Mokrie Dela 2,986 Posted May 2, 2010 Share Posted May 2, 2010 (edited) Mokrie Dela presents:An award winning story:A PDF format is available here Thanks to Cammi for his help/suggestion in this. [table] Chapter Number Chapter Title (Click To Read) One A Shared Sorrow Two A Rude Awakening Three Wetwork Four Clash of the Titans Five Truth or Dare Six Deal or No Deal? Seven Number 47 Eight Homecoming Nine Ace of Spades Ten Round Two Eleven An Unlikely Alliance Twelve Sweet Dreams Thirteen Get This Done, Then We'll Talk Fourteen Hunting the Hunters Fifteen The Voice Sixteen Unmasked! Seventeen Answers At last Eighteen Three's The Magic Number Nineteen Now What? Twenty Keep Your Friends Close... Twenty One ...And Your Enemies Even Closer Twenty Two Guns… Lots of Guns Twenty Three The Cat’s Out of the Bag Twenty Four Ambushed Twenty Five The Battle for Liberty City: Part I Twenty Six The Battle for Liberty City: Part II Twenty Seven The Battle for Liberty City: Part III Twenty Eight For Michael Twenty Nine Revelations Epilogue Epilogue [/table] New format - easier to read and work out where you got to! Just click the link in the above table to go to that chapter.As always please comment, suggestions constructive criticism, ideas etc all welcome! Edited May 3, 2016 by Mokrie Dela 1 Link to post Share on other sites
Mokrie Dela 2,986 Posted May 2, 2010 Author Share Posted May 2, 2010 (edited) <redundant> Edited June 2, 2011 by Mokrie Dela Link to post Share on other sites
Mokrie Dela 2,986 Posted May 2, 2010 Author Share Posted May 2, 2010 (edited) <redundant> Edited June 2, 2011 by Mokrie Dela Link to post Share on other sites
mrpain 43 Posted May 2, 2010 Share Posted May 2, 2010 Very nice! I assumed this story will be about Niko only but the minute I saw Johnny's name I was impressed. Let Luis joined the mix! Looking forward to the next chapters Link to post Share on other sites
mrpain 43 Posted May 2, 2010 Share Posted May 2, 2010 (edited) EDIT: Sorry for the double post. Computer went berserk! Edited May 2, 2010 by mrpain Link to post Share on other sites
Mokrie Dela 2,986 Posted May 2, 2010 Author Share Posted May 2, 2010 Not sure how Luis would fit into the story yet. He may appear. He may not. Thanks for the feedback Post has been updated with the next chapter. Link to post Share on other sites
Cashy 3 Posted May 2, 2010 Share Posted May 2, 2010 Mate, I cannot wait for more. I am hooked on this badboy Link to post Share on other sites
VercettiTheNiter 0 Posted May 2, 2010 Share Posted May 2, 2010 Wow this is one of the best things I have ever read on WD. A lot better than mine! Fantastic. I can't wait to read more Link to post Share on other sites
Mokrie Dela 2,986 Posted May 2, 2010 Author Share Posted May 2, 2010 Thanks for the kind words I'll keep this updated, hopefully very regularly, so keep your eyes peeled! @VercettiTheNiter, I'm sure you story's good. Could you PM me a link to it? I'll check it out later Link to post Share on other sites
Mokrie Dela 2,986 Posted May 4, 2010 Author Share Posted May 4, 2010 Story's been updated with a new chapter Edit: Oh c*ck it. Double post. Sorry. My brain's turned to mush. Bedtime i think! Link to post Share on other sites
Playstation_Loyalist 0 Posted May 8, 2010 Share Posted May 8, 2010 Nice GTA IV sequel! (is it?) It is great, just a few grammatical errors and some not-so-important random stuffs, but overall, the concept is AWESOME. Keep it up! Link to post Share on other sites
Mokrie Dela 2,986 Posted May 8, 2010 Author Share Posted May 8, 2010 thanks. I have notices some errors, most of which i though i had corrected, but I'll look through it when i upload the next chapter, which is on it's way Thanks for the comment Link to post Share on other sites
_Rei 557 Posted May 9, 2010 Share Posted May 9, 2010 Awesome Concept! Keep IT UP!!!!!! here have a cookie Link to post Share on other sites
Mokrie Dela 2,986 Posted May 9, 2010 Author Share Posted May 9, 2010 thanks! The cookie was nice. Choc chip. My favorite! New chapter is in progress... Link to post Share on other sites
xxcyylonexx 0 Posted May 17, 2010 Share Posted May 17, 2010 thanks! The cookie was nice. Choc chip. My favorite! New chapter is in progress... it would be cool if someone made a machinama out of this! i read the whole thing so far. pretty damn good. keep it up! Link to post Share on other sites
Mokrie Dela 2,986 Posted May 17, 2010 Author Share Posted May 17, 2010 thanks! The cookie was nice. Choc chip. My favorite! New chapter is in progress... it would be cool if someone made a machinama out of this! i read the whole thing so far. pretty damn good. keep it up! Hell yeah. But i think this particular story will be better played inside your head More chapters are in progress. The more interest and posts i get the quicker they will come! Link to post Share on other sites
