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TomVDC

A Revengers' Tale

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TomVDC

This is my new story I hope you'll all enjoy it.

Credits to Chunk for the original phone name.

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Plot

Tom had escaped from his hometown too Vice City for an unknown fact you will get to know when it is near the end. After seven years, he comes home one day and he finds his house trashed and his wife killed, there's a note that says that now they're even. the player doesn't know who wrote it and the first thing the main character does is get back on the first flight to his hometown to get

revenge, the things is only two people now why he left, and the Main Character is one of them

 

 

Characters

Tom Dell Castillo

 

The 28 year-old protagonist of this story, he is a tall tanned man brown eyes and has black hair. For unknown reasons Tom Dell Castillo left his hometown of Ostend. He headed towards Vice City where he lived a nice life. A high position in Vice City’s most powerful lawyer’s office: Vice Justice, a fast car, a nice duplex apartment with sea view and a beautiful wife. Then his past caught up with him and when he arrived back home after a hard day of work, he found his apartment trashed and his wife dead. Being the prime suspect Tom skipped town, ready to avenge his wife’s death and put an end to it all.

 

Marylin Smoke

 

Tom Dell Castillo’s mother, living a peaceful life and working hard. Marylin is a good mother and is loved by her son; she is currently involved with Stan Balthazar. She lives in Roksem.

 

JP Dell Castillo

 

Tom’s father, travels a lot for the job, a man that doesn’t like being messed with. He has connections all over the world.

 

Stan Balthazar

 

Stan Balthazar, a true soldier, he is stationed in Sijsele where he is chief of the station. He also has a lot of connections and those could come in handy getting rid of unwanted attention. The new “friend” of Marylin.

 

Eva Santos

 

After JP divorced Marylin, he remarried this lovely lady with Brazilian roots. She’s the mother of Anna who’s her daughter also from a previous marriage. Tom hates her, and would do anything in the world to make her look bad in front of JP.

 

Anna Dell Castillo

 

Tom’s stepsister, she owns her own record company: Rainbow records, located in Gistel. When they were younger they didn’t get along well, but now that they’re older the dust has settled, or has it?

 

Yosh Rocks

 

One of Tom’s childhood friends, he is the only one who knows why Tom skipped town. He was in the East working for the Yakuza. But now he’s back.

 

A'Lynn Smith

 

Another of Tom's childhood acquaintances, A’Lynn is a successful lawyer that helps Tom and Yosh in their search for dirt on James Montgomery.

Tom and A’Lynn used to be best friends but an argument before Tom disappeared changed everything.

 

Tony Prince

 

Tony Prince is an American nightclub impresario. He owns both the Maisonette 9 and Hercules clubs in Liberty City, London and Las Venturas. He is introduced to Tom by A’Lynn Smith.

 

More characters coming along the way…

 

 

Gangs

 

The Montgomery family

 

Run by Jake Montgomery owner of the Ostend Casino. His family protects the casino, they are suspected to be a part of a worldwide human trafficking organization. They are owner of all the brothels in Ostend and they are notorious loan sharks. They are in constant war with the bigger Kings family from Bruges.

 

The Kings family

 

Run by Dave King, Hillary King’s younger brother. Their father’s family was left to them after he died. And since Hillary died in a “tragic accident”, Dave King went back to Belgium and took over at the age of 18. They run the bigger part of Bruges and rumors go even the mayor has debts to them.

 

East Side Syndicate

 

They control a part of the port and are responsible for bringing drugs into the region.

They are having competition from an unknown family that goes behind their back.

 

Map

 

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Edited by ~Vic Vance~

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Radio Stations

 

Raging Rockers: Hosted by Dwayne and Jethro

Iron Maiden- The Trooper

Love Fist- Dangerous Bastard

R.E.M- Losing My Religion

Genesis- Jesus He Knows Me

Bon Jovi- It’s My Life

AC/DC- Touch To Much

Dire Straits- Sultans Of Swing

Love Fist- Fist Fury

AC/DC- Back in Black

 

Hotel Lounge FM: Hosted by BJ Smith

Nina Simone- Feeling good

Amy Winehouse- Love is a loosing game

Senor Coconut & His orchestra- Smoke on the water

Deane Martin- Sway

Emiliana Torrini - I Heard It All Before

Sharon Jones & the Dap Kings-100 Days 100 Nights

Lou Reed- Perfect Day

The Bird and the Bee- Again and Again

Barry Adamson- Something wicked this way comes

 

Movie Sounds 98.7: Hosted by Kent Paul

Alicia Keys & Jack White - Another Way To Die

Paul Engemann- Push It To The limit

Nonpoint- In The Air Tonight

Chris Cornell- You Know My Name

Klaus Badelt- Black Pearl

Leki- Over the Rainbow

A View To A Kill- Duran Duran

Switchfoot- This is Home

Amy Holland- She’s on fire

 

Tha Scene: Hosted by Brian Johnson

50cent- PIMP

Snoop Dogg - Beautiful

P. Diddy - Bad Boy For Life

Tupac - Only God Can Judge Me

Will Smith- Men In Black

Xzibit- X

Xzibit & Young Maylay & Mc Ren & WC - Roll On Em

Ice Cube-Do Your Thang

The Game - Dreams

 

