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Salvatore’s funeral 2/1/00

 

 

It was a dark and stormy day In Liberty City, Toni had taken over as don, since I was too young, and Salvatore’s Funeral was today, I’d prepared a speech to give.

I then proceeded to the Clothing store and bought a tuxedo for the occasion. Then got in my stretch and headed over to the cemetery in Shore Side Vale. When I arrived Toni was speaking: “Fellow Leone’s lets remember Sal for his loyalty, his dedication towards the gang, his respect for us all, and most importantly his Leadership qualities.” Toni Said and got a round of applause from the audience.

 

Then I was called up to speak, “Ladies and gentlemen on Salvatore’s behalf I would like to read a note he left: The true measure of a man is not what he does when he’s up, it’s what he does when he’s down, or in the middle (Laughs) but to close I would like to show Sal we cared enough to do him a favor, we have gave his money to… a charity, even though he was a criminal, he also love giving back.”

 

 

Mitch then showed everybody to the casket, and we all vowed to kill all the grove members, for they made Sal do this, They drove him crazy…

 

 

 

 

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Varios Los Aztecas

Chapter 23

Sam against Jacky and Jony

 

 

When I opened my eyes, Yami was already outside training some Grove boys he asked to come. I leaved the piece with the cane I found under my bed the other day. Things were running good, everyone was training or helping others to take things and charge them somewhere else and all the stuff.

 

Yami was teaching to his men tricks to kill enemies in car and with a weapon. Tommy was brining the food, the gas and other things useful for us to live long enough. While me, I was walking around giving orders.

 

All was good until shots were heard from outside Montgomery. Everyone took position on buildings, houses and at the roadblocks. It was seaming Jacky was about to attack us. The Vercetti gang was ready to use their Molotov’s cocktail, the Grove Street boys too. Me and my Aztecas, were ready to use our Hunting Rifles to shoot the enemy from distance.

 

In total, we were one hundred twenty against two hundred. They came from the other side of what I could say the hill. When they were near enough, I ordered to the banda Vercetti members to shoot their Molotov’s. We killed twenty of them. The one behind, were blocked up because of the flames. Those who were still alive got killed by the Molotov’s of the Grove boys. The west side of Montgomery was safe from any attacks. The most stupid of them tried to get to the city trough the flames but got burned before getting to the other side.

 

The wiser, got to the north side of Montgomery. Once again, we got some Molotov’s to burn them. We were running low of Molotov’s, so it was time for us to use our Hunting Rifles. On the one hundred eighty Jacky Aztecas alive, eighty of them got killed by the fire and by our shoots. The north way was blocked.

 

The west way was the next target. Ten of ours died during this assault. We killed the half of the remaining enemies. To make the things worse, Jony arrived with his one hundred eighty Aztecas and started the assault from the east. We were forced to split up in two.

 

In one hour all the three factions, lost the half or their men. The weird thing about it is that they exchanged side. The Jacky Aztecas started to attack form the east side and the Jony Aztecas attacked from the west side. Luckily, we killed the majority of Jacky men. They were three plus him. The fire was getting more close to Montgomery. In a hurry, I asked Tommy to take his men and to attack Jacky outside the city. In the assault they were doing they lost the tierce of their effective. Tommy got hurt badly and Jacky was our prisoner. They brought him back to Montgomery and I killed him before he could say anything.

 

At this moment, the fire started to burn the north buildings and houses. With Jacky down, only Jony was stepping in our steps. We managed to finish him off at night at nine o’clock. I approached his body and found his diary.

 

Here is what it looked like.

 

Now that Martina and Cesar are death, I just need to kill Sam and betray Jacky to be the boss. Jordan his on the loose in Liberty City and won’t be coming back.

 

 

“Sam, with this fight, you’re going to be looked everywhere by the police, you should quit to Liberty City or Vice City” Said Tommy.

“I’ll go to were my father was when he quitted the Aztecas, I’m going to Liberty City” I replied.

