El Zilcho Posted June 26, 2009 Share Posted June 26, 2009 I would rate, but you guys are writing faster than I can rate. Plus El Zilcho seems to have given up on this. I just need some time. Given up? I'm not the one whose given up. You've not been around for ages, left it to hang. I've had stuff to do and so have you (I assume) but don't try and solely pin this on me. U R B A N I T A S Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eminence Posted June 26, 2009 Share Posted June 26, 2009 Oh come on guys, don't pass off the blame to the writers. You haven't rated any in ages, and even when there were only 3 or 4 to rate it still took DAYS, when it should've taken HOURS. It wasn't that you were offline or away... I saw you browsing and posting in the topic, but just no updates or activity. Even if there are tons of things to rate, you just need to work at them one by one. I don't see that happening at all. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rhoda Posted June 26, 2009 Share Posted June 26, 2009 Nobody's pinning anything on anyone, everyone needs to calm down but still, pitch in and pull your weight. Don't stop writing just because no-one appears to be rating; I'm sure you won't overwhelm the staff. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sam33 Posted June 26, 2009 Share Posted June 26, 2009 I think the solution should be more MODS or more active moderators. Because if not this will just fall like the IV BUYG. Which I quit in the end because there was about a gazillion stories and no feedback for them what so ever. No ones to blame just offering a suggestion to make this better Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Guru Posted June 26, 2009 Share Posted June 26, 2009 (edited) Well, if more MODS are needed, I guess I could be one. Is that okay? EDIT* Im going on vacation to Denmark on Sunday so if Im allowed to be a MOD I wont be around until the 8th of July. Oh yeah and also, BUYA, you can remove .Rafto from the list since I made this acoc*nt which Im using from now on. He aint coming back to life again. Edited June 26, 2009 by The Guru The butcher, the baker, time to meet your maker Tell you to your face, you ain't nuttin but a faker Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rucke Posted June 26, 2009 Share Posted June 26, 2009 (edited) CHPATER 1 - Right before World War III General Jeremy Stewart and Field Marshal Robert Banks walked up the stairs of the White House. Jeremy had been here many times before, and every time he got a special feeling. A feeling of patriotism and love towards America. The president was concerned about a situation that contained an export taxation of goods leaving China for Europe and the US. An important Chinese businessman, and also a politician who led a company called China's Defence Investments were behind the taxation. His name was Ying Zo Lang. The president was worried that other countries might join China's example. Jeremy had known Field Marshal Robert Banks for a long time. They had shared many missions together. Robert Banks was a man in his early fifties. He was a true patriot and loved his country. He had dark hair with stripes of grey. He had a face of steel and did rarely show any expressions. After entering the White House they were showed into the president's office. The office was beautifully decorated with expensive sculptures, paintings and all kind of arts. Jeremy and Robert sat down on a couch in waiting for the president to arrive. "You think the president will be able to hold this conflict on a diplomatic level sir?" General Jeremy Stewart asked Field Marshal Banks. "The president is smart no doubt, but if he won't be able to solve this problem, we'll have to do it." Banks replied. The doors of the office opened and President Jack Clarkwood walked in. President Clarkwood moved elegantly and quick. He was a man in his early sixties, had great hair and smile of victory. However, now the smile of victory gone with the wind. President Clarkwood looked worried and uneasy. He sat down behind his desk, overlooking his office, including the couch where Jeremy and Banks were sitting. He had a pen in his hand, which he nervously played around with. "I just talked to China's president, Hu Jintao. Apparently him and this Ying Zo Lang has some kind of friendly relationship and he does not support we try to stop him." President Clarkwood explained. "What does that mean? That they can just fool around with us?" Banks asked. "No of course not. I want you to meet my right-hand man and most trusted