TenaciousD. Posted October 16, 2006 Share Posted October 16, 2006 Another super-dooper chapter kippers. Keep it up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Bone County Butcher Posted October 16, 2006 Share Posted October 16, 2006 Is this the end for our dear friends? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nick000 Posted October 16, 2006 Share Posted October 16, 2006 Nice chapter Kippers, long. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kippers Posted October 16, 2006 Author Share Posted October 16, 2006 Nice chapter Kippers, long. Lol yeah, it is pretty long. I was looking at it in word and thought it looked too short so i editted it alot Thanks for the replies eventually 習うより慣れろ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Archaon, Lord of End Times Posted October 16, 2006 Share Posted October 16, 2006 Excellent, kipps. You're becoming quite the writter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kippers Posted October 17, 2006 Author Share Posted October 17, 2006 Thanks Arch. Quite the writer hey? I'm on Half Term holidays at the moment so hopfully i'll have time to get a few more chapters up before scooting off back to school.. 習うより慣れろ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TenaciousD. Posted October 18, 2006 Share Posted October 18, 2006 (edited) TD2005 Productions Proudly Presents.. A Kippers Story NOONVALE Edited October 18, 2006 by tenaciousd2005 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kippers Posted October 18, 2006 Author Share Posted October 18, 2006 Shorter than chapter 10 becuase i just wanted to focus on one aspect of the story this time. 11 Ilmig scampered back towards her cell, using the dim light to guide her through the maze of turns and her scratch marks upon the walls to guide her to what, at that moment in time, felt like a secure and safe place to be. Swinging the door closed behind her with a loud clang! as she found her way back past the rotting bodies of the other prisoners, too thin and malnourished to give the badger a passing look, she swiftly kicked the dead rats body under the bench. Slipping the bloody knife under the over turned bowl she had received earlier, she sat down panting, awaiting the guards search patrol. Not a moment too soon had Ilmig made it back to the save had the guards started yelling down the dungeon corridor, keys rattling, swords clanging against keys, and click, click, click of claws on stone, a familiar set of noises for Ilmig to hear. ‘Cam ‘ere badger badger!’ ‘We know you’re the one wastin’ our time!’ ‘Yeah, come out naw, an’ we might let ye die quicker…’ ‘….But only if ye lucky.’ ‘Yew’d have t’ be one ‘eck uv a lucky beast to die quicker in this place. Rottin one stripe at a time sounds more like it.’ ‘Come out badger!’ The rat and weasel patrol unsheathed their swords and started running them along the bars of the prison cells, laughing at their own insults as if they had just become ruler of the land. ‘If yew come out badger miss, then we might gives ye some of our niiiiice, scrumptious food that we’ve got in the kitchens ‘bove’ ‘That food is some nice food ain’t it crabguts?’ Ilmig could hear one of the beasts slam against a cells he was pushed jokingly. Scrambling up to his feet again, he whispered shyly. ‘Y..Y…Yes sir, the food v..Very niii…iiice.’ ‘Ye hear that badger! We’ll giz ye some if yew come out now an’ save us the ‘astle of getting’ our blades all messed up.’ ‘I just cleaned mine yesterday sir; I don’t want no badger blood on it.’ They were just mere cell doors away from her now… ‘Don’t worry matey! You want ‘ave t’ worry ‘bout that coz that badger’s gunna tied up, n ‘ung fur all she’s worth.’ ‘A dead badger walkin’ ain’t that right sir?’ But no reply was given. As the search party walked in sight of Ilmig and her cell, the leading weasel, who was moments ago, cheering and jeering at the badger stood in shock, as he saw Ilmig sitting there still shackled to the wall by foot and hand paws, the bench still creaking under her weight and rotting food still covering her from top to bottom, as if she hadn’t moved an inch in several hours. The weasel leader put his hands around the bars and leaned in, nose fitting perfectly between the bars as he spoke. ‘Don’t think ye can get away with it that easy stripe dog! Yew know as well as me an’ me crew where ya’ve been today.’ An’ if ya don’t remember,’ interrupted another patrol beast, ‘that would be stirrin’ trouble in the main court, peekin’ ye worthless ‘ead out one of them hatches, seein’ what we’re doin’ an’ tryin’ to escape. Ain’t that right!’ The leader pushed him away from the bars and smiled meaninglessly. ‘Thank ye, but she knows perfectly well what she’s done. I could be torturing a slave worth my time now if you hadn’t made a mess o’ me whole day! Ya may think ya safe in this little cage of ‘ers, but I, or any one of these beast ‘ere could have you killed like that!’ He clicked his paw claws together and moved his paw over his neck slowly, not taking his eyes of the badger. ‘I won’t waste anymore of me time on you.’ He turned from the cell and started walking towards the spiral steps, the other beasts following behind sheepishly, giving Ilmig the passing glance which lacked from the other prisoners. ‘Heh, by morn tomorra, you’ll be gone.’ As quick as it had taken the rat to say those words, he found himself pinned up against the bars, knife to his throat, digging deep into his fir blood already showing and an angry badger breathing down his ear. ‘You’ll be dead before you say those words again.’ Whispered the enraged Ilmig. The new prisoner started whimpering, eyes swelling up. ‘You’re not so tough when you’re the one being beaten now are you?’ Ilmig dug the knife deeper in his fur to stop him from wriggling. ‘Listen to me carefully and I promise I’ll let you go.’ The rat gulped and nodded. Suddenly Ilmig slammed the back of the rats head against the bars of her cell knocking him clear out with a faint ugh! Moving him with her paws past the cell bars towards the door, she opened it up and dragged the limp body inside. Sitting him up on the bench she stripped him of his belt and weaponry and awaited his arrival. His foot twitched. Ilmig sitting on the floor leaning against he bars, throwing the knives she had taken from the rat into the air, they span and she caught them by the handle. His left paw twitched. Ilmig had a knife pointed at the rat, she had it close to her eye, aiming at his neck. Drawing her arm backwards she pretended to launch the knife from her paw. His head finally twitched into life, sniffing and grunting his eyes opened. It took the rat a few moments to realise where he was. He started shaking and squirming, moving his paws around frantically trying to escape, kicking and screaming. Turning his head left and right he could see that his paws had been tied to the wall by bits of his belt cut up and tied onto his knives which were dug into the wall. Suspended in med air above the bench he looked at the badger in horror. ‘Ya’ve gone too far this time badger!’ Ilmig chuckled still aiming the knife at his throat. ‘Don’t worry ratty, as I said, if you help me, I’ll let you go.’ ‘This ain’t no torture, this is insanity! You’re insane stripe dog! Insane! I’ve known this place t’ do strange things t’ beast down ‘ere but drive ‘em to insanity. Get me out!!’ The rat started kicking and screaming again, slamming his whole body against the back wall as he swung backwards and forwards in his relentless attempts to get free. The knife Ilmig was holding shattered against the stone wall as the prisoner twisted in time to dodge the flying object. ‘Shut up!’ Ilmig roared at the top of her voice, ‘Help me get out and you can be on your way,’ Ilmig rose from her position against the bars and cupped her paw around his neck to get him to stop moving, ‘help me get out of this place and I’ll spare you.’ She tightened her grip and the prisoner gasped from breath. ‘OK!’ he managed to wheeze with his last breath. The insane Ilmig struck one of the belt pieces, releasing a footpaw. ‘Good.’ She replied, ‘now speak!’ /// WolfJaw wondered through the great hallways of his castle and down flights of spiral stairs and opened the front door and walked out. Everybeast in sight froze as they saw the door open and WolfJaw step out hands behind back, smiling. But Everybeast there knew that he wasn’t really smiling. They had learnt through years of service to the wildcat that whenever he emerged from his cocoon which was his throne chamber, that some beast wasn’t going to see the light of day again. Word was out by mouth of patrol leader that Ilmig was the only prisoner capable of escaping her cell and causing mass panic within the four walls. As the old wildcat strolled through the courtyard below the high window slaves and generals alike were smiling and complimenting the wildcat. ‘Yew look grand today sire!’ ‘Anyfin’ ye want an’ I’ll get it ya afore you can say “Take ‘im away” sire’ ‘Construction of the far wall’s nearly finished ya majesty, if yew like, I’ll give ya a tour.’ ‘An; if no beast is workin to your satisfaction then I’ll give ‘em a good ol’ whipping and an hangin’ at your command sire.’ ‘My grand master, you don’t have your cape. If yew please I’ll retrieve it from your room. You just keep inspectin’ the troops an’ don’t worry your fur.’ WolfJaw raised his hand in rejection and the weasel sulked back at the silence response. ‘Slinger!’ WolfJaw called out across the courtyard. The general came scampering up to him and saluted. ‘Yes sir!’ ‘Why’s Everybeast being so kind? I’ve never seen ‘em bein’ this kind t’ a livin’ soul.’ ‘W..W..Well, you are their leader sire, if they ain;t kind t’ you their lives ain;t worth their presence sire.’ ‘Hmmm, very well. I’ll be down in he dungeons checking up on me new prison rat, gotta show my support by seein’ how they’re sufferin’. Dying slowly I ‘opes!’ WolfJaw laughed and Slinger joined in trying to sound as enthusiastic as possible. He saluted again as WolfJaw wondered off down one of the hatches in the ground. The cell door was open. As WolfJaw came down the spiral stairs one of the daggers wedged into Ilmigs cell wall slipped out and stuck point first into the wooden bench below. Booming with fury WolfJaw yanked the remaining daggers out of the wall, the cut pieces of leather strap slipping off onto the floor. He ran up the stairs and punched the hatch open, adrenaline pumping through his body, he stormed out into the middle of the courtyard waving the daggers around in the air wildly, not caring if they struck an by standing beast. ‘Where that’s badger!!!’ he screamed at the top of his voice. ‘W..W..Well sire…’ Following the direction of the voice WolfJaw swung round knives barely missing the rat general. ‘Ah Gunner, me old matey, remember that little chat we had?’ Not waiting for a reply the wildcat lunched out slashing the general across the gut. Gunners hands went up into the air in pain and as quick as a flash, WolfJaw grabbed hold of one and pulled him to the floor, plunging the knife into Gunners wrist, securing it to the floor. Screaming in pain Gunner pleaded with his master. ‘Please sire! It weren’t my fault. When we had that chat, she was still in ‘er cell. How was I meant to know the other guards were incapable uv lookin’ after a badger. Sire please!’ Tears flowed down his face as the Wildcat smiled at him manically and without a word and with one quick and precise move of the arm Gunner reeled in pain as he toppled backwards onto the ground, rolling around in the dirt, blood pouring onto the ground where his paw once was. WolfJaw removed the dagger from the severed hand above where he had cut and waved the knife and paw in his own paws. ‘You see what happens!! You see what happens when you disobey WolfJaaaaaaw! 習うより慣れろ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TenaciousD. Posted October 18, 2006 Share Posted October 18, 2006 (edited) OMG thats amazing work. Loads of blood and very graphic. Chapter 12 now Edited October 18, 2006 by tenaciousd2005 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kippers Posted October 18, 2006 Author Share Posted October 18, 2006 (edited) That WAS chapter 11 (You editted) Yeah, it was bloody Edited October 18, 2006 by kippers 習うより慣れろ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Seddo Posted October 18, 2006 Share Posted October 18, 2006 Seddo87 reads chapter 11 Wow Kippers another great chapter and very graphic-y The chapters seem to get better and better Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Archaon, Lord of End Times Posted October 18, 2006 Share Posted October 18, 2006 Excellently gorey. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nick000 Posted October 18, 2006 Share Posted October 18, 2006 Once again, another nice chapter. I liked the ending, gore, mmm. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kippers Posted October 18, 2006 Author Share Posted October 18, 2006 (edited) Thanks guys. glad you all like the gore. Last bit's definitly my fav bit of the story so far. i'm happy Thanks Butch VVVVVVVVV Edited October 18, 2006 by kippers 習うより慣れろ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Bone County Butcher Posted October 18, 2006 Share Posted October 18, 2006 (edited) I have said this before but we need more stuff like this in the forums, instead of the novice bullsh*t thats poisoning up the writers forum. "I love GTA, heres my story, hope you like it!" ..................Go to hell! Good job Kips, how many chapters do you plan on writing? Edited October 18, 2006 by The Bone County Butcher Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Seddo Posted October 18, 2006 Share Posted October 18, 2006 Good job Kips, how many chapters do you plan on writing? Im going to go with a rough guess and say about 30ish Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kippers Posted October 18, 2006 Author Share Posted October 18, 2006 As many as it takes to get everything i want written down on virtual paper. So i'm guess around 30 odd chapters. i dont want to stretch the story just so it can last longer or anything. Lol Seddo 習うより慣れろ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kippers Posted October 20, 2006 Author Share Posted October 20, 2006 Just thought i'd double post to bump and to say that i'll be on hols from tomorrow (Saturday) til next saturday so no new chapter all week Hopefully some one will post to keep this place active so it doesnt drop out of sight during the week Cheerio 習うより慣れろ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Seddo Posted October 23, 2006 Share Posted October 23, 2006 I just read all the chapters straight after each other and the story was amazing, and still the last chapter was cool Cant wait for the next chapter Kippers Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
uNi Posted October 23, 2006 Share Posted October 23, 2006 Awesome job mate, I don't enjoy reading and liked this. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TenaciousD. Posted October 26, 2006 Share Posted October 26, 2006 When the next chater gonna be up kippers? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Archaon, Lord of End Times Posted October 26, 2006 Share Posted October 26, 2006 Ah, that's where kipps has gone to. Have a good holiday, man. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nick000 Posted October 27, 2006 Share Posted October 27, 2006 No new chapter? Have a good holiday though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kippers Posted October 28, 2006 Author Share Posted October 28, 2006 I'm back everyone New chapter either today or tomorrow but definitly some time before school on Monday 習うより慣れろ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TenaciousD. Posted October 28, 2006 Share Posted October 28, 2006 (edited) An idea for you: KILL THEM ALL! except a sub-charecter. That'll be fun NAMES: Tenionus Nicolunal Otalate Platnol Sendoam Sivunamo Sagitonilud Procelenog Edited October 28, 2006 by tenaciousd2005 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kippers Posted October 28, 2006 Author Share Posted October 28, 2006 Hmmmm, ok. How about names that i can actually pronounce 習うより慣れろ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TenaciousD. Posted October 28, 2006 Share Posted October 28, 2006 OK, um..... Bill. Need to justify this as a post so... wheres Chapter 12 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kippers Posted October 29, 2006 Author Share Posted October 29, 2006 Lol. Thanks but i think i'll pass on that chapter 12 is taking its damn time, i'm suffering from som writters block after being away all week and not really thinking about the story. 習うより慣れろ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Seddo Posted October 29, 2006 Share Posted October 29, 2006 (edited) Seddo shouts at the top of his voice Wheres chapter 12? Edited October 29, 2006 by Seddo87 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TenaciousD. Posted October 29, 2006 Share Posted October 29, 2006 Your back, wheres the bloddy chapter Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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