ROSA: Republik/Revolucion

[Lochie_old]

Whats my speciality?

[Krailer]

In order to keep Lone Soldiers D's story consistency, his specialty was changed:

 

Lone Soldier D

Safehouse: El Corona, Los Santos

Status: In the Field

Speciality: Mercenary

Weapons: MP5

Equipment:

Stashed Vehicle: Blade

 

@ ~PhusioN~: You don't have a specialty because there's nothing special about ROSA. You should have joined the Resistance instead...

...j/k!

[Oddsock]

A merc?

 

Does Arbusto hire mercs?

 

EDIT: I don't want him near my planes.

 

 

And brrad0, your go on the story. -Cheeburger, Cheeburger!

[Bryce.]

Whats my speciality?

You don't need to have a specialty, but if you want one, how about poisoning Krailer's drinking water and killing him. That will be your specialty.

[Brad]

Aldea Mavada- Part III

 

 

Oddosocks body language was something to be seen. His thought was getting out of this ghost town alive. While I was concentrating on my ROSA goal. To conquer evil.

“s-ss” Oddosck hissed.

We bobbed down. Knowing that was the warning town for danger.

“Yes...”I whispered.

“Over there…” he explained.

The desert must of got to our head in the dead of night.

“Chill out!” I hissed.

A rustle was heard.

“WTF was that” said oddosck in a scared temp voice.

“I don’t know. Follow.” I ordered.

“I am a brigader im the leader. I call the shots”

“Seriously if we want to get out alive we must have some teamwork ok?”

“Whatever” as he said with his hands.

A fog raised… It was thick… It happened in a matter of seconds.

“This is mixed climate isn’t it sock?” I asked.

“I suppose but…” he didn’t finish his sentence.

A large convoy of trucks could be heard. The large anchor of engines covering the desert climate as it got louder and louder.

“Hmm, something up”. I talked to my self but Oddosck could hear me.

“Of course something is up. Were getting be dead!”

“Load up… They not our average ROSA… There Rebels coming from El Quena… whatever”.

“Ok ok.. lets go Brrad0!”

We made cover by nearby obstacles and objects. In-between alleys. The truck came into the small village where the noise was large. Rebel soliders came out the trucks like ants. I had never seen so many rebel soliders in one place…

 

Hope you liked it

 

[Krailer]

Nice story brrad0!

 

I especially liked the part where you were scared , I don't know why, but I just loved that part...

 

EDIT: I wonder where Mxy is...

[Lone Soldier D]

I was waiting on more validasions then the one that Krailer did, but f*ckb that here is my story.

 

 

 

A computer file from a europe based intel/conter-terrorist agency much like CIA, FBI or NSA

 

Background of the lone soldier (the file is partly destroyed and some information have bein deleted by hacker, well no sh*t.)

 

Knowne now only as D. born in the middle of the 80's in Sweden, growing up in a "standard" fammily. Doring the begining of the 21th centery, he started to question the system and is now "a revolutionery" but is not knowne to be active. Disepered sometime 2002-03, his original fammely don't know where or why he "run away", he himself claim to just have taken a "needen vecation". Reported to have bein spoted with latin amerikan leftwing extremist, he has gain high rank in several communistic rebelgroups by mostly just debating and some saboutages. He is now a leader of a smal group who has planes of going to North Amerika for something, God knows what he is planing to do there.

 

 

International water east of San Andreas, some time betwine zero-twohundred hours and zero-fourhundred hours.

 

A tanker with the destination Estern Docks, San Fierro, San Andreas is just entering SA waters.

 

A guy in his mid twentys walks up to a steel door, the man knoks a feue times and wait for any replys, after seweral minutes and knoks he shouts.

"EY, D, YOU f*ck UP sh*t, GET REDY WE ARE ENTERING SA SOON"

The guy gets no replys now ether, so he just enter the room. D, still fast asleep. You can blow off a granade rigth next to him and he whould still be sleeping. The guy trys to wake D up again and get a reply about something that is totaly strange sh*t.

"D, wake up"

This sene goes one for a half hour and D finaly wakes up.

