TonyZimmzy Posted January 13, 2007 Share Posted January 13, 2007 Some progress The final version will be at night, and be more organized ... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blackadder. Posted January 13, 2007 Author Share Posted January 13, 2007 I didn't see one Ninja in that film! What are you talking about? Well it is a beta after all... And face it, I'm never going to be as good as ceedj! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GTA-MASTA 56 Posted January 13, 2007 Share Posted January 13, 2007 jus to give some advice if you've seen miami noon, the dude who voiced the lance vance character sucked to hell so please don't use his voice. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sinful Posted January 13, 2007 Share Posted January 13, 2007 It's OLD. LOL. You sent it to me on msn like a month ago. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blackadder. Posted January 14, 2007 Author Share Posted January 14, 2007 jus to give some advice if you've seen miami noon, the dude who voiced the lance vance character sucked to hell so please don't use his voice. Lance died in 1986 This is set in 2000 Sinful: Of course it is! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GTA-MASTA 56 Posted January 14, 2007 Share Posted January 14, 2007 I meant the voice actor, the one who voiced him sucked Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blackadder. Posted January 14, 2007 Author Share Posted January 14, 2007 It's going to be real hard to imitate the voices, so I can't promise it will be authentic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TonyZimmzy Posted January 14, 2007 Share Posted January 14, 2007 I can do an English dudes voice, we got some Kent Paul up in here!? (I still haven't read part 1 lol) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GTA-MASTA 56 Posted January 14, 2007 Share Posted January 14, 2007 It's going to be real hard to imitate the voices, so I can't promise it will be authentic oh don't get your panties in a bunch, i'm positive it will be great Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-/TNT\- Posted January 14, 2007 Share Posted January 14, 2007 Very interesting video I must say My voice is bland. No accent whatsoever. Of course that happens when you don't live in an English speaking country Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nick Papagiorgio Posted January 14, 2007 Share Posted January 14, 2007 Cool. I'd enjoy watching it. I would lend my beautiful voice, but I don't have a mic. I will do it through spirit. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sinful Posted January 15, 2007 Share Posted January 15, 2007 I could try, but my english isn't that good Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-/TNT\- Posted January 15, 2007 Share Posted January 15, 2007 I will be the rapper. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blackadder. Posted January 17, 2007 Author Share Posted January 17, 2007 (edited) Gman: Thanks, that will work, just imagine Gman speaking! Sinful: The more the merrier TNT: At this moment there are no rappers OR rapers EDIT: First post updated Edited January 17, 2007 by blackadder18 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TonyZimmzy Posted January 18, 2007 Share Posted January 18, 2007 Blackadder18 wanted me to post so that he can post his first chapter of part 3 without double posting. Take it away. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Serafim Posted January 19, 2007 Share Posted January 19, 2007 lol @ Tommy. I'm waiting for hearings from blackadder Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TonyZimmzy Posted January 19, 2007 Share Posted January 19, 2007 lol @ Tommy. I'm waiting for hearings from blackadder Goddamnit my name is Tony, why does everyone keep calling me Tommy Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blackadder. Posted January 19, 2007 Author Share Posted January 19, 2007 Finally here! Chapter 1: Attack in Vice City The year is now 2009. Tim is walking around the North Point Mall with Tommy Tommy: So you thinking of coming to live with me in San Andreas? Tim: I’m alright in Vice, were getting a huge payload on a drug deal at the docks this weekend, open ground, at the docks Tommy: Be careful, I almost got killed then Tim: Vic almost did too Tommy: How is Vic anyway? Tim: I haven’t spoken to him in awhile Tommy: Well you should Tim: What happened last year is in the past now, I would like to forget that Just then Tommy’s phone rings. Tommy looks at his phone and reads the number Tommy: I have to take this, excuse me Tim: OK Tommy flips open his phone and holds it to his ear Tommy: Hello… Yes this is Tommy Vercetti…What’s happening?