Grand Theft Auto: San Andreas Stories

[The Unvirginiser]

Damn right I was. What were your favourite parts?

Just wait for the next few missions lads.

[sam33]

My favourite part was when they were escaping from there crashed and destroyed vehicle. It felt really tense as they escaped the helicopter and oncoming police. It''s things like this which was why I started reading in the first place.

[Chunk]

Jesus Christ, I f*cking love you!

 

My favourite was when Tommy mentioned Majestic City. I never realized that until a second readthrough. Words cannot describe my ego right now.

[Pr0xy_fl00d3r]

EDIT: wtf, I just posted the links to all of your chapters/stories in a nice little organised list and it hasn't shown up.

[radicell]

I fell behind on the story a while back, so I've just had an entire read-through from the very start! This stuff is genuinely awesome, and The Big One was designed exactly the way a bank heist mission should be. Kudos to you, I'll be eagerly waiting for the conclusion. Can't wait to see how Peter Leone is dealt with, although based on the events of SA, I assume that SAS will end with a funeral for our favorite protagonist at Los Sepulcros.

[El Zilcho]

My God, I started from the very beginning last night and have just finished reading SAS now, right up to the bank job which I also read earlier. And I have to say, it blew me away. Well, that's an understatement. I only read snips of this every now and then, but I'm glad I decided to take up the mammoth task to read it all. But it was way worth the 3 hours. Everything is fantastic! For me, it doesn't matter that it's unrealistic, it harks back to the fun missions of SA, and the story is also good, and reminds me of the latter too. And the every single mission is a mission you would love to replay, I mean the bank robbery itself was just amazing! You've got style, how you compose the missions, plus the great dialogue and brilliant story, and memorable characters and effective villains really makes this a masterpiece. They are all amazing, and I thoroughly enjoyed reading.

 

I'm glad I also came across this before it epically finishes, so I don't totally miss out on the fantastic world of SAS. I also loved Oxi, his character was great. I really am excited about the inevitable showdown between Max and Billy, and I'm wondering about what happens to Pete Leone. No doubt, none of us will be disappointed. And to be honest, SAS is really a high light of WD, and no questions asked, the best fan fic and GTA script I have ever read. You truly deserved the medal you got, it's a bloody epic masterpiece. Bravo, and I eagerly await the conclusion. Keep it up Will, I'm sure you don't need the reminder.

[The Unvirginiser]

 

Thank you for all the phenomenal feedback.

 

 

Outside Grove Street, a bright red Comet smoothly slowed to a halt. The door opened up, and two black Didier Sachs planted themselves on the tarmac. Billy Hogan steps out, in fresh, new jeans and a white shirt. His black sunglasses reflected the decayed ghetto around him. He pulled a large duffel bag out of the car, which had gotten considerably lighter recently.

 

Andrew answered his door, he stood in shock to see his brother grinning, with a new haircut and bright, white teeth.

“Did you rob the King of England?”

“England has a Queen, fool - But no, even better.” He trusted the bag in to Andy’s hands and made his way in to the home.

“And the car?”

“All the answers are in that bag bro.” Billy helped himself to a beer out of the fridge as Andy unzipped the bag. For a moment, it was as if he’d seen a ghost.

 

Billy silently watched, sipping his beer and smiling. Andy searched deeper in to the bag, rummaging through the thick, wads of cash, as if checking they weren’t a mirage.

“It was you, on WCTR, the Vinewood shootout.”

Billy just smiled.

 

For the first time in years, the brother hugged, both smiling with teary eyes.

“Everything’s gonna’ be all right bro, from now on, everything’s gonna’ be all right.”

 

 

 

“CJ, make sure you’re then at 3PM to pick him up, sharp!” Sweet shouted at CJ through his bedroom door.

“Brian’s a big boy Sweet, he can walk home cant he?”

Sweet slammed the door so his Mother and Kendal couldn’t hear, “Not with them f*cking white boys running around we can’t, you never notice that he goes to Verona High? Full of skinheads, maybe you’ve forgot that Big Devil just capped their main guy?”

“I know, don’t patronise me man-”

Sweet started shouting, “Nigga, be at the f*cking school at 3 PM!” Without another word he left, furious at his brother’s stupidity.

 

 

 

Where was CJ? The bell had rang five minutes ago, most of the students had made their way home and Brian was left alone on the school lawn, waiting for his brother. After sticking around for a few more minutes, he decided to catch the next bus home, and strolled over to the bench opposite the school. Carefully, he rolled out a joint, sprinkled in tobacco and then weed from the small bag in his pocket. With fine skill, he neatly rolled it up and put it between his lips. As he fumbled for his lighter, a hand gracefully came from behind him, the figure extended a lit match and did the honours.

“Thanks man-” Brian froze solid in fear to see Max Stark stood behind him, holding a huge Colt Python.