Pop(ular) Radio: Hosted by Mary-Beth Vance

Katy Perry- Hot ’N’ Cold

Amy MacDonald- This Is The Life

Avril Lavigne- Runaway

James Morrisson and Nelly Furtado- Broken Strings

Kylie Minogue- In My Arms

Kid Rock- All Summer Long

Amy Winehouse- Back to Black

Shakira- Hips Don’t Lie

Natasha Bedingfield- Unwritten

 

Nostalgia 101.1FM: Hosted by Barry Mickelthwaite

Phil Collins- Easy Lover

Elton John- I’m Still Standing

Bee Gees- Tragedy

The Buggles- Video Killed The Radio Star

Lynyrd Skynyrd- Free Bird

Billy Joel- Piano Man

Toto- Rosanna

Phil Collins- Sussudio

Brian Adams- Summer Of '69

 

 

Weapons

 

Handheld

Fists: Good for hand to hand fights.

Brass Knuckles: Causes more damage than normal fist fights.

Mace: Gives you a 30 sec advantage on your enemies.

Molotov cocktail: Big fire explosion when this is thrown.

Grenade: Causes an explosion after some seconds.

Smoke grenade: You’ll be invisible for your enemies, but be aware they’ll also be practically invisible for you.

 

 

Melee

Knife – Good old knife good for sneaking up to somebody from behind.

Machete - Can chop off limbs.

Baseball bat – One you used this one somebody they won’t have any intact bones left.

Golf Club - Not only good for golfing but also good for knocking people out.

Hammer – See Baseball Bat

Chainsaw - Can chop off limbs, takes a few seconds to get started.

 

Pistols

Glock - The basic pistol that most gangsters carry. Can be dual wielded, can have silencer added.

Desert Eagle - Powerful pistol, only seven shots, quick reload with clip.

Colt Python - Six shots, very slow manual reload, but this is compensated by a great amount of fire power.

Automatic 9mm – This weapon is known for its accuracy and liability.

 

Shotguns

Sawn off - Close quarters low damage shotgun, manual reload after two shots.

Winchester M1897 - Pump action Seven shot shotgun.

Assault Shotgun - A revolver 12-gauge shotgun created for the purpose of riot control and combat

 

Uzis

MAC-10 - Medium damage and range.

Mp5 - Powerful medium range sub- machine gun.

P-90 - A compact but powerful firearm for vehicle drivers, operators of crew-served weapons, support personnel, Special Forces and anti-terrorist units.

 

 

Rifles

Ak-47 - Slightly less accurate than the M4 but still an all round impressive rifle.

M4A1 Carbine - All purpose but machine gun.

Steyr AUG - High damage rifle .

 

 

Special

M249- 100 round light machine gun.

Flamethrower - Heavy duty flamethrower.

Rocket launcher - Powerful but inaccurate rocket grenade propeller.

M79 Grenade Launcher - Medium range grenade launcher, can fire all types of grenade.

 

Other

These weapons can be found in various areas in the city.

 

Barbed Wire

Pieces Of glass

Metal Bar

Bricks

Trashcan Lid

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Intro

 

Cutscene

 

You see a big jumbo jet landing and proceeding towards the airport. The camera cuts to the inside of the plane and it zooms in on Tom he’s getting up just like everybody else to get out his hand-luggage. The screen fades black again and the camera cuts too the inside of airport where Tom is waiting for his suitcase. In the meantime he gets out his Cockia V69

and dials a number. You hear the phone beeping and you hear the Voicemail.

 

Voicemail: Marylin Smoke is not available at the moment; please leave a message after the beep.

*BEEP*

Tom: Mom, it’s me I’m back and I was wondering if you know a place I could stay.

Call me back soon.

 

In the meantime Tom has spotted his suitcase and drops it on his luggage carrier.

The screen fades black again and then cuts to the front of the airport.

Tom’s phone starts ringing, he gets it out of his vest and put’s it against his ear.

 

Tom: Hello?

Marylin: Hey Tom, How was your flight?

Tom: Terrible, but I survived. So you got my message?

Marylin: Jeah, I’m sorry about your wife.

Tom: We’ll talk about that later. Did you find me a place to stay?

Marylin: Jeah, I called the Ostend Hotel, they still have some vacancies.

Tom: Good I’ll take a cab. I’ll come see you tonight.

Marylin: No need to take a cab, Stan has a day off; he’s coming towards the airport.

 

Marylin words aren’t cold yet and the green Merit owned by Stan drives up to him.

 

Tom: I see him mom, see you tonight.

Marylin: See you tonight son.

 

Tom puts his Cockia away, and walks up to Stan’s car. Stan gets out. The 1m80, bald, normal build man wearing a green sweater and blue jeans is immediately recognized by Tom.

 

Stan: Long time no see kid.

Tom: I agree, it’s been too long.

 

They give each other a friendly hug.

 

Stan: Let’s get to your hotel; the security guards are getting nervous.

Tom: F*ck those, assholes. It’s not like I’m bringing in a sh*tload of heroin. It’s worse here then in freaking Liberty City.

Stan: Well with all those illegal immigrants coming in, they have to be suspicious.

We’ll better leave, here you drive.

 

Stan tosses over the keys and gets in passenger seat.