“Then hurry, I’ll take the blame” He said.

“You’re sure?” I asked him.

“Yes Sam, leave” He said as I was going to the airport.

 

 

At the airport, I took a flight to Liberty City saying to myself that I would come again.

 

 

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I'm quiting the Aztecas

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cool who ya joining

 

Note*I'm staying with leones

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IDK, the Leones I think at the Cipriani's Ristorante

 

 

I hope that Hawkdagamer and WAYNESdddkWORLD will be good sucessors.

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you going to be toni or make someone up?

 

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I'm going to use Sam or Jordan.

 

Sam leave to LC in my story and Jordan fled to LC in my story.

 

 

Or, I'll take Ma Cipriani or make someone new.

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eh? i can't write for this stuff, sry

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You don't have to sorry you dude

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awesome anyway here's chap 10

 

Chapter 10 happy birthday to me… 2/2/00

 

Mitch and I got in my car to meet the don Toni, when we arrived, Toni’ s new bodyguard, some chick called Catalina had to strip search us before we could come in.

 

“Sit down kid, Mitch take a walk,” Toni said

“That’s my bodyguard!” I exclaimed

“Listen kid I need you to take this briefcase, it’s your birthday gift.” Toni handed me the case.

“What’s in it for you?” I asked suspiciously

“I need you to get a client to pay his money, for his drugs.” Toni explained

“Okay” I replied

So I headed out, after dropping off the case at my apartment, when I arrived at the clients house, he started to yell at me, so I shot him, and collected his money, but then a bunch of triads gave chase. They followed me to the docks, so I jumped in the water, and then landed on a boat. “Who are you?” I asked

“Tommy Vercetti.”

“Well take me to that pier over there.” I told him

When I arrived back at the pier Mitch had been waiting to pick me up.

“Where’d you go boss?”

“A joy ride.”

We listened to chatterbox and then I heard one name be said on the show: C.J.

And I knew I must kill him.

“Take me to c-box HQ!”

“Okay, sir!”

I knew if I killed C.J., it would end it all.

As he left c-box I hit him with a bat, we struggled, but I got his 9mm and put a bullet in his face, that is my new favorite gun!

 

Toni was ecstatic to hear the news, I got $250,000 dollars for my deed, but I knew we still had trouble with the triads.

 

Happy birthday to me…

 

 

 

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Nevermind this

 

 

Something f*cked up with my story

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Is he in a gang war? I don't think so.

 

Short time in the Leones... and you killed Salvatore!

 

And what are you doing here?:

 

I disimulatedly put my hand under the pillow. I was facing the other side, and not the intruder. I grabbed my hidden Silenced.

 

"I know you are awake" The voice said.

 

I could feel a gun in my head. Then I quickly turn around. As the Silenced is long, I hit the face of the intruder and then shoot his leg. He fell to the floor and I could see his face. It was Salvatore Leone!

 

"You?" I asked.

"Yes me" he answered.

 

He tried to shoot at me but it only hit my ear. I fell to my bed, but I rolled and shoot him in the knee.

 

"Why?" I asked dreamily.

"Because..." Sal said slowly "I wanted to help Jack"

"And who the f**k is Jack?" I asked.

"Ex-grove street, he wants to be recognised by CJ and you are taking over terrain." Sal said angrily "Also, this is one of my last actions"

"What?" I asked "What you mean?"

"What say is it today?" he asked, ignoring me.

"Wha.." I answered "Its the twentyfirst of december".

"I don't think Im going to be here after 40 days" he answered back.

"Get out" I demanded "I'll let you live"

"Bye.." he started

"By the window" I interrupted.

 

He jumped from there.That's the last piece I heard about Salvatore Leone. Then I went to sleep.

 

BAMBERIM RAN REN RUNRUNRANRRAAAAAAN!

 

It was noisy outside. It was a party in the middle of Grove Street. I got out, left a coin and then went over my garage.Out with my Savanna to visit someone.