assistant called John Pinto at the airport. He got a private jet ready. You will be heading for China, where I want you to meet with Ying Zo Lang. Convince him that it will be in his best interest to stop the export taxation, or he can prepare for war." President Clarkwood said and left the office. Outside the White House was a limo waiting for Jeremy and Banks. The black limo took them to a private airport in the outskirts of Washington DC. In the limo Banks lighted a cigar. Jeremy couldn't understand why his boss was smoking; a man working for the military needed good health. However, Banks didn't fight very much, he just led the troops back from his base. He didn't need a good health. The limo reached the airport and stopped next to a small private jet. The president's assistant was already there. He was a man in his late forties, had short brown hair and was very shaved. He was dressed in a suit and had some kind of pass card hanging around his neck. "Field Marshal Robert Banks and General Jeremy Stewart?" John Pinto asked once Jeremy and Banks got out from the limo. "Yeah, and you are John Pinto, the president's right-hand man?" Banks asked. "We better get onboard; we need to be in China by tomorrow morning." John Pinto said. Jeremy loved flying private jets. Only a couple of hours flight between America and China. He had heard about this John Pinto a couple of times. Apparently he took care of many international meetings with important business people. He also owned a national weapon manufacturing company called Macton Industries, which was the biggest supplier of NATO's all weapons. Jeremy sipped on a whiskey drink while talking with Banks and John Pinto. Jeremy was 35 years old, he was born and raised in New Mexico and has served in the military his whole life. He was a good soldier and was quick to move up in the ranks. He was one of the best soldiers from his state, and that was probably the reason he was made General. It was early morning in China, a car picked them up at the airport and drove them to Ying Zo Lang's mansion. With being one of China's most wealthy businessmen Zo Lang could afford mansions like these. The car stopped by the gate, a guard controlled the passengers and let them in. Zo Lang was waiting for them at the stairs. John Pinto, who already knew Zo Lang introduced him to Jeremy and Banks. "They are simple here to guarantee my security while I we do business." John Pinto explained once they all had gathered inside Zo Lang's conference room. "So, you are here to stop the export taxation of goods leaving this country? Tell me John, does China not deserve this? Zo Lang asked with his Chinese accent. "This isn't about China, it's about putting money in your own pocket." Jeremy said. "If that's the way you want it, so be it. From now on we're through with NATO. We don't need you any more." Zo Lang said and left the room. Armed guards stormed the conference room. Jeremy, Banks and John Pinto all pulled up their Colt M1911 pistols and started to shoot at the guards. The guards shot back. Jeremy managed to shoot one of them in the stomach. The trio left the conference room through the backdoor. They ran through the hall and finally they came out on a balcony hanging over the ocean. Jeremy looked down. It was a high fall, plus he could see big rocks down there. He looked up and saw the guards coming closer. "We either take the risk of jumping or being killed by the guards." Jeremy said. "I say jump. John?" Banks asked. "Let's jump." John Pinto said. Jeremy, Banks and John jumped from the balcony. After falling a couple of seconds they finally hit the water. Stay tuned for part 2. Edited June 28, 2009 by Rucke Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rucke Posted June 26, 2009 Share Posted June 26, 2009 Did I say that I would like to switch to NATO? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ziggy455 Posted June 27, 2009 Share Posted June 27, 2009 (edited) Oh come on guys, don't pass off the blame to the writers. You haven't rated any in ages, and even when there were only 3 or 4 to rate it still took DAYS, when it should've taken HOURS. It wasn't that you were offline or away... I saw you browsing and posting in the topic, but just no updates or activity. Even if there are tons of things to rate, you just need to work at them one by one. I don't see that happening at all. You know what I'm tired off? Moderators who pin it on writers and writers who pin it on moderators. I tell you what I'll moderate this entire Thread from now on, cause so far it seems