x0x h3ll x0x Posted April 14, 2006 Share Posted April 14, 2006 holy sh*t! she has to find cj well... she did but then lost him noooooooooooooooooooooooooo! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FelipeVinhao Posted April 15, 2006 Share Posted April 15, 2006 Well, if it's like game-story and -play, it's easier to CJ find Denise insteada the opposite... and maybe just after finishing the main storyline. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ARMEDnPISSED Posted April 15, 2006 Share Posted April 15, 2006 I think this story is almost finished Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lochie_old Posted April 15, 2006 Share Posted April 15, 2006 . You rock Cat! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The_Dancing_Cat Posted April 15, 2006 Author Share Posted April 15, 2006 (edited) You're right, I'm afraid it's almost over But thanks for all your latest comments! Okay, well, here is the very last full chapter. There's an Epilogue to come, which I'll post tomorrow or the day after. Thank you, everyone! EDIT: Found a typing error, lol Chapter 20 “Um, hi there, I’m here to see someone,” the man said to the receptionist inside the hospital. “Alright, may I take your name, please?” replied the woman. “Oh, fo’ sho’, it’s Carl Johnson,” the man responded. “And who is it you wish to visit?” “Denise Robinson.” “What relation are you to her?” “Erm... Well, I’m her boyfriend, but A really need to see her,” “Okay. I suppose I could let you off just this once,” The receptionist flashed a winning smile at CJ. “But you do know she is in a coma, right?” CJ felt chills ride up and down his spine. “No, A didn’t. Is she gonna be OK?” “She could wake up any day now. You never know, it might just be today,” the woman said with another sickly grin. “She’s in room two-hundred-twelve.” “Thanks,” CJ replied and he headed over to the elevator. As the metal contraption rose up past several floors, CJ wondered what Denise would look like. He felt a whole world of guilt after just leaving her back in that mansion. He’d been sure he had killed all the guys in there. It didn’t matter now, though, what was done was done. But CJ couldn’t wait to tell Denise what had happened while she’d just been sat at home in Los Santos all that time. He’d done some really cool stuff. The elevator doors rolled open and CJ walked down the hallway to Room 212. He went straight in to see a nurse and doctor standing around the only bed in there. CJ went over to have a look at what they were doing. He gazed over the doctor’s shoulder and saw Denise’s eyes flutter open. She gasped. “C...J?” she asked in a strained whisper. The medics seemed to only just realise CJ had come into the room. The nurse went to get Denise some water, and the doctor smiled warmly and looked from CJ to his patient. “Is she gonna be OK?” CJ enquired, startled. “The receptionist said she was in a coma.” “She has been, but as you can see she’s awake now. She was about due,” laughed the doctor. “I’ll leave you two to catch up now. Miss Robinson,” he added to Denise, who was gulping water, “ring if you need anything.” Denise nodded, and the nurse and doctor left the room. “CJ, ah sh*t, I’ve been lookin’ for you all over the damn place!” Denise squawked, smacking CJ around the head as he sat down in a chair by her bed. “Ow! Damn, woman, what was that for?!” CJ rubbed his temple where he had been struck. Denise pulled herself up in bed and put her glass of water down on her bedside table. She looked at CJ for a moment, and then said, “What the Hell you been doin’ all this time?” “I’ve been everywhere, Denise,” CJ said, leaning back in the chair. “A seen San Fierro, the country, desert, sh*t, even Las Venturas! The Strip looks damn good all lit up at night! Why you been followin’ me?” “Coz the ‘hood was goin’ under, fool!” Denise replied angrily. “And you just up and left!” “Those damn cops made me leave, baby. A didn’t want to. But everythin’ is aight now, the Grove’s back on top. Ain’t no more Balla pushers in the streets no more,” CJ reassured her. He stoked her hair. “Whatchoo been doin’? Barely leavin’ the house? A wouldn’t blame you, it wa’nt safe out there.” “I’ve had more of an adventure than you have!” Denise screeched. “You never answered your damn phone, busta!” CJ pulled back his hand and looked away from her, as if he was trying to figure out what to say back. “Listen, A followed you, straight? A flew this plane and got shot down in the countryside... Some real strange