"..."

"get dreesed... and shave, and take a shower, man. You smell like a dumpster"

"just five more" D replyes and closes his eyes again.

"NO!, it took me an hour or something to get you to try to wake and now you go up and hit the shower"

"WTF, you sound like my mummy... but it more or less just maked sound... can you go bother someone else if you get lonely?"

"Dude, we are entering SA waters"

D sitts up in the bed, half awake.

He makes a tierd sound and looks around in the room.

"Ok, I'm up... can you go bother someone else now"

The guy leaves D to shower and drees and so.

"SA... Arsebrest and his men will not know what came rolling thorugh the nation..." D thinks to him self, when entering what is the bathroom.

 

I start to get dreesed, in my useual cloths; a longsleved t-shirt like shirt, a par of pant and then I strap on the 17 pined boots of mine (heavy as hell but they can take mutch abuse), and leaves my quater to get to the commando bridege. When entering the bridge only Zerr is there (the guy who woke me).

 

Bio of Zerr

Length: about 190 centimenter (like 6 feet).

Eyes: well, I know he has two but I don't know the colour.

Hair: Green dreads that is now like 1/12 of some brownish shade (his original haircolour, I belive), they are about 60 centimeters.

Body: It's the normal bodytype I gues, I'm not to good at notesing this things.

Cloths: Gray, brown or black (sometimes all of them) some what grudge/punk/goth looking style of cloth (must in the our group (GFA are in a wide range of personaleties and social gropes and stuff, the group on this tanker is almost all alternativ style from low middelclass and down) is dreesed in thoes colours and styles but in our own original selection of cloths, shoes and other stuff).

 

I met him in the Caribians, looks like he is from some easteurope contery, talks with a easterneuropean accsent, leaved his home before his twentyeth birthday (not saying mucth to me). He have walked by my side or I have foulowed him around (we are not sure) Centeral- and Southamerika sens we met, doing all from just backbacking (kinda) to some gerilla figthing (both with and against). Other than this I don't know to much, mostly 'cuz I haven asked.

 

"This is a suprise" he remarks as I enter.

I only replyed with "Where are the rest of the gang???"

"Well, as I sad; this is a suprise, you don't seem to have taken the useial time of washing and sh*t"

"Watcha mean???

I think about what I did in the bathroom and realised that I only took a five minutes shower and skiped the shaving so I started to wander back to my quater to get myself a real hygen lookthroug. I can't realy get a fullbeard (jsut randomly hairstrings that grows out of my face), but I dident care for the time on the tanker and I also let my undercut get some of the hair back.

 

After I have shaved my head and face (about half an hour) and took my useal shower of fifthteen minutes, I just walked around the look at the inventory. My bag of stuff have a Vintorez w/ buildin silencer and ten mags of ammo á 20 rounds (look at this site for more info: http://world.guns.ru/sniper/sn20-e.htm), a par of sades lookin' like a pair of Z800 3D Visors and nigth/therrmel googles with a zoom feat. heat and nigth feat. and other stuff like that. In the cargohall there was ten bikes (looks like a crossing betvine Kanedas bike in Akira, the bikes in Final Fantasy 8 and the Wayfaier) with electromagnetic outerbody for diflecting bullet and other small metal things, six heat rockets (three on the left and the same on the other side) and buildin tec-9 like guns, two Trashmasters with remade body to take a heavy punch, a cargo holding area for rebels (space for six people) and weaponds and two paitriots armored and armed with heatrockets (like the ones in the game), Two other Patriots but thoes where only armored and held space for four guyes in the back and a pasenger in the front with the driver, ther is also two mesas with a minigun on the back controled from the pansenger seat with controls that is like the ones on the Apaceh attacke heli. So there was some preparations done from us, some of us hoped for a not to bloody goverment overthrow and some want much blood, so there was some tension in the gang. The weapond was AK(s)'s and M4/16 with both live ammo and special 'gum bullets', I my self have trancvilzers/'gum bullets' 'cuz I belive in a revolucion with out (dead)bodies. 44 soldier by veichals, then we have a chinook with lots of equipment and suplies and about ten to twenty rebels in it to, so that is like 54 to 64 soldier and footsoldiers that get us up to 90 to 110, we hope that some of the rebel groupes in SA can give us a hand.

