Eminence Posted August 12, 2008 Share Posted August 12, 2008 (edited) ~! Edited July 14, 2009 by Eminence Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Oxidizer Posted August 13, 2008 Share Posted August 13, 2008 Well, well, well. Ain't you the talented one! Ordinarily I don't like fantasy unless vampire bad boys come into play but I found myself being able to follow this one quite easily. You've got a unique writing style and a vast array of skills - but that was to be expected of you. The twist at the end, I didn't see coming! Nice job with that. Now, question: you got plans to write anything else? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eminence Posted August 13, 2008 Author Share Posted August 13, 2008 Thanks for the compliments. Yeah, fantasy's not quite my thing either - is it anyone's, haha - but I was interested in having a stab at it. I think it turned out immensely cheesy at points, and perhaps a little cliche of fantasy in general, but I'm fairly pleased with what I managed to cook up. As I've told you already, I've no definite plans to write anything at the moment, but I'm definitely in the mood to get something done, so watch this space, I guess. Well, not this space, but... well, you know. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chickstick Posted August 13, 2008 Share Posted August 13, 2008 A quick glance through, and it looks a good read. proper feedback will have to wait a while as for some reason my computer has taken to turning all forms of punctuation into little squares. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Oxidizer Posted August 14, 2008 Share Posted August 14, 2008 As I've told you already, I've no definite plans to write anything at the moment, but I'm definitely in the mood to get something done, so watch this space, I guess. Well, not this space, but... well, you know. I certainly hope you pump something out. /WD/ needs more from you! *cough*Chauffer*cough* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eminence Posted August 21, 2008 Author Share Posted August 21, 2008 As I've told you already, I've no definite plans to write anything at the moment, but I'm definitely in the mood to get something done, so watch this space, I guess. Well, not this space, but... well, you know. I certainly hope you pump something out. /WD/ needs more from you! *cough*Chauffer*cough* The Chauffeur was only a tiny idea as I showed you, but maybe I might dig something up along those lines to accommodate your needs! Maybe... In the meantime, I've heeded your words and constant prompts to get more done, and I'll hopefully continue in the same manner. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Oxidizer Posted August 21, 2008 Share Posted August 21, 2008 The Chauffeur was only a tiny idea as I showed you, but maybe I might dig something up along those lines to accommodate your needs! Maybe... In the meantime, I've heeded your words and constant prompts to get more done, and I'll hopefully continue in the same manner. Hee! You know The Chauffer totally inspired AM, right? The little M&P 'deleted scene' I'm now not-so-secretly working on. I hope you continue to write more. Especially the darker stuff. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eminence Posted August 21, 2008 Author Share Posted August 21, 2008 I never, actually. Considering that was just an absolutely tiny fragment I wrote out of boredom and decided to share with you alone, I'm pleased to know it gave you some motivation and inspiration! Darker stuff, eh? I guess that request will always come from you. Again, maybe in time. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Angelo Leone Posted August 21, 2008 Share Posted August 21, 2008 Good job,I really liked it.Have you read my story in the Letifer Organization yet? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eminence Posted August 21, 2008 Author Share Posted August 21, 2008 Good job,I really liked it.Have you read my story in the Letifer Organization yet? Please don't do that. If you're going to read and offer feedback to someone else's piece, you do not then advertise your own. Refer to the 'Forum Etiquette' part of the pinned topic for this. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Oxidizer Posted August 21, 2008 Share Posted August 21, 2008 I never, actually. Considering that was just an absolutely tiny fragment I wrote out of boredom and decided to share with you alone, I'm pleased to know it gave you some motivation and inspiration! Darker stuff, eh? I guess that request will always come from you. Again, maybe in time. Which, funnily enough, if memory serves correctly, was one of the reasons you shared it with me - for motivation/inspiration. It worked! Now all I gotta do is actually write the damn thing. 'Course it will! I'm addicted to the sntuff. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mark-2007 Posted August 25, 2008 Share Posted August 25, 2008 (edited) I loved all the description put into it. It was all very visual and the King was my favourite character, since he had a character that you explored well. It had a great fantasy feel to it, and I liked how you made it different in that dragons aren't thought to exist, but they do, rather than having them roaming around the place, if you get what I mean. One teeny, tiny mistake I think... and he again began to shake and moan and a pitiful dance of desperation.It should be "in a pitiful dance", maybe? Also, just to clear something up for me, why is it that Therolia killed Aedilith to become Queen? Is it that he's the King's main defender, or is it that Aedilith would inherit the throne? Edited August 25, 2008 by mark-2007 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eminence Posted August 25, 2008 Author Share Posted August 25, 2008 You're right - that's a little mistake, heh. Thanks for picking up on it - I should proofread a little more carefully! I'm glad you liked the King's character - it was probably the most fully realised. And yes, that's the reason she's killed off Aedelith, as he's the main one capable of protecting him against any attackers; except, of course, one that isn't human. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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