Writer's Story: The First Project

[Pat]

 

I like that idea, but it could use some work. I think the political guy should be Middle Eastern...

 

...it could be a special-ops team or something.

A terrorist leader, perhaps?

 

You know, with that, we could even have half-terrorists and half-military. One posts, then the other, then the other, etc. You know, two points of view?

[TubbyJ]

 

I like that idea, but it could use some work. I think the political guy should be Middle Eastern, cause they're all f*cked up in the head with torture and sh*t, plus there is a lot of tension there so it would be realistic. Except instead of crime hitmen, it could be a special-ops team or something.

If there spec ops then it just takes some of the suspense out of it. I'd also prefer if it took place in Central America because they're always going through major governmental problems and such (for example, Panama once went through three new regimes in a period of eighteen months), and they have all those shaky guerilla groups and cultural upheavals.

 

Not only that, but how is a spec ops team gonna get set up? I mean, their could be a conspiracy, sure, but I would like the hit man thing better. Plus, if we're working to create one character per person, it gives us a little more room to make more diverse and possibly deeper characters than the spec ops idea.

 

All that being said, if the majority decides upon the terrorist leader/spec ops deal, that's still a very good and original idea and I'm definetly down for it.

 

@EmoPat: They're split up, so if someone just f*cks up one part of their operation than they could have no clue about it. If they get set up than their not going to know who set them up until they piece together the entire story and figure out what happened. Like in Resevoir Dogs (which is where I kinda got the idea) what happens at this heist is that all the sudden the cops just show up out the blue in the middle of their heist, so they figure there's a rat in the crew because how else could the cops respond so quickly and in such large numbers. We can work out the finer details of the story later though.

Edited January 20, 2008 by TubbyJ

[Cubanwhip]

So we got 8-10 hitmen, individually sent to elimiate a political figure who wants to cut down on an illegal activity. Since the hitmen are seperate and not related, they do things their way, but since they don't know each other and that multiple people are on the same mission, they coincide and start to screw each other up. Before they know it, they start to fight and their cover is blown and it's a race to sruvive, and get the hit.

 

Amidoinitrite?

[TubbyJ]

 

So we got 8-10 hitmen, individually sent to elimiate a political figure who wants to cut down on an illegal activity. Since the hitmen are seperate and not related, they do things their way, but since they don't know each other and that multiple people are on the same mission, they coincide and start to screw each other up. Before they know it, they start to fight and their cover is blown and it's a race to sruvive, and get the hit.

 

Amidoinitrite?

Something along those lines, yeah. But they're like a team and they're trying to cooperate. Some may fight with eachother, others may just be in it for the cash, others are just gonna pussy-out and stay out of the way and just make it out alive, but we can work all those kind of finer things out.

 

EDIT: Now that I think about it, your idea brings up some interesting possibilities. But why would a boss send out all these hitmen, not tell them about it, and have them fight to get the hit? I don't know though, I still kinda have a soft spot for the backstabbing, don't-know-who-to-trust/not-to-trust type of deal.

Edited January 20, 2008 by TubbyJ

[Cubanwhip]

Now see, I can work with this. It allows a variety of different types of personality to be involved. You can have tough guys, sly guys, pussy's, etc.

 

Now, we could have like one team, but it would allow more situations and plots to develop if there were a couple of teams and a few lone hitmen around on the same job from different revolutionary groups. This would create tensions between the different groups and maybe some internal conflict within the people against their common enemy. Maybe some form alliances, others don't. Someone screws up and then the enemy is aware that something is going down and sending people out to take down revolutionary groups and any one involved within them. Then it's just a race to kill the main baddy and not die from his goons.

 

Tired, it's two in the morning so I'm running on my late night battery. That's what I could think up.

[TubbyJ]

 

Now, we could have like one team, but it would allow more situations and plots to develop if there were a couple of teams and a few lone hitmen around on the same job from different revolutionary groups. This would create tensions between the different groups and maybe some internal conflict within the people against their common enemy. Maybe some form alliances, others don't. Someone screws up and then the enemy is aware that something is going down and sending people out to take down revolutionary groups and any one involved within them. Then it's just a race to kill the main baddy and not die from his goons.