 

I drove around Los Santos for Vinewood.I took a road and entered the countryside. One or two lunatics stopped me. I broke road and went over to Montogomery.

 

"Wassup Sam!" I greeted him.

 

He was badly injured. He insisted in getting up but we got him to go in wheel chair.

 

After that I picked up the trip.It was twelve o'clock, so I ate a sandwich.There were a lot of different trees from different species.I finally got over angel pine.They advertised me around three times about guided hiking around Mount Chilliad. I denied everything. I went over Easter tunnel and into San Fierro, were CJ blowed up the drug factory. Famous fact 'round the Grove. I finally reached were I wanted, it was Wang Car Autos. A homie was there, working. I just asked some things, and then got my savanna to the airport.

 

"Security this is restricted area" a guard said.

 

I headshot him and then went into the plane garage. I stole a helicopter and picked up my Savanna with it. I rided hardly to Grove Street and droped off my Savanna. A homie parked it and then I went and put the stolen heli over Ballas turf. I just went over with my Savanna for Angel Pine. I went over guided hiking in there and have some fun.

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Chapter 11 the final goodbye

 

As I was looking around In Joey’s garage, he ran up to me

“Hey, hey I need you to get me out of liberty!’ Joey screamed as if he had seen a ghost.

“Why?” I simply asked him

“Forellis, I killed Johnny!’ Joey bursted

“Why did you kill him, I mean they could show up any min?

‘Joey, it’s the Forellis, were coming in!”

“Dude, help me!” Joey exclaimed

“Fine grab that Ak-47, and hand me one too!’ I exclaimed

Then they busted in, we shot 30 of their men dead, but were overwhelmed, and Joey was captured.

I followed them to the location to which they took Joey, which was the bistro

I then went up to it with a 9mm and killed the doorman, then the first waiter. Then a security guard came and I popped him. Then the Forelli’s main members came out and I killed all of them, then proceeded to the back and capped all the janitors and chefs. I then found Joey handcuffed and beaten to a chair.

“Are you alright?” I asked

He nods yes

“I’m going to get you on a boat out of here!” I promised him

(Dialing) “Hey Tommy, Can you take Joey back to Vice city with you bro?” I asked him’

“Sure.” He told me

“So where are you?” I asked

“Docks!” He told me

As I drove two Cars gave chase, so I got out and threw grenades at them and they blew up!

Then we reached the boat, “Good luck.” I told Joey

Then I said one final goodbye

As I headed home I realized that it had burnt down, it had written on the side: Triad will find you, so I took over Sal’s Mansion

It’s quite weird living at a dead person’s house.

But once I got my stuff moved in, I invited some friends over for a party, but after the party the triads attacked and killed my friend Gabe.

So I killed all of them, and then piled their bodies at Triad HQ to warn them all, they got the message, because I also burnt down their factory. But I still have the Forellis on my back, were in a Mafioso war.

 

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As we choosed not to buy what we said we would buy (Housejack12 stuff), we'll buy the:

 

 

Fraud Scheme at 3000$

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yes we will, chapter 12 after your chapter 1

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Leone Mafia Family

The epic chronicle of Ghis Charest

Cipriani's Ristorante

Chapter 1: Welcome to Liberty City

 

 

Hi my name is Ghis Charest. I’m sixty years old and I was living previously in Vice City. I’m born in Los Santos, San Andreas. I was forced to quit because of the gang violence and now I’m in exile because I assassinated the army general ten years ago. The cops still think I’m living in San Andreas hiding and stealing food to live. I’m the most wanted men in Vice City because I killed twenty police officers when making a drug deal that turned out pretty bad. That was one day ago. I fled to the only city I was not looked for by the law and order forces. Today we are the eight September two thousand six. I’m now in the plane that goes from Vice City to Liberty City. I’m above the ocean for at least four hours and it is nine o’clock of the morning. The sun looks hot and there are no clouds in the sky. There are four other passengers in the plane. A retired doctor of seventy year’s old coming from Las Venturas, a private investigator aged of thirty years from San Fierro, a guy looking Mexican that took a book from Los Santos to Vice City and from Vice City to Liberty City that I don’t know the age and a eighteen years old girl looking like a prostitute from Liberty City who took some vacancy from the city.

