TheJonesy Posted August 23, 2007 Share Posted August 23, 2007 Does someone want me to edit my part of the story cause I felt I didn't describe the "awesomeness" of the moment and the chase very well. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
VCHolmes Posted August 23, 2007 Share Posted August 23, 2007 (edited) Does someone want me to edit my part of the story cause I felt I didn't describe the "awesomeness" of the moment and the chase very well. Nothing wrong with your post. Adding the cops was a nice idea. You could add a little detail here and and there; but overall its fine. @Vercetti21 : Okay, I wrote my bit of the story from Niko's perspective as well as a paragraph from the Mafia's perspective. Now you've got to continue with that idea of yours; going ahead in time. Using seasons is a good idea; they might probably included them in GTA 4. EDIT : Oops! Did you want to do that part with the two perspectives? Sorry! Edited August 23, 2007 by VCHolmes Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vercetti21 Posted August 23, 2007 Author Share Posted August 23, 2007 Nah VC, it didn't matter, your part with both perspectives was fine. And there, I went ahead a little in time. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
VCHolmes Posted August 23, 2007 Share Posted August 23, 2007 (edited) Hey that was great! OK, so what is Niko's next move (Apart from stealing cars)? Edited August 23, 2007 by VCHolmes Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheJonesy Posted August 23, 2007 Share Posted August 23, 2007 Hey that was great! OK, so what is Niko's next move (Apart from stealing cars)? I think we should include other gangs and things. Niko is obviously not living in his apartment now and I don't think he should be doin' much work for the Taxi Company. Of course, there should be other gangs besides the Russian Mafia. What about the Italian Mafia and a Jamaican gang? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vercetti21 Posted August 23, 2007 Author Share Posted August 23, 2007 Nah, no Jamacain mafia, and I guess it could be the Italian mafia but I think we need to find something new. What if instead, Niko made a team of people or something, like Ocean's 11? Meaning that, instead of just climbing the ranks of the mafia, He allys with Blue, Little Jacob, Roman, McReary and other people he meets along the way. He has to do missions for them in order to gain their respect, and when he builds a relationship with them enough they become part of the team. Then, the team comes together to try and pull off some kind of huge bank heist, which shows that Niko is alive and causes the Russians to come back to Liberty, ending in a huge firefight between the mob and Niko's "team". Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phil112 Posted August 23, 2007 Share Posted August 23, 2007 What if instead, Niko made a team of people or something, like Ocean's 11? Meaning that, instead of just climbing the ranks of the mafia, He allys with Blue, Little Jacob, Roman, McReary and other people he meets along the way. He has to do missions for them in order to gain their respect, and when he builds a relationship with them enough they become part of the team. Then, the team comes together to try and pull off some kind of huge bank heist, which shows that Niko is alive and causes the Russians to come back to Liberty, ending in a huge firefight between the mob and Niko's "team". Seted up a technolgy guy to be part of the "team". Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheJonesy Posted August 24, 2007 Share Posted August 24, 2007 @ Frenchie- I didn't understand the ending of your part with the radio thing. @ Phil- that geeky guy you introduced reminds me so much of Zero from SA. Ahh, the memories... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vive La France Posted August 24, 2007 Share Posted August 24, 2007 @ Frenchie- I didn't understand the ending of your part with the radio thing. @ Phil- that geeky guy you introduced reminds me so much of Zero from SA. Ahh, the memories... Lemme rewrite it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vercetti21 Posted August 24, 2007 Author Share Posted August 24, 2007 Yeah please do, I didn't understand a word. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vive La France Posted August 24, 2007 Share Posted August 24, 2007 (edited) Very well. I shall remove it. Wasn't very good anyway. EDIT: It's fixed. Please do not refer to it anymore. It was truly a peice of crap. Edited August 24, 2007 by Vive La France Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
VCHolmes Posted August 24, 2007 Share Posted August 24, 2007 (edited) About this Jamaican gang : Niko could do a few missions for Jacob after which Jacob introduces Niko to the leader of the Jamaican gang. Just like in GTA III, Toni introduces Claude to Salvatore. Hacking into McReary's computer : In a preview it was stated that Niko had to do a job for McReary which involved retrieving a memory stick. Before returning the memory stick, Niko could plant spyware in it. Edited August 24, 2007 by VCHolmes Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ryunday Posted August 24, 2007 Share Posted August 24, 2007 My internet has been down and I’m doing exams at school. I just thought I would post this so you know I’m not being inactive I have just been busy, so don’t take my name of the list. I should be able to get back to this in about four days. Off topic: Mokie loving the sig change Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
VCHolmes Posted August 24, 2007 Share Posted August 24, 2007 I just thought I would post this so you know I’m not being inactive I have just been busy, so don’t take my name of the list. You have atleast posted in the story thread. But there are writers who have signed up and are yet to start their work on the story thread. So no need to worry. Even I got some work coming up. I'm starting to get busy lately. @Vercetti21: There's bit of a confusion. Could you please define a time limit for inactivity that leads to removal of names? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mokiesmoky Posted August 24, 2007 Share Posted August 24, 2007 Off topic: Mokie loving the sig change Thanks Ryunday! Made it myself. Damnit, I lost the whole story. Where the hell are the people I wrote on the billboard?! I don't see them. Can we get a list of who wrote so far? Actually I'll do it by myself now. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Supernautus Posted August 24, 2007 Share Posted August 24, 2007 sorry guys, I might have to stop writing for a little while, my Grandmother has been rushed into intensive care so I need time to myself, hope the story carries on OK. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mokiesmoky Posted August 24, 2007 Share Posted August 24, 2007 @Supernautus: I hope she turns out okay. Statistics as of this post Sections written : 72 Signed up writers who wrote : 14 Signed up writers who haven't written : 8 Most sections written: 1) Vercetti21 : 15 2) Vive Le France : 14 3) VC Holmes : 12 Worst writer so far : espedito Just kidding. No offence. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