I like it, and maybe we can even make one of the parties involved a spec ops squad like with Vercetti's idea. You're right, multiple groups with different goals is the way to go. I'm especially interested with someone writing from the revolutionary group's perspective, that should be pretty cool.

Edited January 20, 2008 by TubbyJ

[Vercetti21]

Vercetti21

Chickstick

Oblivionz

TheJonesy (maybe?)

Cubanwhip

Oxidizer

TubbyJ

EmoPat

saltinespike

VCHolmes

 

Who else was in? I don't much feel like going through 4 pages of pure crap right now.

[TubbyJ]

I think that's about it. I can't think of anyone else.

[Pat]

Mind if I suggest something which is basically a ripoff of everything suggested by Tubby and Vercetti?

 

There's a terrorist leader in Iraq, setting up a weapons deal. Now, this guy has been running from the military for God knows how long, and they've finally found a way to bring him down. One troop is sent to deal with him. Of course, everything goes to sh*t. Instead of the weapons deal going down, two of the team members find themselves captured by the terrorist leader. The other two make it away, being stationed in a different building, but have no means of communication. They're two soldiers, alone, in Iraq, with millions of terrorists around. They've got to get to the other two team members to A. request of an airlift out of there and B. save the two men. Both are running low on ammo, and are still pretty new to the army.

 

Now, don't ask questions about how the guy found out about the ambush, because it has to do with a major spoiler in the story, which I want only team members to see.

 

Feel free to edit at will. Sorry, but I just can't get into the whole mafia/hitman/etc things. I just suck when it comes to crime.

Edited January 20, 2008 by EmoPat

[Oblivionz]

Yeah, I'm not too good at crime either. I like that one a lot Pat, and I think that would work pretty good but how are we going to do the teams in that one if there's three different soldiers? Are some of us going to write as terrorists?

[Pat]

 

how are we going to do the teams in that one if there's three different soldiers? Are some of us going to write as terrorists?

We could always have more than four members in the troop. Keep in mind, all I did to think of that was look at Vercetti21 and TubbyJ's ideas, then think Middle Eastern war for about fifteen seconds. Just jotted it down so I wouldn't forget, and decided to post it here.

 

Could be interesting if some of us wrote as terrorists, too, though. That way you can see what's going on here and there. Like, say, if the terrorists know about the two that got away, and what they plan on doing with them.

Edited January 20, 2008 by EmoPat

[Vercetti21]

Lol at some of us being terrorists. "The wrath of Jihad will destroy you!!!"

 

I like it.

[Chickstick]

Also, I think a forum is a better planning ground than MSN.

I agree, a forum would be a good idea. It would mean all planning etc. is there to read through later, and also we would be the only ones able to read it, thus people reading along but not participating wouldn't have the story spoiled.

[Gabriel Constantin]

No Iraq, please. You might as well carry around a placard with the words: "I'M A CLICHE" written in big red writing.

 

There are more places in the world right now that are in political upheaval than just Iraq and the Middle-East. Hundreds of places, some of which aren't as cliche as those two ideas as well! I prefer the Central Americas idea, myself. Other places could include Africa (where some places are still run my tyrannical warlords) or East-Asia (think Vietnam, Taiwan, Tibet etc.).

 

A possible idea is that a new leader has been swept in power by some form of power battle. Though this leader is better for the people, providing a cleaner and safer environment for them to live in, the ex-leader is furious and wants his position back. That way we're creating a moral struggle as well as an physical one.

 

He hires the best hitmen and mercenaries from around the world to dispose of the new leader. He knows that his palace will be heavily guarded, so the large number is simply to increase the percentage of men not killed before entering the building. These men (and women, perhaps) arrive by plane and our forced to fight their way through the harsh environment before arriving at their destination.

 

Personally, I vote for the use of Panama, Vietnam, Colombia or Somalia.

[gangster.yoghurt]

No Iraq, please. You might as well carry around a placard with the words: "I'M A CLICHE" written in big red writing.

