Ottae Posted April 18, 2006 Share Posted April 18, 2006 Looks great guys well done! I've got alot more to work with this time around so I'll hopefully come up with a decent story Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bryce. Posted April 18, 2006 Share Posted April 18, 2006 (edited) Looks great guys well done! I've got alot more to work with this time around so I'll hopefully come up with a decent story I'm glad to see you back Ottae, all that is really new are the Separatists, point system, and a few other small adjustments. You'll do fine. Were doing well people, it's been less than 24 hours and were' already at 83%. G'work. Edit: Mainland Marauder has stepped down from his leadership position due to computer problems, so we will be assigning him to the legion. No word on whether or not a new leader will be appointed. Thanks. Edited April 18, 2006 by Bryce. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brad Posted April 18, 2006 Share Posted April 18, 2006 I'm looking for higher command. But wait im a new character... So it will have to wait. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mainland Marauder Posted April 18, 2006 Share Posted April 18, 2006 Yeah, sorry it's not working out. As it is I cannot run MSN anymore on my computer. I don't think it's right to have a leadership position if I cannot be a leader, so I've asked to be released from that role. I still want to participate as best I can, though. "You tell me exactly what you want, and I'll explain to you very carefully why it cannot be." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kippers Posted April 18, 2006 Share Posted April 18, 2006 An Unsung Hero Part 2 When I finally gained consciousness, it was black, as black as the day I was born, as black as any other day. The air around me felt stuffy, I gasped for fresh air as I kicked and wrestled twisting my body trying to free my hands from a vice like grip, like a mouse being suffocated slowly and torturously,surrounded by death and despair as it tries escaping from the snakes wrath. I tried screaming but any attempt sounded as muffled and faint as the music from the clubs. - I guess there's always a good side to everything, at least I wasn't being drugged or brainwashed. - Pain seared through my body as I tried pulling on the plastic straps keeping my hands from being of any use, I could feel the plastic cuffs dig into my skin, scarred for life. I gave up, worn out and on the brink of tears I stopped, there was nothing I could do now, whoever had taken me sure knew what they were doing, too thought out to be amateur play. As I lay there in the dark I could have sworn I heard a door slam, not too far away. Quickly I leapt up onto my feet only to meet a hard metal roof halfway up. Ignoring the pain I slammed my body up against the side of the van screaming at the top of my voice, made difficult by whatever was covering my head as it kept being sucked into my mouth as if I were some sort of vacuum cleaner. As muffled as ever I kept screaming louder and louded, slamming my body onto the side of the van. Slam! Slam! Slam! Harder with each attempt. As I gasped for air between hits I could hear yet another car door slam, seemingly closer. My shoulder was engulfed with pain and bruises but with all the adrenaline I could feel rushing through by body I wasn't afraid to give it one last shot. One last attempt and SLAM! "HELP!!" I screamed as loud as I could, "HELP!!!" I slammed my head against the van wall, not once, not twice, but thrice. Everywhere in my body was hurting at this point, no pain greater than another, tears streaming down my face as I gave way body collapsing up against the van, slowly but surly I was down on my knees. For a split second everything went quiet, but nothing ever stays quiet for long. The noise I was dreading struck my ears like a thunderbolt, the engine to the car or van I could hear in the not so far distance started up, to me it didn't sound like a car engine, to me it sounded like the noise to announce - to anyone listening - the start of a big game or rather....The end. This is why I left the force in the fight against Arbusto; I just wasn't mentally prepared for things like this... To Be Continued... @Stezza: Where are parts 1 and 2? 習うより慣れろ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ricardomun Posted April 18, 2006 Share Posted April 18, 2006 Thanks Arbusto.Can you say what exactly was wrong in my post so i can improve future posts,please.And what's my speciality? This has been stated before, but I feel like humoring. Not every person has a specialty, so I opted not to assign you one. If MI7, that bastard of traitor, see's it fit, he can assign you one. You really just need to, before you post, go back and make sure your capitilization and spacing is ok, other than that, you are fine. G'luck, I hope we kill you soon. Arbusto, out. I'm doing a story right now and hopefully I'll post it today.Also I'm doing a introduction to my character,like I did in the old thread. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Snares Posted April 18, 2006 Share Posted April 18, 2006 (edited) @Stezza: Where are parts 1 and 2? They would be in the old topic. Nice story by the way. Badlands Badasses When Snares woke up, he looked around the room he was in. It was a damp little place, with poor carpets and teared dwon wallpaper. There was a smell of death about the place. It was at the moment Snares remembered what he'd come from, and ripped off the T-shirt covering him, and saw a stitched up opening, crapply done though. It was some kind of medical center, he was sure of that, legitimate, he was not. He pulled his tee over his head, and walked slowly to the door, watching his step on the floor. The door had a smashed window in it, and he stuck his head through it. It was a corridor, but clear, he reached for the door-knob, and discreetly turned the handle. He thrust himself against the wall, back against it, both arms stretched out from him, and moved along it to the left. He came across another room, similar to his own, empty, and then another. The last room in the corridor had the letters OF I E, he assumed it meant OFFICE. Someone was in the room, talking to himself or a phone, Snares picked part of the conversation up. "Yeah, these new guys, the Separatists man, think they can just walk in on our territory .......... yeah man ....... heh' heh', Separatists, Suckas more like." Sportree! Snares thought to himself, and opened the door. Sure enough it was him. "'ey yo, someone's up." "Where the hell are we Sportree?" "The Panopitcon, a Rebel village in Badlands." "Yeah, I know about it." "One of my bro's friends, Pete, he runs this clinic. He patched y'all up man." "Okay, where is everyone?" "The Cubanos and Leon are still in LS, Dale's waitin' for you in one of the huts." Sportree gave Snares a flannel top to put on, and the Baseball cap he always wore. There was no real front door of the clinic, just a entrance. It opened into a small community, busy none the less. Arms, vehicle and work all around. Snares spotted an orange cap through one of the huts windows, the kind Dale wore. As soon as he went into the door... "I'm now a fully-fledged Rebel, and I've been assigned to work with you, doesn't mean you can boss me around, we're still both maggots. We have a job to do, I give you the details, you come up with a plan." They entered another hut with a map spread out on a table, with figures from the game Risk representing soldiers. "Right. Firstly, the command is very impressed with your work so far, the compound you took out gave the Republik a real scare, and your latest job gave us new arms, not to mention saving lives of our soldiers. Right, there's this group called the Separatists, same goal as us, which is good and all, but they're taking away some of our territory, our job is gonna be taking as much territory as we can, particulary surrounding the Seps' strongholds, to keep the pressure on them, and also, to take out one of the local Lieutenant's." "Okay, I can think of something when we have more info." --- Snares loaded his rifle and cocked it. The pair were waiting in Dale's Walton, in a trailer park next to the estuary that splits the Badlands from Los Santos. The Santa Maria beach area was where they suspect major Sep' activity took place, also, they had spotted a Lieutenant, who they reckoned was in charge of Leaky Hollow. The plan would be to attack his car on-route to whereever he was going. They would make it clear the Rebels had done this, making sure a war broke out, which the Rebels would easily win. Simple enough. They spotted him leaving a garage in a black Bandito, with another man. Snares turned the ignition, and waited for the Lieutenant to cross the bridge. He followed the bandito, keeping his distance, but the guy drove onto a dirt track, which weaved between corn fields. It was now or never, Snares stepped on the accelerator and bumped along the dirt track, the Lieutenant spotted him, and sped off. Dale moved out to the window, aimed his rifle, and popped one of the wheels. --- Night had fallen and they had been searching the area for hours, more Rebels had arrived, and no doubt the Seps' had back-up to. The Rebels had successfully taken control of Flint Range and the surrounding area, formally controlled by farmers and hicks, it would go to good use, supplying food and gasoline. Snares had led the capture of the area, and been shot in the leg for it, now, if they killed this Seps' Lieutenant, the command would be