that I've been on this thread at least twice a day, Put over moderating rights to me. I'll mark down pointers and an alloted amount of cash depending on the skill of each story; not only that but I'll mark down any items purchased. All you have to do is make me a Moderator and I'll do it for every story since the last update, What do you say? Cause you can sit on your asses and point the finger at everybody you want but I'm going to step up to the plate and decide to CPR this topic back to life. I will gladly do it and I have alot of time on my hands... Make a choice. @ Rucke: Please Don't Double Post, Just Edit your story Post and Update it with what you want to do Thanks. Edited June 27, 2009 by Ziggy455 "I might have laughed if I'd have remembered how." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
StrappedEnd Posted June 27, 2009 Share Posted June 27, 2009 I wrote a story about 7 pages ago and just got added about a few days ago. im gonna have to call it quits on this. too much inactivity. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sam33 Posted June 27, 2009 Share Posted June 27, 2009 Oh come on guys, don't pass off the blame to the writers. You haven't rated any in ages, and even when there were only 3 or 4 to rate it still took DAYS, when it should've taken HOURS. It wasn't that you were offline or away... I saw you browsing and posting in the topic, but just no updates or activity. Even if there are tons of things to rate, you just need to work at them one by one. I don't see that happening at all. You know what I'm tired off? Moderators who pin it on writers and writers who pin it on moderators. I tell you what I'll moderate this entire Thread from now on, cause so far it seems that I've been on this thread at least twice a day, Put over moderating rights to me. I'll mark down pointers and an alloted amount of cash depending on the skill of each story; not only that but I'll mark down any items purchased. All you have to do is make me a Moderator and I'll do it for every story since the last update, What do you say? Cause you can sit on your asses and point the finger at everybody you want but I'm going to step up to the plate and decide to CPR this topic back to life. I will gladly do it and I have alot of time on my hands... Make a choice. @ Rucke: Please Don't Double Post, Just Edit your story Post and Update it with what you want to do Thanks. It is true. I'd vote for him. I mean he seems to be more active and helpful than any of the Mods here at all. No offence . Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Guru Posted June 27, 2009 Share Posted June 27, 2009 @ Ziggy, I also want to be a MOD but Im going on vacation to Denmark tomorrow so I could only start on the 8th. The butcher, the baker, time to meet your maker Tell you to your face, you ain't nuttin but a faker Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Build Up Your Army Posted June 27, 2009 Author Share Posted June 27, 2009 It's Ziggy455, I'll be managing this Topic from now on. Expect updates today Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ObsydianRaven Posted June 27, 2009 Share Posted June 27, 2009 Don't forget, the IRA has a new poster! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Guru Posted June 27, 2009 Share Posted June 27, 2009 Man... So I don't get to be a MOD? The butcher, the baker, time to meet your maker Tell you to your face, you ain't nuttin but a faker Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Zilcho Posted June 27, 2009 Share Posted June 27, 2009 Man... So I don't get to be a MOD? We'll see mate, how it goes along. U R B A N I T A S Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Build Up Your Army Posted June 28, 2009 Author Share Posted June 28, 2009 (edited) Stories. @ Eminence: Nice Character Description Em', a bit short but otherwis A great Chapter. $65. @ Osric: A nice first Chapter, Give us a little more insight on the Protagonist, otherwise; keep it up. $45 @ The Guru: A bit of a solid use of repetetive words but the story was described well, make sure you Spell Check in word or any other writing program. I noticed a few random mispelled words, all in all an okay chapter $30 @ mrpain: Nice Chapter Mate, good description but I found the repetetive use of 'Sergeant Zahavi' annoying me a little but I won't hold it against you. The ending left me wanting to read more though, kind of reminded me off a old war movie I saw once. $45 @ Ziggy455: Okay, well That's me and not to be accused of being self biased - I'll put down $20 for each