 

There are more places in the world right now that are in political upheaval than just Iraq and the Middle-East. Hundreds of places, some of which aren't as cliche as those two ideas as well! I prefer the Central Americas idea, myself. Other places could include Africa (where some places are still run my tyrannical warlords) or East-Asia (think Vietnam, Taiwan, Tibet etc.).

 

A possible idea is that a new leader has been swept in power by some form of power battle. Though this leader is better for the people, providing a cleaner and safer environment for them to live in, the ex-leader is furious and wants his position back. That way we're creating a moral struggle as well as an physical one.

 

He hires the best hitmen and mercenaries from around the world to dispose of the new leader. He knows that his palace will be heavily guarded, so the large number is simply to increase the percentage of men not killed before entering the building. These men (and women, perhaps) arrive by plane and our forced to fight their way through the harsh environment before arriving at their destination.

 

Personally, I vote for the use of Panama, Vietnam, Colombia or Somalia.

that sounds amazing. I'm not in but you could like go with what Gabriel said and Have it set in Colombia and a Brutal Drug Cartel have overthrown a corrupt Goverment official. The Corrupt Goverment Official hires numerous amount off hitman and Rebel groups.Then around 2 or 3 planes full off the Hitmen and Rebels could land outside off the Colombian Capital. The Goverment Officials team must then fight there way through harsh terrain to the Drug Cartels Mansion or warehouse. I dunno something like that

[Oxidizer]

I feel threatened now. This is all very similiar to certain aspects of a mini series called Mobile that I got planned - which even the character I'm gonna use is the protagonist. This is so awesome.

 

Whatever you guys decide, especially if it is the special ops/hitmen scenario, it all works out perfectly from my standpoint. Salutes!

[TheJonesy]

This idea seems alright. Then I later realized I shall not. Why? I refused after seeing whose responsible for the topic...

 

Oh yeah, f*ck you to Jonesy. Glad to see you're still a dickf*ck.

 

I'm in for the trifecta.

Same as always!

 

 

I might as well stop now. Because regardless of what anyone says, you'll always come back with a remark from the sh*tty mind that you have. You'll do anything to pull out some more f*cking words from your ass.

 

Dickf*ck?Is that seriously the best you can think of? I really thought, with a writer of your caliber, that you would have thought of something...I don't know...better? You really have disappointed me. Someone who supposedly talks about himself so highly would post this...

 

I had always enjoyed this place.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

[Cubanwhip]

You know, DICKf*ck, (score, best insult better. Almost as good as your father was in bed last night ) if all you want to do is attack me, then you gotta ask your mom cause she has the key to the handcuffs tieing me down to your bed and I can't really comeback while she plays with my dick and shoves a pickle up my ass.

 

Now, can you kindly blow my sister and take leave of this topic because that sir is spam.

 

Anyways, I think somewhere in South America is fine too... Columbia sounds f*ckin fantastic. But I don't like the whole hired by one leader thing. I feel hired by different conflicting groups after a common enemy would do much better and give better diversity to characters. And you can give them different reasons for doing different actions.

[Gabriel Constantin]

Cubanwhip, TheJonesy? Both of you please, shut-up. Nobody cares about your petty little arguements. Take them to PM if you're that concerned with what somebody you've never met over the internet cares about you. In the mean time, this isn't the place for it.

 

The problem is, finding numerous contractors can be hard. I say we have the mercenaries hired by the former government, a US army Spec-Ops unit and a group of revolutionary soldiers. Does that work?

[Cubanwhip]

And a few single hitmen for hire with their own agenda?

[gangster.yoghurt]

add in a mad russian general as well . Now all you have to do is work out who will write which characters story

 

Colombian Cartel Leader-

 

Goverment Official-

 

Main Hitman-

 

Spec Ops Team Leader

 

Hitman-

 

Spec Ops team solider-

 

Rebel Group Leader-

 

 

Etc etc you get my drift

[Oxidizer]

Love. It. In. The. Ass.

 

So this is gonna be set in Colombia with characters stemming from Spec-Ops to contractual assassins all hired to take out the same target, under orders from different criminal organisations and government/military agencies?

