GROVEISLS Posted July 19, 2008 Share Posted July 19, 2008 (edited) This is a story about a 24 year old man who has always dreamed of being a World Traveller along with one of his Childhood friends. Chapter 1: Arrested (United States)Algonquin, Liberty City, July 12th 2010, 7:00pm A cutscene shows of Roman, Niko, Mallorie and Little Jacob watching none other then "The Venturas Poker Challenge" where it was then interruped by the Liberty City News. Niko: Ah WHAATTT! Little Jacob: Hey Niko hold on!... News Person: Good Evening and welcome to the Liberty City news tonight it was reported that a young man named Chris White all the way from Melbourne, Australia has just opened a new show called "The life of Chris White" it is believed that this man is a Maniac with Crazy ideas so if you approach him BE VERY CAREFUL WHAT YOU TELL HIM Mallorie: Yeah good for him, BUT WE'RE MISSING THE OTHER SHOW! Roman: Hey Baby calm down Suddenly Playboy X's Yellow Patriot then pulls up outside of Roman's Penthouse where Brucie walks out with Beers, Burger's and Fizzy Drinks. Brucie(Walks in): What's goin on guys? Niko: Why you so happy? Brucie: It's my 33rd Birthday Niko: Oh that's right well what now? Everyone else in the room: CELEBRATE!!! Suddenly two Cops walk in and take Niko and Roman out of the Room and throw them into the Squad Car. with the rest looking and screaming. Cop 1: So you are the Bellic Cousins huh boys? Niko: Who the F*** you calling a boy? Cop 2: Shut up boy Niko and Roman are then knocked out with an unknown melee weapon and dont wake up until the next day. One day later...July 13th 2010, 11:20am The Bellic cousins are now outside the site which was attacked 9 years ago and destroyed with 2 Hijacked Planes with Roman lying in the old North Tower and Niko in the old South Tower. Niko(Waking up): WHAAATTTT HOW THE F***, WHERE ARE WE? Roman: We're at the old LC Financial Plaza Niko: What are we lying on? my backs starting to ache Roman: These were once buildings. They were attacked by Terrorists in 2001 Niko: Damn! well we should get outta here The future chapters hopefully will much longer and much more detailed Edited July 20, 2008 by GROVEISLS Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GROVEISLS Posted July 19, 2008 Author Share Posted July 19, 2008 I know what you're all thinking, "Where's the Traveller" well you see i just made Chapter 1 like that so he could be introduced on TV first. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Struff Bunstridge Posted July 19, 2008 Share Posted July 19, 2008 Well, that's three stories you've now got running on the first page of WD alone. None of them look like they'll be anything other than fairly long and involved. I'm sure I speak for everyone when I say I'm dubious you can keep them all going, and keep them interesting. It's been said to others before, but maybe you'd be better off sticking to one idea and seeing it through? As to the story: sorry, but I'm not mad on it at all. Scripts are being done to death right now, and still only The Unvirginiser's and radicell's are holding any real attention, as well as a notable tip of the hat to TonyZimmzy. This and other scripts seem to be along the lines of "Hey, wouldn't it be cool if this happened in the game" with little thought how it will all pan out. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GROVEISLS Posted July 20, 2008 Author Share Posted July 20, 2008 Well, that's three stories you've now got running on the first page of WD alone. None of them look like they'll be anything other than fairly long and involved. I'm sure I speak for everyone when I say I'm dubious you can keep them all going, and keep them interesting. It's been said to others before, but maybe you'd be better off sticking to one idea and seeing it through? As to the story: sorry, but I'm not mad on it at all. Scripts are being done to death right now, and still only The Unvirginiser's and radicell's are holding any real attention, as well as a notable tip of the hat to TonyZimmzy. This and other scripts seem to be along the lines of "Hey, wouldn't it be cool if this happened in the game" with little thought how it will all pan out. Well this is the one i'll work on then Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GROVEISLS Posted July 21, 2008 Author Share Posted July 21, 2008 I've abandoned this. I'm now working on Jeffery "OG Loc" Cross again Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Struff Bunstridge Posted July 21, 2008 Share Posted July 21, 2008 Well this is the one i'll work on then I've abandoned this. I'm now working onJeffery "OG Loc" Cross again I rest my case. If you'd just stuck with one to begin with, you wouldn't be chopping and changing all the time. I have my fingers crossed you concentrate on the OG Loc story; make it the best you can, buddy. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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