City of Lies (Possible GTA IV spoiler)

[Mokrie Dela 2,833]

UPDATE:

Chapter Nine - Ace of Spades has been uploaded in its entirety now. It's not my best but i wanted to give you guys something.

 

As always comments are appreciated.

[nufc.neilo 0]

Johnny's a bad-ass poker player! Lol

[Mokrie Dela 2,833]

Johnny's a bad-ass poker player! Lol

Haha not as good as Marston,

 

New chapter's in the works people.. hang tight!

[megahypernova 0]

Mallorie inherited the business.

 

So Does this story spin of the deal branch at the end of gta 4?

[Mokrie Dela 2,833]

Mallorie inherited the business.

 

So Does this story spin of the deal branch at the end of gta 4?

Yes it does. Niko has chosen to forgive Dimitri, taken the deal. Roman has died and Niko is left feeling empty.

 

 

Apologies to everyone who's following this.

 

THIS IS NOT DEAD, I have been quite busy lately, writing for GTA:Thames City, and my own projects, while trying to fit it all around work etc.

 

I do have a chapter half done, and i will be posting it soon.

 

Also, i have a concept for a follow up - but that will ONLY be written if there's enough interest, so the more people post, the more likely i am to A priorities this over other things, and B write the follow up.

 

Thanks for reading, please share it with anyone

 

oh and comments/questions/suggestions/observations are encouraged

[megahypernova 0]

I Also added you to my respect list, you and the guy who made the tales from liberty city concept forum

 

EDIT: i also added you on xbox live!

Edited July 20, 2010 by megahypernova

[megahypernova 0]

i noticed you have two reserved posts, since you already got nine chapters in the first why not start the next one? i also had an idea if you do this they should be divided as sequences, the first would be the first nine chapters, and the next would be for new ones, and if you title the sequences had an idea for the name of the first one

 

"OLD ALLIES, NEW ENEMIES"

 

What do you think?

[Mokrie Dela 2,833]

I Also added you to my respect list, you and the guy who made the tales from liberty city concept forum

 

EDIT: i also added you on xbox live!

Ah, THAT's who that was!

I had no idea who it was so i didn't accept.That said i don't play online much, but if i'm feeling kind i may add you again

 

Seriously though, thanks for the respect list add, and for checking out the story.

 

Due to work commitments, i'm struggling to find the time ATM to write this. My efforts are going into the story of GTA: Thames City, so this has taken a back seat.

However, i am giving you all my word that this story is not dead, and i'm still making slow progress with it. The story itself is starting to near its end too. things are going to get crazy....

 

at the risk of a double post, i'll post when i've uploaded any

 

Thanks for reading guys and please, share it! If anyone wants to see the sequal, please send me a PM message, or post on here so i can gauge how much interest there is. The 2nd one will only be written if enough people want it

[The Lolwut Pear 3]

Wait a second, could that hispanic in a car that Johnny recognized possibly be Luis?

[Mokrie Dela 2,833]

Wait a second, could that hispanic in a car that Johnny recognized possibly be Luis?

 

A car horn screamed, throwing Johnny off balance. He fell back, his hand breaking his fall.

"Get out of the way bro!" A hispanic called leaning out of the window. He looked vaguely familiar, but Johnny couldn't place the face.

He didn't respond though, just stood and crossed the road

 

If you mean that bit - then yes, it was

[megahypernova 0]

this is dead

[Mokrie Dela 2,833]

this is dead

Nah, it's not.

I've vowed to not let it die.

I've been very busy with work and working on 02fishera's "GTA Thames City" recently, that, regretfully, this has suffered from.

 

I am still writing on it, but have fallen way behind schedule on both GTA TC and this story.

 

But i can promise you - it's not dead, and i'm going to try to make the next update BIG

 

 

[Mokrie Dela 2,833]

Chapter Ten is up.... well, most of it.

 

it's not perfect but i wanted to get this out here.

 

 

[megahypernova 0]

Chapter Ten is up.... well, most of it.

 

it's not perfect but i wanted to get this out here.

it was perfect! btw when are you going to introduce luis, you've made a few references to him already

[Mokrie Dela 2,833]

Chapter Ten is up....  well, most of it.

 

it's not perfect but i wanted to get this out here.

it was perfect! btw when are you going to introduce luis, you've made a few references to him already

[nufc.neilo 0]

Wayhey! As Harry Hill would say... FIIIIGGGGHHHTTTT! lol classic. Are we nearly at the end?

[Mokrie Dela 2,833]

 

Wayhey! As Harry Hill would say... FIIIIGGGGHHHTTTT! lol classic. Are we nearly at the end?

getting there. about 3/4 there i think. everything is planned out

An update to everyone, i have written the final chapter - the end has been written. all that remains are a few steps leading to the final revaluation, if you will, and its done.

When the story's done i will be asking people if i should write the "sequal" which would follow the REVENGE story of IV..... feel free to post your thoughts now - the more replies the better.

 

And please spread the word, not just for my story, but for this little hidden section that it seems not many people visit...