 

End of Cutscene

 

Once you get in the car the radio station automatically jumps to Nostalgia 101.1FM. You get some basic driving controls and a hotel icon (user posted image) appears on screen. The route automatically lights up in blue on your radar. Drive to your hotel.

 

Stan: So I know you probably don’t want to talk about it, but you should.

Tom: This isn’t time or the place, we’ll discuss this later.

Stan: It isn’t your fault what happened in Vice City.

Tom: Well if I wouldn’t have run away from my problems we wouldn’t be in this situation.

Stan: You did what everyone would have done.

Tom: (Voice filled with rage) What are you saying?! You don’t even know what happened.

Stan: Calm down, we’ll have this conversation later.

 

The rest of the trip is quiet until you reach the hotel. You pull up in front of the hotel and this cutscene starts.

 

Cutscene

 

Stan and Tom both get out of the car. Tom gets his suitcase from the backseat and walks up to Stan, who has moved to the drivers’ seat.

 

Tom: I’m sorry, I didn’t mean it that way. I just need some rest. I’ll see you later.

Stan: I know what you mean Tom, I lost my wife too. It hurts like hell in the beginning, but after some time you have to get over it.

Tom: I know but why did they have to kill Sarah, she never had done anything wrong in her whole f*cking life and now she’s gone because of a mistake that I made a long time ago.

Stan: Look, if you ever feel like talking just call me.

Tom: Thanks.

 

The car drives off and Tom walks into the hotel, making his way to the reception desk.

 

Receptionist: Welcome to the Ostend Hotel, how may I help you?

Tom: I have a reservation.

Receptionist: Name please?

Tom: Dell Castillo, Tom Dell Castillo.

Receptionist: All right sir you’re staying on the 5th floor, room 504.

Tom: Thank you.

 

The camera cuts to the hallway and Tom enters his room.

He throws his suitcase on the bed. He walks in to the bathroom and throws some water in to his face.

 

Tom: If only they knew the real reason why I came back…

 

[End Cutscene]

 

Intro: Home Coming passed

 

So that's it you can post now

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Chunk

Nice start mate. I hope you continue with this, could be something I'll enjoy reading.

 

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Nice start mate. I hope you continue with this, could be something I'll enjoy reading.

 

Keep it up. icon14.gif

 

A positive comment on one of my stories in English. (Don't see GTA: The Sequel)

Pinch me I'm dreaming.

But then again I already knew you liked it since I gave you a sneak preview.

 

grtz

Tom

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It's good that you have the vital details needed before you start something as time consuming and challenging as a script, so well done for adding weapons and songs, it all adds to the experience. One thing I will say (and I say it to almost every script I look at) is it's so much easier for you and for us in terms of character distinguishing when you colour code your characters names. Below, I've taken an extract to show you what I mean.

 

 

Stan and Tom both get out of the car. Tom gets his suitcase from the backseat and walks up to Stan, who has moved to the drivers’ seat.

 

Tom: I’m sorry, I didn’t mean it that way. I just need some rest. I’ll see you later.

Stan: I know what you mean Tom, I lost my wife too. It hurts like hell in the beginning, but after some time you have to get over it.

Tom: I know but why did they have to kill Sarah, she never had done anything wrong in her whole f*cking life and now she’s gone because of a mistake that I made a long time ago.

Stan: Look, if you ever feel like talking just call me.

Tom: Thanks.

 

The car drives off and Tom walks into the hotel, making his way to the reception desk.

 

As well as colouring them, I've also put them in bold to further set them apart from what's being said. Keep it up.

 

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It's good that you have the vital details needed before you start something as time consuming and challenging as a script, so well done for adding weapons and songs, it all adds to the experience. One thing I will say (and I say it to almost every script I look at) is it's so much easier for you and for us in terms of character distinguishing when you colour code your characters names. Below, I've taken an extract to show you what I mean.

 

 

Stan and Tom both get out of the car. Tom gets his suitcase from the backseat and walks up to Stan, who has moved to the drivers’ seat.

 

Tom: I’m sorry, I didn’t mean it that way. I just need some rest. I’ll see you later.

Stan: I know what you mean Tom, I lost my wife too. It hurts like hell in the beginning, but after some time you have to get over it.

Tom: I know but why did they have to kill Sarah, she never had done anything wrong in her whole f*cking life and now she’s gone because of a mistake that I made a long time ago.

Stan: Look, if you ever feel like talking just call me.

Tom: Thanks.

 

The car drives off and Tom walks into the hotel, making his way to the reception desk.

 

As well as colouring them, I've also put them in bold to further set them apart from what's being said. Keep it up.

 

Thank you very much, it's an honor that a writer like you also likes it, I'll take your advice and change it.

 

grtz

Tom

 

EDIT: That's done, and you're right.

Why didn't I think of that... tounge.gif

Edited by ~Vic Vance~

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Tyla

Nice work, man. You've got a good plotline here and a set of characters who have potential. The camera positions and location details were explained well. I don't really know much about Belgium, so maybe a GTA fan-fic can up my knowledge on the country, as you mostly learn whilst reading, and pay more attention when your interested. I'll look forward to reading more of your script when more missions come through. icon14.gif

 

The songs are good, too. I bet Barry Mickelwaite would have some interesting stories to tell about his time managing Phil Collins and the debt he got him into with Giorgio Forelli. One song I just have to suggest is "A View to a Kill" by Duran Duran, from the James Bond movie of the same name, which would be fitting for Kent Paul's radio station.

