DarthTemplar Posted January 28, 2008 Share Posted January 28, 2008 Another chapter of Legend of Speed is up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pat Posted January 30, 2008 Share Posted January 30, 2008 (edited) Steve stared at the reporter across from him. The cameras on his right inched closer and closer every few seconds. The plywood wall on his left, painted with what looked like a beautiful sunrise, began to annoy him. He was beginning to feel claustrophobic. He looked directly into the reporter’s eyes. The reporter merely stared back, notepad in his hand, occasionally taking a glance at it. Steve guessed it was filled with questions that he had thought of before the interview. “So, you thought it was hypnosis. How about you describe it? Just tell us everything that happened.” Steve sighed, and recalled the events of June 17th, 2006. Expect a release sometime late this week/early next week. Edited January 31, 2008 by EmoPat Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Oxidizer Posted January 30, 2008 Share Posted January 30, 2008 Why is this not working? No matter how hard I try, I just can't write this opening sequence, and I can't scrap it as it's crucial to the story. I am seriously considering just binning the whole project and giving up this writing lark, and at this point, I'm not joking. Ever since Products, I've not been able to properly write as I used to, and it's pissing me off. Over half a year! I'm kinda taking it as a sign to stop. Quite frankly, this whole thing is one gigantic mess, which doesn't look likely to be cleaned up anytime soon. So, in short, Products will in all likelihood be the last thing to come from me. Sorry guys. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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Land Of Confusion Posted January 31, 2008 Share Posted January 31, 2008 Why is this not working? No matter how hard I try, I just can't write this opening sequence, and I can't scrap it as it's crucial to the story. I am seriously considering just binning the whole project and giving up this writing lark, and at this point, I'm not joking. Ever since Products, I've not been able to properly write as I used to, and it's pissing me off. Over half a year! I'm kinda taking it as a sign to stop. Quite frankly, this whole thing is one gigantic mess, which doesn't look likely to be cleaned up anytime soon. So, in short, Products will in all likelihood be the last thing to come from me. Sorry guys. NO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Oblivionz Posted January 31, 2008 Share Posted January 31, 2008 Why is this not working? No matter how hard I try, I just can't write this opening sequence, and I can't scrap it as it's crucial to the story. I am seriously considering just binning the whole project and giving up this writing lark, and at this point, I'm not joking. Ever since Products, I've not been able to properly write as I used to, and it's pissing me off. Over half a year! I'm kinda taking it as a sign to stop. Quite frankly, this whole thing is one gigantic mess, which doesn't look likely to be cleaned up anytime soon. So, in short, Products will in all likelihood be the last thing to come from me. Sorry guys. You motherf*cker. I swear to god, I'll kill ya, Andy. I'll kill you with a cucumber and make you film it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Oxidizer Posted January 31, 2008 Share Posted January 31, 2008 Well, I guess I got one other angle I could try regarding AOM, but I can't promise it'll work or nothing. I hope so 'cause I want this to be my last one, as I reckon you sick pups will love it. If not, I'll probably still write oneshots and stuff, and do collabs or whatever. Though I can't promise any thing I have to offer will be anything but crap, haha. It's more frustrating than anything, especially when I used to be able to actually get things done. But I haven't given up completely yet, I just needed to vent, but I swear I'll wind up going on a killing spree with AOM doesn't work - this stuff's been in my mind since July! Anyway, luffs you guys, and thanks for understanding. <3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chickstick Posted January 31, 2008 Share Posted January 31, 2008 A shame, Oxi. I hope you eventually get back into writing, but even if you don't hopefully you'll stick around Writer's Discussion. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Oxidizer Posted February 1, 2008 Share Posted February 1, 2008 (edited) Cheers mate. I'll still be sticking around, don't worry, I'm hooked on too many awesome stories not to. Though my vent has helped more than I could've imagined - because I've finally written the first paragraph of AOM - which I'm hoping to complete. This seems to always happen when I'm on the brink of giving up writing, I get back into it a day or so later, which funnily enough was the key to finishing Products. Weird! So, I got a small teaser for you guys: "Whose club is this?" Lacey Grey's question was asked in a dumbfounded fashion as she eyed the outlandish interior. Tagged on the surface of each wall was that of personalized names in UV-reactive graffiti, complimenting the urban atmosphere and making it look as though the owner had hired a group of Ghetto soldiers to design the place. On the base of the aluminum dancefloor was the spray-painted e-fit of a teenaged male wearing a hoodie, hand-delineated in black. Across the heart of its chest was the sign of anarchy, the outer circle that contained the traditional A being in the shape of a G, the hook of the latter letter intersecting to complete the first. Whoever was behind the nightclub's layout was a UKG mastermind. Now all I have to do is try to finish the rest! So yeah, thanks for your support guys, I seriously couldn't have even managed to write that without ya. Edited February 1, 2008 by Oxidizer Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chickstick Posted February 1, 2008 Share Posted February 1, 2008 Fantastic. Chapter Four of BBB is up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Land Of Confusion Posted February 1, 2008 Share Posted February 1, 2008 Cheers mate. I'll still be sticking around, don't worry, I'm hooked on too many awesome stories not to. Though my vent has helped more than I could've imagined - because I've finally written the first paragraph of AOM - which I'm hoping to complete. This seems to always happen when I'm on the brink of giving up writing, I get back into it a day or so later, which funnily enough was the key to finishing Products. Weird! So, I got a small teaser for you guys: "Whose club is this?" Lacey Grey's question was asked in a dumbfounded fashion as she eyed the outlandish interior. Tagged on the surface of each wall was that of personalized names in UV-reactive graffiti, complimenting the urban atmosphere and making it look as though the owner had hired a group of Ghetto soldiers to design the place. On the base of the aluminum dancefloor was the spray-painted e-fit of a teenaged male wearing a hoodie, hand-delineated in black. Across the heart of its chest was the sign of anarchy, the outer circle that contained the traditional A being in the shape of a G, the hook of the latter letter intersecting to complete the first. Whoever was behind the nightclub's layout was a UKG mastermind. Now all I have to do is try to finish the rest! So yeah, thanks for your support guys, I seriously couldn't have even managed to write that without ya. Yay! I knew you could do it Oxi! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Oblivionz Posted February 1, 2008 Share Posted February 1, 2008 Steve stared at the reporter across from him. The cameras on his right inched closer and closer every few seconds. The plywood wall on his left, painted with what looked like a beautiful sunrise, began to annoy him. He was beginning to feel claustrophobic. He looked directly into the reporter’s eyes. The reporter merely stared back, notepad in his hand, occasionally taking a glance at it. Steve guessed it was filled with questions that he had thought of before the interview. “So, you thought it was hypnosis. How about you describe it? Just tell us everything that happened.” Steve sighed, and recalled the events of June 17th, 2006. Expect a release sometime late this week/early next week. Great, Pat. I'm anticipating the release for this bitch. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Oxidizer Posted February 2, 2008 Share Posted February 2, 2008 Thanks, guys! I'm changing the story ever so slightly to make it easier to write, which works better than what I already had in mind, and makes Aiden a bit enigmatic too. And likewise Mr. Larceny, I'm looking forward to Hypnosis, Pat! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vercetti21 Posted February 3, 2008 Share Posted February 3, 2008 (edited) Chapter 10 of VLV is in the works, and should be up within the next few days. On another note, sorry I've been a bit inactive for awhile and haven't been able to write or critique. Been having to deal with a lot of birthday stuff lately, only to return to the forums with this sh*tty update. Oh well. Edited February 3, 2008 by Vercetti21 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chickstick Posted February 3, 2008 Share Posted February 3, 2008 Looking forward to it. Oh, and Pat, Hypnosis= Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Oxidizer Posted February 6, 2008 Share Posted February 6, 2008 (edited) *exhales deeply* I've finally finished solidifying the plot for AOM and have got all the character dialogue down, now ready to be written around. I'm glad I couldn't get into what I had before as this story is gonna be much better than what I first had in mind. So I owe it to you guys for encouraging me - thanks. I ain't got a proper teaser for you yet so I'll make do for an excerpt from the dialogue I got. This'll be crap as I suck at scripts and I'm typing this in the reply box: Using the touch pad to navigate the cursor, Sadie enlarges a picture of Lacey on her laptop, set on the surface of Aiden's glass coffee table. Sadie: This girl. (Taps the screen to punctuate her words). I'm utilizing her. Viewing the image reluctantly, Aiden recognises Lacey as one of Shock Management's models. The picture even taken outside the agency. Aiden: (Challengingly) Won't doing that compromise your network's secrecy? Sadie: (Without feeling) An old friend who owes me a favor has agreed to confess to her murder as a rape gone wrong, else he'll get a bullet in his head. (Closes the laptop) It's taken care of. Told you it was crap but it's all I got to offer at the moment. Some of the character gestures might differ in the actual version though. Edited February 6, 2008 by Oxidizer Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Oxidizer Posted February 8, 2008 Share Posted February 8, 2008 (edited) Quick teaser for Mobile, seeing as I'm using this project to get back into writing. It's quite short and I'll be working on it over the weekend, so who knows, you might get this before March as planned. Illumed by the cool fluorescent lighting, Calvin Morgan wiped the sweat from the back of his neck using a fresh towel, leant on the opaque marble basin of a lavish changing room. Unlike most gyms, the one he utilized was actually worth the pricey membership fees, Calvin's having been paid for by the ADFA, giving him free reign and access whilst in-training. Throwing the towel over his bare shoulder, Calvin admired his self reflected in the crystalline mirror, his god-like physique and handsomely dark good looks solidifying his ego. Just noticed I double-posted. I suck! Edited February 9, 2008 by Oxidizer Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
saltinespike Posted February 8, 2008 Author Share Posted February 8, 2008 Well, it seems I'm due for a MAJOR update, including Hatchet Man, the Library, and possibly "Ashes of the Apocalypse. Those will probably come some time thins weekend. Just letting you know. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Oxidizer Posted February 10, 2008 Share Posted February 10, 2008 Re-worked version of the previous AOM teaser I posted: Eyeing her surroundings coolly whilst seated on a black plastic stool, Lacey Grey marveled at the outlandish interior before her; rebounding sluggishly from the bar opposite was a misty hologram that illustrated the nightclub's name - AM - sifting through the purple lasers that sped in unison with the throbbing sensation of dark-sounding Garage bass. "This club is incredible," Lacey vocalized her admiration, turning on her seat to reface her in-looks equal. Monique Moore, sat vis-à-vis of Lacey at the chrome table, nodded casually in agreement; her spot leaving Lacey little option but to catch sight of the elaborate street art that adorned the gray-painted brickwork beside them. On the surface of the wall was graffiti of a vague teenaged male wearing a hoodie, spray-painted in UV-reactive liquid to illume the e-fit in the dark. Across the heart of the boy's chest was the tag of anarchy; the outer circle that contained the trademark A being in the shape of a G, the hook of the latter letter intersecting to complete the first. Whoever was behind the nightclub's design was a UKG mastermind. I'm gonna try and dumb it down a bit. All the big and fancy words are all very well, but they take away a lot from the story, don't ya think? Other than that, I'm actually happy with what I've got so far. So that's good! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chickstick Posted February 10, 2008 Share Posted February 10, 2008 Sounds good, Oxi, and I'm looking forward to it. Chapter Five of BBB will be up in the next couple of minutes. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eminence Posted February 10, 2008 Share Posted February 10, 2008 I'm gonna try and dumb it down a bit. All the big and fancy words are all very well, but they take away a lot from the story, don't ya think? Are you kidding? Please, point out to me one of the "big and fancy" words in that excerpt? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Oxidizer Posted February 11, 2008 Share Posted February 11, 2008 (edited) There's one or two phrases in there - but I kinda like 'em so I'll probably keep them in the proper version. Already I scrapped that teaser. And that's exactly my problem. I'm never happy with what I come up with, because it's crap. I seriously can't write anymore. I don't even think it's writersblock either, I just ain't good at it no more. I'm thinking of re-plotting the entire thing, but the bitch of it is, there's absolutely nothing wrong with the plot whatsoever. It's some of the cleverest stuff I'll ever come up with. So you see why I was on the verge of giving up? I've tried again and again and again and it's just not working at all. It has no flow, I'm pretty certain I'm the only one who'll be able to picture this stuff in my head - the description just doesn't work, and I'm actually getting bored of trying to do the same stuff every day and not getting any further than the first line of dialogue. I really want this stuff done but I just can't get into it anymore because for the better part of 7-8 months, I've re-read and re-read the plot to the point of not caring as much as I need to to get it done. I honestly think the best that'll ever come from me is scripts, and I can't write those to save myself. I'm not exactly giving up, but it's hard not to when this keeps happening. I'm so frustrated and kinda tired of it all now, yet I have to finish it for the sake of my own sanity (which, I think I speak truth when I say this, is rapidly deteriorating ). Edited February 11, 2008 by Oxidizer Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TonyZimmzy Posted February 12, 2008 Share Posted February 12, 2008 I'm back from being sick. Tonight is my Writer's Discussion night. - Added a new [part one out of part two] mission for Return to Heart City - Finished Drake & Isaac: Cashing In - Resumed GTA: Old Times Ladies and ladies, let the party begin . Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pat Posted February 13, 2008 Share Posted February 13, 2008 Update on my current progress. So far, I've ran into so many roadbumps with Hypnosis that I've canceled it. It's one of those stories where the plot is good (not trying to toot my own horn), but it can't really be made into a story. Been working on what I have so far dubbed "Internet Stalker." Basically, a forum is having it's yearly meet (gee, I couldn't have stolen that from here, could I? ) at a hotel deep in the woods of Canada. So of course they start to get pretty spooked when hotel employees start dissapearing. After finding the first body, they try to escape to their cars, soon realizing that someone has both slashed all the tires. Now they're panicking. Someone is a the hotel, and everyone is getting suspicious of Mike, the member who registered just last month and decided to tag along this year. Be sure to see plenty of things being retrieved from cars (or at least, people trying to retrieve things, hint hint), people trying to escape into the woods, and of course plenty of "DON'T GO IN THERE!" moments. Any ideas for a better title? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Oblivionz Posted February 13, 2008 Share Posted February 13, 2008 Any ideas for a better title? Attack Of The '08 members. Haha. so no more Hypnosis? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pat Posted February 13, 2008 Share Posted February 13, 2008 Haha. so no more Hypnosis? Probably not. Sorry, just couldn't work it out. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vercetti21 Posted February 13, 2008 Share Posted February 13, 2008 Any ideas for a better title? Attack Of The '08 members. Seconded, or better yet, "Attack of the Dumb sh*ts" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Oxidizer Posted February 13, 2008 Share Posted February 13, 2008 Zimz, I'm gonna check out those new chapters later! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chickstick Posted February 14, 2008 Share Posted February 14, 2008 (edited) Chapter Six of BBB will be up within the hour. In fact, it's up now. Edited February 14, 2008 by Chickstick Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheJonesy Posted February 17, 2008 Share Posted February 17, 2008 Within the next week, I'm going to start up a topic of my short stories I've written in the past. Then, I will update it with new short stories as well as tidbits. As some may know, I fail at making lengthy stories, so I'll stick to my forte... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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