poikly Posted November 28, 2007 Share Posted November 28, 2007 I thought you were dead or something Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Love.Life Posted November 28, 2007 Share Posted November 28, 2007 tbh its not that hard to have both ya know hav a life and dont. im currently juggling a gf mates and a job but then again i still have time to come on here every night and post new chapters in my fan fic game script lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cubanwhip Posted November 28, 2007 Author Share Posted November 28, 2007 Ah to be blissfully ignorant. I remember. I used to do the same thing. Worked 2 jobs (KFC & McDonalds), held a relationship for, I think it was three months (cheated on me), and held up a 3.5 GPA. That was my life. Then I held up my script, GTA The Conclusion, which lasted a whole year. So don't give that whole "not that hard to have both ya know" thing, because it wasn't. I disappeared on occasions. But to everyone else: Yes, the reason I died was because of creative writing and a scholarship. I have to write 5 chaps/50 pages of an original novel. Like a novel, not a script. Good news though! I may start posting the scholarship story. Summary: Ray Pattrone has spent the last ten years of his life locked up inside an institution. In the last few years he stopped speaking and crying for help and never came out of his room. The staff treats him differently, giving him perfect meals, a room the replicates his old room where he lived. But when some stranger gives him the option to escape, Ray realizes that the world he once knew, was gone. Stuck in a dystopia of what was once his home, it's a manhunt to find Ray because he might hold the answers to the future. Yes, it is a sort of Manhunt 3, but does not reference the games at all. I just need to come up with a better name. It's horror and graphic btw. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TonyZimmzy Posted November 28, 2007 Share Posted November 28, 2007 Blowjob? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vercetti21 Posted December 6, 2007 Share Posted December 6, 2007 So does this mean this story is like... gone forever? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
longkissgoodnight Posted December 9, 2007 Share Posted December 9, 2007 Hey Cubanwhip can you please think about a sequal for your amazing story for the conclusion. And it will be awsom if you and Tony collaberte on the sequal. Let me no what you think? By the way - this wanted story is awsom. Keep going! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Oxidizer Posted December 9, 2007 Share Posted December 9, 2007 Does this mean that we're not gonna get anymore Wanted? Because that horrifies me. Truly. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Oxidizer Posted January 14, 2008 Share Posted January 14, 2008 Just trawling back here to wallow in the FiLtH and I need more of this! Mr. Whip, where are you? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TonyZimmzy Posted January 14, 2008 Share Posted January 14, 2008 Just trawling back here to wallow in the FiLtH and I need more of this! Mr. Whip, where are you? I talked to his lazy ass on MSN yesterday. I swear getting him motivated to write is ridiculously hard. I'm sure he'll continue this and his other projects soon enough, but damn, it has been a long time. He just got back from Paris a couple days ago. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
poikly Posted January 14, 2008 Share Posted January 14, 2008 He went to Paris? Lucky bugger Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Coral_City Posted January 14, 2008 Share Posted January 14, 2008 Ah to be blissfully ignorant. I remember. I used to do the same thing. Worked 2 jobs (KFC & McDonalds), held a relationship for, I think it was three months (cheated on me), and held up a 3.5 GPA. That was my life. Then I held up my script, GTA The Conclusion, which lasted a whole year. So don't give that whole "not that hard to have both ya know" thing, because it wasn't. I disappeared on occasions. But to everyone else: Yes, the reason I died was because of creative writing and a scholarship. I have to write 5 chaps/50 pages of an original novel. Like a novel, not a script. Good news though! I may start posting the scholarship story. Summary: Ray Pattrone has spent the last ten years of his life locked up inside an institution. In the last few years he stopped speaking and crying for help and never came out of his room. The staff treats him differently, giving him perfect meals, a room the replicates his old room where he lived. But when some stranger gives him the option to escape, Ray realizes that the