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Nice work, man. You've got a good plotline here and a set of characters who have potential. The camera positions and location details were explained well. I don't really know much about Belgium, so maybe a GTA fan-fic can up my knowledge on the country, as you mostly learn whilst reading, and pay more attention when your interested. I'll look forward to reading more of your script when more missions come through. icon14.gif

 

The songs are good, too. I bet Barry Mickelwaite would have some interesting stories to tell about his time managing Phil Collins and the debt he got him into with Giorgio Forelli. One song I just have to suggest is "A View to a Kill" by Duran Duran, from the James Bond movie of the same name, which would be fitting for Kent Paul's radio station.

 

I added it, and yes Barry will be giving us some great stories.

Also explaining how he got fired by Phil.

But that will be a short story in between missions.

 

grtz

Tom

 

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Very gritty and nice; exactly the kind of thing I'm into. ph34r.gif

 

I'll be following this. icon14.gif

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Very gritty and nice; exactly the kind of thing I'm into. ph34r.gif

 

I'll be following this. icon14.gif

 

Sh*t with so many good writers reading it I feel a big pressure. But I'm just writing for fun and I'm glad you like it.

 

Tell me Oxi, the Cockia V69 did it for you didn't it?

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Tell me Oxi, the Cockia V69 did it for you didn't it?

ph34r.gif Perhaps. I refuse to comment explicitly.

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Here I am with another chapter, I hope you guys like it as much as you liked the intro.

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You spawn in your room, wearing the same black vest and jeans, you wore when you arrived. Your cellphone rings. You get instructions how to use your cellphone. Accept the conversation. On your cellphone screen appears this text: Calling… Marylin Smoke. When you accept, the conversation starts.

 

Tom: Hello mom.

Marylin: Hello honey, it’s just to let you know we reserved in ‘The Marina’ at 7PM.

Tom: Okay, I’ll take a cab then.

Marylin: See you later.

 

You are now free to roam around the city every hour you will be alerted to go to the restaurant which is marked with on your radar. When you arrive there the mission starts.

 

Mission 1: Freedom Of The Press?

 

[Cutscene]

 

The camera zooms in on Tom’s table.

You see Stan, Marylin and Tom laughing and chatting.

 

Stan: So have you seen you’re stepsister yet?

Tom: No I haven’t had the time; I’ll go and visit her later.

Marylin: That’s a good idea, you should really see her new building. It’s magnificent.

Stan: Jeah, did you hear about that new star that signed a record contract at Rainbow Records?

Tom: No, what’s so interesting about him?

Marylin: Well nobody knows who he is…

He’s more mysterious then area 69, and I thought that Anna might need some help keeping his identity secret.

Tom: Good I’ll go see her.

 

[End Of Cutscene]

 

You’re standing in front of ‘The Marina’. A yellow blip appears on your map. The blip is located in Gistel and stands for the Rainbow Records studios. There’s a bus stop right across the street, you get the instructions how to use public transport. You make your way to the busstop and you have to wait ‘till the bus arrives. Once it arrives you have to get in using the same button as for the car. You have the option to skip the trip or to watch the beautiful scenery of the country and the busy streets of the city. It doesn’t matter what you chose you get this cutscene when you arrive in Gistel.

 

[Cutscene]

 

The camera cuts to Tom’s perspective. He’s looking through the window.

The once peaceful village of Gistel had completely changed, what used to be Tom’s school was now trashed, windows were shattered and the walls were filled with graffiti. While Tom passed the village green he saw some black kids fighting with skinheads. The bus continuous and then stops a little past the market. The camera cut’s to outside of the bus, the doors open and Tom gets out. The camera then cuts towards the front of a big white modern building. Tom pushes the intercom button.

 

Receptionist: Who are you?

Tom: Tell Anna that her big brother is back.

Receptionist: Please come in sir.

 

Tom walks trough the door and finds himself in a huge entrance hall with big crystal chandeliers and even a little fountain. Tom looks around, and eventually finds the reception. The receptionist is a cute 25 year-old woman, with long black hair and trendy designer glasses.

 

Receptionist: Anna is excepting you just take the elevator to the sixth floor.

Tom: Thank you.

 

Tom walks away from the reception.

 

[End of Cutscene]

 

You are now in the middle of the entrance hall; you have to make your way to the elevators.

Once you get in the elevator you get the choice off which floor you want to go, select the sixth floor.

The elevator door closes and you quickly go up.

The door opens again and there’s a floating yellow arrow at the end of the hall.

Make your way to it. Once you get there another cutscene starts.

 

[Cutscene]

 

You see Anna pacing up and down in her office a bit like Ken Rosenberg always did; Anna is 1m65 and brown haired, when Tom knocks on the door and comes in, she immediately runs to him and gives him a hug.

 

Tom: Good to see you to.

Anna: You are a present from heaven.

Tom: Why?

Anna: That isn’t important at the moment; can you do me a favor?

Tom: Sure, what do I need to do.?

Anna: There’s a reporter that found out who my mystery artist is, I need you to make sure he won’t tell anybody.