…Gang War?… Need urgent help?… I’m busy at the moment!… Just go to Ammunation and buy whatever you need, I own it, it’s free! Tommy hangs up Tim: Who was that? Tommy: Just one of my new gang members, there is a gang war in San Andreas Tim: Shouldn’t you help out? Tommy: Look at me, I’m over sixty years old for f*cks sake! Tim: Good point, well, I have to do some paperwork regarding the Airport Security, stupid security guards Tommy: Ok then, I’ll go to a hotel and see you tomorrow Tim: Ok, see you later Tommy walks away and towards the exit Tim: I hate paperwork! Tim runs outside and hops onto his Streetfighter MkII Tim: What genius designed this? Tim thinks for awhile before remembering who designed the bike Tim: Damn, I need to talk to Vic more often and discuss this stuff! Tim revs the bike before accelerating down the road. He turns around a corner before and accelerates to full speed. All of a sudden a Banshee comes from around a corner and starts driving towards him Tim: What the f*ck? The car continues to drive towards him. Tim pulls out his Mac-20 and points it at the car Tim: Move! The car accelerates to top speed Tim: sh*t! Tim bails off his bike right before the car collides with it Tim: My bike! Tim gets off the floor and points the Mac-20 at the Banshee Tim: Get out! Tim tightens his grip on the handle of the gun Tim: Get out! I’m not asking you again! Tim starts to walk slowly towards the Banshee Tim: sh*t my leg! Just as Tim reaches the door the driver reverses before trying to run over Tim. Tim dives out of the way as the Banshee drives away Tim: God damnit! He gets up and staggers towards a Stinger Tim: I need to get home! Tim then pulls himself into the Stinger before falling onto the seat Tim: f*ck! He sits up and notices the keys on the passenger seat Tim: What the f*ck is happening today? Tim puts the keys in the ignition and starts up the car. “It was a good day” is playing on the radio Tim: Yeh right! He drives off and continues towards his mansion. He reaches the bridge that goes to Starfish Island Tim: Nearly there He slows down and pulls into the driveway Tim: No place better than hom… At that moment, Tim’s car goes flying towards the ocean. His Stinger lands on a passing by Violator Boat Driver: Holy sh*t! Are you alright Sir? Tim pushes the Stinger’s door open slowly with his foot before falling out onto the front of the Violator. With his last bit of energy, he turns his head towards his mansion. He sees a huge black shape in its place Tim: Motherf*ckers! I’ll get yo… Tim passes out on the Violator as the Boat Driver drags him towards the seat Boat Driver: Yes, we will get them! Enjoy Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Serafim Posted January 19, 2007 Share Posted January 19, 2007 Nice chapter, b18! And Tony, my bad, some idiot called you Tommy and I stopped watching your nick :S Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rashon. Posted January 19, 2007 Share Posted January 19, 2007 It's been a while since a new chapter. Christmas, I think it was. Anyway, great chapter, blackadder. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blackadder. Posted January 19, 2007 Author Share Posted January 19, 2007 Indeed. This was, the first chapter of 07! Chapter 2 by... My Birthday Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gouveia Posted January 19, 2007 Share Posted January 19, 2007 nice blackadder, nice chapter. If i understood right, you wanna record voices... Arabian and mexican voices here, ese! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blackadder. Posted January 20, 2007 Author Share Posted January 20, 2007 Thanks ese! Chapter 2 in the works Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brutuz Posted January 21, 2007 Share Posted January 21, 2007 Good Chapter! Can't wait for the next one! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-/TNT\- Posted January 23, 2007 Share Posted January 23, 2007 I think I am supposed to say good? good I said good nice Am I weird? Good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blackadder. Posted January 24, 2007 Author Share Posted January 24, 2007 Oh well, it's my birthday and look where we are! Chapter 2 is 7 pages long at the moment Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brutuz Posted January 24, 2007 Share Posted January 24, 2007 Well, Chapter 2 is ment to be here, so POST IT!!