Pat Posted September 1, 2006 Share Posted September 1, 2006 (edited) M'k, as everyone knows, my last story was a FLOP. Short chapters, not enough people liked it, not a good story, blah blah blah. Hopefully THIS one will be better. This is a story of an evil possessed camera, and that's all I'm telling you. You'll understand for yourself when you start reading it. =D Well, here it is. Chapter 1! Chapter 1: Say Cheese Punk The year is 2006, and CJ is sitting on the couch of his old house, playing his GameStation 3. All of a sudden, his cell phone rings. CJ: Yo? John: Sup CJ? We haven't talked in a while. CJ: That's because they put in that damn toll booth at the bridge from Santa Marina to your trailer park over in San Fiero. John: Yeah yeah, I've been meaning to move out but I just cant raise the money. Could you maybe give me a loa... CJ: What happened to the $1000 I gave you last week? John: Uhh... Hey CJ, want to come over for dinner tonight? I'm making fried chicken... CJ: Stop trying to change the subject... Even though fried chicken is my favorite... John: I'll explain it when you get here. CJ: Fine, whatever. CJ turns off the GameStation and walks out into his garage. Then he gets into his Sentinel and looks at the gas. CJ: Damn, must've used up all the gas goin to the Stop&Shop yesterday. CJ gets ouf of the Sentinel and slams the door shut with his foot. Then he looks to the left and sees Sweet's Greenwood sitting there. CJ: Hmm. CJ walks over to Sweet's house and pounds on the door. CJ: Yo Sweet! You home? CJ grabs the key out from under the doormat and unlocks the door, and then walks in. CJ: SWEET! ARE YOU HOME?! CJ hears nothing, so he checks the house. After checking the bedroom, bathroom, living room and kitchen he gives up. CJ: Guess he's not home. Well, he wont mind if I borrow his car. CJ grabs Sweet's car key off of the kitchen counter then walks out and gets in Sweet's car. CJ thinks for a moment, then rolls the window down and sticks his head out. CJ: HEY BIG-H! COME OVER HERE! A very large man known as Big-H walks up to the car door. Big-H: Wassup CJ? What you need? CJ: Listen, if Sweet comes back and notices his car is gone, tell him I used it to go see John. Big-H: Sure thing CJ. CJ puts the keys in the ignition, then drives off. September 1st: Santa Marina to San Fiero bridge: 1:50 PM CJ pulls up to the tollbooth and pays to go through. CJ: Man, this bridge has been less popular since they put the toll booth here in 1996. CJ takes a left and pulls into John's trailer park. All of a sudden, CJ sees a flash and immediately pulls a 9MM out. CJ: What the hell was THAT? All of a sudden, he looks to the left and sees a man standing by the water taking pictures of Los Santos. CJ: Oh... CJ puts the gun away, then the man calls CJ over. Man: Can you take a picture of me infront of Los Santos? CJ: Sure I guess... The man poses, and CJ takes a picture. The picture slides out the front of the camera, and CJ looks at it. It shows the man slowly walking into the water and drowning himself. CJ: What the fu- All of a sudden the man mysteriously walks into the water and drowns. CJ: WHAT THE f*ck?! CJ is scared out of his mind, so he runs over and throws the camera into the car. He pounds on the door of John's trailer. CJ: JOHN! JOHN! GET THE f*ck OUT HERE YOU'RE NOT GONNA BELIEVE THIS!! John Vance, the one brother in the Vance family that didn't work with drugs, a 38 year old african american, opens the door and greets CJ. John: CJ! Great to see you! CJ: John listen! This tourist just asked me to take a picture of him infront of Los Santos and I did and... John: Woah woah woah, tell me inside. I just turned on L.S.P.D., it's this new show about wild police chases and sh*t. I heard I'm supposed to be in this episode, but I bet they were lyin. CJ: Ok, whatever man. But you gotta hear this... They both walk inside, and sit down at the couch. The trailer may look like crap on the outside, but on the inside it's very well kept and makes a nice home. CJ: I dont know why you fixed up the inside, but left the outside lookin like sh*t. John: Meh, what does the outside matter? I dont have to look at it. CJ: Yeah, whatever. Just listen man. CJ tells John the story, and John stares at him wide eyed. John: That is pretty weird... Maybe the guy rigged the camera and planned it out to scare you? CJ: Nah man, this guy was just some innocent tourist. John: Well it's not like it's the camera. CJ: Maybe it is! John: Dont start this bullsh*t CJ. Ever since The Truth had you get that jetpack out of Area 69 you're never been the same. CJ: That's besides the point! Maybe that camera is somehow evil... John: Oh get a f*cking grip. It's just a f*cking camera. CJ: I dont know... Maybe we should do something with it. John: I've got some strong firecrackers stashed under my bed. CJ: That's perfect! John: I'm only doing this 'cuz it'll make you happy. CJ: Yeah whatever, just go get the firecrackers. The two walk outside to the right of the large trailer, then set the camera down on the ground, surrouned by ten TNT shaped firecrackers. John: Fire in the hole! John lights one, then runs away. John: GET THE f*ck DOWN! Both duck behind Sweet's car, and for good reason. The explosion looks