Tom: No problem, do you know where I can find him?

Anna: He lives in an apartment block in Bekegem.

Apartment 3C.

Tom: I’ll get going right away.

 

Tom leaves the room and Anna goes to sit behind her desk again, where she snores a line of coke.

 

[End of Cutscene]

 

You’re standing in front of the building, take the silver Admiral parked outside and make your way towards the apartment block.

 

Tom: God, I hope she knows what she is doing. So far for the freedom of the press.

 

You make your way past the gangs in Gistel and onto the country road. There’s a lot of traffic so you won’t be able to drive really fast. Once you arrive in front of rundown building, Tom automatically gets out of the car.

 

Tom: Damn, looks like working for the newspaper doesn’t pay good.

 

When you make your way towards the front door you notice the door is already forced open.

 

Tom: They’re really making this easy aren’t they.

 

Make your way up the rundown stairs towards the apartment door. Once you get in front of the door you get the instructions how to kick open a door. Use the combo you just learned and kick open the door. The reporter is and elder man sitting in the couch watching CNT news.

 

Tom: You know to much old man.

Reporter: No, please don’t kill me.

 

Walk over to the man and kill him using some basis fighting moves that are shown in the upper left corner of your screen. Once he’s dead another cutscene starts.

 

[Cutscene]

 

Tom walks over to the fridge and gets out some strong liquor. He smashes all bottles against the floor and takes out a lighter.

 

Tom: Sorry, but family comes first.

 

Tom’s face shows compassion with the practically innocent men.

The camera then cuts to the inside of the silver Admiral, you see the apartment block going down in flames. Tom gets out his phone and dials Anna’s number.

 

Tom: It’s done, he won’t bother you anymore.

Anna: Thank you, come see me anytime if you need some more work.

 

Mission Passed: Respect +

 

There appears an user posted image on your map where Rainbow Records is located.

 

 

 

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I'm actually pleasently suprised at how good this is. Keep this up Tom, try and read more books and see more films, in English. This will help you get your head around some of the finer points of the British language. Althought, what I've seen so far is quite impressive. Keep it up icon14.gif

 

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Very good job again Tom, I'm liking this.

 

One of the little things I like is the little icons. Makes it more realistic and I find them to be pretty spiffy. Keep it up. icon14.gif

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One of the little things I like is the little icons. Makes it more realistic and I find them to be pretty spiffy. Keep it up. icon14.gif

Agreed. Also, try to use different colours for different characters if you can. I like how you've taken my advice on board, but one colour for all characters could quite easily tire someone's eyes. Engage us, and use a wide variety of colour.

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One of the little things I like is the little icons. Makes it more realistic and I find them to be pretty spiffy. Keep it up. icon14.gif

Agreed. Also, try to use different colours for different characters if you can. I like how you've taken my advice on board, but one colour for all characters could quite easily tire someone's eyes. Engage us, and use a wide variety of colour.

I'm gonna' have to back Tom up here, colour coding each character is effort. It really is the most repetitive thing ever and that's the reason why I don't do it any more. Especially using different colours and colours that aren't on the drop down menu.

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The story has lots of potential. Nice start, mate. Love the characters. icon14.gif

 

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Thanks for the all the nice comments...

I love those little icons too.

They really add something extra to it.

 

Sorry, no chapter this time, school= pain in the ass.

Probably sometime this week.

 

grtz

Tom

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Here's a new chapter, it might not be as good as the last one since it's been writtin with an incredible head-ache. I've been ill since Monday.

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After the previous mission you are again free to roam around, after 5 minutes you can expect a call. The phone starts ringing. Calling… Unknown Caller. You are free to accept this call or not, either way in the long run you have to accept it. When you do a conversation starts.

 

Unknown caller: Am I talking to Tom Dell Castillo?

Tom: Yes you are. Who am I talking to?

Unknown caller: That doesn’t matter, I noticed you’ve been causing some chaos in Bekegem.

Tom: How do you know it was me?

Unknown caller: I never give my sources. Either way meet me at the Ostend Beach, near the Casino.

Tom: Why should I trust a complete stranger?

Unknown caller: I might have something interesting for you…

 

The phone call ends and Tom puts his Cockia away. After this phone call a user posted image appears at Ostend Beach.

 

(((Since I know you are all interested in the user posted image we’ll do the user posted image first.)))

 

Make your way to Rainbow Records in front of the building there’s a yellow marker ready to trigger the mission.

 

Mission 2: Born to be Wild

 

[Cutscene]

 

Tom is walking down the hallway towards Anna’s office, when he’s there he’s abruptly stopped by a bodyguard.

 

Bodyguard: Sorry sir, miss Anna doesn’t want any company at the moment.

Tom: What kind of bullsh*t is this? Tell her Tom is here to see her.

 

The bodyguard looks like he has heard this a million times before and then turns around, he knocks on the door and then enters. The man has a short conversation and then turns back to Tom.

 

Bodyguard: Oke sir, go ahead.

 

The camera cuts to the inside of the room, you see Tom entering and Anna sitting behind her desk. There’s also another man, he’s wearing a brown shirt and a pair of jeans, he has blond hair and a goatee.