 

He sat down, pulling out a cigarette of his own and sparked up.

“Shouldn’t your brother be picking you up?” Max asked, with a smile.

“Yeah…”

“Shame, it would have been fun to meet him face to face.” He took a long drag off the cigarette and then blew smoke at Brian.

“What do you want man?” Brian was shaking, his voice trembled.

“Do you know who Richard was?” He calmly asked.

“The white guy who just got killed?”

“That’s right, the white guy who just got killed, you’re a clever boy Brian. Richard was an innocent man, he never laid a finger on a black person, never ‘incited racial hatred’, he was a good man. I don’t have a Father Brian, I like to consider Richard as my Father. I’m like you, a man raised by a woman. But I had him there, he was always there for me.”

“I’m sorry-”

“You’re not, you don’t care do you? You’re just another Nigga, murdering decent white people.”

“Look, I’m sorry about what happened. It’s got nothing to do with me.”

“Maybe, but you’ll do it someday, shoot an innocent man while he’s lying half dead in a hospital bed.”

“Max, if you’re gonna’ shoot me, just shoot me.” Brian was scared to death, he just wanted it to be over.

“I won’t shoot you. I wouldn’t shoot a kid, even a black one,” He slowly span the chamber on the gun “you’re just a f*cking dirty little coon you aren’t ya? You know Richard went to Vietnam to fight for this country? What’ve you ever done for it? f*ck all. Admit it, you’re just a f*cking horrible little sh*t aren’t you?”

Brian shook his head, and began to smile.

“Something funny?” Brian kept smiling, “don’t you f*cking smile at me lad. I’ll wipe that f*cking smile right off your f*cking face.”

 

 

 

 

The teachers watched in horror from the school windows. Across the street, the tall white man had Brian Johnson flat against the bench. With murderous force, he repeatedly smashed the butt of the gun in to his fragile skull.

“You f*cking black f*cker, I f*cking hate you! I f*cking hate all of you! What about my dad you f*cking f*ck?!” Clearly the man was a psycho, with every bone crunching blow, a fresh splatter of blood sprayed across the pavement. Nobody dared to intervene, the police were on the way. The man took off his shirt, revealing a huge swastika tattooed on to his chest. Brian lay in a pool of his own blood, motionless. The man eventually got in a car and left, leaving Brian to die on the pavement. The teachers flooded out, desperate to save him. As they approached, his older brother Carl, drove around the corner.

 

Carl screamed and screamed, covered in Brian’s blood. Nothing would bring him back, everybody just watched in silence. He broke down in to hysterical tears, embracing his brother’s body and shouting for him to wake up.

[radicell]

Excellent tie in from your story into SA's. Loving the narratives that pop up once in a while in between the scripts, too.

[El Zilcho]

I loved that chapter. I really felt CJs guilt, (could have been prevented) and I liked the tie in, and finally understand (this should be canon) why he left for LC.

[Chunk]

Oh man, that was brutal. Like radicell and Zilcho said before, an excellent tie in to SA and this is setting things up to be an explosive finish.

 

Great work Will, it's things like this that show how you've become a great writer from the start of SAS.

[The Unvirginiser]

 

Billy watched Andy as he sat on the phone with his head in his hands. The happy mood that the bag of money had brought in to the house was murdered by whoever was on the other end of the line. After a while, Andy hung up and turned to Billy.

 

“Brian’s dead, Max has killed him,” Andy had tears in his eyes and his hands trembled, “CJ’s packed up and taken a plane to Liberty City.”

 

Billy didn’t know what to say.

 

“Look, Sweet’s at the hospital now, we’re gonna’ have to go over.” Andy was in total shock.

 

For a moment there was silence.

 

“Right, we’ll have to go then.” There was an awkward silence between the two brothers, neither knew what to say. Billy picked up his new car keys and headed for the door, just before he reached, his phone rang.

 

“Hello?”

“Billy, it’s Tommy.” Billy threw Andy the car keys and motioned for him to start the car.

“Tommy, now isn’t really a good time man-”

“Shut up and listen, I’m in a police station, they’ve caught me man. They must have followed me from the garage.”

“sh*t! How the-”

“Listen! Forget about me, I’m off the streets, you’re not safe. Get your stuff and get out of there now!” It took Billy a minute to put everything together in his mind. Tommy was gone, he wasn’t safe. He watched out of the window as Andy put the keys in to the car’s ignition.

 

Billy sprinted out of the front door, dropping the phone on to the grass.

“Andy! No! Andy stop!” But it was too late, his brother turned the key in the ignition.

 

The red Comet exploded, sending Billy flying backwards in through the doorway. A terrible fireball tore the car apart, hundreds of flaming fragments were blasted in all directions, they splintered and slashed Billy’s body as he landed on the floor. The front door blew off, as well as the windows shattering. He saw what was left of Andy’s burning skeleton in the wreckage; an image that would haunt him for the rest of his life. All he knew was that the bomb was meant for him.