 

 

It’s the first time I come to Liberty City and I hope I’ll like it. I heard that the gangs were more dangerous than in San Andreas and in Vice City, but I don’t care because I’ll be in no one. I’ll get a normal job with a wife and one or two kids and make a rupture and then fight to have them each weekend. To be simpler, living like a normal American. By the window I can see the shadows of the skyscrapers of the city. It means that I’m about to put my two foots for the first time in Liberty City. I can’t wait to see how it looks like; they say that it’s the city of the millionaire, I wonder if it’s true. In about twenty minutes, I’ll know it, because the plane is approaching more and more the airport. Everyone is getting ready and attach their security belt and wait. It becomes harder to wait. Finally, the plane stop and we can get out. The wall of the airport is white with some red and black stripes. It is so big that got lost ten times before finding the exit. I show my fake passport to the girl at the exit and she let me quit. With the time I loosed trying to find the exit, I won’t be profiting of the good temperature. The clouds are dark and it rains golf balls. I called a taxi and asked for the Cipriani’s Ristorante in Portland.

 

Apart from the elevator bridge, we loosed no time. We nearly got a ticket for driving higher than the speed limit. By chance, the cop got called because of a shootout at the elevator bridge, so he left leaving us free to leave. We continued our drive to the other bridge. Unfortunately, the car ran out of gas. So I walked to the Cipriani’s Ristorante.

 

At twelve o’clock, I arrived and entered the diner. A stranger voice said.....

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Chap 12 Meeting 2/12/00

 

I was trying to get some sleep, but then something tapped me, “Kid wake up!” Toni yelled in a megaphone, “What Toni?” I asked

“Leone meeting in five minutes!” He yelled.

“So, do I have to come?” I asked

“Yes!!” Toni screamed

 

Two hours later at the meeting

“I would like to introduce Ghis, our newest member.”

“Nice to meet you.” I told him lying

“You too.” He replied

“You work for me!” Toni yelled at Ghis.

“Listen, I want you two to blow up Greasy Joe’s café.” Toni told…us

So we got in his Sentinel and drove there

“I don’t like you.” I told him

“ Die then.”

He said as he clutched the wheel and spun our car into a ditch.

Then we were ambushed by triads, but he escaped, while I killed them with a 9mm. I then did our Mission, and told Toni everything that happened.

“Calm down” He told me

“He’s new it won’t happen again.” He also told me

So I headed to My Mansion, took a nap and then awoke refreshed and ready to slaughter the bistro.

But Ghis beat me to it. It was on fire, chunks were coming off.

Then the war broke out, the sindaccos and Leone goons started fighting, so I slaughtered the sindaccos for my guy’s.

 

Then I headed to Chinatown, set down in Punk Noodles and had noodles, but felt woozy then I realized the noodles had been drugged! I then slipped into unconsciousness.

 

When I awoke I found myself being kicked, and laughed at.

 

I passed out again

 

I awoke again this time I couldn’t tell who it was but somebody was hitting me in the face, then I realized, it was Marty lee Chong!

 

I then woke up on top of the hospital, I jumped and landed on the ambulance, I then drove to The Leone secret docks boat, and took a huge overdose of Pot, before returning to my mansion, and then The forellies came but I had Mitch with me and Toni and we prepared to fight…

 

 

The Forellis had Uzi-s and we had Ak-47 ‘s, we picked all 210 of them off without breaking a sweat. It gave me training to go and kill Mike lips one of their big bosses.

