Chickstick Posted April 9, 2008 Share Posted April 9, 2008 I've always loved unhappy endings, and that one was great. By far the best work you've ever done, I'd love to see more stuff like this, and perhaps discuss it on MSN (that's to everyone, by the way- our PC should be working again by the weekend)? There were a couple of errors, but I'll leave that to somebody else, as this PS3 browser makes me ill if I look at it for too long. Overall, though, very, very good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
longkissgoodnight Posted April 9, 2008 Share Posted April 9, 2008 I agree with Chickstick - its the best you have done so far. I have to be completely honest with you: - the way I felt was that the story was short. I was expecting it to be much longer just like most of the stories are on this site. I would like to see a sequel for this... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Unvirginiser Posted April 9, 2008 Author Share Posted April 9, 2008 I felt Nothing Can Stop You was the best story i had done followed by Wrong Choice... followed by this I don't think I will do a sequel, Nobody really digged the nothing Can Stop You sequel so I never bothered finishing it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mark-2007 Posted April 9, 2008 Share Posted April 9, 2008 How about a prequel about his experiences of the alien people? Or maybe a series kinda thing about a whole range of people who see the aliens? I like that that idea, even if I say so myself Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Unvirginiser Posted April 9, 2008 Author Share Posted April 9, 2008 How about a prequel about his experiences of the alien people? Or maybe a series kinda thing about a whole range of people who see the aliens? I like that that idea, even if I say so myself OOH you might be on to something there! All suggestions welcome! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Oblivionz Posted April 9, 2008 Share Posted April 9, 2008 How about a prequel about his experiences of the alien people? Or maybe a series kinda thing about a whole range of people who see the aliens? I like that that idea, even if I say so myself OOH you might be on to something there! All suggestions welcome! Definitely do one of his two ideas, they're probably the two best you'll get. As for the story, the jail one was a bit rushed, and short, but other than that, awesome. Keep it up, hope to see all of your stories written as well as this. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vercetti21 Posted April 10, 2008 Share Posted April 10, 2008 (edited) Wow, what a kick-ass ending! Of course, it is not flawless, but nothing major really worth mentioning. "The History of the Future" was my personal favorite of yours, but as far as narratives go, this is your best. Keep it up, man. Edited April 10, 2008 by Vercetti21 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gouveia Posted April 10, 2008 Share Posted April 10, 2008 VinnyGouveia stares at the story, shocked. Just... wow... VinnyGouveia starts clapping slowly, still shocked, with his mouth open. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Unvirginiser Posted April 24, 2008 Author Share Posted April 24, 2008 Thank-you for all your posts I'm glad that you all loved it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Unvirginiser Posted June 20, 2008 Author Share Posted June 20, 2008 Sorry for the bump but the sequel to this story is coming soon... it will be called I Smell Smoke Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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