big enough to take out a trailer. CJ: Dayhayumn! Where'd you get those things? John: Vic gave 'em to me when he was in the navy. CJ: Hmm. CJ runs over to the smoking black hole in the ground, and looks for what's left of the camera. CJ: Holy sh*t... The camera lays in the hole, perfectly unharmed. John: What the f*ck... CJ picks up the camera, and his finger accidentaly slips and hits the shutter button. Unfortunately, the camera was pointed at John. John: WHAT THE f*ck MAN?! WHAT THE f*ck?! CJ grabs the picture, and sees John inside his trailer, while it goes up in flames. CJ: Dude... I dont think you should... John: f*ck off CJ. That camera's f*cked up. Just go on home. CJ gets into his greenwood, then drives over to the grassy patch by the trailer park and watches John's trailer. He sees John throw a cigarette out the window, which hits a propaine take and... BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOM! CJ: JOHN!!! CJ gets out of the car and runs to the incinerated trailer. CJ: JOHOHON!!! The trailer is charred black, and it's obvious. John is dead. CJ: This camera is seriously f*cked up... CJ throws the camera in the trunk, then drives back to Los Santos trying to think of a plan... I hope that was long enough, and I hope that was a good cliff hanger. PS: If you put the two deaths together, you learn what the camera does. Chapter 2 coming soon. Edited November 29, 2006 by EmoPat Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GSF_Membuh Posted September 3, 2006 Share Posted September 3, 2006 OOOOOOOH Scary! I rate this good, very good! It reminds me of that Goosebumps book " Say Cheese and Die!" Can't wait to read the second chapter! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pat Posted September 3, 2006 Author Share Posted September 3, 2006 Yeah. I'm basing it on that book. That was one of my favorite books back when I was younger. But now we're getting older and including GTA, so instead of bad things, they get killed. Lol. And thanks for rating it good! Chapter 2 coming soon. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kippers Posted September 3, 2006 Share Posted September 3, 2006 Nice Lookin forward to chapter dos. Goosbumps was amazing when i was younger 習うより慣れろ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rashon. Posted September 4, 2006 Share Posted September 4, 2006 Great job, EmoPat. Hope to see future chapters. Topic rated good and a cookie for you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pat Posted September 4, 2006 Author Share Posted September 4, 2006 Thanks everyone! When I was writing this I had to things on my mind: Flame war over "John Vance" And flame war over me basically ripping off R.L.Stine's "Say Cheese And Die". ! I'm 3/4s done with Chapter 2, so expect it soon! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GSF_Membuh Posted September 4, 2006 Share Posted September 4, 2006 Can't wait til Chapter 2! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pat Posted September 4, 2006 Author Share Posted September 4, 2006 Ok everyone, settle down. I talked with Cubanwhip AKA Rob on MSN and asked him if it was time to post up Chapter 2, or if I should wait a little longer. Luckily for you, he says it's time. Chapter 2! Going To Vice City? CJ drives up to the toll booth, and pays to go through. Then, he sees woman crying on the sidewalk. CJ pulls up to her and rolls down his window. CJ: What's wrong? Woman: My husband just drowned himself! CJ flashbacks to the man he took a picture of. CJ: Exuse me, but where did you buy that camera? Woman: Vice city. Why? And how did you know about our camera? CJ: No reason. And... I just noticed him taking pictures is all. CJ drives off towards Grove Street. September 1st: Grove Street: 1:02 PM CJ pulls up to Sweet's house, gets out of the Greenwood and walks inside. Unfortunately, Sweet is sitting on the couch, petrified with anger. Sweet: NIGGA, NEXT TIME ASK IF YOU GONNA USE MY CAR! CJ: Chill Sweet! I only went to go see John! Sweet: I dont give a sh*t! CJ: Well dont worry, I wont be going back. He's dead. There is a moment of silence, then Sweet gets up and puts his hand on CJ's shoulder. Sweet: Oh man. Look, I'm sorry. CJ: It's ok. Sweet notices the camera in CJ's hands, and grabs it. Sweet: Where'd you get this? CJ: Dont worry abou... Sweet looks at CJ and takes a picture. CJ: sh*t! Sweet looks at him with a confused face, then CJ grabs the picture sliding out the front of the camera. It shows CJ swerving his car just barely to avoid being hit by the bullets being shot from a black SUV. CJ: Oh sh*t... Look, I need to go to vice ci... Sweet: WHAT NOW?! FIRST LIBERTY AND NOW VICE?! DAMN NIGGA, JUST STAY HERE FOR A WHILE! CJ: Listen, this has to do with the camera. Sweet: Whatever nigga. Just go. If you gonna be like that, we dont want you here. CJ leaves the house and slams the door, then walks over to his house. CJ gets in his old Esperanto and checks to see if it has gas. It does. CJ starts it and pulls out and drives off for the airport. September 1st: Los Santos International: 1:36 PM CJ pulls up to the pilots gate, and they let him in. CJ (Thinking): I cant just get a ticket there, it'd cost too much. CJ pulls up to a Shammal, and gets inside. CJ hears the cock of a gun, and turns around. Luckily, he was able to take cover before getting shot. Six men in black suits are sitting in the back, shooting directly at CJ. CJ: f*ckING CAMERA! CJ pulls out his 9MM, and returns fire. After 20 minutes of blasting, the six men are finaly dead. CJ: Hmm, I wonder if those MP5's got any ammo left. If so, I might need them. CJ Starts the plane and heads for Vice City. September 2nd: Escobar International: 5:28 PM Vice city is no longer the gleaming metropolis it used to be. It's buildings are run down, it's neon signs are blinking, and Little Hatia and Little Cuba are as dirty and trashy as ever. CJ gets closer and closer to the airport before calling on the radio. CJ: This is pilot Johnson, requesting permission to land. Controll Tower: Permission granted. Welcome to Vice City. CJ lands the plane, gets out, and heads for the gate. Once outside, he notices a small flier that says "Have super natural problems? Call Aunti Poulet! 555-6491" CJ pulls out his cellphone and calls the number. A middle aged man answers. Man: Hello? CJ: Is Aunti Poulet there? Man: She's been dead for ten years. CJ: sh*t. Well, do you still help with any supernatural sh*t? Man: Yeah, her granddaughter does. She inherited the house, so she moved in instead of staying in that sh*tty Highman Condo. Or whatever the hell they call it. CJ: Great. Can you give me directions? Man: We live in the biggest house in Little Hatie. Cant miss it on a map. CJ: Thanks, I'll be stopping by soon. CJ gets in a taxi, and tells the driver to go to the nearest map store. September 2nd: Escobar International Tourist Center: 5:49 PM CJ finds a map, and buys it for $5:65. CJ: Great, now I just gotta find a ride. CJ notices a rusty 86 Sentinel XS parked over in one of the parking spots. It looks like it hasn't moved in years. CJ: Perfect! CJ gets in, and tries to hotwire it. After six tries, it finaly starts. CJ: Hell yeah! CJ backs up, and heads for Little Hatie, hoping that Aunti Poulet's granddaughter can help him with the camera. That's it for Chapter 2! Chapter 3 coming soon! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GSF_Membuh Posted September 4, 2006 Share Posted September 4, 2006 Nice Chapter dude! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pat Posted September 4, 2006 Author Share Posted September 4, 2006 THAT was fast. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Archaon, Lord of End Times Posted September 4, 2006 Share Posted September 4, 2006 Good story, Emopat. Keep up the good work. *Topic rated good* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rashon. Posted September 4, 2006 Share Posted September 4, 2006 Not bad, EmoPat. Can't wait for Chapter 3. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
B Rob Posted September 5, 2006 Share Posted September 5, 2006 Wow, decent story. I think I'll continue to read along. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pat Posted September 8, 2006 Author Share Posted September 8, 2006 (edited) And then God said, "You will give them Chapter 3". Chapter 3: Bad Mojo CJ pulls the Sentinel into a dirt road known as Little Haiti, and sees a house somewhat larger than all the others. CJ: That must be it. CJ pulls up beside it, parks, and gets the camera out of the trunk. He's about to close the trunk, when a rather large woman of 40 yells at him from the door of the house. Woman: Get in here child, we haven't much time! CJ forgets to close the trunk, and walks inside the house. The woman sits down behind a table, and CJ sits down infront of it. The woman takes the camera and puts it on the table. The woman introduces herself as Aunti Goulet, the neice of Aunti Poulet. Then, she asks CJ to put the camera on the table, and he does so. Goulet then takes out a spell book that CJ only knows as jiberish. She speaks in a tounge that hurts CJ's ears. Then, the camera flashes yellow, shakes a little, and then stops. Goulet: Yes... Interesting... I never thought I would see this camera ever again. CJ: You've seen this thing before? Goulet: Yes. Let me tell you the story. As Goulet tells CJ, the camera once belonged to a man named Ned Burner. Ned got himself into trouble with a Leone known as Toni Cippriani. A spell was put on the camera by one of Goulet's friends on vacation, because they knew the evil Ned could cause. After flashing, it would imprisson the soul of whoever was next to die in Liberty City. Five minutes later, Ned had the bullet of an SMG go through his brain, while Toni rode past him on the Faggio, completely ignoring the dead body he had just made. Then, the spirit of Ned Burner was sucked into the camera, and they thought he would cause no more harm. They were wrong. Ned found out he could controll the camera, as if it were him. He was found by a nearby street thug, and he took it to the new camera store right beside the allyway inbetween the apartments and the multi-story car park. Camerastore Owner: Yes... Magnificent. I'll give you $200 for it. Street Thug: Aight. The man payed the thug, and the store owner laughed at how much he scammed the thug. The camera's real worth would be close to $4,000, but the store owner was known to be a cheapskape. He knew the thug had just