TomVDC Posted May 31, 2009 Share Posted May 31, 2009 A little update from Will... I'm having second thoughts about 'Solomon's City', I don't have nearly as many ideas as I had for San Andreas Stories, and I've probably rushed in to it. I just can't seem to find the inspiration or motivation to get my act together and actually write it. As well as having a few exams coming up, life's been busy at the moment, so I can't see me getting it sorted anytime soon. What I need is a howitzer up my arse. I've been reading a few books recently, and I am starting to see where my writing went wrong in the past and how it can be drastically improved. I'm seriously considering re-writing Bravo Seven Down, or maybe starting a completely new war story. That was really fun to write. There's an idea that's been on the tip of my tongue for quite a few months now, one that I think could be easily turned in to a book. I'm thinking of taking a step towards serious writing and taking a plunge in the deep end. But that would mean that I'd have to get feedback off you individually, I couldn't openly post it, because I'll lose all publishing rights. It's a science fiction/crime flick. Too bad to hear about Solomon's City Will. But you have to do what feels good to do. Oh jeah there's a new chapter posted in " A Revengers' Tale" grtz Tom Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DemonKing Posted May 31, 2009 Share Posted May 31, 2009 If anybody could give me feedback in Shards of Darkness it would be much appreciated. Whether I should continue writing chapters or just stop? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lethal Nizzle Posted May 31, 2009 Share Posted May 31, 2009 I've been having the idea of a random battle scenario one-shot floating around my head for a few days. After watching the MW2 trailer I've wanted to write along those lines. So basically it'll be the generic Allies vs. Opfor, but I'll simply write it for an exercise for my writing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Zilcho Posted May 31, 2009 Share Posted May 31, 2009 If anybody could give me feedback in Shards of Darkness it would be much appreciated. Whether I should continue writing chapters or just stop? Keep it going mate, I'm sure you'll get into the flow of it and you'll soon be comfortable with it. Don't stop! U R B A N I T A S Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DemonKing Posted May 31, 2009 Share Posted May 31, 2009 If anybody could give me feedback in Shards of Darkness it would be much appreciated. Whether I should continue writing chapters or just stop? Keep it going mate, I'm sure you'll get into the flow of it and you'll soon be comfortable with it. Don't stop! Alright, well I'll try and churn out another chapter tommorow. I'm going to place some twists in there that will blow your mind! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
VCRules86 Posted May 31, 2009 Share Posted May 31, 2009 Well I have another idea I've been fiddling with recently. Chunk already knows about it but everyone else doesn't. It won't be up here for a while since I'm working on Family Loyalty (my first story that has actually gotten good feedback ) but I figured I would give you guys a brief teaser. After 2 failed attempts at a zombie story I have I have something that will do good here. It's going to borrow a lot of ideas from an old storY I wrote here called Undead Apocalypse but this one will be much more polished and refined. So without further rambling I give you a teaser excerpt from, The Outbreak ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Thunder claps and a harsh rain pelts the delapitated streets of Franklinsville, Pennsylvania. The violent wrath of Mother Nature is visible for miles as the thunder rours throughout the city accompanied by the spectacular blue flashes of lightning that explode out of the sky every few seconds, briefly illuminating the horrific metropolis that lies below. The storm is unaware of the hell that envelopes the land beneath it, it is oblivious to the many citizens who frantically fight for their very survival against a monster so grotesque and abnormal that lucifer himself would shudder at the sight of it. It was unleashed on the unsuspecting inhabits of the world in a flash, its origins unknown and it quickly shredded through domestic society turning the rich and the poor and the privileged and the povertied to equals, everyone has been reduced to a horrified individual whose sole objective is survival and nothing more. Small pockets of survivors scurry throughout the streets trying to find anything they can use to aid in their efforts and help them in their quest to live through this world that has become a warzone and an apocalyptic wasteland rife with the hellish monsters who are insanely intent on reducing them to mere heaps of bloodied flesh and bone. This is the story of the outbreak. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Zilcho Posted May 31, 2009 Share Posted May 31, 2009 I've had an idea for my next storyline in CT once Dan Summers has it's conclusion; Mikhail Lebedev brings in a boat full of sex slaves into the unnamed city, but one of the Eastern European women, Anna, over powers one of the guards and manages to escape, using her instincts to lose her pursuers. As strong and as determined to survive as she is, she's in an unknown city, and knows not a word of English. The men from the boat are closing, it's only a matter of time before they catch up. U R B A N I T A S Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chunk Posted May 31, 2009 Share Posted May 31, 2009 I've been having the idea of a random battle scenario one-shot floating around my head for a few days. After watching the MW2 trailer I've wanted to write along those lines. So basically it'll be the generic Allies vs. Opfor, but I'll simply write it for an exercise for my writing. I look forward to reading more from you Niall. You're a great writer. For UBB, I may "lampoon" various pieces on here. For example, I could do a parody of one of Andy's many snuff masterpieces to be about a bunch of teddy bears. Not gonna happen, but you get the jist. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Zilcho Posted May 31, 2009 Share Posted May 31, 2009 I've been having the idea of a random battle scenario one-shot floating around my head for a few days. After watching the MW2 trailer I've wanted to write along those lines. So basically it'll be the generic Allies vs. Opfor, but I'll simply write it for an exercise for my writing. I look forward to reading more from you Niall. You're a great writer. For UBB, I may "lampoon" various pieces on here. For example, I could do a parody of one of Andy's many snuff masterpieces to be about a bunch of teddy bears. Not gonna happen, but you get the jist. Parodies! Why not do a parody topic lampooning the works of Writers Discussion. It wouldn't be distasteful or disrespectful, but a tongue in cheek portrayal of the stories that captivated us. Do you think that's a good idea or what? U R B A N I T A S Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chunk Posted May 31, 2009 Share Posted May 31, 2009 I've been having the idea of a random battle scenario one-shot floating around my head for a few days. After watching the MW2 trailer I've wanted to write along those lines. So basically it'll be the generic Allies vs. Opfor, but I'll simply write it for an exercise for my writing. I look forward to reading more from you Niall. You're a great writer. For UBB, I may "lampoon" various pieces on here. For example, I could do a parody of one of Andy's many snuff masterpieces to be about a bunch of teddy bears. Not gonna happen, but you get the jist. Parodies! Why not do a parody topic lampooning the works of Writers Discussion. It wouldn't be distasteful or disrespectful, but a tongue in cheek portrayal of the stories that captivated us. Do you think that's a good idea or what? I'd much rather have it in a section in Used Banana Box. I don't want to clog up WD with topics, you know? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Zilcho Posted May 31, 2009 Share Posted May 31, 2009 I've been having the idea of a random battle scenario one-shot floating around my head for a few days. After watching the MW2 trailer I've wanted to write along those lines. So basically it'll be the generic Allies vs. Opfor, but I'll simply write it for an exercise for my writing. I look forward to reading more from you Niall. You're a great writer. For UBB, I may "lampoon" various pieces on here. For example, I could do a parody of one of Andy's many snuff masterpieces to be about a bunch of teddy bears. Not gonna happen, but you get the jist. Parodies! Why not do a parody topic lampooning the works of Writers Discussion. It wouldn't be distasteful or disrespectful, but a tongue in cheek portrayal of the stories that captivated us. Do you think that's a good idea or what? I'd much rather have it in a section in Used Banana Box. I don't want to clog up WD with topics, you know? Fair enough; I was actually more specifically pitching an idea for a larger topic that would lampoon several others. Like a dedicated comedy piece. Or perhaps an addition to WD Express? U R B A N I T A S Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Unvirginiser Posted May 31, 2009 Share Posted May 31, 2009 Funny you should mention that, because I started writing a song about the writers in here. Kind of similar to Jerry Reed's The Bird. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Omnia sunt Communia Posted May 31, 2009 Share Posted May 31, 2009 I came up with an idea for a story earlier (I think). It was really good and a far cry from what I usually write. But then I got home and forgot it. I really want to write something outside my comfort zone. But then finding something that fits into that while still being interesting to both me and the reader is hard for me. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Zilcho Posted May 31, 2009 Share Posted May 31, 2009 Funny you should mention that, because I started writing a song about the writers in here. Kind of similar to Jerry Reed's The Bird. Will you post it? Sounds like fun. U R B A N I T A S Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Oxidizer Posted May 31, 2009 Share Posted May 31, 2009 I am gonna implode. Why is it so hard to describe a little black book (the kind that has contact info regarding shady people jotted down in it)? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Zilcho Posted May 31, 2009 Share Posted May 31, 2009 I am gonna implode. Why is it so hard to describe a little black book (the kind that has contact info regarding shady people jotted down in it)? The little black book I held in my hands was simplistic yet complex, the dark, plain leather that bound it's pages was still and unmoving, yet I knew full well it's contents were darker than the material itself, the contact details held were what kept this almost totally unimportant book close to my heart. As simple as it may have been; I needed it. Is that what you mean? I just came up with that then, I'm sure you can do much better than me. U R B A N I T A S Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Oxidizer Posted May 31, 2009 Share Posted May 31, 2009 Niiice. And almost. I know what I want to write/describe about it but I'm having serious problems wording things. It either sounds wrong, is bogged down with descriptive phrases or just isn't looking right. It's extremely frustrating and I've had this every single day since I last wrote something in September. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Omnia sunt Communia Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 Then don't describe it. Sometimes too little is better than too much. It's only a black book after all. It doesn't need a page of description dedicated to it. Something as simple as: "I pulled out a black leather bound book and began to flick through the pages. Scrawled upon the lined paper were the contact details of some of the most sultry people in my life. I knew they would serve me well someday, and that day was today." Simple and elegant. Don't threat over description. The audience has an imagination too and I'm sure they can piece together a few simple images in their head to make up their own view of your story's events. They don't need everything described to them in the finest detail. They're not idiots, children of the blind. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Oxidizer Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 You just hit the nail on the head ; I try to describe everything, but I need to realize that people can imagine it themselves without having my vision of what's going on forced upon them. Now I feel like a weight's been lifted. Thanks! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Omnia sunt Communia Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 I've made a few alterations to my mercenaries idea. What I have decided, after doing some research, is that the team of mercenaries will be hired by the CIA to invade Afghanistan on September 26. Just 15 days after 9/11. This is when the first members of the CIA's "Special Operations Group" (SOG) were sent in. Though in this reality SOG is just a government front for a clandestine operation recruiting, training and deploying mercenaries into the battlefield. SOG does not use or wear any equipment that can be traced back to the USA; making them perfect for my story. They even dress like mercenaries!: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TomVDC Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 You just hit the nail on the head ; I try to describe everything, but I need to realize that people can imagine it themselves without having my vision of what's going on forced upon them. Now I feel like a weight's been lifted. Thanks! Well get writing then! It's been way too long since WD could enjoy one of your pieces. I would like to remember you that there's a new chapter of A Revengers' Tale out since yesterday evening (my local time) and comments are always welcome. grtz Tom Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rhoda Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 Okay, this isn't a writing update, but it is in fact a graphics update. Kudos to M|chael who's kindly made this Social Club signature/banner at my request. Do feel free to wear it as a signature. http://i41.tinypic.com/15pk5n8.png If you'd prefer it to link to the Social Club topic itself, copy this code into your signature: [img=http://i41.tinypic.com/15pk5n8.png] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TomVDC Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 I'll be using it untill my new sig will finally be finished. grtz Tom Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lethal Nizzle Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 I'll start writing my battle one-off tonight, but don't expect it up rapido. I have GCSE's next week so most of my free time will be revising. But when I can write, I will. I have all the ideas in my head, wrote them down and all I need to do is put into story form. Oh and that Social Club ain't got nothing on Craig's personalized sig for me and Matty. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Zilcho Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 I've had any idea for a quick space filler between the CT conclusion for Dan. This quick piece would involve a run down projects where a Puerto Rican drug dealer called Tito runs the building, brutally extracting protection money and selling drugs around the premises. When he maliciously beats an elderly mob doctor who lives in the neighboring block of flats, a viscous Mafioso enforcer arrives and brings the projects back to peace in vengeance for the now dead doctor; the piece would culminate with Tito's graphic beating with a baseball bat until he is totally crushed and humiliated in front of the people who once feared him. It would show how power is finite and only created by those with the will to keep the exterior image up. The Enforcer would leave, and the populous of the project would cheer as Tito desperately tried to convince the hating crowds to call an ambulance. Does that sound good? I'm also trying to come up with fictional names for the cities, and I want them to sounds good too. For Washington D.C it will be Huntington D.C (named after a leader of Congress from prior to George Washington) and possible Bastion for Boston (where an Irish Mob orientated story would take place) but I really want to know whether these sound good or not. And if anyone has any suggestions for city names, please say so. U R B A N I T A S Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
General Goose Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 Sound good to me. Bastion and Huntingdon both sound GTA-ish, Bastion in particular. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Zilcho Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 Sound good to me. Bastion and Huntingdon both sound GTA-ish, Bastion in particular. Well Bastion is actually a surname but I couldn't think of anything else to do for Boston, I wanted it to sound similar but not the same. And Huntignton is a good fit, it makes sense for the capital too. New Lancaster for New York? U R B A N I T A S Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
General Goose Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 New Leeds maybe? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Zilcho Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 New Leeds maybe? I'm going for something that's Northern, York makes sense, so something nearby or in a neighboring county. So Lancaster would fit, but doesn't sound that good. U R B A N I T A S Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
General Goose Posted June 1, 2009 Share Posted June 1, 2009 (edited) Ignore this post. Was this the one you wanted edited, El Zilcho? Edited June 1, 2009 by General Goose Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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