Woozie's beginning

[Agninoter]

Chapter 1-Arriving at San Fierro-San Fierro International,San Fierro,San Andreas June 30,1989 1:56 pm

Woozie,was one of the most influential men in the Tseung Crime Syndicate.His parents were murdered in a explosion.Taking his venegance out on the families,the war reached a climax during a supposed peace meeting,Woozie was lucky enough to slughter the ambushers but becoming the most wanted man in Hong Kong.To keep him off police attnetion and from weakening the Tseung,he is sent to San Fierro.Woozie just arrived from their flight.

 

Attendant:"Thank you for choosing People'sAirChina."reaches for his luggage

 

Woozie:"Thank you miss"looks over her posterior

 

Attendant:"Are you checking me out?You perv.I'm married."

 

Woozie:"Just looking at what God gave you"

 

Attendant:"Get out of here you perv,and get your damn luggage."

 

Woozie:"Jesus Christ,one comment,and I'm a pervert.Ungrateful bitch"gets his luggage and heads outside for a taxi"

 

Woozie:"The flight wasn't even that good"

 

Emerald Isle Casino,Las Venturas,San Andreas June 30,1989 2:08 pm.

 

Officer Pendlebury,a prominent officer in CRASH,was not known by his fellow officers to be corrupt.Johnny Sindacco was a prominent member of a upcoming Mafia family known as the Sindaccos.Strong-willed and unwilling to follow people's orders

 

Pendlebury:grabs Johnny at the neck with his arms and beats him"You better follow my orders."

 

Johnny:bleeding"Why the hell should my family pay you money and help you"

 

Pendlebury:punches him on the cheeks"You little prick,I have files on you and your family."

 

Johnny:"When my father hears about this"spits some blood

 

Pendlebury:"Do you know that whenever I want,i can bring these files to the Las Venturas police chief to order a takedown on you"

 

Johnny:"You little bastard,you have everything figured out for you,but then,without us,you would be defenseless."

 

Pendlebury:"It's true that it would be difficult,but then I just get another gang to be my lackies,so you are replacable."

 

Johnny:"I rather get f*cked by a horse than work for scum like you"attempts to punch Pendlebury.

 

Pendlebury:"Just give me a million dollars and I won't put you on a plane to Liberty for the Leone and Forelli Families to whack you."beats him to the point of death until someone called him."Hello,who's calling."

 

Secretary:"Enough small talk,next week,you have for you a rookie police officer."

 

Pendlebury:says to himself"sh*t,that what I need,some rookie to check up at me."

 

Secretary:"what are you doing?"

 

Pendlebury:responds quickly"Nothing,so who is this kid?"

 

Secretary:"Some guy named Tenpenny coming to join the CRASH division in Los Santos."

 

Pendlebury:"What is his background?"

 

Secretary:"You seemed stressed,this Tenpenny fellow was prevoiusly working for the VCPD but was transfered to Los Santos for some reason."

 

Pendlebury:"When to I have to meet the new kid?"impatiently as he beats

 

Secretary:"Next week,so what are you doing?"

 

Pendlebury:"Just taking care of a few errands,well,bye"turns off his cell and goes back to Johnny trying to crawl to his pistol."Sadly,I have to make this meeting short,bring the money to me in my place in Ganton in a couple of days."gets in his squad car and leaves

 

Johnny:"asshole"crawls toward his car and heads back to Caligula's

 

Idlewood-Los Santos,San Andreas June 30,1989 2:50 pm

 

OG Kane,was a low,but influential member of the Front Yard set of the disunited Ballas.They were thinking from moving from the old ways of robbery and prostitution to the drug trade.With cocaine,the Ballas have a chance to take down

 

OG Kane:"look,homies,we need to sho' thos' Grove perperators us Front Yar' Ballas can cap their asses."

 

LB:"Grove Street pretty tough,i dont think a set like ours could take out the Grove."

 

OG Kane:grabs a sample of crack"This is goin' to get us the powa' and weapons to take out them Grove mothaf*ckers"

 

LB:"Even with that crack,our sets aint united,we cant fight the Grove if our sets are disunited."

 

OG Kane:"I thought of that and we need to unite the sets by any means necesarry."

 

LB:"So where are going to get the crack from?"

 

OG Kane:"From the Sindacco Family in Las Venturas and the 150st street Yakuza in San Fierro."stops and talks again'We going to attack the Grove in Ganton.I hear those perperators having an party there."

 

LB:"Wouldnt there be guards all around that party?"