 

The Global Freedom Alliance

GFA is an organisation with existens in most countries of the world. Suported by some goverments with finacial aid they also have finacila aid from the oil buisnes, it's belived that they also have drug factorys and platations around the world. They claim to use the capitalistic system agains it whenever geting acused for dealing drugs and oilspills are linket to there suporters, witch also gives them the stamp of being double moral and just a media jipo. The GFA are technologicaly andvanced with things like hydrogen and electromagnetic engiens in there veichal and have tryed to get car companies to use it but have beine beaten down by other oilcompanies due to bothe goverment coruption and sientist who tryes to beat down on there organisation (strangely enogh). There weapond tech is also very intresting in that the have rifels and guns that can shoot a sticy substanc like gum (like the guns they use in the biginig of Jackie Chan's Who am I), a special shotgun like rifel that conpres air and have a power mutch like a watercanon (that rifel has bein use around most of the world to control riots, giving GFA more fainace), but ther is still some in the organisation that use ordenery live ammo insted of the new kind, witch have made them some what splited but has no signs of dividing in to new gropes. GFA is a socialistic/communistic organisation, there is also other leftwing gropes in the GFA. They, the maine oeganisation, trys to be a nongovermential oranisations, the GFA and the samaller groupes is trying to work together to bring down dictatorships and the capitalistic goverment all over the globe. There is estymatle one to ten million people in the GFA (not kowing if smaller groupes and emplyeis of some of there buisenes are in on it or just there for a paycheck).

 

Later in the command bridge

 

Zerr, Yezika and D'rock are sitting around (or something like that) waiting for the rest of the commanders of the boat, we are about 14 who has the control and tries to share it as good as we can.

 

Bio of Yezika

Length: 160 cm

Eyes: they are puple... must be colourd contacts

Hair: a five cm cock's crest going 30cm over her head and spikes around it. Dyed in the colours of extrem lime green and shock pink.

Body: a morph of Kaiori (from SSX) and Selphie (from Final Fantasy 8)

Cloths: a corset with lether skirt that goes down over her feets in the front and goes back 50cm so she has a real drag. Quite a strange outfit for a graffiti artist and parktour practiser (or whatever it's called)

 

Bio of D'rock

Length: 130 cm

Eyes: they are a creepy shade of ligth blue

Hair: bald

Body: remindes very much of Gullum

Cloths: gimp suite lick thing witch make him suprisely agile.

 

Sometime betwen 3 and 4 in the morning

 

All of the 14 commanders are now at the command brige of a sumit.

"Where are we going to do the landing??? as our intel shows they seme have a aircraft carrier by the Gant Bridge so ther is no way we can enter the docks without being detected." one of them sade

"There shold be a landing-stage somewhere on the east beach, we can try to use it..." another sayes but get erupted

"How??? we are sure to be expected and we can't just try to calmly park this there and get everything out, nor can we just ram the landing-stage that whould just shacke the troops and most things whould be in dissary then too." a therd contrebutes with. It's dead silens in the room.

"Well, we don't need to go rigth in to it with full power." Zerr says "If we only know where it is then we can try to park it, just as long as we can use the front ramp to get out quick enough to give the ROSA troops a suprise! he contineud.

"Ok, sounds good, but how are we to know here the landing-stadge is???" a fourth say.

"I think I saw some jetskis down in the cargo hall when I was down. Send a recon team to look for the stage and we take the ship to it, if the water is deep enogh." I sugested.

"Wait, don't we have contact with one of the rebel groups in SF, maybe they can give us the lockation???" a fifth person remarks.

"So... what are we to do, send a recon or try to get rebels to give the location to us???" four, five people say at the same time.

"Why not both, a welcoming team that can keep the beach clear till our arival" Yezika say.

Almost all agrieng, some are quiet but looks to be noding in agrement.

