this mission.

- Difficulty: Easy. Not a difficult mission through. The Enemies have poor accuracy but some has good. The player goes to find Pirez brothers somewhere connected with Los santos vagos, but vagos tried to avoid him. After that he goes to check mansion as he founded the clue in the book. This mission completes after gunfights between player and guard with Vagos.

- Variety: Good. This mission includes such a rich family vehicles and high equipments. Weapons Includes Desert Eagle, MP5 (SMG), 9mm and Tech9. I'm not sure about 9mm. Vehicles Include Normal street bike PCG 600, Cheetah, banshee and turismo. Characters Include George the main character, mark, jeremy, Pirez brother, vagos and some guards protecting mansion.

Overall, The mission is GREAT . The Author did better this time with good storyline. I Suggest to make difficult mission by turning off headshot. But great work. Keep making missions for this stoyline!

[SevilleCheng]

Hi,Reviewers.

 

Can you review my missions in my Things to Do in Las Venturas storyline?Thanks.

 

And I'd be appreciate it if someone would do a video review of it.

[AznKei]

Hello everyone,

 

Today, I'm going to review 4 missions made by ANGHELUTA TIBI, in which he made a review request via PM. The missions are part of his GTA SA Stories series.

 

The mission package can be downloaded at: http://media.gtanet.com/gtagarage/files/21...-A&e=1305202067 .

 

Now, it's time for the review,

 

- Writing: Excellent. Pretty much everything is well written with the right structure and grammar. There's also some gangster languages that can be found.

- Presentation: Very Good. Nice viewing and timing between different cutscenes. Although they don't show some really spectacular stuffs, the cutscenes are pretty much there for explaining the mission objectives.

 

The beginning...

- Length: Short, as it can be done in 3 minutes. The player plays as a unnamed character, and he goes to El Corona from his Idlewood house to meet his friend Tony (random black thug). Unfortunately, the latter got involved into a drug deal and 2 LSPD officers are after him. Lose the heat by going to Glen Park.

- Difficulty: Easy. The player and his ally fight against 2 LSPD officers that are spawning alternatively. As the enemies a equipped with a pistol and the player with a desert eagle, the latter has a slight advantage to defeat the enemies. At the escape to Glen Park part, no wanted level is given, just go through to the race checkpoints.

- Variety: Decent. The characters include the unnamed protagonist, Tony and the LSPD officers. The weapons include pistol and desert eagle. The vehicles include Tony's car.

 

First job

- Length: Good, as it can be done in 5 minutes. The no-name character has been tasked by Tony to kill some Ballas and Vagos gang members around the eastern part of Los Santos, along a suspect who owes him money, in favor for the Grove Street Families.

- Difficulty: Normal. The enemies have good accuracies and are quite numerous against the player. Fortunately, Tony's car is pretty much bulletproof, so the player just run over them without too much trouble. Aim to the head against the last enemy for a quick victory.

- Variety: Good. The characters include the unnamed protagonist, Tony, a no-name suspect and the Ballas, Vagos and Grove Street members. The weapons include ak-47, mp5, micro-uzi, pistol and sawn-off shotgun. The vehicle includes Tony's car.

 

Moving from Los Santos

- Length: Very Good, as it can be done in 7 minutes. The no-name character got involved into a gang massacre and the Ballas boss threats his life by telling to leave Los Santos. He went to Tony's backyard in El Corona to tell the news, which also threats his life for not returning his car. Escape Los Santos to San Fierro.

- Difficulty: Normal. There's a brawl between the player and Tony, and later the plane pilot. Knock them down and stomp them to death for a quick victory. The travel into San Fierro part can be confusing, as the checkpoint is spawned in the middle of crowded street while the player is driving a plane.

- Variety: Decent. The characters include the unnamed protagonist, Tony, the Ballas boss and a plane's pilot. The weapon includes a knife. The vehicle includes the pilot's plane.

Getting a job

- Length: Good, as it can be done in 6 minutes. The no-name character now lives in Carlton Heights, San Fierro, and wants to get a job as a hitman in order to start his new life. He learns that a guy named T-Bone Mendez is looking for a hitman near the Driving School in Doherty. There, he has been tasked by the new boss to kill a target named Johnny who is about to leave San Fierro.