 

OG Kane:"Dont worry,collect some homies and five cars while I get some in Jefferson.We taking down the Grove!"

 

LB:"Fo' sure"heads off seperate directions

 

 

Edited November 12, 2006 by Agninoter

[Blackadder.]

Seems well structured but I will, point out an error that makes it almost impssoible to read. You have it like this

 

 

Woozie:Hey,Fa Li,Chang Tseung sent u to Fierro too?

Fa Li:Of course,well i been here for a year now trying to set up some contacts for you.

 

It should be this

 

 

Woozie:Hey,Fa Li,Chang Tseung sent u to Fierro too?

 

Fa Li:Of course,well i been here for a year now trying to set up some contacts for you.

 

Makes it much easier to read. Story sounds good so far, keep it up

 

EDIT: Also, use you, not u

Edited October 22, 2006 by blackadder18

[TonyZimmzy]

Sounds like a good plot but as Blackadder said, you might wan't to space everything out a little more, make it look nice and tidy, and easy & more fun to read

[Agninoter]

thank u ,i will do that

Chapter 2 will come on soon later in the afternoon

[Agninoter]

Chapter 2-Doing a Favor

Woozie is sleeping in the Infernus and wakes up to the sound of his cell phone.

Woozie:"Hello,who is this"

 

Ra Fa Li::"Its Jezz Torrent,no,you asshole,its me,I have a job for you to do.I owe this guy,big-time street racer,a favor.There is a 1986 Maibustu Thunder in the Docks.Go get it and bring it in his garage."

 

Woozie:"All right"He hangs up and drives the Infernus to the docks...while he is heading to the docks..."sh*t,there are so many Vietnamese here.I hope I don't get shot here."Loads his personal Colt 9mm.Since San Fierro docks were large and many shipping companies made."Hey,you,do u know where Chartered Libertine Lines drop their loads."

 

Guy:"Chartered Libertine Lines drop their loads in the far left terminal.Go there.....I'm sure they are there."Leaves and goes back to checking containers

 

Woozie:"Thanks"Drives the Infernus to Terminal 4-A for CLL and sees the Maibustu Thunder parked there.It was quiet ,too quiet.."Damn,i'm the only one in there,well,need to get that car to the garage."While he was heading to the car.Two Savannas and eight Rifas armed with bats

 

Rifa:"Watcha doing,holmes....you in Rifa turf...that car is ours" The Rifa begin to walk closer to Woozie and started to grin.

 

Woozie:pulls out his 9mm"I dont want to kill you wetbacks...."This just angers the gang members and one of them heads to hit Woozie in the face

 

Rifa:"ime for you to die,you f*cking yellow"Woozie meanwhiles gets his 9mm and shoots the Rifa in the heart "You asshole,get him,pendejos"Dies.

 

Woozie:gets up from the floor"Who wants some??"He uses his karate skills to beat the Rifa and use his pistol to butt the heads.Then grabs two pisols from the floor and shoots at the remaining four Rifa killing them with only minor bruises"Thats what you get ,you f*cking wetbacks."He gets into the Buritto and drives out of the parking lot only to grab the attention of more Rifa in their bikes."sh*t,that's what i need,more fans who want my autograph"

 

Rifa:in their bikes shooting at Woozie"KILL HIM,I WANT THAT ASSHOLE ALIVE"

 

Woozie:"god damn,it start"the car started and drove quickly and was accerelating to a roadblock where two Voodoos blocked the exit protected by four armed guards with a ramp.

 

Rifa:"stop holmes or you get blasted!'The car continued advancing"Ok,holmes,stop or we will kill you."The car is within 10 yards accerelating."Oh sh*t!I'm getting out of here"

 

Woozie:The car is above the roadblock as rhe entire roadblock and guards killed as he drives into the streets with the Rifa behind him"sh*t,i need to get these f*cks off of me."Woozie decies to run past Chinatown and goes to Carlton Heights driving way down the terraces with many of the Rifa bikers,were killed tryin o chase him in the terrace.

 

Rifa:bleeding"You asshole,i will get you for this"

 

Woozie:hehehe......"well,i should take this car to this asshole's garage"parks into the garage in Doherty.I wonder what was in there"opens the trunk."wow,there are M60s,Colt 9mm,MP5s,every heavy weapon is here here,sh*t i risked my life for that

 

Ends Chapter 2

 

 

 

[Blackadder.]

Much better, you just need alittle work on your grammar. And smilies during a story?