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blackadder. Posted January 24, 2007 Author Share Posted January 24, 2007 Chapter 2: Vice City Escapees Tim slowly wakes up and looks around. He finds himself at the Pier near Ocean Drive Tim: What the f*ck happened? Man: Ah, finally, you are awake, you are Tim Vercetti, no? Tim: What? I’m Tim Vercetti if that’s what you mean Man: I am Juan Cortez Tim: Your Cortez? You look way younger than I would of expected! Cortez: You see, I am Juan Cortez Junior! Tim: That explains it…So what happened anyway? Why am I here? Cortez: You were driving to your mansion, when it exploded, your car then flew and landed on my boat, which left a dent on it Tim looks over at the boat Tim: Sorry about that Cortez: No problem, I am a man of wealth Tim: Wait, so you’re saying, someone tried to assassinate me? Cortez: It appears that way Tim: Motherf*ckers! I’ll get them! Tim tries to stand up Tim: f*ck, my leg! I think it’s broken! Cortez: It’s probably just hurting from the accident. Lets get you to a hospital Tim: Ok, where’s your car? Cortez: Over there Cortez points at his Sabre Tim: Wow, looks great Tim gets up again and leans on the wall Cortez: My own personal modifications Tim: Good job! Tim puts his arm around Cortez as they slowly walk towards the Sabre Tim: So how is your dad going? Cortez: He is dead, the French caught up to him, he got shot in the head by a sniper Tim: I’m sorry Cortez: Don’t be, he went out fighting like a man They reach the Sabre Cortez: Get in, were going to Little Haiti! Tim: But there’s a hospital just up the road? Cortez: Oh sorry, I haven’t been in Vice very long They hop in the car as Cortez starts the engine Cortez: So…Which way? Tim: Left Cortez drives around the corner and to the hospital. Tim gets out of the car and falls onto the ground. Cortez gets out and ruins over to him Cortez: Take it easy, you don’t want to break your leg Tim: I thought you said it wasn’t broken! Cortez: I never said that Cortez sees an old wheelchair in the distance Cortez: Stay right here Cortez runs over and grabs the wheelchair, he then quickly rolls it back over to Tim Tim: Thanks Cortez helps Tim up before Tim sits in the wheelchair. Cortez then pushes Tim into the hospital Doctor: Is he ok? Cortez: We just want to get his leg X-Rayed Doctor: Sure, just in this room here Cortez pushes Tim into the room slowly Doctor: Ok, just lye down on this bed here, and we will get it X-Rayed Tim gets up slowly and lies down on the bed Doctor: Ok let me just get the machine ready The Doctor walks over to a machine and flips a switch Doctor: Ok, just stay sill while we X-Ray your leg The machine starts making noises at it moves slowly over Tim’s leg Tim: Why the f*ck is it making those noises? Doctor: Please remain calm Sir Tim: I’ve got some f*cking machine making noises, why the f*ck should I remain calm? Doctor: Please, just remain calm, its just to let people know the machine is on Tim: Really? Because if you are lying… The machine stops making noises Tim: Is it done? Doctor: Yes, let me just look at the results The Doctor looks at the LCD screen on the desk Doctor: Ok, nothing seems to be wrong with either of your legs, must just be a bruise or something Tim: Can you give me anything? Doctor: Take these painkillers, it’s the only thing I’m allowed to hand out Just then they all hear a voice in the lobby Man: Which room is Tim Vercetti in? Receptionist: He isn’t here They then hear a gunshot Man: Don’t play games with me! Where is he? Receptionist: In that room over there Man: Thankyou! Cortez: Tim catch! Cortez throws a pistol at Tim Doctor: Excuse me, why do you have guns here? Cortez: It’s for protection! That man is going to come in here and shoot him Cortez points at Tim Doctor: He is Tim Vercetti? Tim: Yes I am Doctor: What an honour to meet you! Tim: These painkillers better work Tim opens the packet and shoves them down his mouth Doctor: You want water with that? Tim: Yes, please The doctor throws a bottle of water to Tim Tim: Thanks Tim opens the bottle and drinks it quickly Tim: Cortez, let’s go Tim and Cortez cock their guns before standing up and walking out the room Man: Are you Tim Vercetti? Tim: Yes Man: I have a message for you! Tim: And what might that be? Man: Die! The man points his pistol at Tim’s head Tim: Oh, but I have a message for you Man: What is it? Tim: Look left The man looks to his left, his is staring down the barrel of Cortez’s gun Cortez: Don’t move! Man: I’m not scared of you! Tim takes the opportunity to knee the man in the balls. The man collapses onto the ground Tim: Don’t f*ck with the Vercettis! Cortez: Quick, let’s go They head towards the door when two men carrying MP6’s run through the front door Cortez: Quick, Tim, this way! Man 1: Is that him? Man 2: I just want to shoot someone! The two men start shooting at Cortez and Tim Cortez: sh*t! Tim turns around and shoots one of the men in