nufc.neilo 0 Posted May 19, 2010 Share Posted May 19, 2010 I'LL RIP YOUR f*ckING HEART OUT! haha gotta love it, can't wait for more chapters! woo Link to post Share on other sites
Mokrie Dela 2,986 Posted May 21, 2010 Author Share Posted May 21, 2010 (edited) Just a little bump to say,New chapter's up! Please comment with your thoughts, even if it's just to say you've read it! Any feedback is appreciated and any suggestions are welcome! Thx for reading everyone Edited May 21, 2010 by Mokrie Dela Link to post Share on other sites
mrpain 43 Posted May 21, 2010 Share Posted May 21, 2010 JOHNNY IS DEAD?!? Damn I really think you can come up with better chapters with him alive Link to post Share on other sites
Mokrie Dela 2,986 Posted May 21, 2010 Author Share Posted May 21, 2010 (edited) JOHNNY IS DEAD?!? I got a couple of good ones in the works (at least in concept) Keep watching this space! Edit: Does anyone know what these are? They kept popping up in that post... <!--SS--><!--SS--><!--SC--><!--EC--><!--ES--> <!--ES--> Edited May 21, 2010 by Mokrie Dela Link to post Share on other sites
nufc.neilo 0 Posted May 23, 2010 Share Posted May 23, 2010 Yay new chapters! You should include a random paragraph or something about Brucie and Mori again, those guys are funny bitches! Haha. Have a cookie! Link to post Share on other sites
Mokrie Dela 2,986 Posted May 25, 2010 Author Share Posted May 25, 2010 Yay 2 pages! thx. I'm trying to keep all the charecters true to how they were portrayed in IV, and to keep the R* humor too! New chapter's on its way folks. WIP right now. Keep posting your thoughts and suggestions etc! And most importantly, thanks for reading so far I'll do my best to reward you Link to post Share on other sites
LuisBellic 4 Posted May 29, 2010 Share Posted May 29, 2010 R.I.P Johnny Link to post Share on other sites
Mokrie Dela 2,986 Posted June 1, 2010 Author Share Posted June 1, 2010 NEW CHAPTER'S UP FOLKS. It's a slow chapter, but it contains two events that i really wanted to put over, and, although one's very subtle, they're both very important. Some stats for you folks. Eight chapters, 14,696 words (including titles), 1,268 lines of prose! Thanks for reading so far. Sorry for such a long delay, i've been so obsessed with Red Dead, it's eaten up alot of my free time (and i'm only just into Mexico, but this isnt the RDR topic so enough on that). I'll try to keep the chapters coming regularly, but since i started i've scrapped 4 chapters (5, but one was redone), so i'm striving for quality over regularity. Keep commenting with your thoughts and suggestions. If i get enough feedback i may follow through with my idea for a sequal/prequal/altern-qual... Link to post Share on other sites
MrcTOtheJ 280 Posted June 7, 2010 Share Posted June 7, 2010 Wow I am hooked can't wait for more. Link to post Share on other sites
Mokrie Dela 2,986 Posted June 7, 2010 Author Share Posted June 7, 2010 thanks man. A little Bump here too - Ninth ( i think) Chapter's up Enjoy people. I'm about halfway through the story... Maybe 2 thirds..... Link to post Share on other sites
MrcTOtheJ 280 Posted June 7, 2010 Share Posted June 7, 2010 great new chapter can't wait for the next one. Link to post Share on other sites
nufc.neilo 0 Posted June 8, 2010 Share Posted June 8, 2010 interesting to see where this is gonna end up! Link to post Share on other sites
Ziggy455 708 Posted June 12, 2010 Share Posted June 12, 2010 There's only a few teeny tiny grammatical mistakes but the story is awesome in itself I do think GTA IV spin-offs are awesome because there's so many ways you can go with them. I mean with all of IV's plotholes and such (Not intending that to mean it's a bad thing that there are alot of plot holes.) The story is good as well. R.I.P Johhny Link to post Share on other sites
Mokrie Dela 2,986 Posted June 13, 2010 Author Share Posted June 13, 2010 (edited) There's only a few teeny tiny grammatical mistakes but the story is awesome in itself I do think GTA IV spin-offs are awesome because there's so many ways you can go with them. I mean with all of IV's plotholes and such (Not intending that to mean it's a bad thing that there are alot of plot holes.) The story is good as well. R.I.P Johhny Chapter 8 - Homecoming reveals that Johnny's not dead... Thank you for the feedback - I concede there are several grammatical and spelling errors. You'll be amazed how many fully published books are littered with the same (One of the last 3 Splinter Cell books had LOADS in) But thanks, keep reading, hope to have a new chapter up soon Edited June 20, 2010 by Mokrie Dela Link to post Share on other sites