world he once knew, was gone. Stuck in a dystopia of what was once his home, it's a manhunt to find Ray because he might hold the answers to the future. Yes, it is a sort of Manhunt 3, but does not reference the games at all. I just need to come up with a better name. It's horror and graphic btw. Congrats on the scholarship! Definitely keep schoolin' up Cuban, which you probably are. It's apparent you have a talent, so don't waste it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cubanwhip Posted January 15, 2008 Author Share Posted January 15, 2008 Chapter 4: Video 1 – All in the Family Cue fade in. The screen fades in and the word ‘rec’ appears in red on the lower left corner of the screen. White numbers are on the upper right corner, counting up from zero. On the screen, a white piece of paper. On the paper, someone’s name, date of birth, place of birth, parents, and weight at birth. A birth certificate. The paper changes, another birth certificate, but all that changes are the name, date of birth, and the weight. Next, two IDs are shown side by side. One, a young, maybe eighteen year old girl, and the other a twenty one year old male. Everything on the IDs match, aside from names, date of births, weight, height, and sex. The IDs come down and a picture of a family is shown. The mother and father smiling, along with two kids. One nine, the other twelve. The older one being male. The kids had smiles that stretched wide, showing their shining teeth. The male was missing his two front teeth and had his hair parted to one side. The girl still had all her teeth and wore her hair in a ponytail. The picture slowly slid off screen and revealed two people. The same two people on the IDs. The same two kids in the family photo. Except, crying. “Stop crying. There’s no way you’re getting out of this…” Alex walked into the frame from offscreen. “Please, don’t do this! What have we done?!” The man was hugging his naked sister, crying. Alex crouches down next to the man. “Stop crying you little pussy. I’m trying to make a video, and I don’t need your tears ruining it.” The man continues crying and the girl speaks up. “Listen, if its money you want, take it. We have at least four hundred in cash on us. Take our credit cards too!” “Listen, Amber, I don’t want your f*cking money. I just want to make this video, and then you two can go.” “No, please.” Alex stands up and walks about five paces away. He turns around and looks at them. “Enough with the ‘pleases’. I’m not going to change my mind.” Alex walks back off screen and the camera adjusts to show the two sitting on bed naked. “Now, Brian, I want you to start off by eating her out.” Brian looks at her, then at Alex. “No, I’m not going to do it.” Alex smirks and pulls out a switchblade. He twirls it in his hand and points it at Brian. “You don’t have a choice. Now do it” Brian looks at the knife and then turns to her. “We have to do it…” A tear slides down her face. “Be gentle…” Brian bends over and separates her legs. He glances at her pussy and takes one whiff. He looks up at her from between her legs and she half smiles. “That’s right; you better at least look like you’re enjoying it.” Alex’s voice booms over the camera’s mic. Brian moves in and starts to eat her out. He wriggles his tongue and starts to explore. The juices flow in his face and it starts to get thicker. She throws her head back and moans. She looks down at Brian and breathes heavily. “I’m cumming…” Brian finds her clit and starts massaging it with his tongue. She starts to convulse and scream the faster he flicks it. After about five minutes he looks up at Alex, menacingly. “Don’t look at the f*cking camera. That breaks the fourth wall. The people watching don’t want to be looked at. That’s just weird.” Alex adjusts the camera. “Now, I want you two to switch. Amber, suck him off.” Brian backs off and looks her in the eyes. She bends over and takes his dick in her mouth. Brian continues looking directly into the camera as she sucks him off. “I hope you rot in hell.” “That’s not nice. Now enjoy that blowjob.” Amber flicked her tongue on his dickhead. She started to slowly bob her head up and down on it. She could taste the precum starting to form on the tip. Her mouth was like a vacuum and started to suck out all the precum. Brian threw his head back in ecstasy. He ran his fingers through her hair as she sped up her rate. “Amber, I’m coming!” Amber went all the way down to the base, his pubic hairs creating a moustache on her. She felt his load hit the back of her throat like a shotgun. She swallowed as much as she could; the rest dribbled out of her mouth and fell into his pubes. “Deep throat! I love