- Difficulty: Easy. The target is not equipped with a gun, unlike the player, and is car is quite low on HP. Shoot the car and let it explode for a quick victory. Be careful not get too much collisions while parking with a maverick helicopter on a crowded street though.

- Variety: Good. The characters include the unnamed protagonist, T-Bone Mendez, a bystander, a job receptionist and Johnny. The weapon includes a micro-uzi. The vehicle includes a maverick helicopter and T-Bone's car.

 

Overall the missions are good and the style is pretty much similar compared to the official GTA SA missions . The only thing that the author needs work is the character spawnings, as some actors are just spawned out of nowhere or not there at all. Otherwise, good job for the author and keep up the good work .

 

 

[jetjatin]

And I'd be appreciate it if someone would do a video review of it.

I'm little busy with Trailer requests but I'll try reviewing your missions

[guib]

Overall, The mission is GREAT . The Author did better this time with good storyline. I Suggest to make difficult mission by turning off headshot. But great work. Keep making missions for this stoyline!

Thanks Jet, , I appreciate it very much! Also you have rated it very fast, I thought I would have to wait 2 days before it was my turn, I am thinking of making a storyline about it...

 

I am proud of myself for not making any textmistakes

[Drift-Kingz]

Can someone do a review on the first 3 missions of my current mission pack? They can be found here. Thanks.

[Jimmy_Leppard]

Hey, dudes. I would like if someone can review the last 3 missions of my latest finished mission series called ''The story of Leon Ridge''.

 

Here is the link to the mission series topic --> http://www.gtaforums.com/index.php?showtopic=473647

The missions are called ''Friend patrol'', ''Out of the book'' and ''Dead fall''.

 

Thanks in forward,

 

Jimmy

[Satourn]

Hey, WTF!

You must review my mission first!

I'm not angry, but reviewers must first review those missions whcih were requested first.

[Nitesh002]

Please review this mission:

When the wolves howl...

 

Thanks in advance

[maliksusanto]

I will review them Nitesh aka AAAAAAA

 

This time i will review "When the wolves howl" by Nitesh aka AAAAAAA

Link:http://dyom.gtagames.nl/?act=show&id=12473

 

-Writing:Very Good-Almost no mistake word,really serve the purpose of explaining the mission objectives and the storyline

-Presentation:Very good-Nice Cutscene placement,character placement is very good very fits with gang theme,good storyline,I love when Player must kill the Cobra in Hill

-Length:Good-It can be done in 6 minute,Player play as Jeff wolves member,Wolves territory is attacked by Cobra gang,Jeff must defend Wolves Territory

-Difficulty:Easy-The enemy is easy to kill,in first mission you can kill enemy from behind tree in next mission many Wolves member near you they will help you kill cobra member

-Varienty:Good-Jeff the main character,Hardy,some Wolves and cobra gang,Mr chang.Car called Sentinel,Weapon include Smg,Uzi,tec9,AK47

 

Overall mission is very good,but hard when you must climb to Top of tunnel,It doesnt matter Good job to the author(Hope you win the Contest

Edited May 14, 2011 by maliksusanto

[Nitesh002]

Thanks

[maliksusanto]

can somebody review Training mission?

 

[jetjatin]

Hi Everyone, I'm going to review first mission of American War Missionpack made by Maliksusanto/Malik.

The Mission called Training.

 

- Writing: Good. Can't say anything about writing. Just there are some typical mistakes but objectives can be understood.

- Presentation: Very Good. There aren't much cutscene in the mission, but there are lots of Dialogues with real time. Nice actions and great technique of building Objects.

- Length: Good. This mission completes in 6 Minutes, as a training mission i suggest to playing with interest.

- Difficulty: Medium. You play as Pvt.Price today you'll learn some basic movements and improve your Accuracy and Driving. There are Total 5 Task to do.

- Verity: Very Good. Characters Include Pvt.Price playable character, Cpt.Morris trainer of Pvt.Price who gives some task to do, and some enemies for Training. Weapons Include SMG, M4, Ak47. Vehicles Include Rhino and Sanchez.

 

Overall, The mission is quite interesting for DYOM Users, as Training mission i don't got much words to say. You must release the next mission. Great Work .

Edited May 14, 2011 by jetjatin

[Satourn]

Review my last mission I did for "German Invasion".

Here's the link: Sneakly Tiger

Also, don't forget to review this mission as I requested it long time ago.