pleased. Scouts had located the Lt.'s hiding place. He was close, real close, hiding in the corn fields surrounding the area. "We'll torch them all if we have to, find that Sep, and bring him to me!" shouted Snares. Dale, Snares and another two Rebels set off in Squad A, two more groups of similar size set off also. It was one of the accompanying Rebels that spotted some activity in the nearest hill, the roof of a car, and voices. They crawled through corn fields until they were just a few feet away from them. It was him, a few Sep soldier, and a car. One of the Rebels got worried and fired a shot, which smashed one of the cars windows. All hell broke loose. Snares fired one round. Sep goes down. Another. Sep goes down. Another. A Rebel went down. "Cover me!" Snares shouted as he went to the wounded man. He was shot in the throat. "God damn man." He tried his best to help the guy, he was no medic. Another shot hit his chest. Dead. Snares turned quickly. The Sep' Lt. had shot him, and he had a smirk look across his face. Dale was busy aiming at one of the fleeing Seps', and the Lt. aimed at him. Snares grabbed two 9mm's off the dead Rebel. It was like slow motion. Snares dived, side on, holding both pistols out. Clat-Clat. The bullets travelled. One missed. One passed through Dale's right butt-cheek, and Dale's face just went . The bullet passed clean through and hit the Lt. in-between the eyes. Snares jumped up on his feet. "Yeah! I kick ass!" "You also shoot it you son of a bitch. You shot me in the ass!" Edited April 18, 2006 by Snares Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
buttmonkey Posted April 18, 2006 Share Posted April 18, 2006 I will join the republic, to help destroy this rebal scum! Long Live the Revoulution! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Oddsock Posted April 18, 2006 Share Posted April 18, 2006 w00t! I think I have a story base, but I'll work on that a bit later. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Snares Posted April 18, 2006 Share Posted April 18, 2006 New story posted. See my last post Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MI7 Posted April 18, 2006 Share Posted April 18, 2006 New story posted. See my last post Nice job man! Like I said in the PM, Dale won't be sitting down for a while . +1 points for you. I have a vid nearly done, so expect an edit if no one posts after me. Oh, and: Name: buttmonkey Location: Shady Cabin Weapons: Silenced Pistol Equipment: Equipment Vehicle: Quad Combat Experience: Offtopic: Snares, I added you to MSN. Are you online now? Get Connected. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Snares Posted April 18, 2006 Share Posted April 18, 2006 (edited) I was wondering who that was I'm on now. Does this mean the map need changing? @buttmonkey: You'll help kill the Rebels and the revolution? Then say "Long live the Revolution!" Edited April 18, 2006 by Snares Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
alexrw Posted April 18, 2006 Share Posted April 18, 2006 I'm still making my script for my movie. I am having extreme difficulty 'cause of the lack of flying skills i have. I guess i'll have to use my skill. Mwhahahahahahaha*cough* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kippers Posted April 18, 2006 Share Posted April 18, 2006 Looks like we got story writing competition from the BUYG If we can call them competition. Good writing snares 習うより慣れろ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Oddsock Posted April 18, 2006 Share Posted April 18, 2006 I was wondering who that was I'm on now. Does this mean the map need changing? @buttmonkey: You'll help kill the Rebels and the revolution? Then say "Long live the Revolution!" One passed through Dale's right butt-cheek, and Dale's face just went ^That made me laugh out loud. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bryce. Posted April 19, 2006 Share Posted April 19, 2006 Good stories kippers and snares, I really enjoy the way the two of you write. Keep it up. Well, I'm sending back my video card today, so soon I will be back at making movies again, hopefully. I will update now if it hasn't already been done. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kippers Posted April 19, 2006 Share Posted April 19, 2006 Wait...I'm confused. I thought the Seps and Rebels were working together, but Snares stories confused me 習うより慣れろ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
D2TK Posted April 19, 2006 Share Posted April 19, 2006 Wait...I'm confused. I thought the Seps and Rebels were working together, but Snares stories confused me The Separatists are in no way associated with The Revolucion or any of it's members. They are their own faction and operate under their own rules. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kippers Posted April 19, 2006 Share Posted April 19, 2006 Wait...I'm confused. I thought the Seps and Rebels were working together, but Snares stories confused me The Separatists are in no way associated with The Revolucion or any of it's members. They are their own faction and operate under their own rules. So who the heck are they fighting against? i'm completely lost 習うより慣れろ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
gillies Posted April 19, 2006 Share Posted April 19, 2006 We fight the government, it doesn't mean we have to work with the other rebellion group we can fight them just as much if necessary. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bryce. Posted April 19, 2006 Share Posted April 19, 2006 (edited) They're against ROSA. Didn't you read my stories? Well after alot of screwing around with I made a brand new Territory Map, it still has MI7's territories, but it is on a new SA in-game style map. It looks quite good and I'm quite pleased with the result. Edit: Gillies beat me. Edited April 19, 2006 by Bryce. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kippers Posted April 19, 2006 Share Posted April 19, 2006 They're against ROSA. Didn't you read my stories? I did read them, evidently not close enough. Great new territories map btw 習うより慣れろ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
gillies Posted April 19, 2006 Share Posted April 19, 2006 I see you are using the detailed map by that guy. Looks good, nice work on putting the territories on there too Bryce., it's a lot easier to work out what is unoccupied now. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bryce. Posted April 19, 2006 Share Posted April 19, 2006 Thanks guys, I like it too, it's much easier to tell which territories are occupied and which ones aren't. MI7 still gets credit for marking off all of the territories though. I'm backing up all of the tables now so we don't have anything crash on the front tables. G'work today guys. MI7 should have a movie within the next couple weeks but he's having a bit of trouble with getting the shots correctly. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Snares Posted April 19, 2006 Share Posted April 19, 2006 I can't see that map for some reason "/ Just so it can be noted, the Rebels control the Flint Range area now Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stezza Posted April 19, 2006 Share Posted April 19, 2006 Chapter 4 I woke up, but I didn't know where I was. I smelt something, but I didn't know what it was. I saw something, or someone, but I didn't know who that thing or person was. Well, it didn't take me long to find out that I was in hospital, the smell were my Anti-biotics and the thing I saw was the doctor. "Ah, he's coming around now." I realised it was the same doctor I saw in San Fierro. But, was I in San Fierro? "Where the f--- am I?" I was in a bit of a bad mood. "Hospital," "Oh god, I can't believe it, I'm in a hospital!" "Well, you are," this guy was a dumbarse. "I know you f---ing d---head. But which hospital?" "Oh...oh, um...All Saints General Hospital, Los Santos." OK then. That's all I need to know. Wait, no I've got more. "How long have I been here?" "A week and a half." A week and a half, a week and a half? What?! He's got to be joking. "Are you serious." "Course I am," S---, that's just what I need. "Alright then, but how long before I get out?" "Oh...about 1 more week." One more week great. Guess what happened to me afterwards. Yep, that's right, that dreamy state again, coming to haunt me. As I slowly drifted off, I swear I heard a continous noise. BEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEP. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bryce. Posted April 19, 2006 Share Posted April 19, 2006 Sorry to hear that snares. I'll try to keep updating the map, but updating every single day is starting to get tedious. MI7 can maybe up date today. Nice story Stezza. Good work. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ottae Posted April 19, 2006 Share Posted April 19, 2006 (edited) Now that I can post again, here's my first ROSA story: Embassy Sniper Edited April 19, 2006 by Ottae Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bryce. Posted April 19, 2006 Share Posted April 19, 2006 Thanks for stealing my movie title Ottae. Even though you did spell it worng. It was a pretty good movie, it was filmed quite well. Good work Ottae. Your pimped out bus was tops. Points updated. I'm off. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
gillies Posted April 19, 2006 Share Posted April 19, 2006 Even though you did spell it worng. Lol. Nice work on the video Ottae, that was great. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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