it! Now, look up into his eyes.” She looks up from the pubes into Brian’s eyes. Tears were starting to form in them and Brian wiped each one off with his index finger. “What the hell did I tell you two about f*cking crying?” The camera zooms up onto Brian’s face. “Now Brain, I want you to take her from behind, Doggy style, retrocopulation, rear entry, whatever you want to call it. Get behind her and don’t be gentle.” Amber let out a sob and Brian shushed her. “Listen, the quicker and sooner we do this, the faster we can get out of here and forget all about this.” Brain watches her nod her head and she gets off. Amber gets on all fours and Brain presses himself onto her. He glares at the camera as he holds his dick. “You’re sick…” “I’m sick? At least I’m not about to f*ck my sister. Now, f*ck her brains out Brian.” Alex moves the camera and only has her ass and his dick in the shot. Brian puts the head of his dick at the entrance to her pussy. “Ready Amber?” “Just get it over with.” Amber said with a whimper in her voice. Brian slowly enters her and she lets out a soft moan. He starts slow, pumping in and out of her, his breaths matching his pumping. He quickens his pace as she gets wetter. Soon, he was furiously ramming her from behind. She was letting out quick moans and asking for it harder. “Brian, harder. Please.” Alex zoomed the camera up on her face. “Oh, you like that? You slut you…” Amber flips the camera off as she lets out another moan of ecstasy. Brian lets out a long moan and screams. “I’m cumming!” “You better f*cking cum in her. That’s the only way I do it…” Brian’s eyes widen. He looks at Alex, then at Amber. Amber keeps her eyes shut and continues moaning as Brian keeps ramming her. “Do it Brian, fill me up…” At these words, Brian let out a long, loud moan and shot a load right into her Uterus. He continued ramming, but at a slowed pace. “That was pretty good…Now…” Brian looked up as Alex said that word. “Now? What do you mean?” “Well, you can’t have a porno with only one position.” “But I ate her out, she gave me a blowjob!” Alex’s brow ruffled and he glared at Brian. “Listen, you are going to lay on your back and she going to get on top. The Jackhammer as we call it in the industry.” Brian looked at Amber who still had her eyes shut and her breathing was slow. “You said after we did this…” Alex interrupted. “Yeah, after. But we’re not done yet. I want a porno, not some amateur movie. Now, Amber, get on top…” The camera slowly zooms in on Brian’s face. Red explodes from every corner. “Brian, lay down. Don’t worry…” Amber sat up and put her hands on Brian’s chest. Her hands almost slip from the sweat that has built up on it. She pushed him onto the bed and laid him down. She slowly climbed him and sat on his stomach and looked into his eyes. “Amber…don’t…” Brian put his hands on her hips and slowly tried to push her away. “I don’t want to do…” She put her finger on his lips and shushed him. “I want to Brian…” She slowly lifted herself and hovered over his dick. She lowered herself and Brian felt the wetness of her insides grab hold of and massage his dick. He moans and watches as she starts to ride him. He looks into her eyes, and she looks into his. He mouths the word ‘stop’, but she goes on anyways. She quickens her pace and Brian feels it getting tighter. Her pussy starts to pump his dick and he starts to cum again. “Oh, that’s right, shoot another load into her willing pussy Brian. How does it feel?” Alex zooms up to Amber’s face as she orgasms. Her eyes clench shut and she lets out a long, soft moan. “f*ck you. You’re going to hell.” Brian remarks as he continues filling up his sister. “Now, now Brian, that’s not a nice thing to say. Just shut up and enjoy it. Sex is sex, no matter who it’s with. It always feels good.” Amber slams down and sits on Brian for a minute before resuming. “Oh Brian, you feel so good in me…” “See Brian? She’s enjoying, why don’t you?” “Cause this is sick you f*cking bastard! I’m out of here!” Brian pushes his sister off of him and stands up, the mixed fluid of his/her juices dripping down his legs. “I don’t think so, you’re not done.” “No, no more you f*cking freak.” Alex withdraws his knife and comes into the frame. He puts it up to Brain’s balls and slowly backs him up to the bed. “You’re gonna do one more position, and you’ll never see me again, I promise. Just fill her up once more, make sure she has a child…” “What?! A child?!” “That’s right, a kid. I want you two to be a happy couple. Now lay down. Threading the Needle. You know that one, right?” Brian sits on the bed then looks at Amber’s pussy. He looks up at her and notices she is just as surprised as he is. “You can’t