 

Anna: Tom, I would like to introduce u to Kevin Prince, he’s my mystery artist.

Tom: Well if it weren’t for me, his identity wouldn’t much of a secret anymore would it.

Anna: Yes, yes I know, but we have another problem. Everyone going in and out of this building is being monitored by the paparazzi. The problem isn’t getting him in, it’s we need to get him out.

Tom: Well how did you get him in?

Anna: We drove him in with a big limousine with blended windows. The problem is the reporter you killed managed to break one of the windows and get a shot of him in the limousine. So we can’t risk it to drive him out again the same way.

Tom: So you want me to get him out?

Kevin: Not only getting me out, but getting me to the airport.

Anna: He needs to leave the country, we don’t want to risk his identity being exposed.

Tom: The official release of his album and with that his identity is next week. Why wait till now to get him out of here? Why don’t you just keep him in here?

Anna: I’m thinking one of the technicians is a mole. We need to get Kevin out of here as fast as possible.

Tom: And by we you mean me don’t you?

Anna: Exactly. But you really have to change clothes that black vest and jeans won’t cut it.

Go to Victory in Zandvoorde and get some biker clothes.

Tom: Biker clothes?

Anna: Everyday the local biker gang passes here, and you’re just going to drive with them, like that the paparazzi won’t notice you.

Tom: God, I’m not risking my life for nothing. What does he pay?

Kevin: 500€ nothing more, nothing less if you get me to the airport safely.

Tom: Good I’ll do it.

 

[End Of Cutscene]

 

The screen fades black and you hear Tom say: “Bikers, what the hell am I getting myself into?”

You spawn in the underground garage of Rainbow Records and a waypoint appears at Victory.

Get a car and make your way towards Victory. If you finally managed to get there enter the shop.

There are a lot of motorcycles displayed in the showroom. Make your way past them to the back of the room where the clothes are. Buy a jacket, a pair of pants boots and a helmet. This time it’s free of charge because Kevin is paying, so go wild and buy the most expensive sh*t because you could easily pay up to more than 1000€ for a simple jacket. When you’re done make your way through the showroom and when you get out there’s a man on a bike waiting on the other side of the street. When you get there a cutscene starts

 

[Cutscene]

 

Man: Feeling like a real biker now don’t ya boy?

Tom: No comment.

 

The man starts laughing hysterically until Tom grabs him by the arm and pushes him against the steering wheel. The man screams like a little girl.

 

Man: Stop it, asshole.

Tom: Sh*t the f*ck up jackass, is this the bike Anna send?

Man: Anna?? Oh you mean miss Del Castillo, so you’re pretty intimate with her boy? You’re banging her ain’t ya?

Tell me, is she really that good in bed?

 

[End of Cutscene]

 

You are now again in full control of Tom, kick the man from the bike, using the same combo to kick open a door.

 

Man: What are you doing man? I was just joking man.

Tom: Well I’m not.

 

Kick and punch him using various combo’s you learned in the last missions. When he’s knocked out you need to get on the bike.

 

Tom: She’s my sister idiot.

 

A new waypoint appears at Rainbow Records go and pick up Kevin. While driving back to Gistel it’s epic to listen to Raging Rockers and putting the camera in cinematic mode. At a certain moment Jethro talks about the fire in an apartment block in Bekegem.

 

Tom: Stupid f*cks, they actually think it was a short circuit. The cops are really as ignorant as they used to be back in 2002. Somethings don’t change.

 

When you park up again in the underground car park of R.R. Kevin comes walking to you in biker costume.

 

Kevin: That leather suits you… Ever been to an SM club?

Tom: No. Why? You’ve been there lately?

 

Kevin laughs and climbs on the back of the bike.

 

Kevin: You know for a guy that just lost his wife you’re a pretty funny guy.

Tom: And for an annoying rich kid you’re really an annoying rich kid.

Kevin: Thank you very much.

Now get going.

 

Drive out of the car park and join the bikers that are passing by. There’s a spot marked on the ground where you should drive. When you’re passing through Leffinge all of the sudden shots are heard. The biker next to you starts yelling.

 

Biker: F*cking Demons Of Life!!! C’mon we’re The Found let’s show them a lesson.

 

All the bikers get out there weapons and start shooting the D.O.L.. Kevin gets out a sawn-off shotgun and shoots at a D.O.L. in front of you.

 

Tom: Next time you shoot try not to blow of my ear.

Goddamnit, I’ll be deaf for the next five hours. Where did you even get that?

Kevin: That doesn’t matter just get me to the airport.

 

Kevin blows all the D.O.L.’s in the way of their bikes while you make your way towards the airport. When you arrive there a cutscene starts.

 

[Cutscene]

 

Kevin gets of the bike and takes of the helmet.

 

Kevin: You did good here take this.

 

Kevin hands you the money and the gun.

 

Tom: What do you want me to do with the bike?

Kevin: Keep it, it might come in handy one time.

Tom: Well thank you.

 

[End of Cutscene]

 

Mission Passed: Respect +

+500€

 

The biker clothes are in your wardrobe at your hotel room. From now on you can just put on the biker clothes, get on a motorcycle and join a random group of bikers passing by. From now on you can get biker clothes from Victory.