story I wrote. $20 X 4. @ StoneyWhistle: Great first chapter, I really felt like the characters were all different and meaningful, nice choice of detail and words. A few random errors but all in all a nice start. $35. The second chapter was a bit long to read but it surpassed chapter 1 easily. $50. Chapter 3 seemed a little rushed and short , it did develop the Protagonist further though; which I enjoyed. $25. @ Rucke: A nice first chapter, not too long or too short. and it opens it up for a nice chapter 2. I'll be there to read it next. Nice one. $45. Purchases Dragonov Rifle purchased for Novoya Russia: -$500 Molotov Cocktails purchased for China: -$10 M24, Desert Eagle, AK-47,AR-15, Combat Knife, M60, MP5 purchased for IRA, (Greedy Bastards ): -$2,240 Factions. SethPenguin added to 'Irish Republican Army' mrpain added to Israel. All stories counted and added. Updated Finally Edited June 28, 2009 by Build Up Your Army Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Guru Posted June 28, 2009 Share Posted June 28, 2009 (edited) Ziggy you have to add $10 back because the Molotov Cocktails was already put down and money taken away. SO now you just took and extra $1o from China. Or I'm not sure but I saw that update a few days back already. EDIT* I checked China's money and we had $5100 after I requested to purchase Molotov Cocktails so from our first 2 stories we had $5110 so you've not added any money from my story and taken extra money away for getting confused with the Molotov Cocktail purchase. If I am correct, China should have $5130 right now. Just assure you are not suspecting me of any cheating here: In the beginning every Faction had $5000. Me and exclusive both wrote 1 story and we got $110 altogether from that so $5110. Then I requested to purchase Molotov Cocktails and we got it and we were charged $10. Then I wrote my 2nd Chapter, I got $30 so we should have $5130. Not $5090 Edited June 28, 2009 by The Guru The butcher, the baker, time to meet your maker Tell you to your face, you ain't nuttin but a faker Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
radicell Posted June 28, 2009 Share Posted June 28, 2009 I've been watching this for a while now, but did not join since it was a mess. Now that Ziggy has gotten things more or less under control, I'd like to join North Korea. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Zilcho Posted June 28, 2009 Share Posted June 28, 2009 Yes everybody give Ziggy a round of applause, he's a legend and has finally done what me and others have been incappable/unable to do. U R B A N I T A S Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Build Up Your Army Posted June 28, 2009 Author Share Posted June 28, 2009 The Molotov count and Chinese money has been corrected Now I can get things moving. Updates: Radicell been added to Noth Korea. 'Welcome to the Battlefield, boy' Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
General Goose Posted June 28, 2009 Share Posted June 28, 2009 I'm afraid I'm not able to contribute for a while, keep me on the list, but I'll be absent from reading and writing on this thread for a while due to RL things. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Build Up Your Army Posted June 28, 2009 Author Share Posted June 28, 2009 I'm afraid I'm not able to contribute for a while, keep me on the list, but I'll be absent from reading and writing on this thread for a while due to RL things. That's fine Goose, I'll keep you on the Grid Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rucke Posted June 28, 2009 Share Posted June 28, 2009 Stories. @ Eminence: Nice Character Description Em', a bit short but otherwis A great Chapter. $65. @ Osric: A nice first Chapter, Give us a little more insight on the Protagonist, otherwise; keep it up. $45 @ The Guru: A bit of a solid use of repetetive words but the story was described well, make sure you Spell Check in word or any other writing program. I noticed a few random mispelled words, all in all an okay chapter $30 @ mrpain: Nice Chapter Mate, good description but I found the repetetive use of 'Sergeant Zahavi' annoying me a little but I won't hold it against you. The ending left me wanting to read more though, kind of reminded me off a old war movie I saw once. $45 @ Ziggy455: Okay, well That's me and not to be accused of being self biased - I'll put down $20 for each story I wrote. $20 X 4. @ StoneyWhistle: Great first chapter, I really felt like the characters were all different and meaningful, nice choice of detail and words. A few random errors but all in all a nice start. $35. The second chapter was a bit long to read but it surpassed chapter 1 easily. $50. Chapter 3 seemed a little rushed and short , it did develop the Protagonist further though; which I enjoyed. $25. Purchases Dragonov Rifle purchased for Novoya Russia: -$500 Molotov Cocktails purchased for China: -$10 M24, Desert Eagle, AK-47,AR-15, Combat Knife, M60, MP5 purchased for IRA, (Greedy Bastards ): -$2,240 Factions. SethPenguin added to 'Irish Republican Army' mrpain added to Israel. All stories counted and added. Updated Finally I don't want to be a pain but you forgot to rate my story. It's back on page 11. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Build Up Your Army Posted June 28, 2009 Author Share Posted June 28, 2009 (edited) Stories. @ Eminence: Nice Character Description Em', a bit short but otherwis A great Chapter. $65. @ Osric: A nice first Chapter, Give us a little more insight on the Protagonist, otherwise; keep it up. $45 @ The Guru: A bit of a solid use of repetetive words but the story was described well, make sure you Spell Check in word or any other writing program. I noticed a few random mispelled words, all in all an okay chapter $30 @ mrpain: Nice Chapter Mate, good description but I found the repetetive use of 'Sergeant Zahavi' annoying me a little but I won't hold it against you. The ending left me wanting to read more though, kind of reminded me off a old war movie I saw once. $45 @ Ziggy455: Okay, well That's me and not to be accused of being self biased - I'll put down $20 for each story I wrote. $20 X 4. @ StoneyWhistle: Great first chapter, I really felt like the characters were all different and meaningful, nice choice of detail and words. A few random errors but all in all a nice start. $35. The second chapter was a bit long to read but it surpassed chapter 1 easily. $50. Chapter 3 seemed a little rushed and short , it did develop the Protagonist further though; which I enjoyed. $25. Purchases Dragonov Rifle purchased for Novoya Russia: -$500 Molotov Cocktails purchased for China: -$10 M24, Desert Eagle, AK-47,AR-15, Combat Knife, M60, MP5 purchased for IRA, (Greedy Bastards ): -$2,240 Factions. SethPenguin added to 'Irish Republican Army' mrpain added to Israel. All stories counted and added. Updated Finally I don't want to be a pain but you forgot to rate my story. It's back on page 11. I'm sorry Rucke, I'll see to it gets rated right now! check my Update post to see how much cash you got, your story has been counted aswell. Edited June 28, 2009 by Build Up Your Army Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rucke Posted June 28, 2009 Share Posted June 28, 2009 I'm sorry Rucke, I'll see to it gets rated right now! check my Update post to see how much cash you got, your story has been counted aswell. Alright, thanks Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Build Up Your Army Posted June 28, 2009 Author Share Posted June 28, 2009 Minor problems with coding fixed, although I'm not so sure why certain entries in the member list are a lighter blue than the rest. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eminence Posted June 28, 2009 Share Posted June 28, 2009 I'd just like to congratulate Ziggy on a job well done. Good stuff mate, long may it continue. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ziggy455 Posted June 28, 2009 Share Posted June 28, 2009 Thanks Em, Finally I'm writing well and doing something meaningful on here "I might have laughed if I'd have remembered how." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Zilcho Posted June 28, 2009 Share Posted June 28, 2009 Thanks Em, Finally I'm writing well and doing something meaningful on here You work has always been meaningful mate. Needless to say you've really got BUYA in order again, something of which i can't thank you enough. U R B A N I T A S Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ziggy455 Posted June 28, 2009 Share Posted June 28, 2009 Thanks Em, Finally I'm writing well and doing something meaningful on here You work has always been meaningful mate. Needless to say you've really got BUYA in order again, something of which i can't thank you enough. It's ok man, I'm glad to be doing this. On that note, I'll be posting more in BUYG aswell, since my Gta Undead story still hasn't got any feedback I'm going to freeze it while I work on something different...for now. "I might have laughed if I'd have remembered how." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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