 

As always, thanks for reading, and ANY thoughts or comments are welcome, so long as you're respectfull...

[megahypernova 0]

when are you gonna add the next part?

[Mokrie Dela 2,833]

when are you gonna add the next part?

simply when i get time to write it.

Work's a bit busy atm and, without going into details, i am simply unable to let this take precedence over work, and staring at a computer screen all day at work don't help.

Also, my priority is writing the Thames City story - when i've written the next part of that (the story's in parts) i can focus on this a little more.

 

It's not a question of WANT but time. I'd love to blow work off for a week and write but, not only can i not afford that, the work i do i am simply unable to just leave....

 

 

[Mokrie Dela 2,833]

NEW CHAPTER IS UP!

I hope there's still interest in this.

 

It's nearing completion! Spread the word! Tell your friends.

 

Things are heating up!

Answers are coming, the climax is building!

 

as always, please comment, thoughts suggestions, speculations... ! and please tell your mates!

[megahypernova 0]

like always...EPIC, lol now i have to wait for the next chapter

[Mokrie Dela 2,833]

like always...EPIC, lol now i have to wait for the next chapter

thanks!

as i said, the end is looming, i have written the finale, and the chapters that lead up to it (The major events). now all that's left is to fill the inbetween

[Prasdana 1]

cool,I'm waiting for the next chapter

[megahypernova 0]

i made a cover for the book!!!!

 

 

[megahypernova 0]

uh don't get pissed but i added you entire article to my wiki

 

 

Go Here To See The Article

 

 

 

EXTRA HEALTH XD

 

if you want me to i can remove it lol it took so long to add though -_-

[Mokrie Dela 2,833]

uh don't get pissed but i added you entire article to my wiki

 

 

Go Here To See The Article

 

 

 

EXTRA HEALTH XD

 

if you want me to i can remove it lol it took so long to add though -_-

haha that's pretty cool.

 

I have one request: make it very clear, link any mention of my name or the title linkable to my GTAF profile and this topic respectively so no one (even idiots) can question who made it

 

apart from that, it's fine, so long as you don't take credit for it

 

 

I'm working on the new chapter... gonna take a while though

[megahypernova 0]

uh don't get pissed but i added you entire article to my wiki

 

 

Go Here To See The Article

 

 

                                             

 

EXTRA HEALTH XD

 

if you want me to i can remove it lol it took so long to add though -_-

haha that's pretty cool.

 

I have one request: make it very clear, link any mention of my name or the title linkable to my GTAF profile and this topic respectively so no one (even idiots) can question who made it

 

apart from that, it's fine, so long as you don't take credit for it

 

 

I'm working on the new chapter... gonna take a while though

the only thing i took credit for was the cover which i made in ms paint, (lol i wish i had a better program ^_^) i was wondering if you could sign up to the wiki?

 

Go Here To Sign Up

 

 

 

PARACHUTE XD

[Mokrie Dela 2,833]

uh don't get pissed but i added you entire article to my wiki

 

 

Go Here To See The Article

 

 

                                              

 

EXTRA HEALTH XD

 

if you want me to i can remove it lol it took so long to add though -_-

haha that's pretty cool.

 

I have one request: make it very clear, link any mention of my name or the title linkable to my GTAF profile and this topic respectively so no one (even idiots) can question who made it

 

apart from that, it's fine, so long as you don't take credit for it

 

 

I'm working on the new chapter... gonna take a while though

the only thing i took credit for was the cover which i made in ms paint, (lol i wish i had a better program ^_^) i was wondering if you could sign up to the wiki?

 

Go Here To Sign Up

 

 

 

PARACHUTE XD

I'll have a ganders at it ( i don't sign up to many things though to be honest)

 

But in future, say this in a PM, keep this topic on track please

 

 

[megahypernova 0]

uh don't get pissed but i added you entire article to my wiki

 

 

Go Here To See The Article

 

 

                                                                      

 

EXTRA HEALTH XD

 

if you want me to i can remove it lol it took so long to add though -_-

haha that's pretty cool.

 

I have one request: make it very clear, link any mention of my name or the title linkable to my GTAF profile and this topic respectively so no one (even idiots) can question who made it

 

apart from that, it's fine, so long as you don't take credit for it

 

 

I'm working on the new chapter... gonna take a while though

the only thing i took credit for was the cover which i made in ms paint, (lol i wish i had a better program ^_^) i was wondering if you could sign up to the wiki?

 

Go Here To Sign Up

 

 

 

PARACHUTE XD

I'll have a ganders at it ( i don't sign up to many things though to be honest)

 

But in future, say this in a PM, keep this topic on track please

ok

 

 

JETPACK XD

[Mokrie Dela 2,833]

just a little update to say i worked on a chapter earlier. I will not tell you what it is other then:

It's a flashback.

 

got a few chapters waiting upload - not 100% happy with them yet but hold on.

 

also, those who want to see a sequal, or alter-ual, now's the time to say so!

 

Post here or PM me. enough interest i will write it. not enough.... i MAY write it one day.....