Wanted Assailant Posted April 21, 2009 Share Posted April 21, 2009 Now the story's really shifting forward. I found the whole pace, description, and especially the dialogue to go along really smoothly. You two keep it up, very enjoyable. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mafioso86 Posted April 22, 2009 Share Posted April 22, 2009 Excrement and homosexuals as comedic content? Oh I'm sorry, does this not appeal to your sense of humour? If not that's fine, but you don't have to smugly comment back. Thanks for the contribution, but in future if you have nothing to post except something like this, please don't post at all. Although I do honestly love excrement jokes (me and my boss, who are both 23, took some brownies and rolled them into poop shapes last week and ate them in front of his gf while rolling on the ground and laughing); I kinda agree with him on the, "you guys are gay," "no i'm not," thing... calling something "gay" as an insult is just kinda lame and ignorant in my opinion. I would prefer "fags" or "tossers" or saying that they liked butt sex or something... I guess that could be viewed as ignorant and basically the same thing though, so what do I know. In the end it makes the protagonist seem dumb and ignorant in my mind which I don't like... Niko for example was always really witty and clever, you would never hear him be like, "Hey Dimitri... you're gay!" But this is really my first and only complaint with everything you guys have done here. I like the mission itself, it feels fitting for an early mission introducing combat. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Oxidizer Posted April 22, 2009 Share Posted April 22, 2009 I'm coming off as a w*nker and I don't like it either, but I think you should start the actual storyline now. The first two chapters were good enough intros, but the latest 'mission' hasn't done anything to move the plot along. At all. It would be okay if this was an actual game, but being in written form is badly dragging things out and for next to no reason. I'm genuinely intrigued by the overall story, but it's just not going anywhere. Don't hate me, darlings. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
radicell Posted April 22, 2009 Share Posted April 22, 2009 I got the same feeling. I'm all for realism, but the many game-scripts that emerge on this forum usually delve into the storyline after the second mission. Some of them start already with the very first introductory mission. I understand that Mission #3 was probably to mix some comic relief into teaching the player how to fistfight, which, in a real GTA game, would be alright. However, as Oxy said, it's one of those missions that we could do without in a game-script, and it seemed like a bit of a let-down to what we highly anticipated. Of course, if you're motivated to make this as close to a GTA game as possible, you're doing a fine job. However, I'd say that if you want to continue doing these 'tutorial' missions, you could incorporate some large-scale action into it, instead of fistfights in small, enclosed areas. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chunk Posted April 22, 2009 Author Share Posted April 22, 2009 Basically me and Kaden planned this out. You would have to learn the basics before the real story begins, sorry if this didn't fufill any expectations you had, but we're gonna make up for it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pr0xy_fl00d3r Posted April 22, 2009 Share Posted April 22, 2009 JackyFiend is called Kaden? Never knew that, something inside me thought that his name was Jack.... I cant wait for the next mission, keep it up! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mafioso86 Posted April 22, 2009 Share Posted April 22, 2009 Basically me and Kaden planned this out. You would have to learn the basics before the real story begins, sorry if this didn't fufill any expectations you had, but we're gonna make up for it. I think you guys are doing fine... I just kinda wish there would be more new missions/info more often. The first two were great reads, and like I said I thought mission three felt like a good and real early mission in a GTA game, but as it was a bit shorter than the others, it left me wanting to read more. I want missions four and five! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BritishGTAGamer Posted April 23, 2009 Share Posted April 23, 2009 I just read this from beginning to end and i really like it. I'm really looking forward to the next few missions Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pr0xy_fl00d3r Posted April 29, 2009 Share Posted April 29, 2009 BUMP Im eagerly awaiting the next chapter/mission, you guys haven't abandondoned this have you? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chunk Posted April 29, 2009 Author Share Posted April 29, 2009 No, no, no. I'm rewriting the third mission because I wasn't satisfied with it. And I have other projects going on as well, so this might not update as much as you want it to. Sorry. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ghetto Gospel Posted May 16, 2009 Share Posted May 16, 2009 The third mission i just loved. Please make a mission 4 and carry on, if you have time. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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