City of Lies (Possible GTA IV spoiler)

[dannyz 4]

It's great. I want to read more.

 

[Mokrie Dela 2,856]

thanks guys. I'm in the process of editing the finale (split in 3 chapters), so i'm aiming to upload the rest intermittently over the next week or so.

 

The more replies, the quicker each bit will be uploaded. (i would like to try to avoid DPing*). Also, once the story's uploaded (hell even now), i would like to hear people's ideas and suggestions for the alter-ual (alternate squeal)

 

Thanks for taking an interest, and for your feedback, everyone.

 

 

Mati, I'm glad that's carried over. I wanted to avoid this just being a simple story, but a story based on GTA IV, as an epilogue to it, if you will.

 

I'll aim to get the next chapter up in the next few days, hopefully someone will post to avoid DPing*

 

And remember me when the awards roll into town

 

 

*Double posting, not double penetration.

 

EDIT:

 

I would like to see you guys speculate and discuss how you think this will end. What will happen. Will anyone die? Who will win etc. Thoughts/Speculation please!

Edited February 16, 2011 by Mokrie Dela

[Mati 7]

The ending? I think Karen will somehow be shot and fall in Niko's arms. But all the 'bad guys' will die

[El Zilcho 103]

Seriously am loving this! Especially the witty one liners like "he bleeds like any other" and the small details and intricate plot workings. Very enjoyable read, looking forward to more.

[dannyz 4]

I love Reading GTA Fan Fiction. I don't know why people don't write more on this Forum. I think Karen will send all three of them into a Trap and someone dies, Karen moves and the Survivor's are still always looking behind their back not knowing what trap will happen next.

 

[Mokrie Dela 2,856]

 

I love Reading GTA Fan Fiction. I don't know why people don't write more on this Forum. I think Karen will send all three of them into a Trap and someone dies, Karen moves and the Survivor's are still always looking behind their back not knowing what trap will happen next.

Interesting thought there.

 

Next chapter - #20 - Keep Your Friends Close... is up Enjoy

[Mati 7]

This is just amazing. Every single line. Great work

Can't wait for the next chapter.

[Mokrie Dela 2,856]

Thanks, Mati. I love how strongly you've followed this

 

As a reward, here's a new chapter... ENJOY homie! (CH 21 - ... And your enemies even closer)

[Mati 7]

Amazing chapter. But there must be a turn in the story soon. If Niko and others continue the 'jobs' to the end and take the baddies out and everyone has a happy ending, it would be boring. But I'm sure it won't.

[Mokrie Dela 2,856]

Amazing chapter. But there must be a turn in the story soon. If Niko and others continue the 'jobs' to the end and take the baddies out and everyone has a happy ending, it would be boring. But I'm sure it won't.

The dynamic of GTA is that the character always accepts "jobs".

 

But don't worry, it's not all Mission mission mission. The end is nigh...

[Mati 7]

*random bump*

 

Just waiting for the next chapter. Will Luis, Niko and Johnny stick together to the end?

[dannyz 4]

*random bump*

 

Just waiting for the next chapter. Will Luis, Niko and Johnny stick together to the end?

Or will something get in the way and they end up against each other in an all out battle to the Death?

 

[Mokrie Dela 2,856]

Well obviously i'm not going to give away the ending

 

However, i've added the second half of chapter 21 - just search for :

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That signifies the "break" as it were.

New chapter will be up in a day or two - as soon as there's a reply really

[Mati 7]

I like how fast you update the topic, almost as you'll be already done will every chapter and only wait for replys

[dannyz 4]

Keep it coming.

 

[Mokrie Dela 2,856]

New chapter's up fellas.

 

#22 - Guns, lots of guns.

 

Enjoy

Edited February 23, 2011 by Mokrie Dela

[Mati 7]

Another great chapter. A very good read. I simply love how you put everything together. This could be a real sequel to GTA IV.

About the chapter, to me it's kinda suspicious that Karen has contacts to the Russians.

[dannyz 4]

Could you imagine this as a game? Playing this story in three different points of views. I need more so keep it coming.

 

[Mokrie Dela 2,856]

New chapter for you fellas.

CH 23 - The Cat's Out Of The Bag

 

A simple one for you, the end is near. Enjoy, comment, make suggestions discus, or look at porn, what ever

[Mati 7]

Things got very interesting. One question: I didn't read the first chapters in a while, is Kate still alive?

[Mokrie Dela 2,856]

 

Things got very interesting. One question: I didn't read the first chapters in a while, is Kate still alive?

COL follows on from the DEAL ending. Therefore Kate's alive, Roman's dead.

[dannyz 4]

This is going to end in a big War. I wonder who will make it out alive?

 

[Mokrie Dela 2,856]

New chapter's up, well part of it.

[dannyz 4]

Luis to save the day Right? Nice Code Names. Keep Going.

 

[Mati 7]

Keep it coming

[Mokrie Dela 2,856]

Take another look at the last chapter: I've added the second half of it. Search for " * * * " for the break.

 

Also do me a favour will you guys. Promote this writing section where you can (without spamming of course). Perhaps link to it in your sig, if there's room? I feel that the entire writing section gets overlooked most of the time and if everyone KNEW what was in here they'd come down here more.

 

It's like the Forums are a building. The IV is the lobby. VC III SA etc are the 1st 2nd and 3rd floor. General chat is the penthouse/observation levels, with off topic being a smoking area on the roof.

 

The writing section is the basement, dark and dreary, with some gems tucked away. BRING SOME LIGHT DOWN ON THAT!

 

Not necessarily so my work can get more view, but so everyone elses can too!

 

Peace out

 

P.S. New chapter in a day or two.

[Mati 7]

Reading it right now. I will add a link in my sig since Justin Bieber's death got kinda old.

And, I will advert this topic in my gang if that helps.

[Mokrie Dela 2,856]

Reading it right now. I will add a link in my sig since Justin Bieber's death got kinda old.

And, I will advert this topic in my gang if that helps.

Wow man, i wasn't asking or expecting you to link to my actual story on your sig! (was hoping people can just advertise the "writers discussion" forum more).

 

Thanks for that, i'm feeling quite humbled now!

[Mati 7]

So, the battle is going to start soon, isn't it?

[Corndawg93 989]

It would be amazing if this became a game, like a DLC or something like that

 

I hope mayor ochor wins the election and also is Kenny Patrovic gonna have a big role in the ending.