VCHolmes Posted August 24, 2007 Share Posted August 24, 2007 (edited) Thanks for counting it Mokie. @Supernautus : I hope she turns out alright. Alright, what are we going to do about these guys who haven't started yet? Its useless having a pool of 21 writers when 10 of them don't write. EDIT : @Phil - Don't worry, soon you'll gain the third place for your own. I'm starting to get busy lately and I expect my contributions to dwindle. As for the thread, of course, its upto Vercetti21. Edited August 24, 2007 by VCHolmes Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phil112 Posted August 24, 2007 Share Posted August 24, 2007 @ Phil- that geeky guy you introduced reminds me so much of Zero from SA. Ahh, the memories... I thought that about half way though writing it. @ the writers that are on the list but don't write - I think the time period should be a week, unless someone writes in a reason why they won't be able to, but, obviously its vercettis topic so... _______________ Statistics as of this post : Sections written 73 Signed up writers who wrote : 14 Signed up writers who haven't written : 8 Most sections written: 1) Vercetti21 : 15 2) Vive Le France : 14 =3) VC Holmes : 12 =3) Phil112 : 12 Thought id keep it up to date Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ryunday Posted August 24, 2007 Share Posted August 24, 2007 sorry guys, I might have to stop writing for a little while, my Grandmother has been rushed into intensive care so I need time to myself, hope the story carries on OK. That sucks man, hope she’s alright. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vercetti21 Posted August 24, 2007 Author Share Posted August 24, 2007 Definately. If you've signed up but haven't written, I'll be taking your name off the list if we haven't seen you contribute in the next few days. That gives everybody a week to write in the story since the time the thread was started. Also, with school coming up I will be pretty busy myself, so I think the thread will slowly start to lose some of its speed. At that, I think we should all try to put in as much as we can today and this weekend. And, if someone could make me a list of the people who haven't written in the story yet but signed up, that'd be a big help. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phil112 Posted August 24, 2007 Share Posted August 24, 2007 Statistics as of this post : Sections written 75 Signed up writers who wrote : 14 Signed up writers who haven't written : 8 Most sections written: 1) Vercetti21 : 15 2) Vive Le France : 14 =3) VC Holmes : 13 =3) Phil112 : 13 And, if someone could make me a list of the people who haven't written in the story yet but signed up, that'd be a big help. I'll do that later. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mokiesmoky Posted August 24, 2007 Share Posted August 24, 2007 (edited) Here you go: People who haven't written Don Garcia something something Razly secksyjames starion TubbyJ The Unvirginiser willgtavcs ZOMFG Edited August 24, 2007 by Mokiesmoky Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vercetti21 Posted August 24, 2007 Author Share Posted August 24, 2007 (edited) Thanks Mokie. I will give Don Garcia a few more days than everyone else, seeing as how signed up after the thread was started, but for everyone else, you have until sunday to POST OR ELSE! (Did that seem like a lot of 'else's to anyone else?) EDIT: I honestly don't know where you guys are going with this supercomputer thing, so I'll just chill for now and let you write. Edited August 24, 2007 by Vercetti21 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mokiesmoky Posted August 24, 2007 Share Posted August 24, 2007 Thanks Mokie. I will give Don Garcia a few more days than everyone else, seeing as how signed up after the thread was started, but for everyone else, you have until sunday to POST OR ELSE! (Did that seem like a lot of 'else's to anyone else?) EDIT: I honestly don't know where you guys are going with this supercomputer thing, so I'll just chill for now and let you write. Your welcome. Let me know if I can do anything else to contribute because I have nothing else to do. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phil112 Posted August 24, 2007 Share Posted August 24, 2007 Your welcome. Let me know if I can do anything else to contribute because I have nothing else to do. Write in the story? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mokiesmoky Posted August 24, 2007 Share Posted August 24, 2007 Your welcome. Let me know if I can do anything else to contribute because I have nothing else to do. Write in the story? Well uh yeah soon once I get some time. Things been pretty rough. I still need to catch up the reading...I'm still at the FBI Ferry or something scene. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vercetti21 Posted August 24, 2007 Author Share Posted August 24, 2007 Your welcome. Let me know if I can do anything else to contribute because I have nothing else to do. Write in the story? Well uh yeah soon once I get some time. Things been pretty rough. I still need to catch up the reading...I'm still at the FBI Ferry or something scene. Yeah, I found it was easier to just keep up with the story as it goes, like just catch up on reading everytime you come to the forums, that was you only have to read 2 or 3 posts, write a little bit, and so on. But if you have a busy schedule then it's tough. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Don Garcia aka NjNakedSnake Posted August 24, 2007 Share Posted August 24, 2007 (edited) 404: Post not found Edited March 14, 2013 by Don Garcia aka NjNakedSnake Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vercetti21 Posted August 24, 2007 Author Share Posted August 24, 2007 For future reference Mokie, you can just call me Don Garcia, no need for the "something something"..... ANYWAY, I'll be writing as soon as I know what the hells going on. Last I checked, it's about a supercomputer?? What is this, 24? I gotta wait 'till something comes up I can write about. Agreed. I've been following the story pretty well until we got to the supercomputer thing. I'm just waiting for the right moment to jump back in. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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