Plastic

[Lochie_old]

He kissed my forehead and told me to get some sleep, he said that 'business' was calling. At four in the morning with my lips tightly wrapped around his cock, I wondered what 'business' drew him away from the comfort of our bed and myself that he had to attend. We've never actually had 'sex', well, thats what he tells me. He says that after the operation we'll be able to as much sex as both he and I could possibly withstand,

 

'But right now I think we should just stick to fellatio,' he smiles at me every time I ask, I ask him if it's because I also have a penis and his dark brown eyes quickly dart across the room and he changes the conversation. I love anal. I love the feeling of some young athletic man, with beads of sweat perspiring from his brow as he thrusts in and out me. As we wind up to the climax and finally we collapse in a bundle of wet and sticky passion.

 

I love anal, did I tell you that?

 

The thought of someone playing with my cock bores me, having a cock has always bored me. Females have it easier, they have two holes. And after the operation Mr. Weston says that I'll have a second hole too.

 

I met him in one of those dark and gritty bars that authors always try and describe to you. You know the ones with the bartender who wears the white wifebeater and has a grizzly beard. The one with the newly-divorced who sits quietly in the corner crying into his beer glass. I was at this bar because I prey on these guys. They're young and lonely, but the best thing is that they're willing to try these 'things'. When we get back to my studio apartment they start getting cold feet, they start telling me they shouldn't be here. I kiss them and then I tell them that a hole is a hole, and that they can close their eyes and pretend whoever and whatever I am.

 

I told Dr. Weston this and he told me that he could make me a new hole, I asked him; 'How much?' and he smiled and pushed my head down his body and towards his cock.

 

Hes different to most men, he makes me feel like a woman. He makes me feel different, he doesn't make me feel ashamed to be 'gay', he doesn't make me feel dirty for loving a phallus in my rectum. He kisses me and tells me these things are only natural, and that we should always follow our instinct.

 

 

'Us human beings are just dirty, sexual beasts who have to repress the things that only come natural to us. I like blowjobs, but society tells me that the acceptable way to get a blowjob is to be in a long and healthy relationship with a woman. Religion tells me that I should wait until I'm married to get a blowjob. But why should I follow a set of rules when all I want to do is get my dick sucked? I'm just as dirty and messed up and f*cking horny as you are, Mark, and I'm willing to try anything.' He told me once.

 

I feel like Lucy Mancini from the Godfather, after Doctor Segal finishes 'fixing' her, he promised Lucy that he would try it out himself.

 

I just hope Dr. Weston is as excited as I am.

Edited July 2, 2009 by Lochie

[mark-2007]

I most certainly am, you loveable cumslut!

 

Hahah, what made you write this? Just a short, or shall we expect more?

[Ziggy455]

Sexually repressed gays.

 

I'm not a fan of this type of story but bring it on.

 

Lochie, are you Gay?

[Lochie_old]

No Zig, straight as a ruler, but I guess talking to Andy recently has an effect on all of us.

[Chunk]

This is what I reminded you to write?

 

 

Well thank God I did, I quite liked this Lochlan. There were a few errors I seen throughout the piece, like this:

 

 

Hes different too most men,

 

..should have been:

 

 

He's different to most men.

 

Overall, good job. Echoing what Mark said, is this just a one-off or is there more to come?

[Oxidizer]

That made my stomach churn.

 

But in a kind of good way; at first I thought it was an abuse story, and then I thought it was a regular straight couple, and then I found out it was two men and then a sort of woman/man romance. For that it was really interesting. That and it was f*cking brilliantly written too; not to mention original (well, for WD anyway ).

 

Quality work, Cochie.

[Vercetti21]

It seems a little rushed. The writing lacks atmosphere and the character seems unusually numb to any emotion. It's not a 'bad' piece per se, it just looks like you were going for shock value rather than quality to draw in the reader.

[Omnia sunt Communia]

I enjoyed it. It really felt as if I were reading the personal monologue of a homosexual/transgender person. Though I cannot help but feel that they are a bit dead to the world. They do not feel that emotional about what is going on and tend to hide their emotions in favour of narrative.

 

The fact that you wrote this piece alone is a testiment to your writing abilities. Some people find topics like this hard to cover but you managed to do it without even batting and eyelid. Though the character seems to come off as more homosexual than transgender (and as such would not require the surgery) it still is interesting territory.

 

I couldn't help but chuckle when you named the transgender character as Mark.

[Eminence]

As Kaden said, I think the fact that you convey this style of writing in a very natural and believable way really does say a lot about the maturity of your writing style in general. Some of the description was a touch generic (the instant cliche of sweat being on the brow, for example... but we all use that one, don't we, haha) but at the same time the unique framing of the piece just sets it apart quite a bit from everything else.

 

One thing that caught my eye, aside from one or two grammatical errors which I won't bother mentioning, was the paragraph "I love anal, did I tell you that?" It came too soon (that's what she said). No sooner had you first touched upon that topic than you were repeating the sentiment already; it may have worked better by placing it a little further on in the timeline.