Writers' Ideas

[Typhus]

Actually I used the gas mask idea before Ghost was ever written.

But yes, this guy wears a mask at the aforementioned parties.

[mark-2007]

Best I can think of is some ancient Greek-theatre kind of one. Or a masquerade ball one but that is a bit cliche and best fits for a woman. Also, they'd have to hold it in place all party. How about just a blank one - like Tom Cruise's in Vanilla Skies? It kinda looks like Michael Myers' one though.

[Pat]

What are the activities of the character? Take what his role is in the story, and try to tie it to the mask. For example, a psychotic killer could have a mask formed from the skin of a few of his victims (see: Texas Chainsaw Massacre).

 

If you make up the mask, and then the character, you're practically just adding the mask for the hell of it, which is never a good idea.

 

Remember, I'm just trying to help.

[Rhoda]

I need a good mask. Anyone got any ideas for a good, bizzare mask?

I used Slipknot for inspiration. Though they are relatively mainstream now, many members have no clue what they look like so I got away with using one of the more recessive members. Look into it.

Regarding the wider context, a mask suggests that the character is either ashamed of what he's done/doing, prefers to remain anonymous or he has severe psychotic issues. You may want to think why the character is wearing the mask.

[Oxidizer]

Urgh. As cool as my ideas and projects are, I wish I didn't keep getting all of these goddamn awesome plots as I can never actually write them. But yeah, I got a first person[?] POV one-shot for Dean from M&P in mind at the moment, and were it not for the fact that I'm on the verge of falling into a deep coma (I'm so f*cken tired!) I'd attemp at writing it now. I'm beyond help, me.

[The Unvirginiser]

Just thought of lots of plot ideas for Bravo Seven Down.

Expect lots of gunfights, sniping, helicopter fights.

[Oxidizer]

Expect lots of gunfights, sniping, helicopter fights.

Whoa! Badass.

[Gouveia]

Just thought of lots of plot ideas for Bravo Seven Down.

Expect lots of gunfights, sniping, helicopter fights.

Totally awesome!

 

I finally posted some work here. I mean, decent (or near-decent).

 

Also, I'm planning on making the story after GTAIII's events. I think it'll come out good, it won't be like 20 chapters long, but I think I can make 3-5 chapters out of it.

[The Unvirginiser]

Okay so i'm a little stumped on Bravo Seven Down at the moment.

If you've read up the point it's at now.. Hopkins has just set up the booby trap and killed one of the soliders searching for him... now I know what happens later in to the story, but I need one or two chapters to buff it out a bit... so something intresting to happen while on the run from the soldiers.

 

Anybody wants to hear plot details of later on in an attempt to aid me in making a bridge between the chapters please feel free to contact me

[Typhus]

What are the activities of the character?

He kidnaps people (Children and the homeless mainly) whilst driving around at night in a white van. He then stores them in a cellar and every year holds a party in which his victims are sold on to a variety of perverts and criminals.

I was thinking that rather than a mask i could give him a wig. It's mainly a disguise when he's out collecting these people.

[Pat]

What are the activities of the character?

He kidnaps people (Children and the homeless mainly) whilst driving around at night in a white van. He then stores them in a cellar and every year holds a party in which his victims are sold on to a variety of perverts and criminals.

I was thinking that rather than a mask i could give him a wig. It's mainly a disguise when he's out collecting these people.

The wig would probably work well for when he's kidnapping the homeless people. Perhaps he could even have a collection of wigs, made from the hair of the bums that he couldn't sell to any of the perverts nor criminals?

 

As for the children, what are their general ages? Seven and above would probably be quite afraid of a man driving around in an old white van wearing a mask. But if the kids are younger (let's say, six and under), something similar to that of a clown mask would probably work. You could give subtle hints to make the reader aware that this is a person to avoid, but the kids would be trusting and young enough to think that he's just a regular clown.

[Oxidizer]

That's a disturbing plot, right there, Typhus. You written this story yet or just planning it?

[mark-2007]

 

What are the activities of the character?

He kidnaps people (Children and the homeless mainly) whilst driving around at night in a white van. He then stores them in a cellar and every year holds a party in which his victims are sold on to a variety of perverts and criminals.

I was thinking that rather than a mask i could give him a wig. It's mainly a disguise when he's out collecting these people.

I think this van is called for...