Edited October 23, 2006 by blackadder18

[Agninoter]

This is chapter 3

 

Chapter 3-Ra Fa Li's office-Doherty,San Fierro,San Andreas 8:00pm June 23,1989

Woozie,getting a phone call saying he has another job for him and enters his office seeing Ra Fa Li talking with an police officer

Ra Fa Li:"Hi,Woozie,how you been,here Officer Pendlebury and his lackey,Tenpenny."

 

Pendlebury"Woozie,i hear from Ra Fa Li out of your situatuon and be glad to take out any obstacles for a proce,if you catch my drift."

 

Woozie:"Officer Tenpenny,can u give me and Fa Li a minute"Pendlebury nodded and Woozie talked to Fa Li in the other room."You dumbass,you brought SFPD's CRASH Unit here!Our plans will be ruined and Tseung will hang our asses in his fireplace!!"

 

Ra Fa Li:"Chill,man,that guy says if you do hi a few favors and a couple of bribes alon the way,we can get the SFPD on our side to take over the city."

 

Woozie:"You better because by the end of that year,Tseung is going to send some guys o see how we doing and we will call us occasionaly."

 

Ra Fa Li:"Are you finished with your panic attacks?I got it covered...as long as you don screw up"

 

Woozie:"I DONT SCREW UP!I should be worried.You have the entire SFPD up our assesbeacause you think it is safe to have one corrupt cop on our side.I screw up.....asshole"he and Ra Fa Li go back to their office.

 

Ra Fa Li:a bit shaken by the confrontation."My associate is just a bit nervous abou trusting you."

 

Pendlebury:"Woozie,you should trust after all,i am the head of CRASH and any time,i want to"right in fron of him"go monkey on your ass and put you back on the next flight to HK to be killed by Tseung."

 

Tenpenny:"Yeah,you tell that yellow piece of sh*t"

 

Pendlebury:hits Tenpenny while he sniffing his crack"Did i say you can talk,you worthless piece of sh*t,i should have gotten another asshole to be my mentee and lackey"

 

Woozie:"Ok,after you are done with that,can I go?"

 

Ra Fa Li:"No,you cant,Pendlebury has a job for you to do"

 

Pendlebury:"You see,Woozie,in this grea place called San Fierro,you have do whatever it takes to eliminate crime and remove the corrup from power by any means necessary even in what the liberals call illegal."

 

Woozie:"stop talking about sh*t and get to the point"

 

Pendlebury:"Didn't you learn manners in that sh*tty place called Hong Kong?"

 

Woozie:"I can cap your ass right now."Ra Fa Li encouraes him to dont bring out the pistol

 

Pendlebury:"You see,you learning already.I need you to do a service for me.My wife was sexually assualted by some punk trying to think he was all that....by the way,he is associated with the Rifa and has a known record of killing fellow officers.He is found dealing occasionaly in his spot at night in the beach.

 

Woozie:"Ok,i will do that"gets a bat and loads his pistol.

 

Pendlebury:If you do this,maybe you get some more work and rememberNO COPS!"Woozie leaves and gets on his Sanchez and heads to the beach...

 

San Fierro Beach,San Fierro,San Andreas 9:30 pm,June 23,1989

Chavez:"Hey,man want some stuff"

 

Man:"Sure,you got meth...i have a frat party in Las Venturas University...and need lots of it....

 

Chavez:50 pounds will get you around 2500 dollars.

 

Man:OK,heres another 500 for 10 more pounds of that sh*t....

 

Chavez:"Ok.bye,what can i do to serve you."Sees Woozie unarmed

 

Woozie:"It's time for you to die,you bitch,shouldnt have violated Mr.Pendlebury's woman"

 

Chavez:"That bitch deserved it for calling me a dumb Mexican.Oh my god"runs to his Phonix and speeds up as Woozie takes a PCJ-900 to chase him.Afer an hour of chasing him and his car running out of gas,he parks in the alley thinking he is safe

 

Chavez:"That stupid Chinese couldnt outchase me,that cracker whore deserved it."Sees Woozie right behind him"Oh f*ck"he is shot in the face.

 

Woozie:"f*cking Rifa,i just put his body in the dumpster"cleans his pistol and puts the body in the dumpster.He calls Pendlebury who is back in his office downtown"Hello?"

 

Tenpenny:"Who the f*ck is this,Pendlebury is busy!"