stolen the camera, so he new it would work. He put the camera in the display behind the front window. Day after day Ned would try to take a picture of Toni when he walked past, but only a person pushing the shutter button could acomplish that. Ned did get his attention though, for he knew how to set his flash off. Toni walked by one day, and Ned sent his flash wild. This got Toni's attention alright. He recognized the camera. Toni had never been a supersticious one, but he knew somehow Ned was connected to that camera. He went inside and bought it for $5,000. Then, he went to the old docks dipping down into the water, shoved it in the trunk of an old Idaho he had stolen, and sent it into the water. Four years later, a crew found the Idaho and it made the news. They said the only thing they found was a camera. The current mayor wanted nothing to do with this camera, for no apparent reason, so he sent it off to a Vice City tourist shop. A couple bought it, then five years later took a flight to San Andreas. They finaly got to use their new camera. Then CJ knew the rest. The man taking pictures of Los Santos, and the crying widow. CJ: Aight, whateva. Can you do anything to it? Goulet: I can relenquish his spirit from it. CJ: But what'll happen then? Wont he have to possess something? Goulet: Dont worry child. I have over thirty spirit catchers in here. Goulet performs another spell, and they both see a whisp of white smoke start to come out of the camera. All of a sudden, the door shakes then comes open, and the smoke goes back into the camera and starts bouncing around the room. CJ: HOLLY sh*t! CJ ducks under the table, and just nearly avoids being hit by the camera. After five minutes of bouncing off table, ceiling, floor, and wall, the camera finaly bounces out the door into CJ's trunk, and the trunk shuts itself. A nearby Hatian boy, of about 17, notices this and runs up to the car and gets in. He notices CJ left it running, so he peels off the dirt road and drives for the bridge to Leaf Links. CJ: f*ck! CJ runs out, and sees a 24 year old Hatian smoking a joint, leaning on a Voodoo. CJ: Mind if I borrow your car? Hatian: f*ck off. CJ pulls out his 9MM and grabs the man by the neck. Then, he puts the gun to his temple. CJ: I said, mind if I borrow this? CJ cocks the gun, and the man tries to pull away. Hatian: sh*t MAN! JUST TAKE IT, TAKE IT! CJ throws the man to the side, and he hits a rock the size of a basketball. The man is knocked unconcious, but he doesn't seem to be bleeding. CJ gets in the Voodoo and hotwires it, and starts the chase as he peels out of the dirt road, after the bridge, not far behind the Sentinel... That's all for Chapter 3! If you want more writing talents, I'm posting a new story up in a few minutes, but it will not have a GTA character as the main character. On the other hand, it will feature GTA characters and it will take place in the GTA universe. PS: It will be first person, which means huge paragraphs and not many text sentences. Edited September 8, 2006 by EmoPat Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Archaon, Lord of End Times Posted September 10, 2006 Share Posted September 10, 2006 Good one, Emopat. I hope to see more. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rashon. Posted September 13, 2006 Share Posted September 13, 2006 Requesting more chapters, EmoPat. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pat Posted September 14, 2006 Author Share Posted September 14, 2006 New chapter! Chapter 4: Going To Liberty City? CJ is on the bridge, periodicly ramming the back of the sentinel. CJ: PULL THE F*CK OVER! CJ pulls out a .45, and shoots the left tire out. Hatian: SH*T! The sentinel swerves, then makes a severe right and rams into the railing of the bridge. The hatian is automatically ejected from the windshield, and CJ hears him screaming as he falls towards the water. CJ: Tsk tsk. CJ tries to get out, but for some reason the door's stuck. He tries the passenger door. It is also stuck. CJ: Wtf?! Stupid old car! CJ kicks at the door, then notices a rather large man walking up to the sentinel and opening the dented trunk. CJ: HEY! GET THE F*CK AWAY FROM THERE! The man pulls out the camera, and turns towards CJ. CJ recognizes him as Toni Ciprianni, a man known well for his ties with Donald Love, and the fact that he was believed to blow up the old subway tunnel in Fort Stauton. The police had no proof, however, and he got away clean. Toni pulls out a cellphone, and dials a number. Toni: Donald? Can you hear me? I got the camera. CJ hears a high pitched squeal of joy from the camera, then the man on the other line yelling with what sounds like glad chat. Toni nods a couple times, then hangs up. He then walks over to a 2001 dark grey Leone Sentinel. He gets in, starts it up, and drives past CJ. Toni pulls up beside him and rolls down his window. Toni: Listen, if you're smart kid, you'll forget about this camera and stay the hell away from Liberty. Toni rolls up his window and speeds off. CJ finaly gets the door open, but pulls it shut immediately. CJ: Sh*t! I gotta catch the f*ck up to him! CJ puts the car in reverse, does a 180 (In reverse) and speeds down the bridge. After reaching the end of the bridge, he