 

 

You've got a good idea there though, and I like Pat's idea about different wigs too.

[Typhus]

That's a disturbing plot, right there, Typhus. You written this story yet or just planning it?

Project: Red Sky.

[Oxidizer]

Ah! I started to read that one earlier but got sidetracked. I'll check it out properly now.

[Rhoda]

I've got a few ideas floating round, which I hope to develop on when Ghost has finished. Not sure when that will be come to think of it, but I've got an idea for a GTA game script (not another I hear you cry) set it in a completely new location, much like TonyZimmzy's Heart City series.

I've also got another idea regarding the misanthropic and destructive events of Claude in Liberty City, using IV's interpretation of the map and maybe characters from the game. I'm not sure if it would work very well, but I'm keeping it open.

Edited May 18, 2008 by Masterkraft

[Claude GTA3]

I think I'll incorporate Tony's dialogue style in Respect is Everything.

[The Unvirginiser]

Got some amazing ideas for Bravo Seven Down

Two words for you...

Alternative Endings

[Chickstick]

HARVILLE

 

Prologue

The doctor who had instructed Sophie Diaz to take a holiday, whether she wanted to or not, was a dirty old bastard with a nasty zit on the side of his nose and a set of mostly whole, but horribly discoloured, teeth. She had been laying in the almost ridiculously miniscule hospital slip, trying desperately to not let her rather impressive breasts tumble out of it, as they had once done so at the Paradise, right into the face of a drunken tire exporter from Atlanta, who had brushed them away as if they were a fly and continued with his drink.

 

The thought of her work, her life, the only one she knew, was a blessing, distracting her however momentarily from the sinking feeling she sometimes got when she felt people staring at her. Of course that helped with the job, but in a hospital, nobody, particularly a pretty young woman of Sophie’s age and build, likes to be stared at in that perverted way, especially not by a seventy year old with no dental hygiene who probably sorted through the dirty laundry to collect her worn panties and take them home as a souvenir.

 

“Miss Diaz” the doctor- Kurtzberg was his name- said softly, probably distracted by daydreams about spying on his neighbour in the shower.

“I’m sorry, doctor?” she replied, her voice sounding horribly beautiful in the cold white disinfected room. It seemed to come from a world away, like the Martians in War of The Worlds, ready to be destroyed at any moment by the unseen bacteria in the air.

“I was just discussing a possible cause of your recent fainting spells, but no matter. You seem to prefer sitting there staring into space.”

“No, please, go ahead,” she paused before adding, “and sorry” and hated herself immediately. She hated to be seen as being like a little kid in situations like this, and that surely hadn’t helped.

Dr Kurtzberg continued: “You appear to have suffered from nervous exhaustion. Your latest stunt (stunt? she thought, I’m not f*cking doing it deliberately) seems to be the last and worst of it. I would suggest, however, that you refrain from returning to work any time soon. Take a vacation, recharge your batteries. May I ask what is it you do?”

 

“I’m a dancer.”

Dr Kurtzberg nodded, and raised his eyebrows as if to say, yeah right.

“I was at work when I fainted last. The man who brought me in, the guy with the afro, he’s Brucie.”

“Oh, of course!” Kurtzberg said. “How could I forget, it gave us all quite a shock to see you come in dressed like you were. Quite a shock indeed.”

Sophie’s face flared up as she realised she had been naked but for a leather thong when she had started to feel dizzy.

Damn, Brucie, couldn’t you have at least put some clothes on me before you brought me in?

“Oh, yes, Matron said it was the most surprising thing she’d ever seen, and she’s been here since roughly the time of the Crusades-“

“Shut the f*ck up. I’m leaving. Now.” she interrupted, feeling the dark flash of anger for the first time.

Kurtzberg pulled a face that looked as if somebody had just cut his cock off with a pair of rusty scissors before he finally broke the spell and was able to speak.

“That’s not the best decision, Miss Diaz, I implore you to-“

“I’m going on a vacation. That’s what you suggested, wasn’t it? A vacation?” and then, almost to herself: “I’ll go see Connie and Greg in Iowa, yeah, haven’t been back home in years.”

She stormed out, not caring what that creep Kurtzberg made of this little tantrum, not caring that her ass was showing out the back of her slip. She only cared about the vacation, and about Des Moines.