"Ok, then we just need to get in contact and send the recon team out" one sade and the group are dissmissed, some are to get the recon together some tries to get in contact with our SF rebels mates.

[Bryce.]

Nice story Braddo.

 

Alright well I have a bit of a problem, not sure if you guys will change, but at least hear me out. When putting together a video, as MI7, alex, Krailer and I do every once in a while, we have to constantly edit, cut, slice and work on clips. Basically, we make sure everything fits together. That takes time and yes it becomes a bit tedious, but it has to be done or people will think it's lame.

 

I would think that you story writers would sort of want to do the same thing. The horrible grammar and careless punctuation is terribly frequent in most of your stories. Braddo yours didn't have to many mistakes, but LSD, I couldn't get past the first two paragraphs because there was absolutely no proof-reading done what so ever. I'm sorry, but if you want me or any of the other people who take part in this topic, or even people who just come to watch, to take you seriously, then you need to present your story a bit better. As Meta187 says, "Presentation is everything".

 

So please guys, try and clean it up a bit. LSD, if you clean up your story and proof read, I will read it, but if you don't, don't expect any input from me.

 

OdDsOcK , from what I can tell, proof-reads all of his stories, and I can actually read them. Mxyzptlk, I'm sure does, though I don't think he will be adding to the ROSA topic any time soon. He is busy doing other things currently.

 

 

[Lone Soldier D]

To Krailer: I knew someone was to bitch about it, what did I tell you Krailer.

 

To Bryceronic 69: I do not have grade in (insert nativlanguage here), so I don't know if ther is anything that is wrong. As I sad before my story start: I wanted more then just Krailer to look at the text but I diden't here from Stezza, but I'm not sure that he has been in seens I'd send him the story, I have also send it to MI7 but he hasen't given any response ether

 

To anyone else (this is due to Bryceronic): PM me about any thing in my storys that migth be confussing or hard to get troug, critesisem is good, aslong as it's not near taunting (if you don't do it Monty Phyton style).

 

Looked a litel fast one the text and I may need to seperate some of the text when I'm in the cargohall and do a deeper look at the part about the GFA, but the rest looks good from what I can see, but I'll check that too.

Edited March 25, 2006 by Lone Soldier D

[Bryce.]

First off don't take my constructive criticism as "bitching". Secondly even Mxyzptlk gave up on reading this story, and he reads everyones story, so don't tell me that I am "bitching".

 

That's fine if you don't have a "degree in English", neither do I. But some of the stuff you were writing was actually quite good, which leads me to believe you were either too careless to edit your story, or you just were taught certain things.

 

Whatever the case, I won't read your story. Don't take what I am writing as being rude, just as more "constructive criticism" to your post.

[alexrw]

I was concentrating on my ROSA goal. To conquer evil.

 

Hahahahahaha! I think i'm going to die of laughter!

 

 

There Rebels coming from El Quena… whatever

 

Lemme guess.... me and Mxy. If it's anyone else just say.

 

 

I wonder where Mxy is...

 

RealLife: On holiday I think.

ROSA: Still in a state of shock of how much money I brought back.

 

I think I'll get on with my next story soon.

[Lone Soldier D]

To Bryceroni69: I have a grade in english just not in swedish

Knowne now only as D. born in the middle of the 80's in Sweden

there, do you see, sweden, S-W-E-D-E-N, ok, now I'm just try to annoye you. Read the story and then give me the things that I should edit, 'cuz I'm un tunnel view and can't see what is wrong.

[Lone Soldier D]

This was a double post... and still is, due to that my modem likes to drive me crash this happens, THIS IS NOT MY FAULT REALY!!!

Edited March 25, 2006 by Lone Soldier D

[Bryce.]

To Bryceronic 69: I do not have grade in (insert nativlanguage here)

 

Then what was the point of that sentence? Or was it supposed to say something else? Probably...

 

You can seriously GTFO if you have a problem taking constructive criticism, everyone here, including me, has taken it and if you can't handle it, the door is right there.

 

I just told you I will not read your story. Your first paragraph has, from my count, at least 14 errors. That dictates what the rest of the story will be like. You need to work on your grammar and punctuation. Punctuation, P-U-N-C-T-U-A-T-I-O-N.