 

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Hope you liked it, leave some comments. And btw for you that haven't found it out yet Victory is a reference to Triumph

 

Grtz

Tom

Edited by ~Vic Vance~

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TomVDC

Damnit no comments yet.

I'm sorry for the lack of updates, I have an idea to do a sort of Flashback series that goes parallel with this one on how certain characters like Bary *insert complicated name* ended up working for a radio station. There will probably be very slow updates since the exams start wednesday and I can't afford to have bad grades. So I'll leave you know and I might post a chapter later.

Let me know what you think about the Flashback idea.

 

grtz

Tom

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Kowaah

Just like i would (do) write all the story, Keep it up!

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Motherstep

Sorry I've not left feedback. Keep going with this, I'll post back with comments after another installment.

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Hell somebody bumped my topic, well I'm writing on it but it needs that little extra touch for this part and I can't really find it.

But I promise to have this updated before the end of the week.

 

grtz

Tom

 

Btw thanks for the replying.

 

Edit: @Masterkraft: Why don't you have a look at mission 2 in the meantime?

Edited by ~Vic Vance~

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Kowaah

Woops, it wasn't my fault, the topic was in your signature and i thought post in it because i was thinking you posted it before week or so..

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Woops, it wasn't my fault, the topic was in your signature and i thought post in it because i was thinking you posted it before week or so..

 

No problem, mate that was the encouragement I needed to open Word again and finish the chapter it'll be up in an couple of minutes.

 

grtz

Tom

 

 

 

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Oke here it is guys Mission 3 of "A Revengers' Tale". Hope you enjoy.

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Go to your hotel and change clothes. You can now choose between your original clothes and your motorcycles clothes, you can also combine them. Once your done make your way to the user posted image at Ostend Beach. When you’ve managed to get there walk over to the changing cabins. There’s a yellow marker floating there, walk in it to trigger the mission

 

Mission 3: Exterminator

 

[Cutscene]

 

Tom is waiting in front of a cabin looking at the sea, you can see the boats go by and the construction site further in sea where they are building the wind turbines. Suddenly he is grabbed from behind and dragged into the dark cabin.

 

Tom: Get you hands off of me motherf*cker.

Unknown man: Shut the f*ck up.

Tom: Who the hell are you?

 

The man turns on the light. Tom sees the man’s face and looks surprised.

 

Tom: Yosh, what in gods name are you doing here?

I thought you were in Asia, doing the Yakuza’s dirty work.

Yosh: Jeah until the boss found out I was banging his daughter.

 

Tom can’t help himself and laughs.

 

Yosh: What do you think it’s funny putting your clothes back on while there’s a brutal Yakuza hitman knocking on the door with a bullet in his gun that has your name on it?

Tom: Typical, but why did you come back. I thought we agreed to leave this place behind us and never come back.

Yosh: I could ask you the same question you know. But to answer your question I was attacked by a tall European man, I suppose he was Belgian I recognized the accent: the only thing he said was that Saint-Jimmy wants to get even. The problem is the only Saint-Jimmy I know is…

Tom: James Montgomery, the guy that hates us so much he would blow up the whole city if he knew we were here, just to make sure we’re dead. Damnit, but how did he find us…

 

Tom gets up and starts pacing around in the cabin.

 

Tom: Did something special happen before the attack?

Yosh: I was contacted by this high class Russian drug dealer called Aleksei Drevnerussky.

He wanted me to cover a deal. He asked me to meet him at a location of his choice. Being as greedy as I am I jumped on the deal. That’s where it happened, I thought it was pure coincidence but now that I think about it, Jimmy could have asked him to lure me. THE SON OF A B*TCH!!!

 

Yosh jumps up and kicks away the trashcan.

 

Tom: Calm the f*ck down that isn’t going to help us. First we should gain some info on Jimmy. It’s been a long time and a lot has changed.

Yosh: Jeah you’re right. I’ll contact my sources.

Tom: Good call me when you have something.

 

Tom leaves the cabin.

 

[End Of Cutscene]

 

You are in front of the cabin, it started raining in the meantime. A yellow blip appears in Ostend where the police station is located. Go there and find out as much about James Montgomery as possible. You can just take your car but, in this mission a new way cheap way of travelling in Ostend is introduced: the tram. If you choose to take the tram walk towards one of the stops that is marked with this icon: user posted image . Walk up towards one of the entrance doors and walk in, it’s a fixed rate so no matter where you go within the city you will only pay €2 the system is comparable with the subway system in IV but it’s all on street level. Either way when you arrive in front of the police station your Cockia rings. Accept the phone call, it’s Yosh.

 

Tom: So did you find anything out yet?

Yosh: Nothing much, how about you?

Tom: I’ve just arrived at the police station, but I have no idea how I’ll get access to their system.

Yosh: Their system? Man, you’ve been in the States for too long. These are the Belgian pig’s man; they still do everything by hand.

Tom: F*cking hell; then how am I supposed to break in to their archive?

Yosh: Just ask for Melany Gadeyne, she’ll get you in.

Tom: You sure about that, last I remember your plans didn’t always go as planned.

Yosh: F*ck you man! Call me when you’ve got the info.

 

The conversation is abruptly ended, make your way towards the marker in front of the police station. When you enter it a cutscene starts.