 

So I headed out with my 9mm silenced and followed him to the lift bridge, when he got caught waiting I shot through the glass and killed him, but I fear a retaliation attempt…

 

some people wanted a profile here it is:

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Will the rates come? sad.gif

 

 

The front page need to be updated a lot sad.gif

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R...A....T....E.....S!

RATES please!

 

______________________________

Someone new:

 

"Yo!" I heard.

 

I was doing guided hiking and I found some guy. He told me to come over there, so I stopped the guided hike, and payed the cost.

 

"What do you want?" I asked roughly.

"I want tou join the Grove" he answered.

"How did you know im a grove member?" I asked.

"I followed you" he answered "You are great!"

"Thanks..." I said a little bit embarrased "What do you want to do anyway?"

"Serve you" he answered.

"Wha..." I said shocked "Ok, we'll get to job right away!"

"I don't have no car though...." he admitted embarrased

"It's ok, I have my Savanna" I granted.

 

We went back to Los Santos really quickly. I was talking about making a samll group of Grove Streets and go off on all the other tasks.So we went over there and we found another three OGs.

 

The first one was over Grove Street. He had a black cap backwards, shades and green hoodie and jeans. After that we got him.

 

"Hi" I greeted as I drove by.

"Hello" he said "What do you want?"

"Want to join a sub-group?" I asked "What you good at?"

"Im good driver, and interrogation" he answered

"What will be your nickname?" I asked.

"Big Ice" he answered.

"Get in" I commanded.

 

The second one was moving around the hospital.

 

"Hi" I greeted as I parked my car.

"Hey" he said "What you want?"

"Want to join a sub-group?" I asked "What you good at?"

"Im a good shooter in cars," he answered "And Im good at cracking codes"

"What wil be your nickname?" I asked

"Pegasus" he answered.

"Get in" I demanded.

 

While we drove back to the grove I asked the guy I met at Mount Chilliad:

 

"What you good at?" I asked

"Uh" he said "Umm, Im stealthy, but If necessary good firepower"

"Great" I answered back "Nickname?"

"Z Zhark." he answered.

 

At the grove, I told them that the HQ of the team will be in my basement. They have to open the little switch, and yell the password. If somebody is inside, it will get opened. If not you can knock at my door. Too, I may give to any of them the key to my garage. There are some stairs that lead to the basement inside.

 

"Understood?" I asked

"Yeah" everyone said.

"Ok, twomorrow at six thirty pm." I said "The password is "Esoyan""

 

I went back to my house and organized the basement. Then I went upstairs and watch TV.

 

________________

Sorry, I was in a hurry and I had made till Big Ice. Didin't want to do everything again.

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Give me liberty Chap 13 2/13/00

 

I was sitting at my mansion smoking a cigarette when I Heard the news anchor says: “A couple of days a go, Mike Lips of the Forelli’s was shot dead on the lift bridge.”

 

I knew right then and there I was going to get attacked in only a matter of minutes.

So I went around and got thirty Leone goons to help me all of us had Ak-47’s.

But then one of the goons informed me that Chong was also coming. But then the First Car pulled up. Shots were fired back and forth, I lose a man they do, and it didn’t stop. I then saw the fish van pull up and sniped Chong when he stepped out of it, and then we had won.

 

Liberty News!

 

“Today a violent gang war took place outside of Jack’s Mansion, Toni has denied any responsibility, and Jack was not available for comment. More later on Lcn.”

 

I then kicked my desk over, and thought to myself, who told them.

 

Two hours later

 

“Police open up!” someone yelled

“Ha-ha very funny Joey!”

“So what’s up dude, how come you never call?” Joey asked

“Because I have a life, unlike you!” I yelled at him

“I look at cars, thank you very much!” Joey said pissed

“Sorry, I got to go.”

I then proceeded to Ammu-nation and bought more 9mm ammo, then headed out to finish the Mafioso war I’m in right now…

 

I took two hundred goons and shot five hundred Forellis before running out of men.

Then I faced off with Marco Forelli and we hit each other before I put a 9mm bullet in his face.

