Blackadder. Posted October 29, 2006 Author Share Posted October 29, 2006 Me mum banned me, but then I washed her car, and I'm allowed on for an hour And I'm not banned for whole week Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brutuz Posted October 29, 2006 Share Posted October 29, 2006 Nice, I'm actually banned right now, but my computers in my room and my mum thinks I'm playing PSP Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blackadder. Posted October 30, 2006 Author Share Posted October 30, 2006 (edited) I don't have a trigger of what to write for chapter 4, so until that comes, Chapter 1 of... FLASHBACK SERIES! These explain previous events I've mentioned, but in greater detail than before Flashback 1: The Accident 1987, Vice City Tommy is in his office writing at his desk when he hears a car horn outside the window Tommy: Who the f*ck? He walks over to his window and looks out Tommy: What the Ken: Hey….. Tommy! Tommy walks outside as Ken hops out of his car and staggers towards Tommy Tommy: You ok? Ken: Yeh…… I’m fine! Tommy: You sure? Ken: Yeh… I am… Now lets get to that.. meeting or whatnot Tommy: Ok They hop in the car as Ken drives off Ken: So… Where is this place? Tommy: You don’t know where the place is? Ken: Uh… no Tommy Tommy: For f*cks sake, you got a map? Ken: No…. but is it there? Ken points at a building across the ocean Tommy: Nice guess Ken: Ok Ken starts accelerating towards the ocean Tommy: What the f*ck are you doing? Ken: Haha! I’m driving you Tommy looks into the backseat, he notices a small bag Tommy: You’re f*cking doped! Ken: That’s why you love me! Tommy: Stop the car! Ken: Come on man… I’m driving you! Tommy: No you’re about to kill me! Ken starts driving even faster Tommy: STOP THE f*ckING CAR! Ken: I thought you were on a strict timetable? Ken continues to drive towards the ocean Tommy: That it I’m going! Ken opens the door and falls out the car Tommy: YOU f*ckING ASSHOLE! Tommy kicks open the door and jumps out the car. The car speeds straight into the ocean. Tommy gets up Tommy: You are dead! YOU f*ckING HEAR ME? DEAD! Ken: Chill Tommy, no big deal Ken collapses on the floor Tommy gets out his cellphone and dials a number Tommy: Hello? Hey, my name is Tommy Vercetti….. I have a man here a druggie, I want him to be put in rehab…. Ok thanks, bye Ken begins to wake up Tommy: Oi! You, wake up! Ken: What? Tommy: Go to the airport, catch a flight to San Andreas, head to Fort Carson Rehab Center, it will be the place you will be staying for the next few years Ken: What about our friendship? Tommy: What friendship... I never want to see you again! Ken gets into a taxi and Tommy walks off as the taxi disappears in the distance Slightly shorter than most chapters though Edited October 30, 2006 by blackadder18 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brutuz Posted October 30, 2006 Share Posted October 30, 2006 Good Flashback, oh and by the way cutting out that image for you wasn't as easy as it sounds Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blackadder. Posted October 30, 2006 Author Share Posted October 30, 2006 It would of been if you used the magic wand! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-/TNT\- Posted October 30, 2006 Share Posted October 30, 2006 Nice flashback, albeit short. What picture? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blackadder. Posted October 30, 2006 Author Share Posted October 30, 2006 (edited) The picture on the first page, in the first post EDIT: Edited October 31, 2006 by blackadder18 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-/TNT\- Posted October 31, 2006 Share Posted October 31, 2006 Ah, I didn't notice that. I subscribed to this topic you see and it takes me to the first unread post. I'll make one too if you don't mind, just to test my Photoshop skills Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-/TNT\- Posted October 31, 2006 Share Posted October 31, 2006 Nothing much, low resolution too, you can use it as a sig if you want: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spenc938 Posted October 31, 2006 Share Posted October 31, 2006 Nothing much, low resolution too, you can use it as a sig if you want: That's cool Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rashon. Posted November 1, 2006 Share Posted November 1, 2006 Great chapter there, blackadder. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blackadder. Posted November 1, 2006 Author Share Posted November 1, 2006 Nice Job TNT, I will use both of them Thanks for more cookies rashon *blackadder18 stuffs cookies in cookie fridge by Brutuz Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-/TNT\- Posted November 1, 2006 Share Posted November 1, 2006 Thanks, spenc and balckadder. I found the glass on google, it was watermarked though, so I did a big job to wipe off the watermark. Then I made the background black and inserted the logo. It would've taken me no time, I'm just not too actie on photoshop Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blackadder. Posted November 3, 2006 Author Share Posted November 3, 2006 Sorry about no chapter 4, but I was banned from Wednesday till now (Srupid science teacher and her sh*tty homework) I'm still trying to get that "trigger" so when it comes, I will write it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-/TNT\- Posted November 3, 2006 Share Posted November 3, 2006 Sorry about no chapter 4, but I was banned from Wednesday till now (Srupid science teacher and her sh*tty homework) I'm still trying to get that "trigger" so when it comes, I will write it Talkin' bout school, I tottaly screwed up with ancient Greek. I banned myself from the PC too yesterday, so no harm done to me with your abscence. We will wait... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brutuz Posted November 4, 2006 Share Posted November 4, 2006 For some reason When I installed my Graphics crd my net stopped working, but I think I've got it going again. Hurry up for the trigger! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-/TNT\- Posted November 4, 2006 Share Posted November 4, 2006 but I think I've got it going again. You must've. Unless you have weird telepathical powers?!?! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blackadder. Posted November 5, 2006 Author Share Posted November 5, 2006 Lol, anyway, the trigger is slowly happening, It's all coming to me Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spenc938 Posted November 5, 2006 Share Posted November 5, 2006 Hurry Hurry Hurry Hurry Hurry Hurry Hurry Hurry Hurry Hurry Hurry Hurry Hurry Hurry Hurry Hurry Hurry. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blackadder. Posted November 5, 2006 Author Share Posted November 5, 2006 (edited) I Hurried Hurried Hurried Hurried Hurried Hurried Hurried Chapter 4: Welcome To Vice City Radio Tower: Group Vercetti you are clear to land Tim: Affirmative, Proceeding to land Vic: So exactly what are we going to do when we land? Tim: We are going to head back to our mansion Vic: Then what? Tommy: I have a secret stash in our basement? Tim: Really? What guns? Tommy: Colt Python, M60 and an M4 Tim: Were gonna need more Vic: I have connections with the army Tim: That will help but we need even more if we are gonna take down CJ Cesar: You need more then a lifetime supply of weapons? Tim: Were gonna need a bomb Woozie: A bomb? Are you f*cking crazy? Claude: I know a good bomb expert maybe he can help Tim: Call him when we get to my mansion They touchdown on the runway. They taxi off the runway and park their jets. They quickly hop out Cesar: How are we going to get there? Tommy: Like this Tommy walks up to a random pedestrian Tommy: Gimme your wallet Ped: No! Tommy: I own this city I can nuke it anytime I want! Ped: No you don’t? Do you? Who are you? Tommy: Tommy Vercetti Ped: The name is Mike Toreno but you don’t own it anymore Tommy: Then who the f*ck does? Ped: A ehm.. uhm… Carl Johnso… Tommy: THAT BASTARD! Tim: What is it? Tommy: Carl Johnson runs the f*cking city! Cesar: Who’s that man over there, he looks rich Tommy: Some ass called Mike Toreno Cesar: MIKE TORENO! He is very rich! We could afford a bomb with him A Rumpo drives past Tim: I’ll be right back Tim runs over and pulls the driver out whilst pointing his gun at him Driver: Aargh f*ck! Tim: Give me your van and I let you go Driver: aarr… deal! The driver runs off. Meanwhile Mike Toreno is looking at them in confusion Tim: Cesar,Vic, You know what to do Cesar and Vic grab Toreno. Tommy opens the back door of the rumpo Mike: Let me go! Tim hops in the driver seat and Vic and Cesar hop in the back Vic: Are you coming? Woozie and Claude also hop in the back whilst Tommy hops in the front with Tim Tim: Where to? Vic: Lets get some supplies from the army base Tim: Ok Tim heads for the army base… Kinda short compared to Chapter 1 2 and 3, but Chapter 5 will be awesome Edited January 17, 2007 by blackadder18 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-/TNT\- Posted November 5, 2006 Share Posted November 5, 2006 Nice chapter blackadder18. Critiscism: It seems very unrealistic how they simply land and get into a cab. It just looks too simple. Toreno does not appear to me as a person you will find walking around on the street. In a black jeep maybe, but not on foot. I can nuke it anytime I want! That, even for a (ex) mafia boss, seems a bit too far fetched. MIKE TORENO! He is very rich! We could afford a bomb with him These guys don't get paid too much. And most people don't know about their bank accounts. Mike Toreno is looking at them in confusion He isn't the person to be confused either. I got a suggestion. Make it as if Toreno is now an alcoholic and does not work for the agency anymore. It will make the story more interesting. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rashon. Posted November 5, 2006 Share Posted November 5, 2006 If I were blackadder, I'd say "Everybody's A Critic". Le great chapter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brutuz Posted November 6, 2006 Share Posted November 6, 2006 Nice chapter! I give it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Freakorama Posted November 6, 2006 Share Posted November 6, 2006 shood have given ped a name xP Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blackadder. Posted November 6, 2006 Author Share Posted November 6, 2006 Well I'll try to take that into consideration TNT and thanks for cookies! *scoffs them down Chapter 5 in progress, so far it's longer than ANY other chapter Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blackadder. Posted November 10, 2006 Author Share Posted November 10, 2006 (edited) *BUMP* Chapter 5 Chapter 5: Vic’s Return Tim stops the car outside the Army base Army Officer: Sir state yourself! Vic hops out the back of the Rumpo Vic: Just an ex-marine wanting to see his old mates! Army Officer: State yourself! Vic: Victor Vance Army Officer: sh*t… It’s him! The Army officer grabs his comm unit Army Officer: Highly Dangerous Criminal in Sector 1! Vic: You asked for it Vic walks up to the Officer. The officer reaches for his gun. He then looks back into his cabin and sees his gun Army Officer: sh*t! Vic grabs him and puts him in a headlock Vic: Where do you keep the heavy weapons Army Officer: In the tower! Vic: Don’t lie to me… Where? Army Officer: It’s over there in that building The army officer struggles to point to the building Vic: Thanks Vic breaks his neck Meanwhile in the back of the van… Mike: I Have connections! Claude: Now you don’t Claude rips the earpiece out of Mike’s ear Mike: MOTHERf*ckER! Cesar: Hey! He has a gun! Woozie: Here’s another! Claude: Give me them, Tim Tommy and I will break in and get the heavy weapons, Cesar get in the frontseat! Cesar: Ok ese Claude grabs the gun and gets out. Cesar follows him out Tommy: What’s going on? Claude: Your coming with us Tommy and Tim get out of the Rumpo whilst Cesar hops in Vic: I found an M4! Claude: Great we got the sh*t weapons 5 Army men run out Army Officer: Freeze! Vic: No you freeze! Vic shoots him in the neck with his M4. All the other Army men raise their guns except for one Army Officer: Please don’t kill me! Tim: Ok then Tim shoots 2 Army Men in the face. Claude shoots one more. Tim then kicks the last one in the face Tim: Grab their guns and lets go! They all pick up the M4’s. They run forward before falling down a hole Tim: How did this happen? Were smarter than this! Vic: I know how to get out, I used it in jail a few times to trick the guards Tommy: Really? Interesting… So how do we do it? Vic: Back to back wall climbing, we put enough pressure on each other to hold us up, then we walk up the wall. Everyone face a wall They all pick a wall and face it Vic: Now we all have to put our backs together and then on 3 lift your feet off the ground and onto the wall They press themselves back to back Vic: 1…2…3! Tim: Wow! It actually works! Vic: Now on three we walk up alittle, 1…2…3, 1…2…3, 1…2…3 Soon after they reach the top They push as hard as they can and land on the ground Tim: Were free! Army Sergeant: What the? Kill them now! Army Officer: But sir! Our guns are inside! Army Sergeant: Hand to hand combat officer! Army Officer: Yes Sir! Vic looks back down and sees 4 guns lying at the bottom Vic: Oh yeh, our guns, oops Tim: I think we can beat 4 people in hand to hand combat The army officers pull out knifes Tommy: Not f*cking fair! Vic: This is going to be hard Claude is standing there when someone grabs him from behind Tim: I’ll take care of this Tim turns around and sees the Sergeant holding Claude Tim: You bastard! Sergeant: Stand back, or he dies Meanwhile Vic has taken down an officer Vic: Tim! Catch! Vic throws the knife over to Tim Tim: Thanks… and now for you Tim throws the knife at the Sergeant Sergeant: Alright, now he ge… The knife hits him dead between the eyes Tim: Bingo Tim turns around to see all the other army officers dead Tim: Not bad Vic: Thanks Just that moment the Rumpo comes sliding to a stop right next to them Tim: What the f*ck is going on? Cesar: On the radio! They are bringing backup! Tim: sh*t! Claude notices a load of crates in a Barracks OL. He walks over and sees a gun symbol on it Claude: Looks like we won’t need to go inside! Tim: Claude you are gonna drive this thing out of here, Tommy help me on the back of the Barracks Tommy: Doing what? The guns are already loaded Tim: We are going to sit on the back and protect the truck Tim walks over to a crate and cuts it open with his knife. He picks up and M60 and an M249 SAW Tim: Which one you want? Tommy: I’ll take the M60 thanks Tim throws the M60 over to Tommy Tim: You might want some ammo too Tim throws the ammo box over to Tommy. He then picks up his M249 and hops on the back of the Barracks Claude: Ready? Tim: Ready Cesar: Lets go they aren’t too far now They see police lights flasing, then two Rhino’s roll up to main door Tim: Showtime… Edited November 10, 2006 by blackadder18 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rashon. Posted November 10, 2006 Share Posted November 10, 2006 Yay, the action is starting. Great job, blackadder. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blackadder. Posted November 10, 2006 Author Share Posted November 10, 2006 (edited) Chapter 6: Vice City Around Claude drives the barracks out of the Army base Claude: Where are we going? Tommy: To the mansion! Claude: Ok! Claude takes the corner sharply throwing Tommy and Tim to one side of the truck Tim: f*ck this is gonna be hard Tommy shoots out the tires of a pursuing police car Tim: What are we going to do with those Rhino’s? Tommy: We will have to outrun them Tim: You sure that’s possible? Tommy: I think so… Claude turns again throwing Tim and Tommy to one side Tim: I have a better idea, Claude drive closer to that Infernus over there! Claude pulls right next to the Infernus. Tim jumps onto the roof of the Infernus and nearly slides off Tim: Get over here Tommy! Tommy jumps onto the Infernus and hops into the passenger seat Driver: Hey man what the f*ck? Get out! Tommy: No you get out! Tommy grabs the driver and throws him out of the car. A few seconds later Tim hops in Tommy: DAMNIT! We left the guns on the truck! Tim: Here use my glock Tommy: It only has three bullets in it! Tim: f*ck! Meanwhile in the Rumpo… Mike: Let me go you assholes! Woozie: Shutup! Vic pulls out his Colt Python Vic: If you don’t shutup I’ll send you straight to hell Mike: Oh really! I bet you don’t have the gu… Vic shoots him in the leg Vic: I killed a lot of people back in ’84, don’t think that you’re different! Mike: You asshole! YOU f*ckING ASSHOLE! Vic knocks him out cold with a hit to the face Vic: Finally Cesar: We got company! Vic opens the back door of the Rumpo to see a tank coming up behind them Vic: HOLY sh*t! TURN TURN! Cesar turns the Rumpo just as the Rhino fires Vic: Oh sh*t! Woozie: Hey Cesar, slow down alittle then Vic and I can hop on the Rhino Cesar: Ok ese Cesar presses on the brakes lightly as Vic and Woozie prepare to jump Woozie: sh*t! Go faster faster! He’s about to smash us into bits! Cesar accelerates as the Rhino hits the back of the Rumpo, The force so hard it breaks one quarter of the Rumpo off Vic: sh*t! Woozie: It’s now or never! Woozie and Vic jump out of the rumpo and barely land on the Rhino Vic: f*ck that hurt! A man climbs out of the tank Man: You’re going down! Vic: How come an Army Officer isn’t in there? Man: f*ck you! The man pulls out a pistol, while Vic pulls out his Colt Python Vic: Who are you? Man: Why should I tell you? Vic: Well, do you want to die? Man: Do you? Meanwhile Woozie is slowly creeping around the man Vic: No, but you didn’t answer my question Woozie then grabs the Man Woozie: Who are you? Man: I will never tell you! I just want to avenge my father! Vic: Who the f*ck was you’re father? Vic points his Colt at the man’s neck Man: Salvatore Leone! Woozie: Ring a bell? Vic: Nope Woozie: Just tell us you’re name! Man: Joey Leone Vic: Ok Joey we want you to get in that van in front of us and stay there Joey: Make me! Vic cocks his gun Vic: I don’t ask nicely twice Joey: f*ck you, you stupid f*ckers! Woozie hits him over the head Vic: Lets throw him in the Rumpo Woozie: On three, three, two, one They throw him into the back of the Rumpo Meanwhile the driver of the Tank is staring at them Driver: I will kill you! The man climbs out onto the tank. Vic walks up to him and trips him onto the ground, pointing the gun at his face Vic: Oh really? Driver: What did you do to Joey? Vic: Why does it matter to you? Driver: Because I am Toni Cipriani! No one messes with the Ciprianis! Vic: Say goodnight Toni: Why th… Vic pushes him off the tank with his foot and watches as Toni hits the ground Vic: Lets commandeer this tank They hop into the tank as they meet Tim and Tommy outside the Mansion Cesar: Now what? Tim: We take back the mansion… Cookies were nice, Glad I took the day off school If you want to support this story then wear this userbar Edited November 10, 2006 by blackadder18 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rashon. Posted November 10, 2006 Share Posted November 10, 2006 Wow, didn't expect this quick of another chapter. Great chapter there, too. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blackadder. Posted November 10, 2006 Author Share Posted November 10, 2006 Can't write any more chapter till me head is better, I could continue writing but then the whole thing would be sh*t Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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