 

I'm not here to argue with you, so if you can't clean up your story or take some constructive criticsm, than you should leave, because so far, you're the only person that has had trouble understanding that concept.

[Lone Soldier D]

I can take critic but if you can show what it is then that whould be beter than just bitch about that it's wrong. The "(insert nativlanguage here)" was becuse of that I try to keep my identety, nationalety and many other things to myself. Adding: also, I have sad that I don't know when to set punctuation and sh*t, witch also is the reason why I don't spit out fan fict and stuff every seven minute.

Edited March 25, 2006 by Lone Soldier D

[Bryce.]

I can take critic but if you can show what it is then that whould be beter than just bitch about that it's wrong. The "(insert nativlanguage here)" was becuse of that I try to keep my identety, nationalety and many other things to myself. Adding: also, I have sad that I don't know when to set punctuation and sh*t, witch also is the reason why I don't spit out fan fict and stuff every seven minute.

If you say I am bitching one more time, you're gone. I don't need ignorant people like you posting ignorant posts.

 

I'm not you teacher bub, I'm not hear to tell you how to spell certain things or how to put together sentences. If you aren't able to see your mistakes then why are you in here in the first place?

 

This is your last warning.

[Lone Soldier D]

13 years diden't give me sh*t, the teachers diden't get throw, they diden't care for me, and by the way, if you can't be a good friend and show what is wrong, then I'm thinking it's you who are the one to leave, you are the one that is ignorent and smallminded.

[Bryce.]

First off in no way are we friends, I'm not "friends" with anyone on these forums, but I told you that I'm not hear to teach you, ask somoene else.

 

I'm talking to MI7 first thing tomorrow, and I dought he'll have any problems with me kicking you out, because you're way too much to put up with. I'm being as respectful as I can right now, yet you continue to act like an ass. I won't tolerate that, nor will anyone else.

 

 

[Lone Soldier D]

No mather, you could try to point out some gramecal error insted of totaly dissing me and I did not mean to be to hard on you, it's just that I don't notist how pissed some think I am, I know I can sound annoyed as hell sometimes or extremly botherd by someone but that is just becuse I get more layed back than I mean to, if you can make a "ok" sound like you don't give a sh*t, then you are overdoing it. Friend seamd like a good word but I should have used friendly insted. EDIT: BTW, what you did whas not constructiv, it was just to tell me that I did something wrong, and that is tating the obvius, then not to say exsactly what so I can corect it is just to kick on the one that is down.

Edited March 25, 2006 by Lone Soldier D

[Brad]

I will talk to MI7 about a firing squad.

 

Hung or shot? Electric chair? We don't want you here on this topic anymore. You lost the plot so please get out of here.

[Lone Soldier D]

Wait, are you geting me sacked??? If so then bad luck for you 'cuse i'm a Soul Rebel, Ranbow Warrior, a soldier for the univers. You migth want to start thing about if I have beine sereus 'cuz I don't know sometimes (can I get away with temporery mental abrration... I can't be serius for one sentens).

[Brad]

Oh... I if your a Rebel then. We like to send a killer in there. Special for thread abusers. What do you think Bryc?

[Lone Soldier D]

*sends a apolegy to Bryceroni69* OK, my actions where wrong (but you diden't say to much about what exactly was wrong) I notict that after I looked at your post after my story, and ther is that that I hade send my story to Stezza and MI7 but was inpatience, also I can't find my MS Works disc so I hade nothing to check the spelling with.*goes down on his keed and start doing the scean that CJ does when Catelina put's a gun at his head* I KNOW I HADELD IT WRONG PLEASE EXCUSE ME *sobing* JUST DON'T f*ckING KILL ME OF FOR SOME GRAMER ERRORS AND A BAD THEMPER (this is the first time I've done something wrong (and take the blame) PLEAS LET ME STAY *more sobing*

[ricardomun]