 

 

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@YamiFly: If you had checked the rules, you would have seen this one.

 

3. Do not post incomplete stories. Whilst length isn't mandatory, it should include a fully-formed idea which runs throughout the piece.

 

 

@BUYG: Rates sad.gifsad.gifsad.gifsad.gif

 

 

@General: Story soon

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Give me liberty Chap 13 2/13/00

 

I was sitting at my mansion smoking a cigarette when I Heard the news anchor says: “A couple of days a go, Mike Lips of the Forelli’s was shot dead on the lift bridge.”

 

I knew right then and there I was going to get attacked in only a matter of minutes.

So I went around and got thirty Leone goons to help me all of us had Ak-47’s.

But then one of the goons informed me that Chong was also coming. But then the First Car pulled up. Shots were fired back and forth, I lose a man they do, and it didn’t stop. I then saw the fish van pull up and sniped Chong when he stepped out of it, and then we had won.

 

Liberty News!

 

“Today a violent gang war took place outside of Jack’s Mansion, Toni has denied any responsibility, and Jack was not available for comment. More later on Lcn.”

 

I then kicked my desk over, and thought to myself, who told them.

 

Two hours later

 

“Police open up!” someone yelled

“Ha-ha very funny Joey!”

“So what’s up dude, how come you never call?” Joey asked

“Because I have a life, unlike you!” I yelled at him

“I look at cars, thank you very much!” Joey said pissed

“Sorry, I got to go.”

I then proceeded to Ammu-nation and bought more 9mm ammo, then headed out to finish the Mafioso war I’m in right now…

 

I took two hundred goons and shot five hundred Forellis before running out of men.

Then I faced off with Marco Forelli and we hit each other before I put a 9mm bullet in his face.

 

 

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@Housejack12: You posted two times the same story dozingoff.gif

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my bad

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Leone Mafia Family

The epic chronicle of Ghis Charest

Cipriani’s Ristorante

Chapter 2: An easy start

 

I entered the Cipriani’s Ristorante and walked to the counter. Then someone talked to me. The voice said “Welcome to Liberty City and to the Cipriani’s Ristorante Ghis”.

“Who are you?” I asked to the voice.

“They call me Ma Cipriani” Replied Ma.

“I’m Ghis and I’m looking for work” I said to her.

“Then you are at the good place” She said appearing to me.

 

She was around fifty years old and she was having a grey hair. She was measuring between five feet two inch and six feet three inch and was having brown eyes. She put the closed sign to the open sign and opened the radio. I watched here making the restaurant looking open and I sited down after five minutes. Ma came in front of me and explained me how it was working here and all the stuff that I needed to start. She gave me to a uniform.

 

We got our first client at one hour eleven minutes and fifty seconds. They were a man and his wife. They decided to be served outside. By the time, we got more and more clients and missed places. I was forced to ask to those that were here from a long time to leave or to hurry. Around four o’clock, someone came to free me of my work. At my great surprise, it was the Mexican guy that I seen on the plane.

 

As I was having free time, I decided to visit Liberty City. To be more precise it was Portland that I visited. I started with Hepturn Height and visited the city making a circle. I finished it at eight o’clock and returned to the Cipriani’s Ristorante.

 

When I arrived, Ma Cipriani was waiting me outside.

 

“What you were doing” She asked.

“I was visiting the city” I said.

“I guess I won’t punish you because you’re a newbie” She said looking at me in the eyes.

“Thanks..... I guess” I replied.

“Go to bed, tomorrow, is your first day and it’ll be more hard than today” Ma said entering the restaurant.

“If you wish it, I’ll go to bed” I started to say when she made me a sign to follow her.

 

 

She showed me my bed and where was the toilet. She leaved saying me “Good night Ghis”.

I replied her “Good night to you to ma’am”.

 

 

This is like that, that my easy day of work ended.

 

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WreckageGTA

Sorry, I never reply for a LOOONG time.