the shoulder Tim: Quick through here Tim and Cortez rush through a doorway and into a room Cortez: It’s a dead end! Tim: Ah, but that’s what you think Tim walks over to a poster and pulls it off the wall. It reveals a small passageway Cortez: You put this here? Tim: No my dad put it here, for when there are fires Cortez: Quick lets go Cortez walks down the small passageway and out the end Tim: Let me just secure it Tim walks into the passageway and pulls the poster back over the wall Cortez: Which way? Tim: Uhh… Right They turn right to face themselves on a ledge on the side of the hospital Cortez: What do we do now? Tim notices a Flatbed filled with pillows underneath them Tim: Jump into the back of the Flatbed! Tim dives off the ledge into the back of the truck Cortez: Ah, perfect Cortez jumps off and into the back of the Flatbed Cortez: But now what? Tim: We wait All of a sudden the truck starts to move. The truck pulls onto the road Cortez: Wait! Who is that? Cortez points at a black sentinel that pulls out from the hospital carpark Tim: sh*t! Let me take care of this Tim walks over to the cab Tim: Hey, you in the drivers seat! Can you go faster? Vic: Hell yes Tim! Tim: Vic? Why the f*ck are you driving a pillow truck? Vic: It’s just a disguise! Look in the pillowcases! Tim picks up a pillow and shakes it. A few grenades fall out Tim: Your smuggling grenades? Vic: Yeh! Tim: Mind if I use some? Vic: Go ahead! Tim: Thanks! Tim walks back over to Cortez Tim: The pillows are actually filled with bombs! Cortez: That should come in handy Cortez pulls a grenade from out of a pillow Cortez: This is where the fun begins! Cortez throws the grenade at the following Sentinel. It goes through the windshield and lands in the car. Tim and Cortez watch as the car blows up into the sky Vic: Nice shot! Vic slides the truck around the corner as another Sentinel pulls up alongside them Vic: Hey, you didn’t tell me friends were coming! Tim: I didn’t know myself! Tim picks up a grenade and throws it onto the road Cortez: Now what is th… The grenade then rolls under the car and explodes. The car flies through the sky and lands infront of the Flatbed Vic: Holy sh*t! Vic slams on the brakes as hard as he can. Tim and Cortez get flung into the back of the cab. Vic quickly steers around the wreckage Vic: Sorry guys! Tim: Where we heading? Vic: I’ll drop you off at your mansion! Tim: My mansion doesn’t exist anymore! Vic: Holy sh*t! So where to then? Tim: Escobar International! Vic: Ok Vic turns the Flatbed onto Starfish Island. Two more Sentinels join the pursuit Sentinel Driver: You ready? Sentinel Passenger: Yes! The passenger climbs out of the Sentinel onto the roof Tim: What the f*ck are they doing? The Sentinel then bumps into the back of the Flatbed Vic: What the hell are they doing? Tim: They are trying to get up here! The man on the roof of the Sentinel jumps and grabs the edge of the Flatbed Man: Arggh! Tim: Cortez, don’t shoot! Let’s wait for him then interrogate him Cortez: Good idea Tim and Cortez wait for the man to climb over. The man finally pulls himself over and lands on top of the pillows. Tim pulls out his pistol Tim: Don’t move! The man looks up at Tim’s gun Man: Don’t shoot! Tim: Who are you? And who sent you? The man stands up Man: I am…Jim Tim: Why did you pause? Jim: I didn’t pau… Tim grabs the man by the throat Tim: Don’t f*cking lie! Who are you? Jim: Ok, ok! I am Callum Tim: Ok then, now who sent you? Callum: These two brothers, they sent me Tim: What are their names? Callum: Uh… One is called… Stefan Tim: Are you f*cking lying? Callum: No! I swear! Tim: Who is the other one then? Callum: Aaron…or something Tim: Where do they live? Callum: In Amourica! Tim: Thankyou! Tim picks Callum up and throws him onto one of the Sentinels. The driver loses control and crashes into the other Sentinel Cortez: That seems to be the last of them, so what do we do now? Tim: We get to the airport, then we fly to Amourica Cortez: You’ve been there? Tim: Well… yes I have, I don’t really know the place though Tim and Cortez sit down as Vic drives the truck to the airport... As requested Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
King_Vercetti Posted January 24, 2007 Share Posted January 24, 2007 I have read the whole story so far except for the chapter you just posted up, and its hella good my good chum! Rated=GOOD. Can't wait for more dude Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brutuz Posted January 24, 2007 Share Posted January 24, 2007 Very good new chapter! You should really make this bigger..... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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