saltinespike Posted February 3, 2008 Share Posted February 3, 2008 Please take the f*cking time to look around you. The only stories that have one post are SHORT F*CKING STORIES! If you would just pay attention, you might be able to realize that. Jesus Christ. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
longkissgoodnight Posted February 3, 2008 Author Share Posted February 3, 2008 They are "short stories". Mine is not short - so theres a difference. And please stop cursing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
saltinespike Posted February 3, 2008 Share Posted February 3, 2008 Which is why you need to break it into goddamn segments. Or what? Are you going to report me? Sh*t piss f*ck c*nt cocksucker motherf*cker tits tw*t. That'll be it for me. Have fun trying to figure out what I'm saying. I'm not gonna post here anymore, for I don't want to get in trouble for spamming up an already spammed up topic. Eager to see what people have to say about the story though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
longkissgoodnight Posted February 3, 2008 Author Share Posted February 3, 2008 I dont report people and I am just asking you not to curse please. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HawaiianHardHitter Posted February 3, 2008 Share Posted February 3, 2008 Brah, doesn't common sense tell you that when posting a story, you should always post it in chapters and/or segments? If it's a short story, then I understand, but that was definitely not a short story. It's like reading one of Leprechaun's (or whatever his name was. ) stories all over again. Hopefully, that piece of advice kinda helps you. Edit: Wow, in that one minute of posting this post, alot of replies came in before it. LOL. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
longkissgoodnight Posted February 3, 2008 Author Share Posted February 3, 2008 I really don't like using chapters and I didn't no about the segments - Saltine never told me about it - he just told me I can post the story. And its to late to do it now because the story is already posted - I would have put segments if he told me but I did not no. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pat Posted February 3, 2008 Share Posted February 3, 2008 longkissgoodnight, I'm going to make this short and sweet. You know jack sh*t about writing, and constructive criticism. Write a rough draft, then write the story. Correct the errors. Do the research to make sure what you're saying is correct. Hell, even do the research to find out how to write the god damned story. Jesus Christ, you don't even know how to spell the word "know." And honestly, stop blaming other people for your mistakes. Take a look at this article. You seem to hate constructive criticism, so I want you to learn just what it is. Constructive criticism is the process of offering valid and well-reasoned opinions about the work of others with the intention of helping the reader or the artist, rather than creating an oppositional attitude. An art critic can also be a champion of a new artistic movement in the face of a hostile public (e.g., John Ruskin), using scholarship and insight to show the value and depth of a new style. Critics might even champion a wholly new art medium: for instance, the century-long critical struggle to have photography recognised as a valid art form. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
longkissgoodnight Posted February 3, 2008 Author Share Posted February 3, 2008 Everybody keeps on talking bad stuff about my writing. They talk so bad like "I'm writing a story for an Oscar or a golden globe award". But I am not. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cubanwhip Posted February 3, 2008 Share Posted February 3, 2008 I love quoting this: CubanWhip: 15? SHuLkMaNiA: wats 15? CubanWhip: not you! SHuLkMaNiA: y do u like sex? CubanWhip: cause im 17 CubanWhip: any normal guys that hit puberty love sex SHuLkMaNiA: im not a dirty kid SHuLkMaNiA: i dont like dirty stuff CubanWhip: and u play gta? SHuLkMaNiA: yes i beat gta 3,vice city and san andreas,i like wen people curse SHuLkMaNiA: wats your problem? So shut up about telling us to stop cursing. That's you admitting to your dirty little fantasies about some man whispering "f*ck sh*t and a bottle of cock" in your ears and he slowly slips your dick in his ass. Also, f*ck that I ain't reading all that in one sitting. So pig sh*t and two fiddle son. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
longkissgoodnight Posted February 3, 2008 Author Share Posted February 3, 2008 I aint gay - I love girls. But I dont talk about sex with people that I barely even no. I wanted to become friends with you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HawaiianHardHitter Posted February 3, 2008 Share Posted February 3, 2008 I aint gay - I love girls. But I dont talk about sex with people that I barely even no. I wanted to become friends with you. Brah, this is like watching Days of Our Lives or something close to it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
longkissgoodnight Posted February 3, 2008 Author Share Posted February 3, 2008 Sorry but I don't no what that is - I heard of it but I don't no. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pat Posted February 3, 2008 Share Posted February 3, 2008 Sorry but I don't no what that is. For the last god damned time. There is a K and a W in the word. USE THEM. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HawaiianHardHitter Posted February 3, 2008 Share Posted February 3, 2008 Sorry but I don't no what that is - I heard of it but I don't no. This is seriously killing the Bunny in my Avatar... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
longkissgoodnight Posted February 3, 2008 Author Share Posted February 3, 2008 Sorry but I have the blood of an immigrant and thats not my way of writing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
longkissgoodnight Posted February 3, 2008 Author Share Posted February 3, 2008 ok whatever you say Hawaiian - I don't even no what your talking about. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cubanwhip Posted February 3, 2008 Share Posted February 3, 2008 KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW KNOW AND A PADDLE FULL OF CREAM Spell it right. I've got the blood of an American and do you see me saying "I FCKIN LOEV HAWT DAWGS" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
longkissgoodnight Posted February 3, 2008 Author Share Posted February 3, 2008 Hey Cuban - why do you hate me so much? What did I ever do to you? (Sercerlouly no joke) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Justin Posted February 3, 2008 Share Posted February 3, 2008 Locked for the sake of my sanity. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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