City of Lies (Possible GTA IV spoiler)

[Mokrie Dela 2,901]

Mokrie Dela presents:

An award winning story:


A PDF format is available here Thanks to Cammi for his help/suggestion in this.

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Chapter Number

 

Chapter Title (Click To Read)

 

 

 

One

 

A Shared Sorrow

 

 

Two

 

A Rude Awakening

 

 

Three

 

Wetwork

 

 

 

Four

 

Clash of the Titans

 

 

 

Five

 

Truth or Dare

 

 

 

Six

 

Deal or No Deal?

 

 

 

Seven

 

Number 47

 

 

 

Eight

 

Homecoming

 

 

 

Nine

 

Ace of Spades

 

 

 

Ten

 

Round Two

 

 

 

Eleven

 

An Unlikely Alliance

 

 

 

Twelve

 

Sweet Dreams

 

 

 

Thirteen

 

Get This Done, Then We'll Talk

 

 

 

Fourteen

 

Hunting the Hunters

 

 

 

Fifteen

 

The Voice

 

 

 

Sixteen

 

Unmasked!

 

 

 

Seventeen

 

Answers At last

 

 

 

Eighteen

 

Three's The Magic Number

 

 

 

Nineteen

 

Now What?

 

 

 

Twenty

 

Keep Your Friends Close...

 

 

 

Twenty One

 

...And Your Enemies Even Closer

 

 

 

Twenty Two

 

Guns… Lots of Guns

 

 

 

Twenty Three

 

The Cat’s Out of the Bag

 

 

 

Twenty Four

 

Ambushed

 

 

 

Twenty Five

 

The Battle for Liberty City: Part I

 

 

 

Twenty Six

 

The Battle for Liberty City: Part II

 

 

 

Twenty Seven

 

The Battle for Liberty City: Part III

 

 

 

Twenty Eight

 

For Michael

 

 

 

Twenty Nine

 

Revelations

 

 

 

Epilogue

 

Epilogue

 

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New format - easier to read and work out where you got to! Just click the link in the above table to go to that chapter.
As always please comment, suggestions constructive criticism, ideas etc all welcome!

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[mrpain 43]

Very nice! I assumed this story will be about Niko only but the minute I saw Johnny's name I was impressed. Let Luis joined the mix!

 

Looking forward to the next chapters

[mrpain 43]

EDIT: Sorry for the double post. Computer went berserk!

Edited May 2, 2010 by mrpain

[Mokrie Dela 2,901]

Not sure how Luis would fit into the story yet. He may appear. He may not.

Thanks for the feedback

Post has been updated with the next chapter.

[Cashy 3]

Mate, I cannot wait for more. I am hooked on this badboy

[VercettiTheNiter 0]

Wow this is one of the best things I have ever read on WD. A lot better than mine! Fantastic. I can't wait to read more

[Mokrie Dela 2,901]

Thanks for the kind words

I'll keep this updated, hopefully very regularly, so keep your eyes peeled!

 

@VercettiTheNiter, I'm sure you story's good. Could you PM me a link to it? I'll check it out later

[Mokrie Dela 2,901]

Story's been updated with a new chapter

 

Edit: Oh c*ck it. Double post. Sorry. My brain's turned to mush. Bedtime i think!

[Playstation_Loyalist 0]

Nice GTA IV sequel! (is it?)

 

It is great, just a few grammatical errors and some not-so-important random stuffs, but overall, the concept is AWESOME. Keep it up!

[Mokrie Dela 2,901]

thanks. I have notices some errors, most of which i though i had corrected, but I'll look through it when i upload the next chapter, which is on it's way

 

Thanks for the comment

[Clueless Muffin 558]

Awesome Concept!

Keep IT UP!!!!!!

here have a cookie

[Mokrie Dela 2,901]

thanks! The cookie was nice. Choc chip. My favorite!

 

New chapter is in progress...

[xxcyylonexx 0]

thanks! The cookie was nice. Choc chip. My favorite!

 

New chapter is in progress...

it would be cool if someone made a machinama out of this! i read the whole thing so far. pretty damn good. keep it up!