runs into a black limo. Man in back of limo: WHAT THE F*CK?! The man gets out of the limo, and CJ recognizes him too. The man has black hair, with a few grays. He has a black suit on, and has stubble for a beard. CJ: Sh*t. Tommy Vercetti. The man walks up to CJ's car, and CJ starts to try to reverse the car. Tommy: Do you know who I am? I SAID DO YOU KNOW WHO I F*CKING AM?! Tommy pulls out a .357, and walks toward CJ's door. CJ: SH*T SH*T SH*T!!! CJ finaly gets the voodoo reverse. It speeds back, then CJ puts it into 1st gear and makes a right turn and swerves around the limo. Tommy: GET THE F*CK BACK HERE! Tommy walks over and gets in a 98 Banshee and speeds towards CJ. Tommy: F*ck that limo, I need to catch him A.S.A.P.! CJ makes it to the airport, and Tommy's not far behind... Chapter 5 coming soon! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
xygtaxy Posted September 14, 2006 Share Posted September 14, 2006 i like it, go check out my Gta: Trilogy Storyyyy i rated ur story good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rashon. Posted September 14, 2006 Share Posted September 14, 2006 Wow, that was a quick reply. Great chapter, EmoPat. More, please. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Archaon, Lord of End Times Posted September 15, 2006 Share Posted September 15, 2006 Good job, EmoPat. 'Bout time we got some Tommy Vercetti in here. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vanilla Shake Posted September 17, 2006 Share Posted September 17, 2006 Dude, great story!!! TC718 / <629 / CF5 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pat Posted September 19, 2006 Author Share Posted September 19, 2006 I got done with this chapter a little early. Enjoy! This Guy Can Hold A Grudge! CJ busts through the gate and his Voodoo finaly breaks down. CJ: f*ck! CJ gets out and looks around. He sees a plane and Toni Cippriani's boarding it. CJ: I gotta catch him! The plane is about to leave, and CJ can see they're not taking any passengers. He looks over to the right and sees an NRG-500. As he jogs over to it, he chants to himself "Please, Please, Please..." He gets on the bike, opens his eyes, and sees keys in the ignition. CJ: YES! CJ starts the bike. CJ: Now what? He looks and sees a ramp into the luggage compartment. CJ: Oh he... All of a sudden a banshee breaks through the gate and CJ sees Tommy in it. CJ: NOW OR NEVER!!! CJ speeds off towards the plane in a wheelie, levels it out, and ramps into the luggage compartment. CJ: OH SHIIIIIIIIIIIIII... CJ kicks off the bike, and barely makes it inside. Five seconds after that, they close the door, not seeing CJ burried under a pile of suitcases. CJ: Well, atleast I got in. CJ goes through the compartment door and takes a seat. Flight Attendant: Can I get you anything sir? CJ: I'm fine. Can you tell me where this plane is heading? I uh... Forgot. Flight Attendant: Liberty city, sir. CJ: Thanks. CJ fluffs a piillow and takes a nap in his chair. Five Hours Later... CJ wakes up and stretches. CJ flags a nearby flight attendant. CJ: Exuse me ma'am, but where are we? Flight Attendant: Well, we had to make a quick stop in Carcer International. We just left the airport a few minutes ago. How was your... The flight attendant is interrupted by a scream. CJ: What the hell? CJ looks out his window and sees a Hunter following the plane. CJ: Of course. Tommy Vercetti fires a rocket at the back of the plane, causing it to go down. People run around screaming, and CJ knows he's going to only have once chance... CJ runs towards the front of the plane and grabs a parachute. Then walks over to the door labled "EMERGANCY ONLY: DO NOT OPEN!". CJ: Sorry, but it looks like I'm breaking the rules. CJ looks back and sees Tommy through a window, preparing to fire another rocket. CJ: Damn this guy holds a grudge! CJ pulls open the door, takes a deap breath, and jumps. CJ: SHIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIT!!! CJ pulls his ripcord, and the parachute deploys. He looks to his right and notices Tommy still following the plane. Apparently he didn't see CJ. CJ: Thank god. CJ sees Tommy's about to turn the Hunter around. CJ: sh*t, gotta think fast. CJ sees there's only one way to get down faster. CJ: I hope I make it... CJ pulls the parachute off and lets go, just in time for Tommy to see an empty parachute. Tommy: DAMN IT! WHERE THE F*CK DID HE GO?! CJ falls, uncertain of what's going to happen next, feeling the polution of Carcer City slow his fall... Chapter si... Ok just kidding. Intermission. Go get some snacks. Intermission over. Back to the chapter! CJ eventually sees buildings, and then sees a fair. CJ: Perfect! CJ turns himself just enough to land on an inflatable bouncy castle. CJ: Damn that was close! CJ climbs down, and notices he's in a football stadium. CJ: Looks like a highschool football field. Must be some kind of funraiser fair. CJ walks out the gate onto the street, and hails a cab. CJ: Take me to the nearest hotel. Driver: I dont think so. CJ: Why the f*ck not? Driver: Tommy sent me a message. He said: The driver pulls out a .45 Driver: "Goodbye" CJ ducks, the shot barelly missing his head. CJ: sh*t! CJ grabs the gun by the barrel, and yanks it from the driver's hand. Driver: HEY! CJ pops up and shoots the driver in the head. CJ: Pikaboo! CJ gets out of the back, pulls the driver's body out of the front, and gets in. CJ: What the hell? All I did was hit his f*cking limo! CJ speeds off into the distance, looking for some place to stay in this increadibly corrupt city. Now for real, chapter 6 coming soon. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vanilla Shake Posted September 19, 2006 Share Posted September 19, 2006 Keep up the good work!!! TC718 / <629 / CF5 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rashon. Posted September 19, 2006 Share Posted September 19, 2006 Indeed. Great chapter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pat Posted September 19, 2006 Author Share Posted September 19, 2006 I feel like I should spoil you guys and give you the next chapter right now. Oh well. Maybe if we get more fans of the story, I will. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
zeta1 Posted September 19, 2006 Share Posted September 19, 2006 I really don't believe it is necessary for people to post here to show they are interested. Dammit, you made me reveal my stealthy idling technique Can't wait for the next chapter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pat Posted September 20, 2006 Author Share Posted September 20, 2006 Ok, that last chapter felt kind of small. And since then, I've been planning a new huge chapter out, with a big twist! Now, this is probably the only time I'll spoil you guys with two chapters on the same day. Here's the new chapter! Wasn't He Dead? In The Past...: John looks at the photo. John: WHAT THE HELL? This thing shows my trailer blowing up with ME IN IT! CJ: Dude, I suggest you dont... John: No CJ, I dont want to hear it. Whatever the hell it is, I dont want to f*cking hear it. GO. CJ walks off and gets in his greenwood, then drives off. John: Stupid f*cking camera. John walks into his trailer and slams the door shut. Then walks over to the kitchen and pulls out a cigarette and lights it. Then takes a long drag. John (Coughing): God, no wonder Vic kept trying to get me to stop smokin these! John flicks the cigarette to the right, looking out the kitchen window. His intention was to hit the ash trey laying on the counter, but the cigarrete passed the counter, veering to the right, then passed the broom closet door, then went out the window. John looks to the right and then sees what's going on. John: OH SHI... John knows there's only one thing to do. He runs for the closet, yanks the door open, climbs inside the closet, and slams the door shut. BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOM! John feels himself rising along with the trailer, and then falling. John: (Cough Cough) Damn that was a big (Cough) explosion! John was protected by the fact that in 1983, Vic set up explosion proof walls in his closet. Vic: Someday, you're going to have your trailer blown up. I can tell with all these propain tanks around. Vic looks at the cigarrete John's holding and smirks. Vic: Especially if you keep smoking those. John: Hahaha. John gives him an angry look, then Vic finishes. Vic: There. Those should protect any bomb, unless it's in the closet with you. I put it in this closet, since you're in the kitchen so god damn much. John: Yeah yeah, whatever. Vic: I'll see you around. I gotta get back to the base. Did you hear? John: Hear what? Vic: I'm going to Vice City next year. John: Seriously? Vic: Yep. Gonna go and take care of Lance for not talking to us at all for the past few years. John: That wimp? Dont waste your time with him. Vic laughs, then walks out of the trailer and gets in his Mesa Grande. Vic: I'll see you around baby bro. John: I said dont f*cking call me that! Vic gives him a grin, then drives off. John: Son of a... John comes out of the dream. John: Huh? What the hell? Must've dosed off thinking about Vic. John walks out of the closet and steps through charred remains of wood, tile, and something John cant even identify. John sees that somehow, his digital calender survived. John: Dumb f*ckin luck. John takes a look. John: Dayumn, I've been in there for two or three days. John walks across the dirt and unlocks the door to his spair trailer. John: Knew it'd be a good idea to have this thing. John sits down and turns on the TV, then flips to the news. News Reporter: And in other news, in Carcer City a highschool football field had some action when first a black man of about 35 landed on their inflatable bouncy castle, then five minutes later what was left of the front half of a PLANE landed there! Luckily no one was found dead, but a few people were injured. Three bodies of people on the plane were found dead. John: Stupid news. "No one's dead" and then "Three bodies were found". Sheesh. John stops the TV all of a sudden using Tvo. He looks to the right of the field and sees a man getting in a taxi. John: Could that be...? He zooms on the image and sees a black man of about 35 getting in the back of an old taxi. John: CJ. John shuts off the TV and leaves the trailer. Then walks up to his Bobcat and gets in. John: Wait, gonna need some heat. John goes back into his spair trailer and pulls 2 Berreta pistols out of his closet, along with an M-16. John