 

 

WreckageGTA: Chapter 4 – The Meeting

San Fierro Triads

$15

There are two accounts of rule breaking. You used two vehicles that the Triads do not own. A PCJ-900 and a Sea Sparrow.

 

Oops, I forget to add this: He found a PCJ-600/Sea Sparrow. Can you agree still?

 

 

I am not sure how to deal with rule breaking but I guess this is a warning.

 

My first warning! mad.gif

 

 

I have rated your story significantly lower due to the rule breaking. Also there was some grammatical errors such as:

 

He car-jacked a PCJ-600 and sped to the airport. How can you car jack a bike?

We drove near to the meeting and hide on a wall. When a character is talking unless he's

talking about previous events don't use past tense.

 

It should be, "We will drive near to the meeting spot and then hide behind the walls"

 

=/ Not again!

 

 

You need to describe your scenes more instead of cheating and skipping to a new location by adding, "26 October 1997 – Los Santos International Airport" all the time.

 

"cheating" - Huh?

 

I should have add a location between "26 October 1997 (around 11am to 12:05pm) – Rui Zhi’s house, E.L.S (East Los Santos) and Idlewood" and "26 October 1997 – Los Santos International Airport"

 

 

Also I don't like the idea of your protagonist happens to have five million dollars. Very unrealistic... confused.gif

 

blush.gif

I forget to tell you in my first chapter! mad.gif

 

Anyway, I'm making a new chapter soon.

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YamiFly

The big takedown:

 

Already at the basemwnt we were ready. Everybody knew the password was esoyan. We started planning along with what I red of Big Smoke letters. Then, I went over and took the weapons. I gave the AK to Pegasus, grabbed a tec-9 and Satchels, and I gave the Sniper to Ice. We went to the meeting place of the league. I put the Satchel in the car parked and Z got in with a knife. We took cover. They arrived.

 

[Flashback]

 

"Z will hide in the car, and will kill the guy who gets in" I told everybody. "Afterthat, we start shooting, Z runs and I detonate the Satchel."

 

[End of Flashback]

 

There were five important and as it said in the letter, 50 bodyguards armed.

 

[Flashback]

 

"And who will come?" Pegasus asked.

"I don't know" I answered "But Im sure of atleast 50 armed bodyguards."

 

[End of Flashback]

 

A guy with a long beard, and a tuxedo entered the car. Z got up slowly from the back seat. He moved and picked up the knife. We loaded our guns.

 

And the hell broke loose.

 

After the guy got killed bullets flew everywhere. Z picked the weapon from the guy and ran to his spot moving some bit. I detonated and I killed an important and two bodyguards. Left fire and injured ten bodyguards. Smoke popped out and ran away taking cover on a box. Z had a Desert Eagle. Under the fury of bullets I so some bodyguards burning. And then Smoke running. I so Ice fire a bullet. It traveled to the air directly to Smoke head. But then a bullet hit Smoke arm and he falls, with the bullet hitting an already dead bodyguard. I went over with a 9mm and shoot Smoke in both legs and in the arm. I knocked him and restrained him. Then I carried him to the car, all while being covered. Set and done, we threw some Molotovs and we fee the place.

 

Back at the grove, we locked Smoke in the basement again. I checked the car and we decided to meet next week. We were now going to exterminate the League!

End of Prologue

Edited by YamiFly

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Master Mind

If we want to have all the rates coming, we should maybe lay it easy on the stories as Build Up Your Gang said.

 

Maybe a story soon.

 

@BUYG Staff: Do the thing called Petty Crime is in fonction? To see more, go on page five of the topic. It's around the niddle of the page.

Edited by Master Mind

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Vercetti27

um..the idea is you write a story then it gets rated, not writing loads then switching gangs without letting your previous stories get marked. sigh.gif

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YamiFly

Petty Crimes are not in function. It said there...

 

The first saga "Voodo People" will come in a while.

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housejack12

very inactive, lots of school!

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