[El Zilcho]

No, Andy! Damn, that chapter was emotive as hell. These just get better and better! I can't wait for the next one, and I'm wondering who set the bomb as well... Keep it up, brilliant work.

[Chunk]

2 chapters in one day? Very nice.

 

That was short but it really furthered the plot, and a new question as to who set the bomb? I do love a bit of guessing, but I'm sure we'll find out soon enough. Good job again, Will.

[Oxidizer]

That's two Andys you've killed! Lucky for you I go by the name of Drew now, or I'd have been deeply offended.

 

Badass stuff, Will, I definitely get the feeling that these are the final handful of chapters. Like Z & C, I too anticipate finding out who's responsible for the car explosion.

[Greenage380]

I have now caught up and all I can say is make this into a f*cking game. Those chapters were some epic sh*t Uv,shame it has to end. After this ends will you finish Bravo six down or batman city of shadows?

[VCRules86]

yikes. Very emotional and It wouldn't surprise me if it were Pete Leone who had the bomb planted. I do also have a sneaking suspicion that Damian King isn't as dead as previously thought. but then again that's just me. I can't wait for the climax.

[Tyla]

I wasen't expecting Brian to die like that, I thought it would of happened in some sort of Ballas drive-by. So credit where credit is due, 10/10 for your originality, it really ties in to why Sweet has such a dislike for CJ when he comes back on the scene. And with Andy's death, Billy must be in one messed up frame of mind. Retribution will be sweet Billy is a badass, but Pete Leone is off the scale. The death's of two people that close to him, might give him the stregnth to go after Pete, even though he might be in a "I don't care anymore" frame of mind with his sole focus being on getting Pete's head on a stick. I'm interested to see how it all works out for him. Looking forward to the next chapters

[The Unvirginiser]

Ooooh I like all this speculation. Keep guessin' chumps! Glad you liked them two narrative chapters, just wait for the next two.

[Lethal Nizzle]

Thank God I came back from tour to see that mission up, and the pieces to follow. Awesome stuff Will, I can't wait to see how you wrap this thing up.

[TomVDC]

Damn, good stuff. But then again I already mentioned that on MSN.

I have 2 theories in both of them Peter Leone dies because he doesn't exist anymore in 1998 or 2001.

1) Big Devil is going to face Peter Leone and they both die.

2) Big Devil is going to face Peter Leone, scene his own death and go away just like Tommy suggested only now he has te money to live a nice and quiet life.

 

grtz

Tom

[VCRules86]

Good idea Vic!

 

I never thought about the fake death scenario.

[TomVDC]

Good idea Vic!

 

I never thought about the fake death scenario.

 

Well I write to but just for fun.

And if I would have created such a strong character I wouldn't want to kill it off.

Although WilI could surprise us with something none off us thought of.

Like Billy can't handle all the misery and kills himself.

 

grtz

Tom

[The Unvirginiser]

Been a bit ill recently, so sorry for the lack of updates. I think this week may be the end of San Andreas Stories. Two missions left, so spread the word! You won't want to miss it.

[TomVDC]

 

Can't wait man...

I've been spreading word to my friends, to bad they don't have an account here.

 

grtz

Tom

[VCRules86]

Been a bit ill recently, so sorry for the lack of updates. I think this week may be the end of San Andreas Stories. Two missions left, so spread the word! You won't want to miss it.

Don't worry I won't miss it. Who the f*ck in their right mind would?

[TomVDC]

Been a bit ill recently, so sorry for the lack of updates. I think this week may be the end of San Andreas Stories. Two missions left, so spread the word! You won't want to miss it.

Don't worry I won't miss it. Who the f*ck in their right mind would?

 

Probably some assholes who think they can do better.

While what they write is actualy sh*t.

I should know, been there done that.

 

grtz

Tom

[nerner]

 

I should know, been there done that.

 

Same here, although, if I remember rightly, I got a temp ban for mine, as it was also plagiarised, not my best move on these forums.

[TomVDC]

I should know, been there done that.

 

Same here, although, if I remember rightly, I got a temp ban for mine, as it was also plagiarised, not my best move on these forums.

 

My first: script and beginning was to similar with that Las Vegas story... didn't get banned for it though.

My second was script and sh*t.

My thirth wasn't script but still sh*t.

My fourth in dutch on an other site: Fantastic...

 

So that's my writing evolution.

 

grtz

Tom

[The Unvirginiser]

These scripts are big, serious stories. You can't get a half arsed idea and start writing without planning can ya?

[nerner]

These scripts are big, serious stories. You can't get a half arsed idea and start writing without planning can ya?

Well I did, it involved a lot of copy and paste.