 

[Cutscene]

 

Tom walks in to the old fashion police station, an officer with grey hair and a moustache is sitting behind a desk buzzing people in and out.

 

Tom: I’m an old friend of Melany Gadeyne, I was told she was here by one of our mutual friends.

Could I see her please?

Officer: You can’t see her, she’s questioning a suspect.

Tom: Where is she?

Officer: Look it may take a while, why don’t you wait over there, there’s a bench.

Tom: Oke then, I’ll drop by later.

 

[End Of Cutscene]

 

You are back outside, you notice a police car pulling up to the parking garage. This is your chance hurry up and make your way in. Stay in the shadows and use of the cover system to make your way through the building. When you are trough the gate you see the police officers pulling up and getting out of their car. One of them is finishing a donut

 

Police officer 1: These donuts from Burger Shot are sh*t.

I told you we should have gone to Rusty Rings.

Police officer 2: Stop whining like a b*tch and eat the f*cking donut, it’s fine.

 

The officers exit the garage, crouch towards the staircase, from what you can make up of the old sign you should go down one more floor to reach the archive. Stealthily make you’re way down the stairs and through the hallway. You can hear these are the interrogation room. Cops are playing the classic good cop, bad cop game. At the end of the hall there’s an elevator and next to it there’s a door with a marker in front of it, enter it.

 

[Cutscene]

 

Tom enters the room, it’s huge (something you would expect it to be from the outside). The camera changes again and you see Tom strolling trough the corridors between the racks searching for that one file. Tom finally finds it and puts it inside his jacket. When he’s just about the exit a cop enters. The camera turns to a corner overlooking what’s happening.

 

Cop: Who are you?

Tom: Relax man, I'm a friend of Melany Gadeyne, she can explain everything.

Cop: Oke.

 

The man suddenly notices that Tom’s holding his trustworthy Sawn-off that he acquired in the last mission.

 

Cop: Oh my god, oh my god!

 

The cop pulls out his gun and aims it at Tom; the camera cuts to Tom’s view.

 

Cop: Don’t you freaking move, asshole!

Tom: I can explain man.

Cop: Shut the f*ck up and drop you gun!

 

Tom pulls out his gun even before the cop can react and blasts him through the door.

 

[End of Cutscene]

 

You now have a four star wanted level. Make your way through the police station towards the front door. Blast the unsuspecting cops and take advantage by picking up the weapons they drop. When you’ve made your way too the staircase at the end of the hall the elevator opens and a squad of N.O.O.S.E. officers storms towards you. Take cover behind a wall.

 

N.O.O.S.E. officer: Didn’t expect this, huh you f*cking piece of sh*t.

Tom: Well I was wondering why it took you assholes so long.

N.O.O.S.E. officer 2:Cover me man, I’m taking this bitch down.

 

Poke your sawn-off around the corner and blast the heavily armed N.O.O.S.E. officer in the face.

 

N.O.O.S.E. officer: Sh*t, Jerry! Ow, you’re going down now man.

 

The N.O.O.S.E. officers are moving in, shoot the fuse box on the other side of the wall. When you shoot it the whole hall goes black, take advantage of it to take out the confused N.O.O.S.E. officers and pick up their P-90’s.

Now run up the staircase. Shoot every officer that stands in your way and don’t let anyone stop you. Once you’re back in the garage take one of the cop cars and make your way out, use the narrow alleyways and escape the four star wanted level.

 

Mission Passed

 

The game autosaves, and a user posted image appears on the radar

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I really hope you guys liked it, comment and tel me what I can do to improve.

 

grtz

Tom

Edited by ~Vic Vance~

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Kowaah

Nice, never thought of what would happen. I'll guess - you already have storyline ending in mind, only you want make it better after every mission you think of, right?

 

And only bad thing imo is that you call it Belgium, it's real country and everything happens in it, you better call it Europe or Yurop. icon14.gif

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Motherstep

Told you I'd be back.

 

It's looking good. Aside from a few grammatical errors, this is a really enjoyable piece. The good thing about game-scripts is anyone can do them and a story can be put across so simply and efficiently. The bad thing however is... well... anyone can do them. While I'm not saying yours doesn't have choice moments, you need to add a bit more excitement; just because it's a script it doesn't mean you can't describe things more, set the scene for us. Maybe a short paragraph introducing an environment or a character? It's the little things that can really bring your script to life. I can't fault anything else other than the grammar. The colour coding for characters is spot on and makes things easier still to read. Keep it up. icon14.gif

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Told you I'd be back.

 

It's looking good. Aside from a few grammatical errors, this is a really enjoyable piece. The good thing about game-scripts is anyone can do them and a story can be put across so simply and efficiently. The bad thing however is... well... anyone can do them. While I'm not saying yours doesn't have choice moments, you need to add a bit more excitement; just because it's a script it doesn't mean you can't describe things more, set the scene for us. Maybe a short paragraph introducing an environment or a character? It's the little things that can really bring your script to life. I can't fault anything else other than the grammar. The colour coding for characters is spot on and makes things easier still to read. Keep it up. icon14.gif

Hey guys,

 

Glad to hear that Masterkraft, I'll see what I can do.

Well I've had a lot of personal sh*t to deal with+ I've been sick; but now I'm back so expect a new mission soon.

 

grtz

Tom

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