do this…” “Duh! I know I can’t, that’s why this is so f*cking great. Especially when she becomes pregnant. Now, lay down and bring your knees to your chest.” Alex frames the shot so both Brian and Amber are in the shot. “Now, Amber, it’s a variation of the position you were just in. Just sit on his dick. The only difference is that his knees are to his chest. This should look great after editing.” Brian laid down and brought his knees to his chest. He looked into Amber’s eyes and saw no tears. He tilted his head and looked at her. She slowly lowered herself again and moaned loudly. “Oh my god…this feels so much better.” “As it should. This position stimulates the G-Spot directly and increases the female orgasm. One of my favorites…” She started to ride Brian and he just clenched his eyes. Her pussy was milking his dick and he could feel her orgasming again. She moaned loudly and quickened the pace. Sweat started to form on her forehead and she looked up to the ceiling. Her hands clamped around his thighs and she leaned down, staring at him. “I love you Brian…” “I love you too, Amber?” He felt her muscles start contracting again and he wondered how a girl could orgasm twice in the same position in such a short amount of time. “How does it feel Brian? Absolutely amazing? I’d think so. Your sister looks so fine, I wouldn’t mind getting a piece of that…” Brian started to feel his dick get thicker and much more sensitive. “You f*cking freak!” Brian shot a third load into his sister. This time, none dripped out. His sister let out the loudest moan and screamed. “I’m cumming, Brian, I’m cumming!” She grabbed and dug her nails into his thighs and blood started to trickle down his thighs. “sh*t! You cut me Amber!” Amber loosened her grip, but continued riding him. “Amber, did you hear me?!” “This feels so good, Brian, don’t stop!” She started to go even faster. Brian’s vision started to go and his sister was a blur. All he could hear were his sister’s moans of ecstasy. “Sis…I’m bleeding…help…” He could feel his dick start to throb again. She screamed and orgasmed again. “You really like it don’t you…” The camera swings away and points at a blank, gray wall. “You enjoyed it more than you thought you would, didn’t you?” “Let us go…she cut me up bad…” “I can’t, Brian, you should know that. You can I.D me…” “Wait, but you said!” “Oh Amber, how sweet and naïve, but alas, you’re not…” “You f*cking bastard!” “Watch your mouth! I don’t need you anymore and I don’t have to deal with these insults anymore." Brian lets out a blood curdling scream. “Oh my god, Brian!” “My f*cking finger! Oh my god!” “Shut up you two!” A small red battery appears in the bottom right corner of the camera and flashes. Amber lets out a scream. “Stop f*cking moving.” The camera fades as white lettering appears across the screen saying “Low Battery”. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Oblivionz Posted January 15, 2008 Share Posted January 15, 2008 Oh my god, you're back. Amazing chapter, keep posting them please. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vercetti21 Posted January 15, 2008 Share Posted January 15, 2008 Glad to see this is finally back. Kinda disappointing to see an unconcluded chapter, but I guess that's what the next chapter is for. Good luck! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Oxidizer Posted January 15, 2008 Share Posted January 15, 2008 Pervy boyo is baaack! This is so f*cking wrong it's seriously hilarious. And insipring. Incredible, incredible work. I hope you'll be posting more very soon! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TonyZimmzy Posted January 15, 2008 Share Posted January 15, 2008 That's my boy, told you I'd read it when I woke up. Your greasy ass had to eat chicken wings and make the post past my bedtime didn't you? I'm guessing that Amber will be used for the preggo video aswell . That chapter was hawt. Brian's a lucky bastard. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gouveia Posted January 15, 2008 Share Posted January 15, 2008 The only thing I can say about this story is LMFAO! Man, it's awesome, it's gross and it's funny. What else would I want in a story? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Oxidizer Posted February 25, 2008 Share Posted February 25, 2008 Equally if-not-more sick boy, will there be anymore of this? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moth Posted February 27, 2008 Share Posted February 27, 2008 That was a pretty good chapter man and bring on the next pretty soon. Peace out. Formerly known as The General Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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