GTAwarrior Posted June 20, 2008 Author Share Posted June 20, 2008 CHAPTER 8 As the group got to know each other, Roy realized that the duffel bag was left at Starfish Island. The only guns they had was Tommy's M-16, Mr.X's nectar guns and a pistol Roy had tucked in his pants. Ken: Okay, I'm sh*tting my pants here! Somebody tell me where are we. Mr.X/Blue: We are somewhere where they can't hear you scream. Ken: (Gulp) Thanks. (under his breath) creepy guy. Roy: Hey where'd Freddy go? When they were knocked out, the creatures stole Pvt. Speed's body. Tommy: Alright, I've had enough of this sh*t. Show yourselves you retarded alien bas*ards! There was a piece of clear glass separating the humans from the aliens. They were staring right at the hideous things when... FREDDY'S BODY WAS THROWN AGAINST THE GLASS!!!!!!!!!! A voice was speaking through Freddy. Freddy??: Humans. Roy: Freddy? Freddy??: Your friend Mr. Speed isn't here. Roy: Who's this? Freddy??: We are Abraham. Roy: What do you want Abraham? Abraham: Power Roy: How are you going to do that? Abraham: Simple. We rule all the planets. Roy: Oh Sh*t! This is an extermination. Abraham: Correct. Puny Human Tommy: F*ck your mothers!!!!!!! Tommy shot the glass off clean. Mr.X used his nectar guns to blow off some alien heads. Then an alien took Freddy's body behind a door. Within minutes it came back. It's top was Freddy but its legs were like a spider's. Roy: I hope I;m high or asleep. The "thing" that was Freddy was now terrorizing the humans. Then to make the moment random Mr. X turned on his i pod to start playing Queen's Don't Stop Me Now. It made the action more fast paced. Roy found a huge piece of metal broke one of Freddy/Abraham's legs. Abraham had some sort of futuristic cannon gun and was firing plasma balls. Those things burned your skin off. It killed Rosenberg. Tommy: Nooooooooooooo! F*ckin' bas*ards!!!!!!!!! Back on Earth-- The Uni-Force sent thousands of shuttles from Las Venturas' Area 69. Corporal Vic Vance was flying the main shuttle. Shuttle Big One. Vic: Alpha Team! Let's kick ass!!!!!!!!!! CHAPTER NINE COMING SOON! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GentlemanSquid Posted June 20, 2008 Share Posted June 20, 2008 Apparently you don't know the meaning of sarcasm little kid. The story is T-E-R-R-I-B-L-E Apparently, you think I'm being sarcastic. This story is absolutely amazing. And if you think it's terrible, then you should take a trip with me to a strip club where I will dress you in pink tights and make you pole dance while singing "Mr. Blue Sky" by ELO. GTAwarrior. This story is f*cking awesome. Don't Diss ELO. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cubanwhip Posted June 20, 2008 Share Posted June 20, 2008 Don't Diss ELO. I didn't. I f*cking love them. Also, sheer awesomeness. My skin has been blown away and hung as a curtain in my bedroom. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TonyZimmzy Posted June 20, 2008 Share Posted June 20, 2008 Haha, awesome. First thing I've read in a week and I laughed hard. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GTAwarrior Posted June 20, 2008 Author Share Posted June 20, 2008 CHAPTER NINE: BATTLE ON MARS AND ACROSS THE STARS Vic Vance led the Uni-Force to the mother ship just few miles north of Mars. The ship was hovering and spinning. Vic's team was ready for war and hell. They all had missiles and machine guns on their shuttles. Vic: Alpha Team, Let's go to Hell and Back!! Alpha Pilot#1: Let's rock!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! The shuttles were flying towards the mother ship when they realized that the ship had compartments that let millions of little crafts to leave the main ship. Vic: Boys, we got company. Bullets and blasts lighting the galaxy sky. INSIDE THE MOTHER SHIP-- Chaos was springing inside, though it seemed the aliens would become victorious. Mr.X was tied by a aliens five foot tail. The alien was called Esther. Esther: Mr.X you should have spent your life studying how to share with aliens than studying how to kill them. Like that time in 1997 A.D. Roy: What's he talking about? Esther: He hasn't told you? Roy: What? Mr.X: In '97 me and a team of scientists went to Jupiter to discover that craters there shoot comets with life forms on them. So we decided to blow up all the craters. Esther (interrupting): But you missed one. Roy (punched X right im the face): You son of a b*tch! Go rot hell. Then Abraham and Esther killed Mr.X. They ripped his stomach in half, spreading blood everywhere. Then the ship's lights flickered. Bullets and missiles were ramming into the ship. This was the perfect time to over power the aliens. Tommy: Get a gun!!!!!!! Here take this! Tommy passed Roy an alien cannon that was on the floor. Roy: Thanks. (He shot Esther in the face). Esther fell back onto X's body. Esther than grabbed a shard of metal and threw into Tommy. Tommy: F*ck!!!!! (Tommy shot with his M-16 Abraham as he fell). Roy: Damn! (He kicked Esther in the face, knocking Esther onto a control panel. This made the mother ship go into self distruct menu). Voice: You have exactly ONE MINUTE until self distruction! Roy: Just My F*cking Luck!!!!! Again!!!!!!!