carries them out to his truck. Then he puts the pistols on the passenger seat, then puts the M-16 behind the seats. John: Knowing CJ, I'm gonna need those. John gets in the driver side, then drives off for Los Santos International. Back In Carcer City... CJ drives halfway past the International Bank Of Liberty, then notices a jet black sentinel parked infront of it. CJ: Oh sh*t... CJ veers to the right and parralel parks. Then looks over at the sentinel. CJ sees a woman of about 31, and a man of about 26. The man seems to be jotting notes, while the woman seems to be babbling on. Apparently she has told the man to take notes on what she's saying. CJ: Catalina. Of course. CJ picks up his .45 and gets out of the taxi. Then walks over to the sentinel. CJ taps on the driver side door window. Catalina yells through the plate of glass. Catalina: WHAT THE HELL DO YOU WANT? Catalina turns around, and is about to roll the window down when she sees CJ. Catalina: You... YOU... Catalina backs up, bumping into her boyfriend. Man: Who's HE? CJ: I'm the man that's about to kill your girlfriend. Man: WHAT?! CJ: Didn't you hear? She killed everyone she went out with except the lucky ones, me and Claude. Catalina: Oh uh baby, he's just lying! He's just jealous of what we have... Catalina grabs his hand and rests it on her boobs. The man was just about to open his door and run, but then he settles and gets comfortable. CJ: Nice try, bitch. CJ yanks the door open before she can lock it, then pulls her out and makes her lay on the street. CJ: You may have escaped that helicopter at the last second, but I dont think you'll be escaping this. Catalina: NO PLEASE! CJ: Sorry. CJ puts a bullet in her brain. Then turns to the boyfriend. CJ: I suggest you get out of here, before she pulls some sh*t and comes back to haunt you. The man just nods, then opens his door and runs. CJ: Tsk tsk. CJ walks around and closes the passenger door, then walks back around and gets in the driver seat and closes his door. CJ: I like this ride way more then my sh*tty old taxi. CJ starts the sentinel then drives off. CJ passes the bank, then makes a right turn and sees a five star hotel. CJ: Perfect. CJ parallel parks the car, then gets out and walks through the front doors. Hotel Clerk: Can I help you sir? CJ: I need a room for the night. Non-smoking, if you've got it. Hotel Clerk: Certainly sir. How about this? Two king sized beds, plasma-screen TV, non-smoking, and a jacuzzi! CJ: How much does it cost? Clerk: Only $95! CJ: Well, I gues that's ok. CJ pulls out a credit card and pays for the hotel room. Clerk: Can I get your luggage sir? CJ: That's ok... CJ then gets an idea. CJ walks outside and opens the trunk and scouts it for weapons. CJ: Perfect, just what I was hoping for. CJ pulls an AK-47 out of the trunk. Trying to make sure the clerk doesn't see, he carries it over to the right side of the car and opens the back door. Then slides it onto the back seat. CJ: Might need that later. CJ then sees three suitcases, each filled with $100 bills. CJ: DAYUMN! I'm gonna need those too! CJ keeps the suitcases in the trunk, then shuts it and walks back inside. CJ walks up to the elivator and goes to floor 2. CJ then walks to his room and walks inside. CJ: Gotta love that clean hotel room smell. CJ jumps on the bed, kicks off his shoes, and falls asleep immediately. To follow up this chapter will be a challenge! Expect to see a new chapter in 2-3 days. Dont worry, I wont forget about you guys. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vanilla Shake Posted September 21, 2006 Share Posted September 21, 2006 Great job dude! TC718 / <629 / CF5 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rashon. Posted September 21, 2006 Share Posted September 21, 2006 Yeah, keep the chapters coming. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pat Posted September 23, 2006 Author Share Posted September 23, 2006 We Meet Again John drives up to the airport secuirty gate, rolls down his window and talks to the guard. John: Exuse me, but how much does it cost to ship a vehicle? John sees that the security guard is about to see his pistols, so he grabs them and stuffs them behind the seats. Security guard: Hmm? Oh. Shipping a vehicle. Hmmmm... I'd guess about $700. John takes a moment to think. John (Thinking): Well, if I drive there, by the time I get there he could be dead or somewhere else. But then if I just pay the $700, I can get there faster, and keep my weapons. I doubt they'd let me take them in a duffle bag. John looks at the security guard, then pulls out his credit card. John: Fine. Guess I have no other choice. John pays for his truck to be shipped, then the guard turns around and kicks the back of a different computor chair. A young boy of about twenty one pulls his feet off the desk, puts his magazine down, and looks at the guard. Security guard: Dan, take this man's truck to the Andromeda and put it aboard. The teenager rolls his eyes, then exists the guard shack and opens the driver side door. Dan: Well? Do you want me to take it there or not? John: Oh uh, right. John gets out of his truck, and Dan gets in. Dan then drives through the gate over to a huge plane. John: Well, now I just have to go buy