 

Woozie:"f*ck you,Tenpenny,pu on Pendlebury.What are you,his f*ck buddy"Tenpenny puts Pendlebury on the line.

 

Pendlebury:"You shouldnt be rude to my lackey,only I can push him around,by the way,did you kill Chavez.

 

Woozie:"Yeah,i did,he is on the dumpster.Didnt realize it"

 

Pendlebury:You done good,kid,heres some money outside your place for your deed.I'll be seeing you."

 

Chapter 3 ends

 

[Agninoter]

Chapter 4-Blast from the Past

 

Misty's-Hashbury,San Fierro,San Andreas July 3,1989 8:00 pm

 

Woozie was drinking a cup of rum and was "checking out the action" in the club.Officer Pendlebury arrived surprising him.

 

Woozie:"Look at the ass at the one"

 

Waitress:"Look,I ain't no ho to look at."

 

Woozie:""Your the one wearing skimpy clothing"

 

Waitress:scoffs off"f*ck you bitch,"leaves

 

Pendlebury:"She had a nice ass,didnt she?

 

Woozie:no giving a look"Yea she did"turns his head"What the hell,Pendlebury,what the hell you doing?"

 

Pendlebury:"What,a police officer after trying to keep the streets of Fierro safe,can't have a drink to relax."

 

Woozie:"Where's your bitch Tenpenny?"

 

Pendlebury:"He's doing my paperwork,the moron."laughs"Thats why I love this job,i can get idiots to do the work I don't wan't to do."

 

Woozie:"What do you want?"

 

Pendlebury:"There's a friend of mines Cherhov Sokolov,head of the Russian Mob who's heard of you?"

 

Woozie:"Who told him about me?"

 

Pendlebury:"Its your friend Ra Fa Li.From seeing him,he is a real fan of vodka."

 

Pendlebury:"Sokolov is in his mansion outside the city.Full of guards.Here's my card,this will tell Sokolov ur a friend of mine's"

 

Woozie:"Your everything,but a friend"

 

Pendlebury:"Yeah,yea,get out of here,errand boy."

 

Chang's Palace-Hong Kong,China July 3,1989 8:23 pm

Chang and his servant Wei was in another of his meetings with the members of his organization and talked about his top man,Woozie and his doubtful loyalities.

Li:"Boss,You sure that we can trust this Woozie guy,he is a little arrogant"

 

Long:"He may be a little uncontrollable especially abou supervision but he has done a lot for the family.

 

Tseung:"Be as what they may be,times have changed in China in our lifetimes.No longer is gambling,prostitution or robbery profitable enough but drugs."

 

Wu:"Many of the rival syndicaes didnt dabble in that risky business and it caused much internal squabble in other gangs."

 

Tseung:"We don't care about the other syndicates since are the only organization in complete control of Hong Kong.Especially after what Woozie done in the Queen Elizabeth."

 

Long:"Who says that Woozie will remain loyal to us since we sent that incompetent bum to help him help us take the West Coast."

 

Li:"I suggest we need people to spy on him...just to see where his loyalities lie and if we don't here from him...we send some muscle to help him think"

 

Wu:"Our only competent contact down there is who?"with curiosity

 

Tseung:"Of course,our assassin Mai Taedong is there on a extended vacation there.She can keep an eye on him."

 

Long:"It has been a while since we conacted her last."asked with doubt

 

Tseung:"This meeting has ended,gentlemen.I will call her now but i need privacy."

 

Men:following orders and leave"Ok,Tseung,we will leave you"

 

Tseung:"Wei,get me my phone"

 

Wei:"Yes,my lord,anything else you desire"gives the cell on the desk to him.

 

Tseung:"That will be all,take the next day off."

 

Wei:"Thank you,sir,i will be leaving you"shuts door closed

 

Tseung:dials Mai's cell number but the line seems busy"Damn,this bitch is trying my patience.'dials again and still no response"This make take a while."

 

Xoomer-Doherty,San Fierro,San Andreas July 3,1989 9:30 pm

Mai ,by the way was staying over at her boyfriend Claude's house.They were at the bed with Mai's hand in Claude's chest with Mai only in her garments.

Mai:"That was awesome,Claude,i never felt anything like that in my life."

 

Claude:responds"You know it wasn't all me,you were doing your thing all around me.My ex-girlfriends were never like that."

 

Mai:"Like what??"

 

Claude:"Is that you are the first girl who is hot bu has a good personality and is not known to be the biggest whore in San Fierro"

 

Mai:"Ok,thanks.Are we still on for tomorrow night date around San Fierro?"