 

*****

I bought Stephen King's On Writing the other day (and I advise you to as well, excellent book) and took some of his advice about editing. Basically, wait a while. Before, I was going through it almost as soon as I had it done, and whether that was affecting my view on it, I don't know. I'll try out this method though, and see what becomes of it. Regardless that's the first thing I've written for weeks.

[Claude GTA3]

I dunno what to do with the Zaibatsu now. Protagonists or antagonists?

[The Unvirginiser]

GTA: San Andreas Stories is in very very very early stages of pre-production...

Get ready gents, over the coming months it will develop and then out of nowhere

BOOM

Explode in to writer's Discussion

I promise you nothing less than perfection

 

Time to get excited

[Typhus]

Another bunch of mission scripts right?

[Rhoda]

It seems that Heart City has influenced more than we know. Game scripts are fantastic if done right, and thankfully, there's not a lot here that do wrong.

 

Claude GTA3: I think you should make them protagonists. Who were their adversaries again, was it the Loonies? If so, it's a tough decision, as there's a lot of mission possibilities each way.

[Lethal Nizzle]

I have a story in the works which is set in Heart City. I've had the go ahead from Tony to use Green State as the backdrop. It's written in normal fashion ( no scripts ). I've wrote the draft, and I may post it on the WD just to get some feedback. Thinking of a title though.. any ideas?

[Rhoda]

"A Green State Of Affairs" maybe? I don't know how much of a reference to Heart City/Green State you want in your title.

[Lethal Nizzle]

I was thinking of using Propane Nightmares, which is a pretty cool phrase ( and an awesome song ).

 

A Green State of Affairs sounds pretty cool.

[Rhoda]

Only use a title if it has reference to your story. If your main character's nickname is Propane, that's fair enough but don't use it just because.

[Claude GTA3]

Prologue

 

Algonquin, Liberty City, 2008

 

The alarm was ringing loudly as Claude was running away from the police. The bank security guards were fierce, and wouldn't stop shooting. Claude, burdened with his duffel bag full of money, took cover behind a dumpster as the cop cars started arriving. Police officers started coming out of them.

"PUT YOUR HANDS IN THE AIR, RIGHT NOW!" Shouted a cop trough the megaphone. He had no choice but to fight. Claude cocked his shotgun, closed his eyes for a moment, and started shooting trough the cops. The rain of bullets opposing him seemed to have avoided him, but his last shell dropped out, and he got shot. He dropped the gun and put his hands on his head and laid down on his stomach, barely even paying attention to the wound. The officers cuffed him, and put him in the patrol car.

"You're gonna do a lot of time." An officer mocked Claude. But he just kept looking at the filthy car mat and kept silent. He got patched up in the prison's infirmary, and was sent in court. Claude was sentenced 5 years in an experimental cryonic prison. He only got five years due to the fact that nobody knew of the horrible actions of his past, and treated him like a petty thief. Claude was soon transferred to a Zaibatsu research lab, and some federal agents guarded him there for a few days. Claude didn't know what was really going on, and just obeyed everybody to avoid any confrontations. He got sent in a glass coffin-like chamber, and was ordered to lay down and close his eyes for a moment. He felt strong cold surrounding him, but hasn't managed to open his eyes to see what was it before it got to him. He is finally at rest...

 

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Edited May 20, 2008 by Claude GTA3

[Typhus]

 

"PUT YOUR HANDS IN THE AIR, RIGHT NOW!" Shouted a cop trough the megaphone. Claude had no choice but to fight. Claude cocked his shotgun, closed his eyes for a moment, and started shooting trough the cops. The rain of bullets opposing him seemed to have avoided him, but Claude's last shell dropped out, and he got shot.

 

I think you're mentioning the name "Claude" too much. It gets repetitive.

 

 

The alarm was ringing as Claude was running with away from th police.

 

Should be:

 

 

The alarm was ringing as Claude was running with away from the police.

[Claude GTA3]

"PUT YOUR HANDS IN THE AIR, RIGHT NOW!" Shouted a cop trough the megaphone. Claude had no choice but to fight. Claude cocked his shotgun, closed his eyes for a moment, and started shooting trough the cops. The rain of bullets opposing him seemed to have avoided him, but Claude's last shell dropped out, and he got shot.

 

I think you're mentioning the name "Claude" too much. It gets repetitive.

Thanks, I'll edit it later today.