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chickstick Posted June 20, 2008 Share Posted June 20, 2008 Mr.X: In '97 me and a team of scientists went to Jupiter to discover that craters there shoot comets with life forms on them. So we decided to blow up all the craters. Jupiter is a gas planet, and therefore has no craters. ... Why the hell am I going to the trouble of nitpicking a story which obviously took ten minutes to write and is being done for a laugh? Disregard this post; make them travel at light speed and have sound effects in space if you want. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GTAwarrior Posted June 20, 2008 Author Share Posted June 20, 2008 thanx i guess i should of done some research but yeah this is for laughs and meaningless violence Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Danny Phoenix Posted June 20, 2008 Share Posted June 20, 2008 He's not doing it for a laugh; he thinks he's writing a grade-A novel that all of the WD legends love. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GTAwarrior Posted June 20, 2008 Author Share Posted June 20, 2008 Also when i finish this im going to right a gta story a bout a gangster who has a twin brother that is nice but Leones confuse the twins and try to kill the nice one. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GTAwarrior Posted June 20, 2008 Author Share Posted June 20, 2008 hey DANNY youve been bad mouthing about me lot if ur gonna talk smack say it 2 my face Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Danny Phoenix Posted June 20, 2008 Share Posted June 20, 2008 Hey, just so you know, it's not 'DANNY.' It's 'Danny,' and sometimes 'Danni.' Also, 'your' is spelled Y-O-U-R, not 'ur.' And the same goes with 'to;' it's not '2,' it's 'to.' Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GTAwarrior Posted June 20, 2008 Author Share Posted June 20, 2008 Fine Mr. I have to be grammatically correct. Do you have a problem with me because frankly, I do not like to be mean or harsh especially when any one can read it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Danny Phoenix Posted June 20, 2008 Share Posted June 20, 2008 No. It's just that if your story is supposed to be serious, it's a joke, at best; and if it's supposed to be lulz-worthy, it's definitely not funny. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GTAwarrior Posted June 20, 2008 Author Share Posted June 20, 2008 I guess it may not be funny but I'm trying my best here. At least my next topic will be way more serious and definitely not going to have aliens. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Carbine23 Posted June 20, 2008 Share Posted June 20, 2008 I guess it may not be funny but I'm trying my best here. At least my next topic will be way more serious and definitely not going to have aliens. Hey you know what, i'm sorry for being a dick about your story. Cubanwhip made me realize what a real ass i was criticizing this. I didn't know you were being so serious. I thought you were just another troll who got banned a while ago and was messing around in this section. The story may not be good, but i laughed a couple of times. You'll get better as you go on. Good luck in the future Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GTAwarrior Posted June 21, 2008 Author Share Posted June 21, 2008 thanks a lot carbine Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GTAwarrior Posted June 21, 2008 Author Share Posted June 21, 2008 (edited) CHAPTER 10/FINALE As the voice in the ship kept reminding Roy that how much time he had left. He was more worried if he'd live or not than scared. At this point he didn't care wether or not he'd kill the aliens, his mind was just on surviving. Roy was running from Abraham through the section near the escape pods. Roy: Abraham, you don't have to do this! Abraham: All the other species have said the exact same thing. Roy ran behind a turret. Roy (in his mind): That's it I'll use the turret to finish Abraham. Roy jumped on it and reloaded the turret. Roy: Hey Abe, you suck!!!!!!!!!!!! Roy fired like Tony Montana, rapidly and viciously. Abraham was getting blasts of bullets through his gills and flesh. He was charging Roy like a football player. Roy realized he was low on ammo he jumped off the turret. Abraham going way too fast crashed into it. Abraham was knocked out. Roy: Stupid alien. I know re-res smarter than him. Total idiot. Roy ran to an escape pod when he head the voice. Voice: Five seconds to self destruction. Tommy or what was left of him was crawling towards Abraham who wasn't dead. Tommy had a pocket knife. He cut Abe's stomach open as he waved at Roy. Vic Vance's team was annihilating the aliens. As the pod was leaving Roy was crying at all the lives lost, how he would never see Sarah or 8-ball again. As shards of ship flew across the stars, Roy took one final look at his enemy. He stared and said Roy: Well I'm definitely not going to Vice for vacation. WELL THAT'S MY END TO MY SHORT FANFIC MY NEW STORY WILL BEGIN TODAY THANX FOR FEEDBACK! CHECK IT OUT ITS CALLED "GTA: Identity" Enjoy=) Edited June 21, 2008 by GTAwarrior Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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