*sends a apolegy to Bryceroni69* OK, my actions where wrong (but you diden't say to much about what exactly was wrong) I notict that after I looked at your post after my story, and ther is that that I hade send my story to Stezza and MI7 but was inpatience, also I can't find my MS Works disc so I hade nothing to check the spelling with.*goes down on his keed and start doing the scean that CJ does when Catelina put's a gun at his head* I KNOW I HADELD IT WRONG PLEASE EXCUSE ME *sobing* JUST DON'T f*ckING KILL ME OF FOR SOME GRAMER ERRORS AND A BAD THEMPER (this is the first time I've done something wrong (and take the blame) PLEAS LET ME STAY *more sobing*

If you don't have something to check your spell,try to search the word you think it's wrong on google,if it's wrong it will display the correct word.Don't know if it works for every word but i never had problems with it.

[Brad]

Or simply do your writing on MS Word English...

 

That can help.

[Lone Soldier D]

To richardomun: I'm on a 56k wannabe modem so I can't sitt an check every word.

 

To brrad0: Well if I could find the MS works disc I could instal Works Word and anything else I migth need... if they aren't on the XP disc, gotta check it.

[MI7]

Welcome to our new recruit and also possibly goodbye LSD!

 

Anyway as you may or may not know, Mxy has basically packed up and left thus leaving the Rebels leaderless. Anyway, here's the new organisation:

 

New ROSA Leader: Bryceroni69

New Rebel Leader: Krailer

 

From now on, please PM all ROSA faction stories to Bryceroni and all Rebel stories to myself. From now on I will be doing stories and organisation for the Rebel side. I hope this does not inconvenience anyone in any way. Keep up all the good work everyone .

[Bryce.]

Thank you MI7.

 

Well after some consideration of the situation, MI7 and I have come to the conclusion that Lone Soldier D, will not be joining us any longer. You're too much of a burden LSD. Please do not post in the ROSA topic anymore, if you continue to post, I will have you banned from GTAF.

 

Thank you.

 

Alright ROSA, let's get our stories/videos out so we can show these Rebel scum their place.

 

That will be all.

 

MI7 has reserved the execution for LSD.

[Brad]

Psst bryce been in ROSA for a long time... Lieutenant rank will fit nicely *COUGH*....

 

 

Oddsock your turn...

[Bryce.]

Tying Up Lose Ends

Part 1

 

As I jumped in the Dinghy and started the engine, I felt as though I was being watched. That feeling was a constant now that I was in hot Rebel territory.

 

I began to veer left from Bayside, heading towards Pier 69, I had been giving a briefing on the chopper ride, that, Pier 69 was where Rebel intelligence had been carried out within the last week.

 

I stopped the Dinghy about 200 yards out from the docks, so as not to alert my prescence. I jumped out and swam the rest of the way. My MP5 and Glock 37 silenced we're not making this swim easy, but it had to be done.

 

I quickly raised myself onto one of the docks and made sure that I wasn't being watched. San Fierro was extremely lively at this time, even for it being 2:00 A.M. I quickly crept over to a corner of the building, hidden from sight of pedestrians, and and parallel to the building that my intel told me the Rebels would be in. I pulled out my binoculars and viewed the situation. There were two suspicious looking pedestrians standing out front of a cargo bay door. Both were trying to look as if they were just viewing the sights, but I could see that both had pistols inside their jackets.

 

I got into a prone position and prepaired my MP5 with a silencer and a bipod. My quicksite was already attached, I flipped it to 10x and alligned the crosshairs on the first, and closest guard to me. PFFt. PFFT. I put one in the first guard's head then quickly alligned for a shot to the second guard's chest. Both wen't down like a sack of bricks.

 

I made sure that nobody heard the noise, though it was be near impossible due to the ambient noise all around me. I ran over to the guards, and one by one picked them up and threw them into the Ocean. I then took off the bipod and put it back in my small backpack.

 

I placed my head against the cargo bay door. I heard voices coming from inside and a large humming sound, could be a server or two. I crouched low and began to think about my entry. It would be tough getting inside and who knows what kind of security they had once I was in.

 

I had to think fast...

 

 

 

Edited March 25, 2006 by Bryceroni69