 

Claude:"I rented us a plane to fly around San Fierro,a yacht to go in Bayside Bay and hit the clubs and then,get to seat front-row for Madd Dogg's opening concert tour in San Fierro."

 

Mai:"My god,you are the best boyfriend ever!!!!Let's get married and have a family"

 

Claude:"I know I am,baby,you aren't half-bad yourself.Hey,you never know..."

 

Mai:hears the phone ringing and puts on some robes and go to the bathroom where her cell was.She was thinking "Damn,who the hell is ruining my moment"answers"Hello??"

 

Tseung:"Hello to yourself,its your boss.Do you remember what your mission is?"

 

Mai:"Oh, come on,im tired of that life.I came here to make a new start and find what is the meaning of my life and now you come,you drag me back to that life.I me love and i think he may be the one"opens the door slightly and stares at Claude.

 

Tseung:"Love is all bull,just buy a woman some sh*t and they quit bitching.I sent you here because i thought u would remember and check if our old pal Woozie is remaining loyal.

 

Mai:"Dont worry,i saw him a week ago chasing some drug dealer pushing yay for the Rifa.Woozie is a pretty brutal killer and now I know those werent legends since i saw him from the rooftops of my apartment dump the body in the dumpster.but by the way,I'm in the middle of something."

 

Tseung:"This is your final warning,if you dont work for us,we will send a hit team to take you out."

 

Mai:"Ok,ok,i heard from his wiretapped calls,he going to Foster Valley to meet someone."

 

Tseung:"Go then and i will hear from you,"hangs up and says to himself"Yes,we will meet"Mai goes back and begins dressing in her typical black clothing.

 

Claude:"Hey,baby what wrong?troubles back home?"asks

 

Mai:"My boss needs me in my workplace and probably can't make it to our date,im sooo sorry."

 

Claude:"It's ok,i just reeschedule it for next week.But why you need to go........"Mai leaves without a trace.

 

Chapter 4 ends

Someone please post comments

Edited November 13, 2006 by Agninoter

[TonyZimmzy]

The characters personalities are all so weird, I'm just not following whats going on properly

[Agninoter]

It is suppose to be wierd cant get any weirder than Grand Theft Auto

[Agninoter]

It is suppose to be wierd cant get any weirder than Grand Theft Auto

[Agninoter]

It is suppose to be wierd cant get any weirder than Grand Theft Auto

 

 

If u wan this story removed,just tell me and if i do write another one

[Agninoter]

Chapter 5-Rendezous with Death-Sokolov Estate,Bayside,Tierra Roboda,San Andreas July 25,1989 4:00 pm

Woozie:"Hello,anyone home"looks around the home"Hello?'an Russian man in his late 30s show up aiming an shotgun at him.

 

Stranger:"Who the hell are you doing in my home,you f*cking chink"readys to aim at him

 

Woozie:grabs the shotgun and throws it"I was sent here,I'm looking for a Sokolov guy."

 

Sokolov:"You looking at him,so I guess my old buddy sent ya here."

 

Woozie:"Ra Fa Li wouldnt consider you a friend.By the way,names Woozie"

 

Sokolov:"Ahh,Woozie,you the guy who slaughtered all those Triads"

 

Woozie:"Who told you about that?"

 

Sokolov:"It was your moron of a friend,Ra Fa Li.I didn't even have to use interrogation.Just took a few bottles of vodka and told me everything about you.

 

Woozie:"It wasn't my fault.It was supposed to be a peace meeting of all the Triad organizations.Everyone began shooting at me and my brother.Luckily,we survived only to get every police officer in Hong Kong to be on my ass."

 

Sokolov:lights a cigarette"Well,thats all in the past.So why you came here,Woozie?"

 

Woozie:"To cool down and relax along the way til its safe to move back.But from all i been doing,i been everything except that.Why you came here from Russia"

 

Sokolov:"To Live the American dream!Hae bitches sucking me off and having money and enough drugs to keep me high til the day I die."

 

Woozie:"Ok"

 

Sokolov:"Thats all beside the point.My organization can use a guy with your skills.All my men are dicks.There's a deal going on between my rivals the Latin Kings and he Leone Family.Take themut and get the money and drugs back here"

 

Woozie:"So what do you expect me to do about it."

 

Sokolov:"There's some of my guys outside to help you with a helicoptor."

 

Woozie:"Where's the deal located?"

 

Sokolov:"In one of those Chartered Libertine Lines container ships the deal is going on ?"