[Mokrie Dela 2,901]

thanks! The cookie was nice. Choc chip. My favorite!

 

New chapter is in progress...

it would be cool if someone made a machinama out of this! i read the whole thing so far. pretty damn good. keep it up!

Hell yeah.

But i think this particular story will be better played inside your head

 

More chapters are in progress. The more interest and posts i get the quicker they will come!

[nufc.neilo 0]

I'LL RIP YOUR f*ckING HEART OUT!

 

haha gotta love it, can't wait for more chapters! woo

[Mokrie Dela 2,901]

Just a little bump to say,New chapter's up! Please comment with your thoughts, even if it's just to say you've read it! Any feedback is appreciated and any suggestions are welcome!

 

Thx for reading everyone

Edited May 21, 2010 by Mokrie Dela

[mrpain 43]

JOHNNY IS DEAD?!?

 

Damn I really think you can come up with better chapters with him alive

[Mokrie Dela 2,901]

 

JOHNNY IS DEAD?!?

 

I got a couple of good ones in the works (at least in concept) Keep watching this space!

 

Edit:

Does anyone know what these are? They kept popping up in that post...

 

 

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Edited May 21, 2010 by Mokrie Dela

[nufc.neilo 0]

Yay new chapters! You should include a random paragraph or something about Brucie and Mori again, those guys are funny bitches! Haha. Have a cookie!

[Mokrie Dela 2,901]

Yay 2 pages!

thx. I'm trying to keep all the charecters true to how they were portrayed in IV, and to keep the R* humor too!

 

New chapter's on its way folks. WIP right now. Keep posting your thoughts and suggestions etc!

And most importantly, thanks for reading so far I'll do my best to reward you

[LuisBellic 3]

R.I.P Johnny

[Mokrie Dela 2,901]

NEW CHAPTER'S UP FOLKS.

 

It's a slow chapter, but it contains two events that i really wanted to put over, and, although one's very subtle, they're both very important.

 

Some stats for you folks.

 

Eight chapters, 14,696 words (including titles), 1,268 lines of prose!

 

Thanks for reading so far. Sorry for such a long delay, i've been so obsessed with Red Dead, it's eaten up alot of my free time (and i'm only just into Mexico, but this isnt the RDR topic so enough on that). I'll try to keep the chapters coming regularly, but since i started i've scrapped 4 chapters (5, but one was redone), so i'm striving for quality over regularity.

 

Keep commenting with your thoughts and suggestions. If i get enough feedback i may follow through with my idea for a sequal/prequal/altern-qual...

[MrcTOtheJ 282]

Wow I am hooked can't wait for more.

[Mokrie Dela 2,901]

thanks man. A little Bump here too - Ninth ( i think) Chapter's up

Enjoy people. I'm about halfway through the story... Maybe 2 thirds.....

[MrcTOtheJ 282]

great new chapter can't wait for the next one.

[nufc.neilo 0]

interesting to see where this is gonna end up!

[Ziggy455 702]

There's only a few teeny tiny grammatical mistakes but the story is awesome in itself I do think GTA IV spin-offs are awesome because there's so many ways you can go with them. I mean with all of IV's plotholes and such (Not intending that to mean it's a bad thing that there are alot of plot holes.) The story is good as well.

 

R.I.P Johhny

[Mokrie Dela 2,901]

 

There's only a few teeny tiny grammatical mistakes but the story is awesome in itself I do think GTA IV spin-offs are awesome because there's so many ways you can go with them. I mean with all of IV's plotholes and such (Not intending that to mean it's a bad thing that there are alot of plot holes.) The story is good as well.

 

R.I.P Johhny 

Chapter 8 - Homecoming reveals that Johnny's not dead...

 

Thank you for the feedback - I concede there are several grammatical and spelling errors. You'll be amazed how many fully published books are littered with the same (One of the last 3 Splinter Cell books had LOADS in)

 

But thanks, keep reading, hope to have a new chapter up soon

Edited June 20, 2010 by Mokrie Dela