my ticket. Security guard: I know it's none of my business, but where you goin? John: Carcer city. The security guard looks at him like he's joking, then bursts out laughing. Security guard: HAHAHA! CARCER CITY! Oh man, that's the best joke I've heard all day. John looks at the man with a serious face, then the security guard's eyes widen. Security guard: Oh sh*t, you're serious. Listen, you dont want to go to Carcer. There's some bad things going on up there. John: I know. My friend has something to do with them. The security guard's eyes widen even more, as John gets in a taxi and orders the driver to take him to the ticket area. Back at the hotel... CJ is in a dream. In the dream, he's fifteen and playing with his younger brother Brian. All of a sudden a man pulls up in a greenwood and walks up to Brian. CJ cant quite see his face. Man: Hey little kid! Can I take a picture of you? Brian nods his head up and down, and CJ recognizes the camera. CJ tries to say no, or even grab Brian and move him away, but he cant move or talk. The man takes a picture of Brian, and Brian suddenly falls on the ground, dead. CJ's eyes widen, but he cant scream because he cant move or talk. CJ's mother then walks out of the house. Beverly Johnson: What are you doing with that camera boy? The man turns to her and takes her picture. She then falls on the steps, dead. The man then walks up to CJ and CJ sees that the man is himself. Man: Hello. Say cheese. CJ sees a flash of white, then wakes up and breathes heavily. CJ: Oh my... Oh my god. It was just a dream. CJ rubs his eyes, then sees sunlight streaming through the hotel window. He then looks at the clock beside his bed and sees that it's 8:39 AM. CJ: Well, I check out at 10, so I better go down and check out. CJ opens his door, walks halfway to the elivator, then hears the fire of an M4 and hears a voice. Voice: WHERE IS HE?! WHERE'S CJ?! CJ: sh*t. Tommy found me. CJ hears footsteps coming up the stairs, then runs to the window on the opposite wall. He then sees a fire escape, and climbs out onto it. Unfortunately, it only goes up, and he doesn't feel like jumping two stories. CJ: No where but up. CJ climbs the fire escape, and makes it to the top. He knows Tommy has probably seen it by now, so he picks up a crow bar laying beside it and pries the rusty bolts holding it onto the roof off. The fire escape falls, and makes a loud BANG in the allyway. CJ then hears footsteps coming up the stairs. CJ: sh*t! He took the main stairs up! CJ looks around, and sees three metal chairs, one with a sniper rifle on it. CJ shrugs, takes one and props it against the door. CJ: That should keep him busy for a while. CJ then sees a plank about eight feet long, then picks it up and makes a bridge to the building on the left of the hotel. CJ walks across, then notices the metal chair start to bend. CJ: sh*t! CJ kicks the plank into the allyway, where it lands on the fire escape. CJ: Uhh, uhh.. CJ runs across the roof and sees another fire escape. CJ: Yes! CJ climbs halfway down, but keeps eye level with the roof to watch the hotel's roof. The metal chair finaly bends as far as it can, then Tommy busts through the door. Tommy: I know you're up here CJ! You cant hide forever! CJ hurridly climbs down into the allyway, then spots an 87 Banshee. CJ: Perfect. CJ gets in, and luckily the keys are inside. CJ tears out of the allyway, makes a right, and pulls up beside his sentinel. Being really quiet, he sneaks his AK-47 and two breifcases of money out of the back of the Sentinel, then puts them in the Banshee with him. CJ then drives off, hearing Tommy's scream of rage. Then a lightbulb blinks in his head, making him remember the whole reason he's running from Tommy, and that he's in Carcer City. CJ: The camera. CJ makes a left, passes the bank, and is at the highschool five minutes later. CJ notices that the plane's remains are still there, and no cops have touched them. CJ: Phew. CJ runs to the plane and sees what looks like half of Toni Cippriani's charred face. CJ grimaces, then walks over and sees the camera, in perfect shape. CJ: Of course. CJ picks it up, wipes the dust off with his hand, then his cellphone rings. CJ answers it. CJ: Hello? John: CJ! CJ: JOHN?! John: CJ, I hid in that bomb shelter of a closet Vic set up back in '83, and it protected me from the blast! CJ: Thank god! John: Yep, I'm still alive! CJ: But that puzzles me. The camera kills anyone it takes a picture of. John: Are you saying I'm going to die somehow? CJ: Not sure. Maybe it's possible to escape it. Looks like ol' Toni didn't though. John: Who's Toni? CJ: Sal told me about him when I had to do some sh*t for him back in Las Venturas, way back in 92. John: Oh. So what happened? CJ tells John everything that happened. CJ: Toni must've taken a picture of himself on accident, and then Tommy got wrapped up into it and blew up the plane, taking out Toni. John: Wow. Hey, I'm going to be getting off at Francis International over in Shorside Vail. Why dont you come pick me up? CJ: Sounds like a plan. CJ gets into his sentinel, and drives off for the Carcer City to Shorside Vail tunnels. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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