 

Woozie:"Okay"heads out the door

 

Sokolov:"Good luck"laughs

 

Leone-Estate,Saint Marks,Liberty City July 25,1989 4:15 pm

 

Fabrizio:"We shouldnt be doing this,Salvat0re"

 

Salvatore:"We need to expand our opeartions,Fabrizio.Times have changed since we arrived from Sicily working with Torini."

 

Fabrizio:"We don't need to get in this sh*t,our family have been doing great for 20 years."

 

Salvatore:"It's a life-time investment that will set the family....you and me for life."

 

Fabrizio:"So your saying entering to this drug business help us."

 

Salvatore:"Exactly"

 

Fabrizio:"You moron,thats an idiotic idea.I am not going to have my organization ripped apart and ruined like the Forellis."

 

Salvatore"Just becuase the Forellis did the same thing only to get screwed big time by some punk doesnt mean we gonna get screwed."

 

Fabrizio:"Okay,do you wanna be the Don,do ya"grabs a pistol

 

Salvatore:"Relax,i did'nt say anything?Chill,give this thig one shot."

 

Fabrizio:"Okay,you get one chance,So what do you want.?"

 

Salvatore:"There this deal between our organization and the Latin Kings based in San Fierro.We have some guys ready for the deal."

 

Fabrizio:"Who do we have there?"

 

Salvatore:"Someof my guys are already in Las Venturas.I call them right now."Salvotere calls."Hello"

 

Mobster:"Yes, Mr. Leone, what do you need?"

 

Salvatore:"Nothing, me and my cousin were wondering if you there yet."

 

Mobster:"We are nearby Blueberry.We should be there in 30 minutes."

 

Salvatore:"Good,be a good kid"hangs up"See Fabrizio,it all taken care of."

 

Fabrizio:"You better be right"leaves the room

 

Sokolov Estate Helipad,Bayside,Tierra Roboda,San Andreas July 25,1989 4:30 pm

 

Woozie:"Am I going by myself?"

 

Sokolov:"You crazy,and have you when you' re done,stealing the cash and cocaine for yourself?"

 

Woozie:"So am i getting help?"

 

Sokolov:points to three heavily armed men with M16s"My men will help you and keep an eye on you guys"

 

Woozie:"You can't trust me, Sokolov,as long as I'm being paid"

 

Sokolov:"As long as you don't screw me,we have a very good partnership"leaves as the helicoptor heads to its destination.

 

Chartered Libertine Lines,San Fierro Bay,San Andreas July 25,1989 4:45 pm

 

Woozie:sees the container ship overhead"Thats it,wait for the Leones to arrive to the deal."meanwhile on the ship.

 

Felipe:

Edited November 22, 2006 by Agninoter

[TonyZimmzy]

Lol, wtf. You just cut the story off a few lines in How come you started writing like three stories anyway, just work on one

[GnBanditoCI5]

Umm, just curious....

 

Your story reads as follows...

 

Woozie:"Thank you miss"looks over her posterior

 

Attendant:"Are you checking me out?You perv.I'm married."

 

Woozie:"Just looking at what God gave you"

 

Correct me if I am wrong, but...err...Woozie is BLIND...no ? How could he then LOOK at what God gave her?..lol

 

The story starts off saying....

 

Woozie,was one of the most influential men in the Tseung Crime Syndicate.His parents were murdered in a explosion.Taking his venegance out on the families...

 

Just a suggestion...

 

Would it not have been better to delve into Woozies history a bit more to reinforce to the reader a bit more of who Woozie IS and what happened in his past to make him who he is today?

 

For example...something along these lines....

 

 

 

Woozie was one of the most influential men in the Tseung Crime Syndicate.

 

He had risen to power in his late teens after the Yakuza attempted to murder his entire family bloodline by their cowardly use of a car bomb which succeded in killing his parents.

 

However, Woozie survived this attempt by the Yakuza to sieze control of his families business, but it came with a cost, the explosion that took the life of his parents had also taken away his sight.

 

After years of recovery and contemplation within the walls of the Shaolin Monastery on Mount Song. Woozie was taught the mastery of his other senses, and no longer depended on his sight to one day claim his vengeance upon the Yakuza and taking his rightfull place as the head of the Tseung.

 

 

 

You know, something along those line

 

Just a thought, as most stories about an individuals life usualy starts off getting the reader accustom to the main characters history and giving them a sense of WHY the character is who he is today...etc