f**ked-up folks out there, A tell you that!” Denise broke off into her tale, waving her arms about until it hurt her stomach too much and she had to stop. CJ listened intently, his eyes growing wider until Denise told him about her chase through Big Poppa’s mansion, and then it was back to the present day. “Damn,” CJ paused. “Damn! A had no idea!” “Yeah, fo’ sho’. And who the Hell is Catalina?!” Denise said, her anger returning. CJ blanched. “Erm.. She and I did some business, baby, she helped me get back on ma feet when I was out in Red County. That’s all.” Denise huffed and crossed her arms. She shot a glare at CJ. “Yeah, well that better be all.” She took a deep breath, then went on, in a soft tone, “I missed you, honey.” “Yeah, me too,” CJ replied. “I’m sorry.” Denise shrugged and smiled. “It don’t matter. Hey, what happened at Big Poppa’s after A passed out?” “I chased that motherf**ker down and nailed his ass! Now A own his crib,” CJ grinned. “And you’re lucky, coz I’m just about the richest guy on Grove Street.” “Daaaaaamn! That means you gotta buy me lots of great stuff, y’hear?” “I hear you, baby, loud ‘n’ clear. But man, all that stuff you done... sh*t, you’re determined!” CJ said, spreading his arms wide. “A don’t know how you survived it all.” “I guess somebody up there likes me,” Denise said with a smile. And then the two embraced in the glow of the late afternoon sun, as its gold smile spread through the hospital window, enveloping them in its warmth as they enjoyed their reunion. Edited May 7, 2006 by The_Dancing_Cat Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Boss_ Posted April 15, 2006 Share Posted April 15, 2006 Thats what we call Amazing Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dingleman Posted April 15, 2006 Share Posted April 15, 2006 Now that's cool! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
x0x h3ll x0x Posted April 17, 2006 Share Posted April 17, 2006 That was amazing. I can't believe how good that was congratulations this is going to be sent to all my friends (have lots) so yeah congrats keep on riting and i hope to see another story. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stezza Posted April 17, 2006 Share Posted April 17, 2006 Yeah, I agree with xox. Well done with this. xox: I take it you're a fan of Family Guy? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
nicka912 Posted April 17, 2006 Share Posted April 17, 2006 Wow, this is great. I've got some FanFic tips to learn from you!!! Very nice job. I'm impressed with the detail you use, and it's interesting to see something from the point of view of Denise! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The_Dancing_Cat Posted April 17, 2006 Author Share Posted April 17, 2006 Thank you everybody! And here's the very very final part of Somebody Up There Likes Me. It's just a little continuation of the story coz I refused to stop writing it even though I knew it was already over, lol. *sad music rises to a high crescendo* Thanks to all of ya who said lovely things and supported this fanfic! I'd also like to thank my goldfish... Well enough ramblings. Peace! Epilogue Later that week, Denise was allowed to go home. CJ picked her up in a new sports car - it was white and flashy, an Infernus. He was wearing a tuxedo and had a big bouquet of pink beach flowers clutched in his hands. Denise looked at him curiously as he pulled out of the hospital pick-up zone. He wasn’t heading back to the Grove. Instead, he took her under the spaghetti junction in Downtown Los Santos, through Conference, and out the other side. Denise gasped as she saw where CJ had stopped the car. He helped her out of her seat and her feet met sand, sand that glowed orange with the slowly setting sun. CJ walked her down to the ocean, where the soft waves were slowly lapping. They sat down and talked together, as the sun sank beneath the horizon. The sky darkened and the stars came out, twinkling up in the sky like tiny diamonds. Soon, Denise and CJ headed back to Grove Street, but a few people still remained on the sandy shores of Santa Maria Beach. They were standing in groups, drinking out of liquor bottles, gazing up at the lighthouse that towered over them. They were gang members. But there was one thing different about them to the ones Denise had seen before. They were wearing green. The End Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Forelli_Boy Posted April 18, 2006 Share Posted April 18, 2006 A wonderful ending to a story I only now found interest in (because I literally just stumbled upon this thread now, and sped read through the rest.) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ARMEDnPISSED Posted April 19, 2006 Share Posted April 19, 2006 Wow. Great story. Too bad its over. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The_Dancing_Cat Posted April 20, 2006 Author Share Posted April 20, 2006 Thanks guys, I really appreciate it! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ottae Posted April 20, 2006 Share Posted April 20, 2006 Better put Stezza on suicide watch now that this is over Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TommyVercetti. Posted April 21, 2006 Share Posted April 21, 2006 Wow I just read all of them. Theyre great. I'm suprized you could write so much in a post and just create it as you go. Freestyle story writing. You should write for a living or something. I like your stories. Once again great. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FelipeVinhao Posted April 21, 2006 Share Posted April 21, 2006 Awesome³!!! Ah, btw must I comment CJ's poor excuse? “Yeah, fo’ sho’. And who the Hell is Catalina?!” Denise said, her anger returning.CJ blanched. “Erm.. She and I did some business, baby, she helped me get back on ma feet when I was out in Red County. That’s all.” Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stezza Posted April 21, 2006 Share Posted April 21, 2006 NOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! It had to finish, it had to finish . But WHY, great The_Dancing_Cat, WHY!!!!! Trust me, this story will be in my sig as long as I live!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ARMEDnPISSED Posted April 22, 2006 Share Posted April 22, 2006 NOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! It had to finish, it had to finish . But WHY, great The_Dancing_Cat, WHY!!!!! Trust me, this story will be in my sig as long as I live!!! Every story has to end Stezza. I don't think there's such thing as a story that goes on forever. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lochie_old Posted April 22, 2006 Share Posted April 22, 2006 What about the Never-Ending story? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TommyVercetti. Posted April 22, 2006 Share Posted April 22, 2006 What about the Never-Ending story? Thats alittle demanding. Let her go with what she did. It was great and I know it had to be tireing at times because I used to type out bar stories on the TCB Pub. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The_Dancing_Cat Posted April 22, 2006 Author Share Posted April 22, 2006 (edited) Thanks to all of you. I'd really like to write stories for a living, it's been my dream job since I was little, but most of the things I write that don't have copyrights in are either unfinished or crap. Anywho, thank you again! It really gives me a boost. Aww, Stezza, lol, I might write another one when I have the time... I have an old Vice City one I wrote ages ago, I might post that if I can get it off the old computer and onto here. I'm not sure, I doubt I'll be able to get anything done soon And the Never-Ending Story is a scam! I saw that movie when I was younger and it ENDED! What a rip-off EDIT (6th May): TWO STARS!! Woo!!!!! Thanks for the ratings! And more thanks for Stezza, you still have the topic in your signature I've posted this epic tale on fanfiction.net, just to see if the people there like it as well. Anyway, just wanted to say TWO STAAAAAAAAARRRS! Wasn't sure if I should bump this topic to say it, hence the editing. I think this topic has had its day, but it's nice that people seem to still be interested in it Thanks a lot, everybody Edited May 6, 2006 by The_Dancing_Cat Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MeeMeeCandy777 Posted October 30, 2021 Share Posted October 30, 2021 I love this story so much! I first found this on FanFiction(dot)net website, so it was pretty interesting for me to find the topic here. I even commissioned an artist to draw one of the scenes from the story!: https://www.instagram.com/p/CVAhBqcI_l7/?utm_medium=copy_link I will give this 10/10! I hope that more GTA fans will write more stories about Denise. She's one of my favorite characters in San Andreas and wished she got more development and backstory. I imagined once the two went back to Grove Street, she invited her over for "coffee", which he agrees. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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