[gangster.yoghurt]

yes i do think thats the general jist. I think it should all end in a massive Blood bath

with the survivors off each group (rebels, Spec Ops) having a massive shootout in the Cartel mansion or something though or you could have a couple off surviving members but uh yeh. your story folks your rules

[Oxidizer]

Excellenté.

 

Well, for idea inspiration, I don't mind giving away a couple of scenes from the thing I had planned, seeing as it's scarily similiar anyway.

 

I'm all for a shoot-out. But not your usual kind with regular 9mm guns, I mean semi-automatics and the like. A real hardcore, guns-a-blazing kind.

And each character's first scene could be of them prepping themselves for the task at hand; example; mine would be first seen target practising in a makeshift shooting range in the basement of some undisclosed location, training himself for assassination etc.

 

Plus, you can never go wrong with an explosion. Either as an opening sequence to the story or a closing sequence. Fire pretty.

[Gabriel Constantin]

If we look at it in terms of "teams," so far we have:

• Current Government
• Former Government
• Revolutionary Soldiers
• Contracted Hitmen
• Self-Motivated Mercenaries
• US Spec-Ops Team

[Land Of Confusion]

Wow you guys have come up with some excellent ideas! Good job with the list of 'teams' GC. Since almost all of the teams have conflicting intrests there may even been attempts to wipe out another team by one team, say, Current Goverment VS Former Government, ect.

[Vercetti21]

Columbia sounds good, but what about North Korea? Except instead of taking down a drug cartel it could be some nuclear weapons crisis which could cause WW3 should we fail the mission.

 

I like the idea of us all coming from different organizations and countries, as it creates a greater diversity of characters. Americans, British, Australians, etc.

 

Reminds me of CoD4...

[Cubanwhip]

Alright! We gots ourselves, what looks to be a fantastic story, with great diversity. Now, let's start planting motives on who hates who and why.

[Pat]

 

Columbia sounds good, but what about North Korea? Except instead of taking down a drug cartel it could be some nuclear weapons crisis which could cause WW3 should we fail the mission.

First of all, you totally ripped that off of CoD4.

 

Second of all, I don't know. That would make for a quick story. Go to target, take out target, stop missiles, yay no war story's over.

 

But, with my idea of the team getting split up and some getting kidnapped, it would be something like...

 

Go to target, wonder why target isn't at weapons deal/drug deal/whatever he's supposed to be at, X amount of people get captured, others are stranded with no communication and low ammo. They have to get through a civilization swarming with people who want nothing more than to put a bullet in their brains, to get back home and save their team mates. Plus, if we're going to have hired hitmen, this would be interesting too because these are the kind of people that would say, "f*ck that, I'm going on my own, I know I can do better than you guys!" which could lead to some very interesting turnouts.

 

Perhaps we could combine them? They go to the civilization to take out the nuclear weapons crisis, but are captured, so now they have three reasons: transportation, saving their team mates, and stopping WW3.

[Land Of Confusion]

Columbia sounds good, but what about North Korea? Except instead of taking down a drug cartel it could be some nuclear weapons crisis which could cause WW3 should we fail the mission.

First of all, you totally ripped that off of CoD4.

 

Second of all, I don't know. That would make for a quick story. Go to target, take out target, stop missiles, yay no war story's over.

 

But, with my idea of the team getting split up and some getting kidnapped, it would be something like...

 

Go to target, wonder why target isn't at weapons deal/drug deal/whatever he's supposed to be at, X amount of people get captured, others are stranded with no communication and low ammo. They have to get through a civilization swarming with people who want nothing more than to put a bullet in their brains, to get back home and save their team mates. Plus, if we're going to have hired hitmen, this would be interesting too because these are the kind of people that would say, "f*ck that, I'm going on my own, I know I can do better than you guys!" which could lead to some very interesting turnouts.

 

Perhaps we could combine them? They go to the civilization to take out the nuclear weapons crisis, but are captured, so now they have three reasons: transportation, saving their team mates, and stopping WW3.

Isn't the WW3 thing a bit cliche? I mean, it's almost as cliche as doing a bank robbery, and isn't cliche what we want to get away from, to do something unique?