Thrown Away - Poem

[.AshRemains]

Something I wrote about this girl who I really am interested in and she doesn't know yet, but she is out of reach, and kind of broke my mental state by hooking up with her ex boyfriend, who is a huge douche bag.

 

Like the fog,

You came, then you were gone.

This silence that surrounds me,

One day...

I'll break free.

But now... I can't run away.

Until then, I'm yelling a guilty plea

I'm cursed until forever, but this is what you don't believe.

You were clear, something I could see

But you're now a hopeless dream.

I lie on this floor

Blood, guts, butchered and mutilated remains.

I'm just f*cking debris.

I wish I never met you

I wish I drowned at sea.

I pity the next fool who catches you,

Another victim, of another's killing spree.

[The Unvirginiser]

Intresting and deep

Yet.. it sounds like you need to move on.. its sh*t when girls are fags but thats liee and the word "mutilated" can only make the situation worse

 

Well written though

[Typhus]

I like the imagery, violent writing in some cases can be cleansing. It can help relieve stress, a form of escapism. I can sense your anger here, the words are spat off like bullets from a Tommy Gun. Keep it up, if you can find a healthy, productive way to express your anger I say go for it. As long as you leave said anger where it belongs.